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#had multiple moments in my life where i decided to change how i write <3 my 2's are so much funner now
gnaga37 · 5 months
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actually deciding to change how you write letters and numbers is very easy and fun <3
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tatoda · 1 year
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Drive | conrad fisher x fem!reader
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!!MINORS DNI!!
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summary: you take a drive to cousins, but your boyfriend can’t keep his hands to himself and you do something about it CHARACTERS ARE 18+
warning: SMUT!! male receiving, road head
wc: 300ish (very short)
i’m sorry this took forever to get out. i also changed it to just conrad receiving to get this out faster. i may re write it later on. i’m sorry. i will also be taking a small break from posting trying my best to get stuff out NOT EDITED
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It was one of those spontaneous drives. Conrad texted you telling you he was pulling up to your house in exactly 10 minutes to take you somewhere. It wasn’t normal for him just to show up when Brown was almost a 3 hour drive from you to him. He has surprised you a few times and drove to come see you but it was never a secret of where you were going.
You have been dating conrad for about 9 months now. It was just a new relationship but you knew him you’re whole life so it didn’t seem weird at all to be with him 24/7 when you could be. It took you some time to catch up to conrad’s hornyness (is that a word). He knew how to do a lot of things and well you knew most of it but maybe not enough. When you we’re together he could keep his hands to himself but as you entered his black car, he kissed you deeply even before you could shut the door.
“conrad.” you said into the kiss smiling as he held your head close to him
“i know i’m sorry.” he paused “i just missed you so much.” he kisses you again and you let yourself sink into the kiss as your body was over the console of the car and you pushed back into the front seat
“let’s go to cousins.” you grinned at him and he had his stupid smile on his face before putting the car in drive
It was about thirty minutes into the drive when his hand rested on your thigh started to move higher up on your thigh and you just stared at him and he acted as if anything was happening. So you decided to do the same to him moving your hand to his thigh and moving it higher
“y/n, i’m driving.” he quickly glanced at you
“just keep driving don’t worry about me.” you moved his hand from your thigh to the wheel and slowly took your seatbelt off from across of you and leaned over the console
“fuck.” you zipped his pants down and he lifted his hips so you could pull them to his mid thigh and through his boxers you teased him a little bit by putting pressure over the hard part forming between his legs “y/n”
“calm down.” you lifted the boxers next and net his erection come out and he let out a breath but kept his focus on the road “just drive”
Conrad let out a groan as you wrapped your hand around him and slowly stroked him. He lifted your hips to get more friction from your hands and you laughed at his state. You used your thumb to wipe some pre-cum off the tip and he hit it head on the headrest keeping his eyes on the road
“just relax.” you looked up at him
“i can’t relax when you’re doing this to me.” he sighed and his hands tightened on the steering wheel.
You leaned down to lick the side of his erection starting from the bottom to the tip. Conrad’s hips were trying to add more friction but he stopped himself trying to enjoy the moment. Before you put him into your mouth you licked the tip and then put your mouth around him.
“fuck.” conrad let out through closed teeth
You continued his movements up and down and each time the boy above you let out multiple groans and moans at your actions. He moved one of his hands to wrap around your ponytail to help you move up and down to his speed.
“that’s it.” he glanced down quickly “mhm”
You moved to his movements trying to help him get to his speed going up and down hollowing your cheeks to help. He was a mess above you trying his hardest to pay attention to the road when your were below him and doing the best work ever.
“just let me.” he sighed “please” you nodded and he lifted his hips up and slammed into your mouth and controlling your ponytail at the speed. you were letting him take all the control just how he liked it “yeah, yeah.” he moved faster and you knew he was close “cumming-“ you were cut off by his load moan and his hips lifted off the seat cummings into your mouth and you tried to swallow as much as you could before he pulled you off of him and he went limp “fuck, that was good.” he looked down at you resting your head on his thigh and he moved some lose strands away from sticking to your forehead “good job, baby.”
“of course.” you smiled
“when we get to the house, you’re the main attraction.”
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deanssluvr · 4 months
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thought you were made for me
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part 2 | part 3
pairing: brother’s bsf!Joost Klein x fem!reader
warnings: mentions of drugs and alcohol
word count: 2.4k
a/n: this is my first fic so please be nice. I didn’t really expect to write more than 500 words lmao. Also, this isn’t proofread sorry. I plan on writing a part 2 for this.
It had already been a long and tough week. With just finishing the last of your final exams the week prior. Each exam felt like it took years off of your life. And the week itself felt as though it would never end. Not even mentioning the multiple all-nighters you pulled to study before. But when it was finally over you were beyond ecstatic. And now you got to finally be at home and relax.
It was relatively quiet morning. You had decided to stay in the comfort of your blanket for a while longer before deciding to head down to the kitchen. There you were greeted by your brother Ethan and his best friend Joost. They were making breakfast. Well, it was just your brother cooking and Joost waiting patiently. Ever since Joost finished touring, he’d been spending a lot of time at your house. Spending multiple nights in your guest room. Your parents never really minded because he was nice and respectful. Usually, they’re in your brother’s room playing video games or out doing something. You never really got the chance to see him a lot since you were off to college. But you were hoping that would change now that you were home.
“Good morning.” Joost smiled softly. Ethan turned away from the stove briefly to tell you good morning and offered you breakfast. You nodded and turned back Joost. He was sipping a cup coffee and the steam was slightly fogging up his glasses. He took them off and set them on the counter beside him.
“Good morning Joost.” You returned the smile. He moved next to you from where he was standing. 
“And how are you this morning?” he asked in a low tone. His voice was still laced with sleep.
“I’m good. Just glad to be back home. How are you this morning.” You looked up at him and through tired eyes.
“Better now,” he spoke, his voice barely above a whisper. It caught you off guard. Was he flirting with you? Before you can finish that thought your brother hands you both a plate of food. You thanked him and they walk out of the kitchen to the dining room. Leaving you to your thoughts.
Later on that day, you called your best friends. They discussed with you their plans with their newfound freedom. You were shocked at their ideas. Party here and bar hop there. You thought they were just as exhausted as you. The idea of getting wasted as a celebration wasn’t your favorite idea. You just wanted to catch up on sleep.
“But we’ve been doing nothing but staying in our dorms for finals. We NEED to go out,” she stated.
“I know. I know. But maybe we could do something a bit more laid back. Like the movies or that festival that’s in town.” I practically pleaded with them. But it was no use. They weren’t changing their minds, and I was outvoted two to one. The conversation shifted back to their ideas for celebration for the next few days.
After agreeing to meet up this weekend, you said your goodbyes to your friends and hung up the phone. But quickly after your brother texts you.
hey Joost has a concert tonight. i have an extra ticket. wanna go with me?
You thought about it for a good moment. You just wanted to get some extra sleep tonight, but on the other hand, you haven’t spent much time with your brother since you left for college. And now is a better time than ever to make up for lost time. Also, you just wanted another excuse to see Joost.
ofc sounds like fun
it’s tonight at 8. i’ll pick you up at 7
You texted him “okay” before setting your phone back down, and finished making yourself lunch.
As leaned over the sink, you checked your makeup one last time in the mirror. You used your nail to fix your lipstick. You stepped back to look over your overall outfit and decided you were happy with the outcome. You sprayed a bit of your favorite perfume on yourself. Checking the time you realized you were ready a bit early, so you sat in your living room. You started scrolling through Instagram as you waited. Then a notification popped up in your phone.
hey i’m outside.
You quickly checked your appearance once last time in a nearby mirror and checked your purse to make sure you had everything. When you felt satisfied with everything you grabbed your keys and left the house.
The ride to the venue was relatively smooth. You talked about what you’d miss in each other’s lives. He explained to you how he just found a new job as a bartender at a new bar downtown. He also told you how he was saving up for a new place. You told him that you were really happy for him. When he asked about you, you told him about how you just finished up finals week and now you finally have time off. He gave you a small chuckle and congratulated you.
The outdoor venue was packed that night and people were trying to rush to the front. You’re glad your brother was there as he kept a secure grip on you and was able to push you both to the barricades near the stage. It was extremely humid that night with a faint smell of weed and cigarette smoke clogging the air.
The lights dimmed slightly and you heard a beat starting to play over the speakers. You could feel the anticipation from the crowd and it made you even more excited as you leaned forward on the barricade. Then Joost ran on stage. Blue flashing lights engulfed him as he started performing and the crowd, including yourself, began jumping to the beat.
Once the energy died down slightly, you were able to take him in. His outfit was really simple tonight. He was in a white dress shirt with his sleeves rolled up giving us a glimpse at the tattoos that littered his arms, a pair of baggy jeans, and his black thick-rimmed glasses that were fogging up every so often. Something was enticing about him and you couldn’t keep your eyes off of him.
You had never heard his music before, but that didn’t stop you from letting loose. Everyone around you on the other hand, including your brother, is yelling the lyrics word for word. Joost takes notice of this and walks further downstage towards your brother, acknowledging him and smiling. Now you were able to get a good look at his face. He is even prettier up close you thought to yourself. Then he looks over to you, holding eye contact for just a split second before giving you a wink and continuing his performance. You were in utter disbelief at the encounter. You honestly thought you had imagined it. You were pulled back to reality when the loud beat of the next song started pouring into your ears.
“Did you enjoy the concert?” your brother asked as you both walked to his car. You were still feeling the buzz of the concert. It felt like the night shouldn’t end here. Maybe because you wanted to see Joost again.
“Yes, I did! His music is so good. I had an amazing time.” You left out the part about him winking at you, but you felt that you should keep that bit of information to yourself.
“Well, I’m glad that you had a good time.” His phone chimed with a notification. As he checked it you decided to check your phone. Your friends were blowing up your phone about the concert. They loved Joost so they wanted to know how it went. As you texted them back, your brother spoke.
“Hey, Joost is having a little after-party at a club nearby. He’s asking if the both of us wanted to go.“ You considered it for a moment. You did want to see him again. But when you did what would you say? Maybe he does this to all of his fans. Your brother senses your indecisiveness and tries to help.
“You don’t have to go. I would understand. I mean you’re not close to him. I just asked because he said he wanted to see you.” You were surprised at his request.
“No. I want to. I would love to go.” You stated as you gave him a reassuring smile. He nodded as he started the car towards the new destination.
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Your eyes scan over the scene. A DJ was blasting music over the speakers, but it was more near the dance floor. The place was dim with small, warm lights keeping tables and the lit. You follow your brother as he leads you to a table that seats a few guys. When you got close enough you realized it was Joost and who you assumed were a few of his friends. He loudly acknowledged your brother as they shared an embrace. They share a few words before he sees you.
“Hey. I’m glad you came.” he hugged you and you embraced him back. He smelled faintly of cigarette smoke, but it didn’t bother you. You liked it. You both lingered for what was probably a moment too long before he let go. You looked over to your brother and saw that he went to talk to the other guys at the table. Leaving you with Joost. 
His eyes slowly scanned over you as he took in your appearance. Once his eyes reached yours, you noticed a different look in his eyes. Almost like hunger. Being under his gaze almost made you feel nervous.
“Come sit with me and let me pour you a drink.” He didn’t give you much of a choice as he grabbed your wrist lightly, his fingers brushing against your palm. He guided you to sit with him in the booth. He pulled you close enough to the point that your thighs were touching. You liked around and realized it was just the two. You scan the place and see your brother and his other friends have run off to the bar. Probably to do shots you thought to yourself. 
You focused your attention back to Joost who was carefully pouring you both a drink. Though it was hard to see, a small dim light slightly lit up his face allowing you to still see his face. His hair was even messier than it was at the concert but he still looked amazing. You notice his strikingly delicate features and his captivating eyes that seem to sparkle under the light. Your eyes then trace down his arms and you take note of the tattoos that are there.
“Here.” He pulls you out of your trance by handing you a glass with brown liquor in it. You take the glass from him, your finger faintly brushing his. You didn’t drink much and when you did it was mainly vodka. Nonetheless, you drank it anyway. He watched as you took a sip and smiled when you seemed to enjoy it. He drank some of his own before turning to you.
“Did you enjoy tonight’s show?” He leaned in closer making sure you heard his question. 
“Yes, I did. Your music is really good. I wish I had discovered your music sooner.” Even with how dark it is you notice the smile he gave you.
“I'm happy you had a good time. You know I know we don’t know each other that well, but I would love for us to get closer.” Once again he leaned in, but this time it was in your ear. His warm breath against your ear sent goosebumps across your skin. As he leaned back to look at you, he stopped just inches away from your face. You can faintly feel his breath against your lips. You swear can see his eyes glance at your lips for a second before looking back into your eyes. His expression changed again into what you saw when he first greeted you. Hunger. His eyes were focused on yours and it made you nervous. The air suddenly changed. It felt more thicker and warmer.
“Let’s go dance.” He offered his hand as he slid out of the booth. You smiled and took his hand. He guided you to the crowd on the dance floor and pushed you both near the center. There was a dark blue light that engulfed everyone. The beat took over you as you started dancing. You let your hips away to the rhythm. You felt Joost’s hands find their way to your waist, and he pulled you closer to him. 
You continue to dance against him, grinding on him. His hands started to explore your body as they found themselves on your hips, and then slowly went down to the hem of your short skirt. His fingers found their way under and he started to rub the soft skin. His head found its way closer to the crook of your neck. You feel his warm breath on your collarbone as he speaks.
