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Narrative - Writing workshop with Betts- Week4

@bettsfic asked us to use narration in various ways

https://www.tumblr.com/books/727539839941165056/writing-workshop-week-4?source=share

Here is my EXPERIMENTAL version

Title: Ma'am

my mirror to "Girl" from Jamaica Kincaid

from Richard Murray < RichardMurrayHumblr>

Did anyone know why god needed Whites? Did anyone know why Whites can't hang to dry too? Didn't Nana walk bareheaded all the time when she raised you? Why you didn't warn me about the oil popping, the first time? Why you didn't tell me how little cloths get red? Why couldn't you help me buy cotton for any blouse I made myself? Why you made me cook salt fish every weekend? You never talked to your mother too. Why you never looked at me when we ate? Why you never look up when we walk by the British ladies with the soldiers all around them? Why you didn't come see me in Sunday school? Why you never talk to papa, and he never talk to you? Why couldn't I enjoy fruit with my friends? You think I can't hear you questioning me, like I did Nana, and she her mother? Why were you never patient? Why were you never patient showing me? Why were you never patient showing me anything, and never showed Papa anything from you? Why you always made me iron Papa's clothes? Why you never smiled ironing Papa's clothes? Why was I the one who had to always pick the okra? Why was I the one who always had to fetch the dasheen water? Why couldn't you buy me a new broom? Why couldn't I use your new broom? Why couldn't I use your old broom? Why did you smile like that to me? Why didn't you smile like that to the British? Why didn't you smile like that to Papa? Why we never had tea? Why we never set the dinner table together? Why you didn't let me set the table for my friends like important guest? Why did I always set the table for lunch? Why did I always set the table for breakfast? Why did you never tell me how you knew so much about slut prevention? How did you wash in Nana's house far from the river while working cane? Why did you never play games with me? Why did you never pick wild flowers? why was you comfortable when the black birds settled on a neighbors house? Why did neighbors only talk about my bread pudding? Why did neighbors never talk about your Doukona? Why didn't you make pepper pot, Papa's favorite dish, for his birthday? Why you never gave me your good medicine when I was sick? Why you didn't tell me how you mastered medicine to throw away children? Why couldn't we join our fish in a bucket? Why did you always tell me to throw back most of my fish? Why you treated Papa that way? Why you let Uncle treat you that way? Why you never told me why you don't smile at Papa, or laugh with him, or hold his hand? Why you never felt like spitting upon the air around me? why did our ends never meet? Why did you never let me squeeze bread around you? I never needed your help So after telling me what to do all the time, you never wanted me to do anything?

The following is the summary of + notes to my FICTION Version with a link to read more.

summary->The detective Tony from Innocent Little Margaret is perplexed at the accepted end of a case he had simultaneously from his partner. He goes through the end of its most recent phase while waiting for a potential new path to open the case back up. on a day of renewal.

notes-> I implemented point of view, point of telling, and from my comprehension an inverted point of method. Can you tell what I used to create a visual structure to the omniscience?

Read More-> https://www.deviantart.com/hddeviant/art/Title-The-First-Mass-Of-The-Perihelion-At-Saint-La-981961141

NONFICTION section

I used my sportsblog

Read More-> https://rmfantasysetpieces1.tumblr.com/post/728165870205009920/training-ground

BONUS section

My biggest takeaway. How important using various styles of writing is to approach characters or relationships in a world. My original intent was to create screenplays for everything on Tumblr, but at the end of the day, that was unfeasible. Certain relationships , stories, are told better in certain formats. That isn't negative that is advantages of writing genre<poetry/screenplay/prose/ or other> that no writer should feel they need to overcome. It is better to embrace it.

My new insights was through experience. I said to myself last year. In 2023 I will take creative moments like this on Tumblr and use to create a world, or at least begin one. through the four weeks, I created the basis of a larger world.

My writing goals are the same. I still want to finish a book of poetry this year and submit work to be translated. I am closer than meets the eye to both. But next year, I will look at this world I created in this workshop and we will see.

I will submit to OFIC the work in the workshop that receive the highest praise

My Tumblr series -workshop with betts- use to access the prior weeks plus this one again if need be.

LINK

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Week4-HW

Incorporating Immersive Narrative and Sound into Project 1 Today’s talk on immersive narrative has made me think more deeply about how I can shape my Project 1 experience to make it more engaging and emotionally impactful. A key takeaway is to place the viewer within the narrative so that they feel like they are truly inhabiting the space, rather than just observing it. For my project, which explores awe-inspiring or eerie atmospheres, I want to use sound as a key element to enhance immersion. I’m thinking about creating a spatial soundscape that reacts as the viewer moves through the space, incorporating ambient noises like the sound of wind in the distance, dripping water, or soft echoes in a confined area. These elements could make the environment feel more alive and responsive. Additionally, I’m thinking about using recorded voiceovers to introduce personal memories or fragmented narratives. For example, whispers or monologues could provide insight into the history of an abandoned space, making it feel like it’s hosting forgotten stories. These techniques will help deepen the emotional impact and guide the viewer’s interpretation of the environment.