#pls don't hesitate to ask me for literally any kind of writing advice!!!

[yandere-daydreams]

Do you have any tips for being like, less straight to point when writing? I feel whenever I write I’m being super descriptive and taking my time talking about stuff and then I read it back ands it like

“The sky was a cool blue. I like when the sky is blue”

Like I was reading one of your fics and thought “damn, this bitch like the Tolkien of yandere fanfiction, writing the most beautifully paragraphs known to mankind for gojo”

You won’t gotta tell me I know that you do commissions and stuff so that’s like, your income lmao

wait this is actually something i think about on the reg,,, you really have to come at with the assumption that, if you're writing in first or third person limited, your readers will know to assume that whatever's being said is automatically from your pov character's perspective and therefore aligns with their mentality. that frees you up to get really creative with adjectives and physical descriptions that inform the audience about the character's feelings (i.e. "the sky was a cheerful and idyllic blue" for a character who lies sunny days or "the sky was an agitating and eye-bleeding blue" for a character who doesn't). alternatively, you could also link new stimulus to the physical reaction it causes in the character, for example "the sky was blue. i found myself smiling absentmindedly as i went about my day." the latter is pretty easy to overuse, but also leaves a stronger impression with readers.

it's also very important to be very, very mindful with how you're pacing the distribution of information, too. i personally try to limit myself to one new piece of information per paragraph, just to give my readers time to adjust to a character's eyes being blue before letting them know that his mom is also super dead, but in general, just don't feel the need to get all of your exposition off your chest as soon as it's brought up. intrigue is hot, and the deliberate with-holding of clarification makes it hotter. plus, if it can't be shown by the events of the story and doesn't come up in a character's natural monologue/dialogue, there's a good chance it wasn't that important to begin with. there's no need to talk about how dead a character's mom is at all if he's going to her funeral, like, three pages later.

tldr; use more adjectives and don't tell your readers shit. they'll figure it out on their own if they know what's good for them.