“Ik heb je nodig (I need you)” He breathes into your neck and it sends shivers down your spine. With the light grip he has on you, he turns around so now you’re facing him. You wrap your arms around his neck pulling him closer to you. Your faces are inches away from each other. The air around you is hot and thick. You look into his eyes and see the same familiar look as before. Even under the lights, you can see his pupils blown with lust. 
You don’t know if it was the alcohol but you felt bold. So you pulled him into a kiss which he happily accepted. His hands moved from the hem of your skirt up to the curve of your ass where he squeezed lightly. The kiss became more intense as you both realized how hungry you were. Your hands found their way to his hair and you pulled gently at the white locks. He pulled away only to say something.
“We should take this somewhere else.” He suggested between pants. You nod quickly. He takes your hand and guides you off the dance floor. Your head was buzzing and you felt as though you were caught in a haze. He leads you back to the table and you see your brother and some of his friends there with a few girls. Joost let go of your hand only for a moment when telling your brother that you were both leaving early. He told him you weren’t feeling good. Surprisingly he wasn’t suspicious of anything and only told you both to drive safe. With that, you and Joost make your way to his car. You both get settled in before he looks over at you.
“My place or yours liefje (sweetheart)”
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Tranquility.
You're not good at keeping secrets from the boys. Turns out, Will isn't either.
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Pairing - Will Miller x female reader. Benny Miller, Santiago Garcia, Frankie Morales x female reader.
Age Rating - 18+
Warnings - Brief allusion to sexual content. No cursing in this one!!
Word Count - 4.3k
Author's Note - hi lovelies. here's another triple frontier fic for you all!! i love writing these boys so much. we all know by now that i am a total will girly, so it's no surprise he takes the lead in this one. but all the boys are included - i can't leave them out <3. as always, if you have any specific requests or thoughts, send them over!! lots of love x
my other triple frontier fics - Tethered, Time, and Home Is Where The Heart Is.
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“Baby, we gotta go!”
“Coming!” you yell, running down the stairs with a duffel bag in your hand. “Almost forgot my toothbrush.”
“You’d forget your head if it wasn’t on your neck,” Will winks, nudging you with his shoulder.
“Shut up, Miller,” you tease, no real malice in your voice. You lean up to peck his lips gently, before he takes a step back.
“We can’t be late again. I can’t make up another excuse – last time was bad enough.”
“That was literally your fault! You were the one that couldn’t keep your hands off me, like some sort of teenage boy,” you laugh.
“It was the green dress’ fault, not mine. I don’t regret it,” he chuckles.
Will winks at you again before picking up your bags and walking outside to pack up the car.
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Four days by the lake with your boys sounded like complete and utter bliss. When Frankie had suggested it, initially, everyone had laughed it off. Realistically, it wouldn’t work. You all struggle to plan a day off at the same time, never mind multiple. It sounded like a sweet little idea. Nothing more.
Then, life got stressful. Work was tough on everyone, families causing issues, deadlines looming – the mundane routine of every day wearing the five of you down. Eventually, it was Santiago that snapped.
“We’re going to that damn lake house,” he exclaimed one evening in Benny’s backyard. “I don’t care what we have to do. I don’t care if we all have to call in sick. We are going to the lake house.”
He looked around at his friends, expecting them to instantly shut him down. Instead, he was met with unanimous nods of agreement.
That was months ago. It was a logistical nightmare, working out your schedules to intertwine with each other, but you did it. You were ridiculously ready for four days of swimming, drinking, sunbathing and laughing with your favourite people in the entire world. It sounded like the well deserved break everyone needed.
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Will’s warm palm meets the bare skin of your thigh as he drives. The roads are long and monotonous, but you don’t care. Everything is an adventure with him.
“You still sure about not telling ‘em?” he asks, blue eyes flitting over to you briefly. He’s got a gentle smile on his face. He always does when he’s with you. It’s like his default setting.
“Yeah, I think I am. Are you?”
“Yeah. Think we should live in paradise a little longer.”
“Paradise, huh?” you tease, squeezing his hand.
“You know it is. I’m on cloud nine every moment I’m with you, baby.”
His words make your head spin, and you’re glad you’re sitting down already. You wonder everyday how you got so lucky. It’s rare, to know with full certainty that you are someone’s favourite person in the world. The centre of their universe. Sometimes, it’s overwhelming. Mostly, it’s astounding. It warms up your bones, settles itself carefully into your ribcage, pumping your heart to the beat of Will’s love. What a gift.
Which is why you’ve decided to keep the two of you a secret from the boys. You know that it won’t change anything between the group, not really – but you’re a little worried nonetheless. It’s scary, altering a dynamic that works so well. The five of you, stuck like glue, know each other like the lyrics to your favourite songs. You know each others strengths, weaknesses, favourite ice cream flavours, middle names, star signs, families – everything. It’s the kind of friendship that binds you together for life. Changing that in any way would break your heart. Will’s too. You know, deep down, that they’ll be perfectly accepting. But the fear still lingers, ugly and unwavering.
Also - you and Will didn’t take the most conventional route into a relationship.
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The two of you met in Delta Force. Co-workers, first. Comrades in arms. He had your back, you had his. You saved each other’s lives countless times. You’d stitch up each other’s wounds, carry each other back to base, share your water even though you only had a drop left. You were a team.
Then, you became friends. It’s hard not to, when you’re thrown into a life-or-death situation. You spent 24 hours a day together, wherever you were sent – sometimes Asia, sometimes South America, sometimes Africa. You got to know each other, learnt one another’s quirks and habits and likes and dislikes. The five of you bonded quickly and effortlessly. It made you a slick team, your missions running like clockwork. You could all predict each other’s movements, finish each other’s sentences. It’s what made you so successful, so revered.
After Delta Force, you became friends outside of work. Forced proximity friendship is one thing, but actually making the time to see each other back on home soil is another. You were worried that you were going to drift, and all of the trust built would perish. That wasn’t the case. The five of you quickly adjusted to being home together. You’d all spend Saturdays in Frankie’s backyard, Friday nights on Santiago’s porch, Sundays in Will’s kitchen. You’d pop by and see Benny on a Wednesday night after work, ready to watch another episode of that reality show you both couldn’t get enough of. You’d see Will any chance you got. Sunday morning farmers market trips and early swims and pancakes for breakfast and why don’t you just stay over? It’ll save you driving home.
You’d been best friends with Will for years before you realised how you felt about him.
It’d hit you, all of a sudden, one Sunday morning. You drove over to Will’s to pick him up, ready to go to the flea market downtown. You were going to grab lunch after, maybe cook some dinner together later. Just an average day.
You let yourself in to his house using the key he’d had made for you years ago. You had keys to all the boy’s places – just in case. You found Will at the stove, shirtless, golden skin on display. Whatever he was cooking smelled heavenly, and you wondered for a minute how it was fair that he was talented at everything.
“Morning, Miller,” you sing, throwing your bag down and striding over to him.
“Morning, sweetheart,” he replies, turning around to face you. He opens his arms and you step into his space, wrapping yourself around him and resting your head on his bare chest. You inhale, breathing in his scent deliberately. He smells like warmth and sleep and sunshine and promises.
You take a step back, craning your neck to look at him. The morning sunlight is gleaming through the windows, casting a gold hue across the room. Will’s hair is glowing, illuminating him like some sort of halo. Angelic boy.
Those ocean blue eyes survey you carefully. He rests his hands on your hips, pulling you in closer.
“What’s on your mind? I can see it runnin’ a mile a minute,” he murmurs. You try to look down, but he catches your chin with his thumb and forefinger, gently guiding you back up.
How do you explain that you’ve just realised that you’re completely, utterly, irreversibly in love with Will Miller? That it’s just dawned on you like a sunrise, warm and promising? How do you tell someone that you’re quite convinced you’ll drop dead if you don’t kiss them immediately? Is it even possible to explain these feelings? Is it possible to put all of these emotions into words? Are there enough words in any language to explain the enormity of what you’re experiencing?
Instead, you simply say,
“I’m in love with you.”
Will’s pupils blow wide, and he sways slightly, as if the weight of your confession has knocked him off balance. You steady him by cradling his face, forcing him to look at you.
“You don’t have to say it back,” you continue. “But I’ve kind of just put the pieces together, and it seems stupid not to tell you. You of all people know that life is short and fragile and can change in the blink of an eye, so I just thought –”
Will cuts you off by smashing his lips against yours. The kiss is passionate and tender and so full of love you’re convinced you could get drunk off it. He pulls back for air and looks at you earnestly.
“Don’t have to say it back? Sweetheart, do you know how often I’ve dreamt of you saying those words to me?”
You can’t help but break out into a grin. You feel like you’re floating, levitating above ground, held up purely by the love William Miller has for you.
“You have?” you ask, disbelief written on your features. “Why didn’t you say anything?”
“I was waiting for you,” he beams. “I knew you’d figure it out eventually.”
You smile at him ear to ear before jumping into his arms. You kiss him again, legs wrapping around his waist to anchor yourself, closing the distance. He spins around the kitchen with you in his arms, the joy of being in love filling the room.
Suddenly, Will puts you down.
“Stay here,” he tells you, before sprinting upstairs.
Usually, you can predict Will’s every move. But not now. Now, you’re more confused than you’ve ever been.
He returns, placing a kiss to your forehead, before getting down on one knee in front of you.
“Marry me,” he says, complete certainty in his voice. You’ve never heard him this assured.
“Will… what?” you ask incredulously. You confessed your love for each other ten minutes ago, and you’ve skipped straight to marriage, apparently.
“Listen. I know it’s crazy. I know it seems fast. But we’ve loved each other for years, sweetheart. I realised when I met you that I was never, ever going to love anyone else again.”
He pulls out a box from the pocket of his pyjama pants and opens it to reveal a gorgeous diamond ring. It’s understated and it’s elegant and it’s just so you.
“I bought this two years ago. Maybe you think I’m insane, and maybe you’re going to run out of that door the minute I stop talking. But I’ve never been surer of anything in my entire life.”
You’ve been trying to catch your breath unsuccessfully for the past few minutes. It feels like everything is moving in slow motion, and your brain is trying to keep up.
“Will, we aren’t even technically dating,” you tease playfully. You already know your answer. You just like hearing him bear his truth to you like this.
“We’ve been dating for years, technically,” he rallies. “Everyone always thinks we’re a couple. We’re together every weekend, we go on dates, you sleep over… we went grocery shopping last week!”
You grin, remembering how you’d jokingly argued over whether to get the red or the green grapes, and how you’d ended up getting both. It was all so domestic it made your heart ache.
The two of you sit in the silence for a minute, Will still on one knee. He’s looking up at you like you hung the stars in the sky just for him. There’s no doubt in your mind what you’ll say.
“Yes.”
“Yes?”
“Yes, Will. God, yes. The easiest yes of my entire life.”
He jumps up to grab you, spinning you in circles. You kiss him with so much force he stumbles backwards. Will takes your left hand, and carefully slides the ring onto your finger. It looks like it’s always belonged there.
You always knew it’d be Will Miller. It’s the only thing that makes sense.
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That was months ago. The other boys know that you and Will spend a lot of time together one on one, so no one has suspected anything out of the ordinary. You have no doubt they’ll be happy for you both, but you’re content to keep everything a secret a little while longer. It’s easier, that way. It means you and Will get to keep living in your bubble of bliss, unphased by the outside world. You’ll tell them soon enough. You’re just trying to savour every last second.
“We’ll tell them soon,” you reassure Will, interlocking your fingers with his where they rest on your leg. “We’ll make it a whole thing, if you like. It feels like something that warrants a celebration.”
“Oh, definitely,” he grins, turning his eyes back to the road. “We’re almost there. So, you’re gonna have to act like you’re not totally head over heels in love with me for four days. You think you can manage?”
You scoff playfully, and squeeze his hand.
“I’m sure I’ll be okay,” you tease. He chuckles, and the melody of it is music to your ears.
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You arrive at the lake house only ten minutes late, which you and Will agree is not entirely unacceptable.
“Finally, they’re here!” Benny yells as he bounds over to the car. He envelopes you in a bear hug, picking you up off the ground accidentally.
“Frankie is inside,” Santiago reassures when he catches you looking over his shoulder. You turn to give him a hug, and he kisses you on the cheek. Old habit.
“Santi, did you pack bug spray? You know the mosquitoes love you,” you wink, running your hands through his hair affectionately. He has greys coming through, and they suit him beautifully.
“Yes, hermosa, I got your text reminding me,” he smiles. “Thank you.”
You and Will grab your bags and make your way inside, where Frankie is making margaritas.
“Hola, mi amor,” he greets, wrapping his arms around you. “How was the journey?”
“All good, Francisco,” you reply. “I have a very reliable chauffeur.”
Will laughs from behind you, and it makes your knees weak.
“Bad news, you guys!” Benny interrupts, jumping to sit on the counter. “You two have to share a room, since you were the last ones here. Finders, keepers, and all that.”
That really isn’t the inconvenience that the boys think it is, but you and Will play along nonetheless.
“Damn it. He snores, you know!” you laugh, looking over to where Will is pretending to be offended, hand over his heart.
“That’s what you get for being late, losers!” Benny retorts, throwing his head back in amusement. Everyone laughs along with him, and all the tension melts from your body.
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It’s day one, and you’re already struggling. You’re all relaxing on the dock, soaking up the sun’s rays. Will is wearing his forest green swim trunks with a ridiculously small inseam, his strong thighs on display. You so badly want to kiss them, lick them, bite down on them in the way you know he likes. Instead, you sip your margarita and settle for ogling him over the rim of your sunglasses.
He dives into the lake elegantly, and a bead of sweat drips down your neck. He breaks the surface, coming up for air, and pushes his hair back, water cascading down his golden skin. He’s glowing, beaming, gleaming in the sunlight like an ancient marble statue. You’re practically panting. Santiago notices.
“You okay, hermosa?” he asks, giving you a once over.
“Yeah, Santi, I’m good. Just super warm,” you lie. He seems to buy it, because he moves to grab his book, fanning you with it. Admittedly, the light breeze does cool you off, and distracts you from Will. Double win.
“Thank you, kind sir,” you joke, as he pretends to tip his hat towards you.
“You should join us!” Benny shouts from the lake. When did he even jump in?
“Yeah, come on, darlin’” Will chimes in, watching you with a slight smirk on his face. He’s not going to pass up the chance to see you sun soaked and dripping wet.
“Fine!” you huff jokingly, pulling your oversized t shirt (which you’re realising belongs to Frankie – when did you steal that?) over your head. You’re left in a bikini that leaves little to the imagination, the bright colour accentuating your skin beautifully. You look good. You feel good.
Will looks you up and down and takes a deep breath. You’re just friends, remember? He’s trying to convince himself, attempting to make the act somewhat believable. You break him out of his thoughts by running along the dock as fast as you can, and diving into the lake with a surprising amount of grace.
The five of you spend all afternoon in the water. Benny thinks it’s hilarious to pick you up, placing you on his shoulders before jumping backwards, sending you both flying through the air. You all play catch, laughing when Frankie misses the ball and accidentally punches Santi right in the stomach. You and Will easily fall back into your old habits of being friends, but you can’t help but notice the way his eyes linger just a second too long every now and again. You’re sure nobody else clocks on, all of the boys too busy splashing each other like children.
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When the evening comes, you all shower and dry off while Will and Frankie make dinner. You, Benny and Santi curl up on the couch, trying to warm each other up after hours of being in the water. You eat, you laugh, and you all swap stories about the things that you’ve missed since you last saw each other properly. It’s bliss. Perfect tranquility.
The sun sets, and you all move outside to the deck. Santi starts a campfire, and the five of you grab beers, settling into the warmth of the crackling wood. Everyone is relaxed, not a care in the world. You wish, for a moment, that life could always be like this. As if reading your thoughts, Will reaches out and brushes your cheekbone with his thumb in a fleeting moment, before retracting his hand as if nothing happened.
“I’m gonna make us some warm ciders,” Frankie decides, rising from his chair.
“I’ll come and help you. You always put way too much alcohol in - these idiots can’t handle it,” you signal towards where Benny, Will and Santiago are sat. They all scoff at you, laughing because they know it’s true.
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You sit atop the counter next to where Frankie begins gathering his ingredients. When a strand of hair falls into his eyes, you move it away gently.
“Will you let me cut your hair tomorrow? It’s getting in your way,” you ask him softly.
“Of course, mi amor. Wouldn’t trust anyone else.”
He smiles at you, and your heart swells. You love this man so much - some days you wonder how you got so lucky. All five of you are bonded for life, best friends until the end. But there’s no denying that you and Frankie have always understood each other on another level.
He stops making the drinks, moving to stand between your legs. He looks at you intently, as if he’s trying to solve something.
“I like seeing you happy like this,” he murmurs.
“How can I not be?” you whisper back. “I’m with my favourite people. I have everything I could ever want.”
“Yeah, but this is different.”
You scrunch your brows in confusion, and he chuckles. He begins to draw slow circles just above your bare knee. You can tell he’s thinking carefully.
“It’s Will, isn’t it?” he asks, gentle smile on his face.
In this moment, you could lie. You could feign innocence, deny it with your life, maintain that you and Will are just friends. But what’s the use? Why hide the best thing that’s ever happened to you from one of the people you love the most in the world?
“Yeah,” you grin. “It’s Will.”
He’s practically beaming at you now, equal parts proud of himself and you.
“Knew it,” he murmurs, careful to keep his voice down. “Did something happen?”
You realise now that there’s absolutely no point in lying to Frankie. You’ve come this far. Might as well tell him the truth.
“We’re engaged,” you whisper, grinning from ear to ear.
He pauses for a moment, processing the news. You can see the shock registering on his face. Then, he lunges forward, wrapping his arms around you.
“Oh my god, hermosa! You’re kidding!”
He’s squeezing you so tight you can barely breathe. You hear a shout from the boys outside and remember where you are.
“We haven’t told anyone yet. We’re just living in our little bubble of happiness for a while.”
“Hey, I get it,” he reassures. “I’m so happy for you. Both of you. I knew it’d happen eventually. It was just a question of when.”
You hug him again, so overwhelmed with love. What a miracle, to be loved like this by so many brilliant people.
“We’ll tell everyone soon, I promise. We were thinking of making it a party, a whole celebration.”
“Of course. Just tell me when, and I’ll be there.”
He pinches your knee playfully, before making his way back to his drinks, smile still plastered across his face.
“Hey, Francisco?” you murmur, still aware of the volume of your voice.
“Yeah?” he turns, giving you his full attention.
“So, I know it’s not traditional, but, I mean, when have me and Will ever done traditional?” you both laugh, and you continue. “I was just thinking – and you don’t have to say yes… I’d love it if you did, but really, you don’t have to – “
“Spit it out, mi amor,” he teases gently.
“Will you be my best man?”
He stops in his tracks, suddenly serious, and you’re worried you’ve made a mistake. Then, he breaks out into a grin, practically running over to bear hug you again.
“Of course I will,” he confirms into your ear. “I’d love nothing more.”
“I love you,” you tell him earnestly.
“I love you too, hermosa. So much.”
Frankie kisses you on the forehead once, then again, and begins to pick up the drinks he’s made.
“They’re gonna get suspicious if we’re gone too long. You know how they get,” he winks, leaving you alone in the kitchen.
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You sit in your happiness for a little while, just basking in the glow. You’ve never felt so at peace.
Will wanders into the kitchen, immediately coming over to stand in front of you. His warm palms find your hips, and he leans in to kiss you softly.
“Hi, sugar,” he murmurs against your mouth.
“Hi, handsome,” you mutter back.
“You okay? You disappeared,” he asks, fingers moving in warm circles on the bare skin of your waist.
“I’m good. So good,” you smile, kissing him again.
It’s then you realise what you’ve done. You broke the rule – don’t tell the boys.
“Will?”
“Yeah, baby?”
“I have something I need to confess.”
He pulls away so he can see your face, and smiles at you gently, before putting the pieces together in his head.
“You told Frankie, didn’t you?” he asks, still smiling.
There’s a pause before you bare your truth.
“Yes. I’m sorry! He kind of figured it out himself, and he asked, and I didn’t have the heart to lie to him. He’s my best friend, he can see right through me at any given moment. I know I was the one who said we shouldn’t tell them and I know this makes me a hypocrite and I’m sorry – “
Will cuts you off - just like that day in his kitchen - by smashing his lips to yours.
“It’s okay. Sweetheart, it’s okay,” he reassures when you pull away.
“Really?”
“Yes. I promise.”
He rests his forehead against yours, and allows you to breathe him in. Then, he chuckles softly.
“What?” you ask.
“We’re idiots,” he replies.
“I mean, yes. But why?”
He chuckles again, clearly amused, before answering,
“I totally just told Benny and Santi while you were in here telling Frankie.”
You process the information, before bursting into a fit of giggles. He joins you, the both of you laughing like fools.
“You’re kidding!”
“I wish I was. Benny made a comment, said he’s kinda noticed that something has changed, and I just sort of confessed.”
You’re both laughing so hard your sides hurt. What are the chances? It all feels like fate. The two of you, together. The timing of the evening. It couldn’t have worked out any more perfect.
“We’re idiots,” you agree, throwing your arms around his neck. Will pulls you off the counter and spins you around, making you shriek. It’s the most beautiful déjà vu.
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The two of you make your way back out to the deck. As you walk over to the boys at the campfire, you’re suddenly caught off guard by two of them rugby tackling you, the three of you barrelling into the ground with a thud. Benny and Santiago are crushing you beneath them, shouting as they do it.
“Congratulations!”
“Hell yeah, sweetheart!”
“How did you even keep this a secret for so long?”
“Yeah, when were you planning to tell us, huh?”
“Can’t believe you’re marrying my brother. Oh my god, we’re gonna be family!”
“The five of us are already family, Ben.”
“Yeah, but, like, legally. Brother and sister!”
Benny’s hair is in your mouth and Santiago’s knee is in your ribcage and your earring is caught in someone’s shirt and the grass is scratching your back and you can’t breathe. Will and Frankie are watching from a distance, chuckling. You wouldn’t change it for the world.
Tranquility.
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Anyone ask for the commentary yet for the latest chapter >:3 *dies*
You’d be the first!
So this chapter is cursed. Let’s talk about that first. 
You probably noticed that my writing output has been in the gutter this year. I have not written half as much as I should have. There are two main reasons why. The first is that I finally decided to get off my ass and have a more enriching personal life. This means a lot more of my evenings and weekends have been spent exploring other hobbies or taking weekend trips. I don’t regret any of those, and they have really improved my life overall (but I do write more when I am a sad little shut-in).
The second, more pressing reason was that there was a very important wedding I was the maid of honor for. That means I have spent a lot of my free time this year planning a bachelorette, a bridal shower, and helping with general wedding prep. I honestly was not nearly as busy as an expert maid of honor would have been, but all of this took up so much of my brain space that I was having trouble being creative. Multiple times, I would go to a coffee shop with plans to write, only to spend the entire time stressing about buying a new dress or researching hotels. 
I did not realize how stressed I was about this whole thing until literally this week. The wedding is over now, and I am already biting huge chunks into the upcoming chapter. I just have so much more brain space to write. I feel free. 
All that’s to say that this chapter was primarily written the month leading up to the wedding, and my head was Not There. I was struggling to figure the chapter out, and that struggle is reflected in the quality of the prose. For that, I apologize, as inevitable as it was. 
I won’t make any major revision to this chapter, but I have plans to redo my proof-reading. There is an egregious number of typos in this chapter, more than I consider acceptable for a one person team of me. 
(That being said, my typos have gotten worse this past year; ever since AI was integrated into Grammarly and Google Docs, both have been godawful for helping me fix errors. I appreciate how lenient you all have been with my most blatant mistakes.) 
Now that all of that is established, let’s talk about this chapter.
This introduction to Proxi is really, really bad. I am frankly a little embarrassed that I went ahead and published it. While I had a vision for the first few scenes of Link trying to help Proxi and Jakucho’s aid afterwards, I didn’t realize until the day of writing that I actually had 0 plans for how Warriors and Proxi’s first conversation would go. 
I am not even joking. I have a bunch of plans for their interactions together afterwards (which will appear next chapter). But their first conversation once Proxi started to get better? None. 
So what little they talked together here feels like a waste of space. What’s worse, I don’t even know what I would change the dialogue to in order to fix it. My brain is blank. I don’t know.  It’ll probably hit me in a few weeks. This is the trouble with publishing what is essentially the first draft of a story. If my initial ideas are solid, it’s great. But when my brain farts, I’m screwed.
That being said, my favorite part of the past section is that first half where Link frets over how to help Proxi, as well as Jakucho’s speech about the fairies disappearing. 
I have been trying to subtly establish this era of Hyrule as being one that is shocking devoid of magic; having Jakucho mourn the loss of fairies and what omen that could mean feels like I am ruining things. Nonetheless, I just really like the idea of Jakucho having this small moment of wonder over seeing a fairy, as well as her verbalizing these fears that darker times are ahead. 
I think I just enjoy reading about older people having the same anxieties about the world as younger people. It’s more comforting to me than an all-knowing mentor. 
So this chapter has a lot of random names splattered all over the place. Me being me, I stole some of the names from other media and such I enjoy. I’ll point out any fun connections as I find them. 
So for Proxi’s list of names for Link, there’s two of note. The first is Grimshaw, which is the name of the male lead from Lightlark. Despite how much I talk about Fourth Wing on this blog, Lightlark is the bad book I am truly passionate about. 
The second is Wen-li, which is for Yang Wen-li from Legend of the Galactic Heroes. He’s the character of all time for me, and I will go insane if I think about him for too long.
This Proxi section was supposed to go on a little longer, but by the time it came to write it, I was 100% over this chapter. Luckily, next chapter will be a fresh slate and I can finally deliver on all my promises about Proxi’s return. 
I cannot emphasize enough how frustrating it is to know that I fucked up an important character’s return. It’s... sigh. C’est la vie. Whatever. 
Onto the present day:
So I have a particular problem with the present day section. The last chapter, this chapter, and the one I am writing now are all the same plot point in my outline. I severely underestimated how long the lead up to a Very Important Event was going to be. No doubt, I have probably made similar mistakes before. But I am trying to finish this story, so any time I have to draw out the pacing, I die a little on the inside.
I think I initially planned to just skim over how Warriors got to the castle, but then I realized that this was the politics stuff that is the supposed bread and butter of the story. But the reason why I wanted to skim over everything was (as Legend pointed out) fucking networking.
What’s worse, I got to this chapter and realized that, realistically, Warriors should have to spend at least a few months building up a cult of personality. This should be a (purposeful) multi-chapter arc. I don’t want to do that, so I tried to really emphasize how much Warriors was using his reputation as the hero and legends surrounding it to his advantage. Does it still feel unrealistic? Yeah, but we’re just going to have to cope with it. 
Sevas is named for the male lead in Ava Reid’s Juniper & Thorn, which was sitting on my desk when I realized the priest needed a name. 
Colonel Remarque is named for Erich Remarque, author of All Quiet On the Western Front. I think I had made a post name-dropping him around the time I got to this character.
Matthew Thorn... again, Thorn is for Reid’s book. Matthew was just the most bland name I could think of. 
Vlad Dubarry... so I was watching both Castlevania and Rose of Versailles and took the first and surname from both respectively. 
Between the conversation with the priest, the provost office, and Remarque, I was trying to give out a few more details every time to paint a clear picture without boring the reader by reiterating information over and over again. Unfortunately, I still managed to write three pretty boring scenes. 
That being said, I think the friction Remarque offered was interesting to write, even if I had to resist pointing out every single plot hole during it. 
So everything from the castle to Spirit being poisoned took me the longest to write. I knew it was boring, but I could not figure out a way to make it more exciting without omitting the networking stuff entirely. I didn’t really hit a stride with this chapter until I got to Spirit being poisoned. 
The entire time Spirit was being poisoned, I was rubbing my hands together maniacally. I have been searching for a good moment to have a true poisoning in this story and I finally got it. 
Also, I think if this chapter was of higher quality, someone out there would have realized that, for purely medical reasons, Hyrule had to technically give Spirit and smooch on the lips. There should be at least two very silly memes about this. But, alas. The quality.
You can tell I ran into the realization that, realistically, the Royal Guard’s structure would be more complex than I have alluded to previously. Very importantly, you can tell I realized that I should have mentioned the King’s Guard sooner if they were really going to be this powerful subsection of the Royal Guard.
I actually like how the idea that the King’s Guard is only super powerful in matters relating to the king, aka: Castle Town, and is pretty insignificant otherwise. The bureaucratic bullshit that must cause feels very real. But you can tell that I have no idea what rank that would make Endicott. I have been bending over backwards to not state that man’s ranking. 
That being said, his absence from Warriors’s social circle until now is kinda important. Put a pin in that. It will come back.
Also, Endicott is a name I stole from Over the Garden Wall. I picked it because it sounds like the name of someone important. I picked Roald at randomed.
I am really happy that a lot of you have been enjoying the growing distrust the Chain has for Spirit. Insert rant about how victims have to remain palatable in order to be emphasized with, and how tragic it is that the only person who seems to understand that is the person who traumatized him in the first place. 
I feel like I have been fumbling Time’s character a bit, and his conversation at the floor of Spirit’s bed is me finally getting back on track with him. I enjoyed writing that so much, from him trying to fold the scarf to him being upset that no one has learned their lesson yet, all while still not learning a lesson himself. 
There was going to be a comment somewhere that Spirit is in such bad shape in part because his lungs are weak from all that smoking he does, but I honestly don’t know if anyone but Spirit would make that connection. 
I also need to put Legend and Midna together more. They can be so snarky, and I want them to keep a running commentary of Warriors and Spirit’s bullshit like they are two sports announcers watching a football game.
I first imagined Spirit and Warriors’s conversation taking place on the parapet, and came to the same realization about the ladders that Spirit had. I’m glad I put them by the moat, though. The bit about the smell is probably my favorite bit of prose in the chapter. 
I also really like this conversation between Spirit and Warriors. It’s not as insanity inducing as their past bullshit has been, but it hits a few notes. I like Warriors showing off how much he understands Spirit’s abilities (via the jacket), as well as Spirit’s utter disbelief that Warriors is capable of caring for anyone but himself. 
I was also trying really hard to put more of their bullshit into subtext. I have a bad habit of having characters just state what they are feeling out loud, so I am trying to write more coded dialogue. It’s never just about a toaster, etc. 
Warriors was also having such a night of self-discovery. First he had a little moment to freak out about how much his sincere attempts to help sound like manipulation. Then he realized that he would probably never be fully exonerated from his past. Big night for him.
Being unable to fully fix your past is part of the reason why I buffer against the idea of Warriors having a redemption arc. That implies a certain amount of undoing that is just not possible. I don’t know if I am putting that well. However, I am concerned that I am letting my Catholic upbringing color my perspective.
That being said, if Catholicism was a thing in Hyrule, Warriors would be that and be plagued by Catholic Guilt
He’s Catholic coded.
Irish Catholic, to be specific. There’s a difference. 
Anyway, Four. When Four showed up, I was going to have this bit of dialogue where Spirit would allude to knowing about Vio (and therefore, Four) having a relationship with Shadow. It would have been nestled in a larger, coded bit of dialogue where Four would obliquely imply that he was starting to suspect what the Hot Mess is. I cut it because A) Spirit is so socially inept that he cannot do subtly like that, and B) Spirit’s spirit senses would not give him the ability to know about Shadow. 
I also did not want to commit to Four figuring it out first, if at all. 
I have so many ideas about what Warriors the Symbol means to the people of Castle Town that I will hopefully be able to elaborate on in this upcoming chapter.
Realistically, Hyrule Castle should probably be more like a fortress. But again, I have been watching The Rose of Versailles, and I just really liked the idea of the castle being this symbol of opulence during a time of poor economics. The people are struggling but the nobles are thriving, babes. 
Also, Endicott is so much fun to write. He’s like the true antagonistic version of Lincoln. That man was enjoying making Warriors squirm, and I was having a blast writing it. The sexual favors line? I was utterly delighted. 
Realistically, Endicott probably could have been replaced with Whitestone. However, Whitestone is still on the front and I don’t regret putting him there to be Wind’s superior during his short stint as a soldier. (Even if I still think I could have cut out Whitestone in favor of giving Impa more to do.)
I also feel bad for killing Meemaw off so suddenly, but I was enchanted by the idea of her name having to be crossed off because the death was that  recent. 
I also was going to have Endicott spare Warriors for unknown reasons, with the reveal that Ganondorf had been bribing him coming later in the story, However, I was so worried about this seeming too-easy for Warriors that I decided to reveal that detail early. 
Okay, King of Hyrule stuff.
I’m trying to play at this idea of Zelda’s reputation not matching her actual role. Earlier in the story, Warriors describes her as a socialite with no political sense, and Zelda derisively thinks that of herself as well. Then that bit about her being the face of the kingdom is supposed to contradict that perception. She can’t just be a socialite if she had been the mouthpiece of the king since she was a child. 
There’s supposed to be multiple mistakes going on here: Warriors assuming the worst of Zelda, a sexist perception of Zelda by society as a whole, and Zelda feeling worthless because she knows she’s just a symbol. Not sure if I conveyed any of that well. 
Reuenthal’s dementia was caused in part by a stroke, but he also has a condition called prosopometamorphopsia, which is a form of face blindness where faces become distorted the longer you look at them. 
Fun fact is that I generally knew that there was some kind of condition that had made Reuenthal isolate from other people, but I did not pick prosopometamorphopsia until I read this article from the New Yorker. I won’t go as far as to say that I wrote an accurate version of the disorder; I definitely played up the emotional distress it causes for dramatic effect. That is probably problematic, so please do not trust this story as a definitive source on it. 
This also went unsaid in the story, but I imagine that because every daughter in the royal family is named Zelda, they probably go more by their middle names. I almost named dropped one of her sisters as Zelda Artemis, just to be mean.
The last line “A week later, everything went to hell” is, admittedly, very silly. I had a whole section describing what that meant written, but it seriously sucked. I am in the process of rewriting it now, and it’s already so much better. Plus, now that I have another chapter to hit these plot points, I can explore a more daring version of my original idea. Very excited for it. 
That being said, I would 100% cut off that last line and probably improve the chapter by 3%.
And that’s the chapter! Again, I am so sorry that it was such substandard quality. I promise that the next chapter will be better. 
In other news, can I get your opinion on something. Ever since polls came out, I have wanted to do a little census poll on how many people know about CTB, read it, or choose to read it. Just to gage how big the actual audience is. 
On one hand, I think it would be interesting. On the other, it’s a practice in vanity that is very antithetical to how hard I try to be nonchalant about everything. I don’t know. Let me know what you think. 
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rorywritesjunk · 3 months
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Down in the dark where the waves won’t go, I’m bound to find my way.
Sunny and Buggy disagree over the next steps of their life together leading to them spending time apart.
Rating: PG-13 to be safe for swearing and arguing. Warning: Each chapter will have a specific warning. Epilogue!!! Happy ending!!! AAAA!! Word Count: 2,111 A/N: The direct sequel to "No locked upon land...", the fic that started it all. I do not use "You" in this as now that Sunny is an established OC I decided not to go that route. The ending!! Happy!! Also I'm of the belief that you never remember every person you've ever met in your life. You may cross paths multiple times and not realize it. Hence how I chose to end this. Thank you for reading this! It was fun and painful and great to write!
Title comes from "Sailing Song" by S.J. Tucker
Chapter 1 + Chapter 2 + Chapter 3 + Chapter 4 + Chapter 5 + Chapter 6 + Chapter 7 + Chapter 8 + Chapter 9 + Chapter 10 + Epilogue Taglist: @hey-august @lostfirefly @ane5e
Epilogue
It was weird sleeping in but Buggy insisted on it the night before. He said he would get the baby up and even make breakfast (she wasn't too sure on that part) but that she deserved to sleep in. The last year had been hard on them, from the fights to their brief separation to Sunny telling Buggy she was pregnant. She never saw him fall to pieces so quickly before until that moment. 
He had been shocked into silence for just a few minutes before he shrieked and rushed to go tell the crew, leaving Sunny behind in the pantry. She could hear the excited cheers from the crew. Apparently they were just as excited as their captain.
“Shh, shh, why are you fussing? You're not supposed to fuss when daddy carries you! It's not flashy!”
She cracked an eye open and looked over towards the door. Buggy held Gold against his chest while carrying a tray of food with his hands out in front of him. The baby was fussy even though Buggy was trying his best to calm him.
“Gold, buddy, come on, Mama's sleeping and you're gonna wake her up.” He huffed softly as he tried his best to soothe him. “I already changed you and you didn't want the mush she made you last night, so what do you want?”
She grinned and burrowed herself under the covers. She'd let him suffer a bit more. He didn't have to carry a baby for 9 months or spend over 30 hours in labor. All he did was cry when the baby was finally born and he finally saw his son with his little fluffy blonde hair and little red nose.
“Goldie, kiddo, you're killing me here.” Buggy whined. Sunny sighed and finally rolled over to face them, only to burst out laughing at the sight of her husband covered in flour, eggs, and she was pretty sure there was some jam in his hair. He glared at her as he set the tray on the bed and passed her the baby. Gold’s eyes lit up and he was happy to snuggle in her arms. She kissed him on the forehead and smiled. 
“You okay there, Buggy?”
“I cooked you breakfast!” He told her. “The skillet was too hot and I burned my fingers, and then the water boiled over when I made your tea. The eggs spilled onto the two of us so I had to change Gold again and then he sneezed as I had a scoop of flour and it got everywhere.”
Sunny distracted herself by looking at the tray of food and tried not to erupt into giggles. The piece of toast seemed to have a little hand print in the jam. She looked back at Buggy as he scooted himself into bed beside her and took a bite of the toast.
“Honey, you have jam in your hair.” She pointed out. He groaned and slumped against her as Gold watched his daddy curiously. “There's a little hand print in the jam…”
“He grabbed my hair at one point.” Buggy whined. “I didn't realize he had sticky fingers! Babe, I just washed my hair!”
She kissed the top of Buggy’s head and smiled. “You're a good dad.”
He lifted his head up just enough to look into her eyes as he pouted at her. Dealing with a sticky baby from time to time was something Buggy still couldn't handle. Everything else? Whatever, he could deal with diapers and spit up, but for some reason anything sticky like jam had Buggy wanting to have a meltdown over it. 
“Can I go wash my hair?” He whined softly.
“Yes, honey.” She told him as he started to get up. “Thank you for breakfast and for getting the baby ready.”
Buggy looked at her funny and shrugged. “I'm his dad, it's my job to look after him.”
“Yea-”
“I don't care what your family thinks should happen. He's my kid, I am going to raise him. It's not all on you, babe.” Buggy told her as he went to look at himself in the mirror. Maybe he didn't need to wash all of his hair, just that section of it. “The idea that I'm babysitting my own kid is shit and if your aunts and uncles say anything then I'll say something back!”
Sunny doubted he would say anything but she wouldn't discourage him. She loved him even more now after seeing him take care of Gold. Buggy almost always had his son in his arms or near him when he was working. The only time Sunny saw the baby was when it was feeding time. 
“I love you, Buggy.” She told him as he tried to wash the sticky jam out of his hair. He looked back at her curiously before grinning widely at her.
“How could you not?” He asked as he winked at her. “I'm the greatest husband and dad in all the sea, babe!”
~*~
He didn't mean to get lost again.
Buggy had only taken a few steps away from the first mate to look at something when a crowd walked by and he was by himself. Where did Rayleigh end up? This was his second time getting separated from the crew on an outing. If Buggy was lost again, he'd get a talking to and won't be allowed to step off the ship ever again. He tried to look around but the first mate was nowhere to be seen.
Buggy tried not to panic but it was a little hard not to. 
He stuck his hand in his pocket, gripping the pretty bracelet he had found a few weeks ago. He didn't quite remember how he found it but it was one of his favorite things. The weight in his pocket was a comforting reminder of what he was striving for in his pirate journey: find as much treasure as possible.
“Are you lost?”
Buggy’s head jerked around to see a girl who looked about his age. She was smiling at him but he wasn't sure why. Was being lost amusing to her?!
“No, I'm not lost!” He insisted as he straightened up. “Why would you just ask someone that?!”
“You just looked lost.” She told him with a shrug. “I'm Sunny, my Mama's right over there. You can stay with us until your mom or dad show up if you want!”
Buggy stared at her. She just… offered to have him stay with her not knowing who he was when he could be some scary, dangerous pirate. He was about to say something to her, call her stupid for that, but a woman walked up, her blonde hair in a ponytail, arms covered in tattoos, startling Buggy into keeping his mouth shut. She looked more like a pirate than someone's mother.
“Sunny, what's going on?”
“He's lost, mama!”
“I-I’m not lost!” Buggy squeaked, not taking his eyes off the pirate. She cocked her head to the side before crouching down in front of him, looking him over curiously. He tried to look like he wasn't nervous but… he was for some reason. His captain was the strongest but this lady looked like she could be just as strong. 
“Oh? Well, you can hang out with us until someone comes looking for you.” She smiled. “I'm Windy. We were about to get a snack. What's your name, honey?”
He couldn't help but stare at her. The way she smiled and called him honey was… familiar and comforting to him for some reason. He glanced at Sunny. She was smiling at him as well and he felt himself relax just a bit. Maybe he could stick around with them until Rayleigh showed up.
“B-Buggy.”
“Buggy? That's a cute name.” Windy said as she smiled at him. “Let's get you kids a snack while we look for your adult, Buggy. How does that sound?”
He shouldn't talk to strangers. The crew told him and Shanks not to, but he did feel safe around these two. He wasn't sure why but they didn't seem to be a threat. There was a familiarity in that smile and how she called him honey, but he couldn't place where. He swallowed heavily and nodded. He could stay with them until he found Rayleigh.
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To keep him from getting separated from them, Sunny held his hand the entire time. Buggy allowed her, saying nothing as his cheeks burned as they sat on a bench while Windy went to get them both a snack. The little girl looked at him and smiled brightly. He looked away.
“I bet Mister Rayleigh will find you.” She told him. “If not, you can stay with us.”
“I can find my way back to the ship if I have to!” Buggy shot back. “This place is just big, okay?”
Sunny tilted her head to the side and smiled. He hated that she kept doing that. Why were these two being so nice and helpful? Did they want something in return? He huffed softly and looked back at her. She gave his hand a squeeze and looked back at the people milling about the area
Windy came back a few minutes later, handing them both a tasty piece of fruit before standing beside her daughter and keeping an eye out for Rayleigh. She met the first mate once before, back when she was a member of the Cook Pirates, so spotting him wouldn't be too hard.
She glanced at the kids. Sunny was asking Buggy questions about living on a ship, being a pirate, all kinds of things, even asking what was the best treasure he found so far. The boy was answering back, an air of arrogance about him as he talked about rescuing the captain one time from a nasty pirate crew and how he found a treasure chest that was almost bigger than the ship! Sunny’s eyes were sparkling as she listened and Windy was happy to see her daughter making friends with someone. 
The snacks were enjoyed and the kids were chatting when Rayleigh made an appearance. His face was a mix of anger and relief as he crossed his arms and looked at Buggy. The boy straightened up and looked back at him, wondering what the punishment was, but Windy patted him on the head.
“Rayleigh, it’s been a while!” She laughed. “My daughter found your boy and was close to adopting him into our family. Better keep an eye on him or she’ll kidnap him.”
“Maybe he'll learn not to wander off.” Rayleigh grumbled as the kids stood up. “Let's head back, Buggy. Tell them thank you.”
Buggy looked over at Sunny and Windy. The pirate seemed amused while Sunny looked disappointed about him leaving. They just met, they weren't friends or anything, so why was she looking like she wanted to cry? He scratched the back of his head and glanced up at Rayleigh for reassurance. He sighed and looked back at them.
“Thank you for looking after me.”
“Any time, Buggy!” Windy chuckled. “It was nice meeting you. I bet you're going to be a famous pirate someday.”
Buggy puffed out his chest and looked smug about that. Rayleigh put his hand on Buggy’s head and directed him to Sunny. The little girl just gave him a sad smile and waved at him as the boy glanced up at his guardian again. What was he supposed to say to her? He just thanked them! 
“Thank… you for helping me, Sunny?” It was more of a question, but he wasn't sure. Her eyes lit up and her smile got bigger. Buggy forced himself to look away again because he didn't want to look at her any more. She had a pretty smile.
“You're welcome, Buggy!” She replied happily. “I hope we can stay friends!”
He didn't really know how, they wouldn't see each other again, but he just shrugged and stuck his hands in his pockets, toying with the bracelet he found for a moment. It was pretty, but he didn't remember how he got it, so maybe… 
He could offload it on her. It wasn't worth anything, he was pretty sure about that, so he pulled out the bracelet and reached for Sunny’s hand. She looked at him curiously as he put it in her hand. He said nothing, stared at her for a moment, then turned and hurried off before Rayleigh turned to follow. Windy just chuckled softly as Sunny looked it over and put the bracelet in her pocket. 
He was kinda weird but Sunny thought he was nice. Maybe she'd see him again.
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Aaaahhh I just finished ‘Merry Men Making Merry’ (otherwise known as MMMM) and I’m so hyped about it!!! I had so much fun reading it, your world-building is amazing, so impressive!
As I said I’m a big fan of the story of Robin Hood and it brings back childhood memories. I like that you can read your fic without having any knowledge of the original story, but if you do have knowledge of it it’s so much fun to recognize parts. Like BBH being friar Tuck had me cackling, it’s perfect!
I always love how you write Larray, I can literally hear him in my head with the way you write him 🤭
Oooh and don’t get me started on the ingenuity of incorporating their background stories through flashbacks, that really made the story come to life for me.
//“You gave me a purpose,” Dream tells him, barely audible over the cracking and popping of the fire. The wind almost carries the words away, but George heard them. They’re his now.//
This is probably my favorite part in the fic. For a moment there you had me fooled because of how the og story ends, but your ending was literally perfect. Anyway, I don’t want to spoil too much and I’ve been going on for too long so for anyone reading this ask please go read the fic, you will not regret it!
Thank you Scoops for giving us such a wonderful story again, you’re amazing!
(All that’s missing was the map of the realms at the beginning of the story, haha)
MMMM because it's finger lickin' good!!! Lol no that's so cringe omg
Spoilers under the cut!
I really wanted to write Robin Hood and I was blessed to get the prompt (It was one of those challenged where you give your top 3 preference and then get assigned one). I knew I could write something actiony/adventury because I LOOOVE writing those and I think I'm pretty good at it. Cc!DNF don't really lend themselves to action and adventure but AU versions of them do. Deep in Dream and The Mushroom King and the Nightmare were some of my favorite stories to write. Like, fully obsessed while I was writing them and working on the world building, and MMMM reminded me heavily of those vibes.
I have seen the DIsney animated movie, of course, and also "Men In Tights" and both of those stories kind of spoof the already famous tropes of Robin Hood, so I did some digging --aka I watched an hour long youtube video essay about the evolution of Robin Hood lore-- and dove in. I wanted to add elements from different "canons" - like Robin Hood being secretly a nobleman. I also didn't want this story to be 100K words (which, as you know, I could easily accidentally do) so I decided for the plot, we would center around something fun-- stealing something, since that's what he's known for. I didn't know how to make George Maid Marian because obviously he has to be the love interest, OBVIOUSLY lol, so once I changed it to Maid Marian being Dream's sister, it all kind of fell into place.
However, I also wanted to see *how* they became the Merry Men, I think that's really interesting and integral to the story, and thus the flashbacks were born. I really don't like flashbacks, both in reading and writing, I think they can be done very very well (Hi Luci!), but normally i just find them really boring, so I had to keep them short and action packed to keep everyone's attention.
BBH as Friar Tuck -- fit tooooo perfectly, I just had to. I went back and forth on George or Sapnap being Little John and then decided it didn't really matter ultimately, they both kind of fill that role. Though, George kind of also rounds out the "Robin Hood" persona --please note that he gets mistaken for Robin Hood at least once in the fic!
I had a blast writing this one and, not going to lie, it got away from me for a while, but @rebelwithoutabroom helped pull me back lol.
Thank you so much for such a lovely review of the story! I'm so glad you liked it <3
(Yes, next time will add a map, though i have no idea what it all would look like so that will add like 5 months onto things. Also, multiple realms, what was I thinking?!)
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autumn-foxfire · 3 months
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Oooh, are these the episodes where Shinichi almost gets caught by Gin in the locker? I think they are! I'm excited, that moment has such great HC potential!
Shinichi the moment he gets a hint of the BO: All care for his cover goes out the window and he gets reckless.
I'd say it's interesting that in a situation where the BO are involved, he isn't worried that Ran has accompanied them, when he won't even tell her his secret due to fearing the BO killing her, but I guess Gosho didn't think about that. No, wait, as I was writing this, Shinichi thought about it but he's quickly put any worries to the back of his head.
You know, Shinichi, if Kogoro and Ran were aware of your situation, they would be able to help you get the disk so much easier. Ran could use Shinichi's name to get it for him, saying the man might be related to a case he's investigating so he needs to check it. Just spitballing some ideas here for you, Shinichi.
How... how does Kogoro in these moments not realise that he is not the one solving the crimes T-T I know he's dumb and prideful at times but come on, he is smart enough to be a detective.
Shinichi using the victims dying message as a way to get the file he needs without raising suspicious, he's resourceful at least. And then once again Ran, in a very weird position in this series, is the one who hinders Shinichi.
Okay, I say it a lot but it's because I mean it, I love when we get to see Shinichi be rash and reckless, I love his flaws. He had to mentally talk himself down because he's got what he wants and now he just needs to leave but he can't do so without wrapping up what he had started even though he wants nothing more than to get away and follow the scent he's found. It's in these moments we see him be a teenage boy who just wants to return to his normal life so badly.
Then stop waiting, Ran. Stop waiting for a man you don't know will return and finally live your life. And when Shinichi comes back into it eventually, then you decide what you want to do.
And stop lying to yourself, Shinichi. You have changed, you aren't the boy she remembers, not anymore. You can't go through what you have without changing. The way you lie to her is the biggest proof that you have.
"Your always crying." She is, because Gosho doesn't know how to write her beyond crying love interest whose life revolves around a man and we hate it. Ran deserves better and I'll say it until I am blue in the face. It might seem like I complain about her writing more often than most but that's because hers is probably one of the worst in this series.
Shinichi, you shouldn't be running with such an important disk in your hand.
Shinichi's lack of interest in girls is so amusing. He's very gay, gay, homosexual, gay.
Oh, this episode introduces the soccer belt. You will become one of Shinichi's most feared weapons.
Agasa is much more fearful than Shinichi is XD
The dreaded coin locker. I can't wait!
My dog is trying to liveblog as well T-T
It's Shinichi's luck that he gets picked up by jewel thieves though. He must hate his life sometimes.
Shinichi: Can I go one moment without being involved in a crime?!
Life: No <3
Yamamura should not be a police officer. He's bragging about how he misused his gun...
Shinichi to the criminals: I'm sorry, I have bigger fish to fry than you two.
Imagine being shaded like that by a boy who looks like he's in grade school. I'd never live it down.
Shinichi really did not think this through. He's down two of his main weapons and he's going to confront criminals that have bested him multiple times.
Gin has got such a cool voice...
Gin helping his partner, how kind of him.
0219. A number that Shinichi is sure to never forget.
I LOVE THIS MOMENT SO MUCH. It's such a small one but it's such a good one to explore Shinichi developing trauma from almost being caught and killed. I did a small drabble on tumblr which involved him developing claustrophobia due to this, associating the small and suffocating spaces with almost being killed.
It's so great too because Shinichi resents Conan, he hates how his body has been altered and he can no longer live his previous life, and yet it's due to Conan that he is able to investigate the BO as well as he can, it's saved his life more than once.
Annnnd he's hiding the truth from Haibara T-T I know he said he would protect her but protection is not leaving them in ignorance. In fact, especially for Haibara, it puts them more in danger.
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zutaralesbian · 11 months
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Tagged by the lovely @callivich to answer these Gallavich questions! Thank you, they were fun 😊
1. What’s a fic you’ve read more than once?
You Can Bite Me by Shamelessquestions. I love the vampire trope so having arguably the most iconic author for the Gallavich fandom write something for it was a dream come true. And it did not disappoint.
2. What’s a gifset you always have to reblog?
I can’t really think of a specific gifset but pretty much anything that involves paralleling Gallavich’s first ever scene with one of them getting married or engaged is my shit. It’s the journey.
3. What’s a headcanon you can’t stop thinking about?
A headcanon that is my Truth and that I always stick to is that the first time Ian told Mickey he loved him was in 4x11 after Mickey came out.
4. What’s a fanart you love looking at?
This one ❤️
5. What’s an idea you’d love to create if you had the time/inspiration?
I have a thousand different fic ideas running through my head at all times 😭 But one that’s been lingering in my head lately in particular is a canon divergence where Mickey completes his time in prison after S6 but doesn’t try to contact Ian after he’s released. Years later, they run into each other in a different city when they’re both in their early thirties and married to other people. They decide to catch up and try being friends. However, they quickly realize that the romantic feelings never fully went away and things spiral into them having an affair with each other. It’d be a super messy fic but would capitalize on the aspect of them being magnetic soulmates who ultimately can’t stay away from each other no matter the circumstances.
6. What’s something you’ve discovered since entering this fandom? A new trope you love? A different analysis of the show? Something else?
Hmmm…tbh I can’t really think of anything in particular for this question
7. What’s an underrated trope or concept you’d like to see more of?
I’ve said this before, but Gallavich is one of those ships that I feel like can fit into a large pool of AU’s. That being said, I would personally like to read more enemies to lovers and/or rivals to lovers. I kinda get why it’s a little rare since in canon, Ian/Mickey definitely are a friends with benefits to lovers type trope. But I can’t help it…I love reading fics where two characters fucking hate each other before falling in love lol
8. What’s your favourite season? And has this changed after multiple rewatches of the show?
S4. And it’s pretty much been that way since the first time I watched the show. Mickey is my fave so I’m definitely biased considering it was arguably his best season.
9. What’s a plot hole you wish had been answered or resolved?
I would have liked to have gotten to know more about Mickey and Mandy’s mother. I guess in a way it is kind of fun that the fandom can have their own headcanons about her. I kind of have a headcanon that Mickey and Mandy have a different biological mother than the rest of the Milkovich siblings because they look alike but both look different from Terry.
10. What scene or moment do you feel isn’t discussed enough?
This is another hard one because I personally feel that the fandom does a pretty good job of discussing and analyzing all of Ian and Mickey’s important scenes. I guess maybe the “you’re just a warm mouth to me” scene in S2. It gets overshadowed as far as angsty scenes go considering everything Ian/Mickey go through in their relationship later. But I feel like it was their first big heartbreak with each other.
11. What line/dialogue/description from something else (a poem, a book, a tv show, a movie, or something else) do you feel describes Ian and Mickey’s relationship?
"When you meet the right person, you know it. You can't stop thinking about them. They are your best friend and your soulmate. You can't wait to spend the rest of your life with them. No one and nothing else can compare." (From How I Met Your Mother)
12. What do you think is next for Ian and Mickey post-finale?
I think they stay in their westside apartment for a little while but ultimately do decide to move out when their lease is up. They end up getting a decent place back in the south side, after both of them admit they miss it. Ian brings up the idea of them having kids from time to time but the idea still makes Mickey nervous. They compromise by deciding to try out being pet owners first and get a cat and a dog. (The cat being a stray they find on the streets and the dog adopted from a shelter). They run their security business for a while but eventually Mickey does encourage Ian to try something new, knowing his husband has a hero complex and might not be fully satisfied with a career that doesn’t involve him helping people. What that is, I’m not entirely sure. I’d like to see him go back into the medical field but I don’t know how feasible that is with him being a felon. But hey, it’s also the Shameless universe so anything is possible.
Tagging: @whaticameherefor @milkymickeyway @such-a-barbarian @auds-and-evens
I feel like most of my Shameless moots were tagged in the og post but if I happened to miss anyone feel free take this as a tag!
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kiki-sleeps · 1 year
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MHA - Hitoshi Shinso x reader
A/N: Exactly after a year since I've created my tumblr account, I've been so mesmerized by the sheer amount of content that I completely forgot about writing myself lol. Anyways, this a one-shot based on a character I created a long time ago and it was written around that time so my style is different from the Jack Frost story. Let me know which of the two you think is better and why if you feel like leaving a comment or a reblog <3
LISTEN TO THE SONG CHLORINE - TWENTY ONE PILOTS WHILE READING (I changed the lyrics a little bit to make them fit with the story, it shouldn't be noticeable tho) 
TW: Torture, mentions of needles, blood, (semi)gore, character death, wounds, tubes and stitches (lmk if I should add other warnings)
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So where were you? It's been a little while
The doctor's voice wakes me up from my slumber as I feel multiple tubes and needles injecting in my skin. My eyes are half-lidded, blurry figures hovering over mine. Ahh, it's truly been a fair bit of time since I've been here. I didn't miss it. These experiments have been draining the life out of me. They put me in one of the capsules for monitoring and then he speaks again; 
"Aren't you happy? We'll do one of your favourites!" 
His voice is muffled by the glass, but I hear his sarcastic words perfectly. He turns his head to one of the nurses and orders:
"Go full out in the lungs" 
Sippin' on straight chlorine, let the vibes slide over me
The ugly smell makes its way through the mask on my face, and I can feel my senses going numb for the umpteenth time in my life. My head starts spinning, and so do my thoughts. This could be regarded as getting high, but it's nowhere near as happy as that. The euphoric feeling doesn't exist here. Just nothing. 
This beat is a chemical, beat is a chemical
The only thing I feel is the steady rhythm of my heart. Like a calm drum that goes in pair with the ringing in my ears. It's a lonely soothing feeling, like a lullaby that's just for me. 
When I leave don't save my seat, I'll be back when it's all complete
Memories come to mind. 
"Don't worry," I said to him. "I'll be fine." 
Lies. I should have just said goodbye when I had the chance. 
The moment is medical, moment is medical
My depressing regrets come to a temporary end as my tired eyes look at a finger tapping on the glass. They do this every time. 
"If you see it, it means you're healing." 
Healing from what? I've never been sick in the first place. You're the ones who created a whole clinical identity for me. 
I was fine, once upon a time. But my story is no fairytale. Just a bunch of unfortunate choices. Except for one. Deciding to give him the last hopes I had is the only thing I regard as the luckiest that could ever happen to me. 
Sippin' on straight chlorine
I want to cough, but I can't. I've tried, when I still had the will to resist. The result? Just vomiting. The tubes are too far and too deep in my throat to make me have any kind of relief by the action. 
Lovin' what I'm tastin'
Still, I like not being able to do anything. Gives me time to think. I never could do it, being worried about even surviving on to the day after. 
Venom on my tongue
Dependant at times
I'm fully conscious of the acid in my mouth, and I love it. Tastes like the ugly tears I've shed in my useless 17 years. Ah, this is too good. How ironic, I've come to appreciate the thing I hated the most.
This beautiful, addictive feeling. 
Poisonous vibration
The capsule shakes, more needles get into my arms. One goes in my cheek, stained with uncontrollable tears. 
Helped my body run
I remember the one time I tried to escape. And I almost succeeded. But seeing the light at the end of the tunnel was too good to be true. 
I'm runnin' for my life, 
Runnin' for my life
I can't explain how I found the strength to break the restraint that kept me here, I just did. But it didn't last long. I was suffocating after all. No one could run more than a couple of meters with all that toxins in the lungs. Like I have now. 
Sippin' on straight chlorine, let the vibes slide over me
This beat is a chemical, beat is a chemical
When I leave don't save my seat, I'll be back when it's all complete
The moment is medical, moment is medical
The process starts again. More silence. I focus on the memory of my hopeless escape. Why did I do it? In the end, I had nothing to live for. 
Right, when I only had these laboratories as a source of knowledge, how could I have the wish to be out? It was probably because I didn't know anything about the outside. It was the thirst for freedom. But now? I have nothing to fight for. I saw what I wanted and met the people I so desperately wanted to talk to. A disappointing experience, to say the least. When they found out I was a testing mannequin, they looked at me like everyone here always did. A monster. A beast, a creature that could go feral if it was so much touched. 
They all did. 
I blink, and an almost forgotten face in all the hatred surrounding my mind comes to thought. 
Shinso. 
He was the only ray of light in the ugly darkness of the world, the sole person who saw past the scars on my skin. 
Oh, yes. He'd be worth fighting for. All of his touches, every little inch of affection he deserves makes it worth the fight. 
Sippin' on straight chlorine
I inhale profoundly. I've decided. If not for myself, I'll do it for him. I'll get out of this hell hole and be free again. And this time, I won't be caught. 
Fall out of formation
Without making it noticeable, I slowly start to move my arms, testing what I can and cannot control. I can move almost everything, but the skin is completely numb, I've lost all sensitivity. 
Well, not like I care. This could be actually good, I won't feel any pain even if they shoot me. 
I plan my escape from walls they confined
I close my eyes and free my mind of everything useless. I have to make a plan, I can't just burst out and hope to be lucky. Think, think! What can you do? I could break out and take the nearest syringe to get to a weapon, but after that? More information, I need more! All the simulations in my mind end all in the same way: failure. There must be something– Oh. Yes, that could work. It kinda looks like my savior, that little annoying finger belonging to an armed guard. 
Ok, time to put it in action. 
I gather all my strength, and pull myself up with all the strings still attached to me. I focus on the hit I have to give to the glass with my head to make it break. 
Ah, it worked. 
Rebel red carnation
The pieces of the capsule cap I broke are impaling my arms, but I don't care, I don't even feel them. Blood is pouring out, almost too blue to be recognizable if not for the metallic smell it has. 
Grows while I decay
This isn't exactly the best thing that could happen. Losing blood means a higher chance of fainting and less resistance. Damn it. 
I jump out taking the shards of glass and throwing them around. At least I can make a bit of people incapable like this. None of them has to leave the room, I can't have the alarm going off just as I lifted a finger. 
I pull the guard in front of me by the hand. 
"This is the finger that likes to tap as if I'm a fish in a bowl, huh? I can't let you keep it then!" 
Is this my voice? It sounds foreign, a stranger that talks like me. Well, no matter, I can't be distracted now by futile things. 
With a little bit of sickening happiness, I cut off the hand of the soldier with the last shard and take his gun. 
I'm runnin' for my life
Runnin' for my life
Yeah, I'm runnin' for my life
Runnin' for my life
I spin and start to run, bare feet resounding against the floor tiles. My breath is ragged, and I'm opening my mouth like a gaping fish out of water. 
Had you in my coat pocket, where I kept my rebel red
Come on, come on! Think of him, he'll give you strength! I grit my teeth as the lights start to flicker and go red. Tch, they were able to give the alarm. 
I felt I was invincible, you wrapped around my head
It doesn't matter, I can still play. In my mind now the only thing that goes round and round are the words he once said to me;
"I love you"
Like a broken record, my head plays and replays the memory, as if to give me confidence. And it works. I don't care if I slip, I just run and run and run. 
Now different lives I lead, my body lives on lead
I want to be with him again, I want to be the idiot who thought he was joking when he asked her out, I want to be that girl again!! 
But it feels as if that is a totally different universe, where a lucky distorted version of me can be happy. But not the me right now. 
The mixture of chemicals is taking control of me, my eyes are starting to see black dots in the corners of my vision. 
The last two lines may read incorrect until said
No, it's not finished until I say so. I refuse to give up now that I have something to strive for. I didn't get drugged just to trip at the last second. I. Won't. Fail. 
The lead is terrible in flavor
I want to puke. And technically, I could. No plastic tubes are here to stop me now. No, no, bad thoughts. Just push it down and you'll be fine. Standing up, I gulp and dash down the white hall again. 
But now you double as a papermaker
As I run behind a corner to avoid some bullets, I'm taken down by memories again. Oh great, a panic attack. Just what I needed. The rush of colors in my head is fabricating episodes that never existed. Words thrown at me by my stupid brain created from layers of anxiety. 
And the first ones, always making me freeze in my steps, are said by the lips I love the most, twisting in a cruel smirk, a double faced mask covering the features of the boy I adore;
"You're a monster, how could I ever love you?" 
Supported by the real reminder of the only times we ever argued, the fake statement creeps fast through my mind, breaking the last bit of self restraint I have. 
I despise you sometimes
I shout, I have to move or these shadows lurking in my mind won't leave me alone. I start to talk in my head, to remain sane. At least, as sane as I could be. 
"Hey Shinso, you know what? I hate you. For making me do this, for making me wish for a life that wasn't mine to begin with!" 
But it's a lie. I love him, so much it hurts. 
I love to hate the fight and you in my life is like
And the actual discussions we had, I hated them with a passion. I could never be mad at you. How could I? The happiness I felt with you was so overwhelming. 
I could only see you. Kinda like
"Sippin' on straight chlorine" ,
let the vibes slide over me
This beat is a chemical, beat is a chemical
When I leave don't save my seat, I'll be back when it's all complete
The moment is medical, moment is medical
Sippin' on straight chlorine
I huff, this is taking a huge toll on my body. I don't know how many turns I've taken, how many people I've killed, and I can't bring myself to care. I just want to find the damn exit in this labyrinth of walls and closed windows. I want to be mad. I want to let myself be consumed by the rage that wants to erase this hell from existence. I want to, but I can't. For two simple reasons. Blood loss and toxins. I'm running on adrenaline and suppressor chemicals, the only quirk I have right now is the will to save my ass. 
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Beat is a chemical, yeah
My heart is beating frantically, maybe I can finally go apeshit? 
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Moment is medical, yeah
No, I have to stay sane. I don't want to die here because I couldn't control my rage. 
Sippin' on straight chlorine
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Beat is a chemical, yeah
I can see it, I can see the emergency exit sign light! It's so close, I can get there–
My feet skidder on the floor as I'm stopped by a loud explosion. 
Out of hole in the wall, guided by the purple hair I recognize immediately, in all their glory stand my classmates from UA. How…? They're not supposed to be here, they're supposed to hate me! No, no, this is all wrong-
"Sorry for being late, love. This place was hard to find." 
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Let the vibe, let the vibe
Moment is medical, yeah
And I can see it. The dark circles under his eyes are even more accentuated than usual, he must have stayed nights awake just to find me. I'm so happy he's here, the tears come to my eyes in a reflex.
I'm so sorry, I forgot you
Behind him, in their full geared suits, my friends start to fire at the soldiers. Kirishima gives me one of his usual toothy grins. How could I forget the stupid nicknames, full of affection, the late night games, the long shopping sessions? How could I ever think the ones who lured me out of my shell could turn against me? 
Let me catch you up to speed
I run towards them. I throw my gun, I don't even care anymore. I just want to get to the blinding light they all emit, a promise of salvation I desperately want to grasp. I'm almost there, I'm almost there! 
A bang makes me gasp. A bullet, straight through my heart. I let out a blood-curdling scream. Ah, I'm falling. I look up ahead, Shinso's violet widened eyes are staring at me, his mouth open. I'm waiting for the impact, but he catches me. Sweet, sweet Shinso. Always going to be my knight in shining armor, huh? He turns me to face the ceiling as I lay motionless in his arms. I watch as he shouts for a paramedic. 
He then turns to me;
"Everything's going to be ok, don't worry, you'll be fine-" 
I stop him. I just want to tell him one last thing:
"I've been tested like the ends of
A weathered flag that's by the sea" 
All the pain is summed up in a sentence. Almost too easy to describe the amount of suffering. And yet, it fulfills its purpose. 
I ask him one last thing. 
"Can you build my house with pieces?" 
I'm just a chemical
Can you promise me you'll still do everything you told me? Will you continue to live without me, happy? Please do. All the things we wanted to try together, do them for me. And the smile you hid all these years, show it. To someone who can brighten up your days like I won't be able to do. 
"No, no, no! We have to do it together, you promised!" 
"Can you build my house with pieces?" 
I'm just a chemical
I take my hand up to his cheek, once full of wrinkles because of the joyful laugh only I was able to hear. I wipe his tears away. 
Promise me. Please. 
"N-no, I don't want to, there's still enough time! S-see? The ambulance is coming!" 
"Can you build my house with pieces?" 
I'm just a chemical
He starts sobbing, and places his hand above mine.
I'm fine with this. An appropriate death for a cursed life. I know he'll move on. He's strong. He'll achieve his dreams and so more. Even though I won't be there to see it. I ask him one more time.
"Can you build my house with pieces?"
At last, he promises. 
"I-I swear I will."
Good boy. Ah, it's time. I can feel my conscience slipping away. I'm so, so tired. I want to sleep. As I close my eyes, the last thing I see are his vibrant purple irises full of tears. At least, their comforting color will accompany me to the other side. If there is one for me, that is. There could never be heaven for a creature like me. 
After all, 
I'm just a chemical
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My favorite fic of yours A. Probably obvi, but my favorite fic is neither snake nor dragon :)
My favorite chapter in my favorite fic of yours A. Probably "Of Ravens and Whispers"
The best character you've written for A. Helaena and Elayne and Aemond and the Greens!
The best ship you've written for A. Helaena / Elayne :)
A fic I haven't read yet from you, but I want to A. I would love to read your Volturi Fic, I just don't know that much ab twilight
Something I remember vividly from reading one of your fics A. The horror of realizing what was going to happen to Elayne
What made me the most emotional after reading A. Thinking about how they are buried together
What I like the most about your writing A. Your use of multiple sources and arrangement with fictional historical texts
A fic i'm excited for you updating/posting A. I don't know if you plan to update, but I hope you do for season 2!
A character/ship I didn't enjoy/think about as much before you wrote about them A. I had a hard time reading about Aegon before your fic. I really enjoy him as a character now. He is very complex
Something I wish/hope you write A. Perhaps the Greens Win AU you talked about
A fic of yours that i've re-read A. I reread Neither Snake nor Dragon like monthly
If i've ever shared/talked about your fic to someone else A. to so many people!!
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Oh my god! Thanks so much for all these answers haha! I'm so glad that you've enjoyed Neither Snake nor Dragon that much!
To engage few of the comments here:
3. I loved exploring those three and the Greens as a whole!
5. Honestly, I would say if you want to give my Volturi fic a shot without really knowing much about Twilight, I would say give it a go. It takes place literally thousands of years before canon and lives in the space of mostly Volturi headcanon. It's just morally questionable politicking(?) done by someone who is just happy to be here/ is so unreliable as a narrator. My friends tease me that I have decided to write the furthest thing removed from its original material. It would be fascinating to hear thoughts from a reader with 0 knowledge, but I understand just not wanting to because it's not your fandom.
6. Is this specifically the moment that I reveal that her brother kills her or just a general creeping horror? I did intend for both effects, but I remember a lot of people having a moment of oh! at the former.
9. Oh I really want to write more for Season 2! I think the problem with me is that I like me strange book-show hybrid world, but I like knowing what the show has in store so that I can know what I'm working with! I guess that is just the problem with writing for an ongoing series haha! I'd really love to get more into some scheming.
10. Wow! Honestly, I wasn't expecting to have changed anyone's feelings about Aegon! I'm so flattered to hear that! I wish there was a recording of my face watching the HotD episode where we meet older Aegon, because I already knew Elayne was going to have complicated sibling-esque relationship with him, and watching him just be the worse was me being uhhhh, but then it worked out to even more exaggerate my point that sometimes the worst person you know is somehow one of the best people to you specifically(really goes to show how much Elayne's life is unfair and just sucks). Anyway, yeah Aegon being complex
11. One day, maybe. I have this weird writing trait where I have to balance out good things with bad things, but the bad things kept accidentally being overwhelming. Also in terms of DnD stats, Elayne's dump stat is unfortunately constitution and she keeps dying when I put her in scenarios in my head.
12-13. I'm so glad to hear that, especially hearing that you liked it enough to recommend to even more people is just wow!
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oh i am powerfully grumpy today let me list the reasons why to break their hold over me! and then i will list the substantive good things that will counterbalance the grumpiness.
WHY AM I GRUMPY
didn’t sleep well and got up too early (this, as you will see, is probably the root of all other ills)
was pretty cranky with ruthie at 5am because she wouldn’t poop and wanted to just wander around outside & take a little walk instead. which fine but i was so tired and grumpy already haha. and then i always feel like a CRUEL MONSTER after i have spoken to her a bit sharply because she is a sweet little girl and sometimes you just don’t have to poop ok! also sometimes when i have been short with the dogs i am like oh great this is like a two-second glimpse of the lowest setting of sleep-deprived parenthood i bet i am going to handle that GREAT. (you can see here how i was already in that Mood where your crabbiness starts magnetizing all other free-floating crabbiness in the ether towards it)
got a little cranky on the phone with my mom because it felt like she was taking a liiiittle dig at me about the salary cut i’m taking (i don’t think she intentionally was i was just already kind of grumpy and sensitive) 
i am experiencing some lowgrade anxiety about the HSG test tomorrow, partly because i have read that is going to be moderately painful and partly because i am worried it will reveal bigger problems
my lead just straight up stood me up for a meeting today lol... i was on the teams call for 10 min just waiting and then she didn’t respond to any of my messages so i hung up but can’t really wander away from my laptop in case she calls me back... i’ve been just kinda Over It for a while but man it is annoying when she does stuff like this. also lol she did the thing in a meeting yesterday where i offered to review this tiny inconsequential project real quick with my boss and my lead jumped in to be like “to make the best use of [boss]’s time, i think it’s best if i review the content first to ensure everything looks okay” which is code for “i am going to make one formatting change and then schedule a meeting with our boss without inviting you where i imply that your work was so shoddy i had to make MAJOR changes to salvage it.” i was just like sure girl. whatever. enjoy these last few days of getting to powertrip over me. you are so close to being in my rearview mirror forever.
i only have like 1-2 pointless work projects left before my last day (next friday) but they are so pointless and so hazily defined that working on them plunges me into a deep work despair spiral even though i am SO close to being done with this stupid job. i know i need to just pull myself together and finish them but wow. i hate this.
some IRL friend stuff is making me a little bit irritated and i just need to sit down for a minute at some point and decide if/how i want to react to it. it’s genuinely not a big deal it’s just one of those situations where there have been multiple small annoyances that are not exactly anyone’s fault but cumulatively just make me feel a little put-out. however i am aware that if i’d slept 2 more hours last night i might feel totally different about it so i am just bracketing it today.
phew okay. now WHAT ARE SOME OF THE GENUINELY GOOD & MEANINGFUL THINGS IN MY LIFE THAT ARE FILLING ME WITH A SENSE OF GRATITUDE THAT I GET TO BE ALIVE IN THIS WORLD IN THIS MOMENT?
i wrote for 3+ hours this morning and feel really intrigued by the project... not sure if i have a sense of where it’s going yet but it’s been quite a while since i’ve been in that headspace where you wake up and reach blearily for your phone right away because you’re just HUNGRY to review the writing you did the previous night & start working on the new draft. i am very, very much hoping that a change of job and scenery will jumpstart my creativity a bit... i think it’s just challenging to write when literally nothing is happening in your life. you have all this open unstructured time, which means you don’t value any of the time you have (because if you don’t write in THIS empty moment you can always put it off to the next empty moment!), and then you are just sitting at home not experiencing any social or intellectual stimuli so i feel like you don’t get that “lots of ideas sloshing around in my brain... new encounters triggering new ways of looking at or connecting them... back-burner brain stuff simmering while doing other activities” stuff going. ANYWAY this is all to say it feels good to be writing again & feeling excited about writing whether or not this one sticks. i am just happier when i am engaging in the practice of making things even if i am not finishing things.
part of why i started writing again is that i got two extremely long, detailed, thoughtful comments on my last story from another writer that just made me feel so, so good and creatively energized. all comments are soooo good/valued but i feel like there is something extra special about getting that kind of extremely detailed feedback from a talented writer who picks up on why you did certain things and has a very clear sense of the really, really time-intensive revision and redrafting work that goes into weaving multiple layers into a story. i read the comments yesterday and at first was happy but also kind of in a funk about it - like it was SO nice and affirming to receive them but i have also kind of built that story up in my mind to be the best/most fully realized thing i’ve ever written and can sometimes get down on myself feeling like i’ll never be able to top it or even repeat it. but then i read the comments several more times and started thinking about some of the specific scenes or choices the person was highlighting and just remembering how many times i patiently reworked not-great versions of those scenes to just steadily make them better and more effective. and i was just like okay listen. it just takes hard work and time. i have to put in the hard work. i have to invest the time. i have to give up the fantasy that the first version i write (or the second version or the tenth version) is going to be, or should be, perfect. i’m so proud of that polished final work but to get there i had to really keep the draft shitty and unfinished and patchworked-together and rough around the edges so that i could have the flexibility to rearrange things and torpedo what wasn’t working and generate new ideas through new combinations of rough material. so get over yourself and get to work, you idiot, or you really will never make anything again because you’ll have gotten wrapped up in some fantasy of doing things perfectly the very first time. ANYWAY it was a journey haha but those comments got me moving again and it really made me remember again how much i value being part of a creative community where you get to have that kind of engagement with other readers and writers.
i think it’s going to be a stupidly gorgeous day out! and then a stupidly gorgeous next week or two! soooo nice to have nice weather!! spring is here!!! i scrubbed down the deck last night before bed finally and am now just awaiting the delivery of the outdoor rug and side table.
 i had a really, really good catch-up call yesterday afternoon with a former mentee i worked closely with for a few years in my last job. i thought she was probably reaching out to ask about a letter of rec or something but it turned out that she actually just wanted to tell me about how this project she started years ago with me has continued to grow/evolve and has led to these pretty major institutional changes around making caste a protected class at our university. she was just like, ‘i’ve been thinking about you so much all year because everything we’ve been doing is rooted in the research ethos you taught me in that program. and then it just occurred to me that instead of just thinking about you i could reach out to tell you about how much you shaped this work.’ it was just so good to hear from her and so amazing to hear about this stuff she and her co-organizers have been able to achieve in the last couple years!! it made me feel really good/happy (for her but also obviously it’s just nice when people say nice things about your teaching impact!) and i also feel like it kinda lit a fire under me a little bit... like this past year has been so isolating and i think one thing i’ve missed is the way that students’ passionate commitments push YOU to be more engaged in your own life/community and more awake in your own life. i feel like this student in particular always pushed me to be more honest you know... she’s one of those people who is continuously pursuing difficult, important work because she believes it’s the right thing to do and she knows she has the skillset to do it. so i just want to hold onto that feeling you know... like as i begin to become more involved in the life of a campus community again and more connected to students i just want to keep pushing myself out of this period of isolation and into the world to do meaningful work.
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A Rick and Morty Critique
Rick and Morty is one of those series i always heard others talking about for years but some reason i never bothered with watching until recently. Around August from this year (2022) i decided to give the series another try. To my surprise i really started enjoying it.
It kept me interested in seeing what was going to happen each episode, which twist the premise was going to have and which direction was going to take. What it’s more, i really found myself liking the characters and their dynamics. I liked how the series would have some episodes exploring their psychology, sometimes them changing along the way.
However, i also started to notice i had a bit of frustration with the series while i was watching it. These issues weren’t big enough that they ruined the experience for me but they were things i kept noticing from time to time.
Here are the major issues i found in the series:
Lack of identity and direction
Rick and Morty is one of those cases i find myself questioning what the writers really want to do with it. There is a lack of consistency of what direction the show is trying to follow and what the arcs are going to be. I think this can be tracked back to the writing staff changing constanly each season and thus there isn’t a established writing team because it is always changing.
During the first two seasons and part of Season 3, it felt like the series mostly stayed focused in wacky space adventures mixed with slice of life sitcom moments. In some episodes it would get a bit more serious where it explored the psyche of the characters, such it is the case of  ¨Auto Erotic Assimilation¨ and ¨Pickle Rick¨. During that era the show had a clear identity most of the time.
Then in Season 4 and Season 5 is when the show started to get more experimental, something i usually support since it can lead to great concepts. The issue is that the narrative elements kept constanly changing in way that felt distracting. I mean, in one episode the characters are in a Lord of Rings world, in another is some sort of weird parody to media tropes and then there is another one about galatic wars against an alien snake species. It’s difficult to get an idea of what it wants to be if it keeps changing every episode. Not that doing different things is bad, my issue is this lack of consistency i mentioned.
Another thing related to this point it’s that there are times it feels like the writers don’t have a real plan, an end goal for characters and arcs. There are some instances of the show leading the audience to believe that there is going to be real consequences from some event only to backtrack on that promise. One of the biggest examples is  "Forgetting Sarick Mortshall"(Season 5 Ep 9). At the end of that episode Rick separates from Morty because he realizes that his relationship he has with his own grandson is toxic... this lasts less than an episode.
I can forgive a few things like this since ¨returning to the status quo but not completely¨ is common in TV animation. Rick and Morty is not exclusive to this problem. Still, i have watched other animated series sitcoms that they commit to changing in the status quo for multiple episodes or permanently. To give some examples: Craig of the Creek, Big City Greens, The Ghost and Molly Mcgee, Bojack Horseman, Inside Job.
...In spite of all this, Rick and Morty appears to be fixing this issue on Season 6. This Season had a mini arc about Rick not having his portal gun working, which is quite challenging considering the portal gun is one of the core elements from the show. The ending of Season 6 also teases the series becoming more serialized with Rick getting obesessed with killing Prime Rick. It’s certainly interesting for Rick’s character to have a clear goal.
I’m intrigued to see if they stick with this concept for one or two seasons. It would be the right direction for the show to take.
Secondary characters aren’t allowed to return or get developed more than their debut episode.
This is another rare issue i found in Rick and Morty. For some reason many secondary characters that are interesting and have potential to add more to the show they usually  either die or dissapear after the episode they get introduced. This is a weird writing choice because this is not what it tends to happen in other animated shows i watch.
I hold this opinion that if a show is a semi-episodic sitcom it does needs to have a good support cast. It makes the world of series feel richer and more alive than just having the characters interact with whatever they stumble themselves into. Note that i’m not saying that they should develop to every secondary character, that would be too complicated. My point is that they should be allowed to return for more than one episode.
There are a few examples of Rick and Morty doing this with some characters. One of them being Birdperson, who got a great episode in Season 5 actually developing his character. Before  "Rickternal Friendshine of the Spotless Mort" Birdperson was only know as someone who was a close friend to Rick, not much else. There is the president who got some development across the seasons. In season 6 Dr. Wong returned because Rick decided to go to therapy for a while. That episode, ¨Analyze Piss¨, is probably the best episode in Season 6.
So, yeah, it goes to show that Rick and Morty is able to explore its support characters for more than episode. It would be nice if the series continued to do this with other characters as well.
Lack of subtlety when it comes to references.
This is a problem i started to see more in the later seasons. Instead of having the characters going on an adventure that resembles a well known film ( See Lawnmower Dog for instance) and that you can fun without having watched said film, it feels like it has to remind you every two minutes or so that they are making a parody of a film. This can also be applied to other media that series makes reference to.
Some episodes in later seasons it has become less about the characters going on crazy adventures and more like ¨What if Rick and Morty were in a Lord of Rings world?¨ ¨What if suddenly Rick found Voltron robots for some reason?¨. It has become annoying and the episodes turn more about making references than trying to be entertaining.
Like, there are ways to make reference to things without having to constanly name them again and again. Other animated shows i watch do make reference to anime or older films, it’s that they are lot more subtle about it.
This aspect seems to have been toned down in Season 6 with "Rick: A Mort Well Lived" having Summer repeating that she was imitating the film ¨Die Hard¨ tons of times and then again that wasn’t the main plot of the episode. Then there was the Season finale with Morty literally getting a light saber from Star Wars.
I do hope the writers keep up with toning it down and focus in the episodes being fun rather than making references like the first three seasons used to do.
Excessive use of incest jokes
Okay, this one is a bit obvious. It doesn’t need much explanation and everyone agrees that it has to go. Like, the the first three points of this critique are something a person can agree with it or not, but, this point it is an aspect that bothers most of the fandom.
I’m not sure why these jokes keep being pushed in the show. If it’s because some executive demand it thinking it is funny. Or that the Rick and Morty crew thinks it is funny. Honestly, i don’t know.
Here is the thing: The series always has had incest jokes. The key difference was that they were things that lasted a few seconds, they weren’t the plot for an entire episode. In my case i can let it pass if it is a one line joke that doesn’t have any importance in the story since this is an adult animated show. I draw the line if it’s the plot an entire episode.
If it’s one thing that has to be fixed from the show it is this one, which it’s a very easy thing to do- just don’t do that type of plotline. Nobody in the fandom wants it, it isn’t funny, it’s gross and people are tired of it.
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Well, these are the main issues i have with Rick and Morty. I’m sure i have a few more that i don’t find that big as these ones. A lot of this could be fixed if the series tries to be more serialized in future seasons. Maybe it could have two episodes of random adventures and one episode about the main story arc. As long as there is better continuity, it shouldn’t be a problem.
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love4myg · 2 months
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play pretend | myg
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summary. maybe, just for one night, you can pretend that you're still his and he's still yours. just like it used to be. just like it's meant to be.
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pairing: yoongi x afab!reader
genre: exes to ???, smut, angst & fluff if you squint
word count: 3.2k
warnings: brief mention of alcohol consumption, kissing, explicit sexual content, dom!yoongi, sub!reader, oral sex (f. receiving), fingering, orgasm denial, hickeys, ruined orgasms, slight overstimulation, cum eating, finger sucking, brief edging, multiple orgasms, unprotected sex (don’t be like them plz), mentions of aftercare <3. plz tell me if i missed something 🙏
a/n: this was supposed to be apart of a 20k wip i was writing, but half of the fic got deleted and i don’t have the energy to rewrite it all rn. i took the smut scene and made it into a oneshot (i completely changed the og plot). i’m still very iffy about writing smut but i tried my best 😭 english is not my first language so i apologise for any spelling or grammar mistakes. i hope you enjoy!!
PS: right so i decided to change the ending like a day after i posted this cuz i realised that it contradicted with some of the stuff said in the story. I'm sorry to everyone who had to read the original, unhappy ending 😪
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People say that exes that stay friends either never loved each other or still love each other.
You wish you could say that you never loved Yoongi, but that wouldn’t be true. You also wish you could say you’re not in love with Yoongi anymore, but that too would not be true.
The chilly air bites into your exposed skin as you both walk along the dimly lit street. The exact moment you encircled your arm around Yoongi’s biceps eludes you, but the position provides enough heat to prevent you from pulling away.
You left the fancy restaurant where Jimin’s birthday was held around ten minutes ago. Despite your protests, Yoongi insisted on walking you home and you gave up attempting to convince him not to.
Now, as the night sky paints the street with bruised shadows and stalking figures made of light, you’re grateful that he is with you.
What you’re not grateful for is the feelings his presence evokes.
Your breakup was a mutual decision: both of you were not in the right stages of your life to pursue a relationship. Back then, as fresh college graduates, you were too focused on your careers.
He was the one who brought up the topic first. You agreed with his reasoning and stayed close, just like you were before entering the relationship.
What you hadn’t considered when deciding was how much it would hurt seeing him, knowing that you still had so much love to give him but not being able to.
Honestly, you aren’t sure whether staying friends helped the pain or worsened it.
Yoongi seems to notice your mind straying, and his voice cuts through your thoughts. “Penny for your thoughts?”
You snort. “God, you need to stop saying that,” you say, looking up at him to see a lazy smile drawn across his face. Whether he is smiling because he made you laugh or because he finds your comment amusing, you aren’t sure.
“Seriously though, what are you always thinking about?”
“Nothing,” you say, shrugging your shoulders.
“No, it’s not nothing. You always space out randomly and you have this expression at specific times.”
“What expression?”
“I don’t know, you just have this expression. You had it just now.”
“I think you’re reading too much into it.”
Yoongi pauses for a few seconds, allowing the occasional sounds of crickets chirping to be the only disruption to the silence between you. “Maybe.”
You know by his tone that he doesn’t believe you but is choosing to leave the subject, and you’re glad he does.
By the time you reach your home, all the windows of the apartment complex are dark, not a single one lit up from the inside. You cringe when your keychains clink together loudly as you unlock the main door.
You keep a foot out to keep the door open and turn to Yoongi, who had peeled himself away from you as you fished out your keys.
“Thanks for walking me home, Yoongi.”
“Ahh, it was no problem,” he replies, fanning the air to swat away your words. You smile at the action and he does too.
“I’ll see you around then.”
Yoongi nods. His hands return to the pockets of his leather jacket and yours remain by your side. Despite the shared goodbyes, neither of you make any attempts to walk away.
Yoongi steps closer to you.
The light—equipped with motion detection sensors that turned on when you opened the door—spills across his pale skin, illuminating his face in warm shades of golden.
You can see the ghost of a smile on his face, the way his hair slightly obscures his vision, the small mole that rests beside his nose. It used to be your favourite place to kiss when you used to date, and the thought unfurls a twinge of hurt in your heart.
His blinks are slow, and his tongue comes out to wet his lips as his eyes flicker down to yours.
It would be incredibly easy to just take a step closer and press your lips against his. Fortunately, he closes the gap between your bodies with a small step so that you don’t have to.
His breath fans across your skin and goosebumps erupt across your body. You look up at him through your eyelashes and his gaze flickers to your mouth once again.
Yoongi dips his head, brings his hand up to tenderly cup your cheek, and then presses his lips to yours.
You blame the alcohol when you make no effort to move away. You blame the alcohol when you step onto your tiptoes to deepen the kiss. You blame the practically non-existent alcohol in your system when you find your hands clutching at the collar of his leather jacket to pull him in even closer than he already is.
The pressure of his kiss is exactly how you remember it, and he tastes sweet from the red wine he drank at the restaurant. His lips feel so familiar that it hurts your heart.
It overwhelms you how much it feels like no time has passed. How it feels like you’re still two souls completely in love with each other. How he’s wearing the same leather jacket from the night you two first met and how you’re wearing the same necklace he gifted you for your second anniversary.
How you have the choice to forget everything that has happened and pretend, just for one night, that you’re still his and he is still yours. Just like it used to be.
Just like it’s meant to be.
Yoongi presses your body against the door and you use the movement to open it, pulling him inside. You only break apart from him when you can’t locate the call button to your elevator, and your mouth is back on his as soon as you press it.
One of Yoongi’s hands is tangled in your hair and the other is still pressed against your cheek. You can sense the hesitancy from how light his lips are, and from how he doesn’t move his hands any lower from where they are.
Just as the elevator doors open with a small ding, Yoongi pulls away from you.
“We shouldn’t be doing this.” His voice is low and you flush at the warmth that swirls at your core at the sound.
“We don’t have to if you don’t want to.” Your hand rests at the edge of the open elevator to prevent the doors from closing.
“Fuck, _.” He chuckles, his tone raspy. “Of course, I fucking want to.”
“Then stop talking and kiss me. Whatever we have to deal with, we’ll do it tomorrow.”
Your reasoning is stupid and you both are well aware of the fact. But you’re both too drunk on each other, on the years you had each other and the years you spent without each other, that you don’t give a fuck.
Yoongi grins, sliding his hand under your jaw to bring your lips to his again, and you push him into the elevator, barely managing to press the button to your floor.
Yoongi’s hand shields your head as you stumble into the wall of the elevator. His lips are rougher now, his tongue kissing the back of your teeth briefly.
His hands move to your waist and he grips at your flesh as your kiss grows deeper. Your hands are in his hair, tugging and pulling at his grown-out locks. You manage to coax a deep sound from him, and it causes arousal to course through you and makes your core throb with desire.
The elevator doors eventually open and you manage to stumble to the door of your home. You struggle to insert the keys into the keyhole as Yoongi nips at your neck.
“Am I too distracting?” he mutters in that stupidly deep voice of his.
“Shut up,” you mumble, indeed shutting him up when you push your mouth up to his again.
You let out a small sigh of relief when you finally managed to get the door open, quickly pulling Yoongi along by the fabric of his sleeve.
You shut the door, lock it, and return your attention to Yoongi. You both pause for a second, simply staring at each other in the darkness of the unlit home, with smiles on your faces and darkened eyes, before you break out of the trance and you’re on him again.
Yoongi’s kisses move along your jaw and down your neck. You hate how he knows you so well, knowing exactly where to push enough pressure to pull a light moan from you.
He pulls off his jacket and the zipper makes a sharp sound as it hits against the wooden floor.
His teeth nip at the side of your neck, causing a sharp intake of breath from you, and he slides his tongue along the faint marks he leaves. He sucks against your skin, and the sounds feel lewd as they fill the air.
He presses open-mouthed kisses along your collarbone, but by the time he reaches the top of your cleavage, you pull him away from you.
“Bed,” you mumble, your voice breathless. Your chest heaves up and down as small pants fall from your parted lips.
“Okay.” He brings his mouth to your ear and he whispers, “Jump.”
You obey after he pulls you close to him and hooks his arms under your ass. You wrap your legs around his waist as he leads you to the bed.
You have to look down at him from the way he carries you and your hair falls around his head, almost acting like a curtain when you kiss him again.
When he drops you onto the bed, your body bounces against the mattress and for a second, he simply stands by the edge of your bed.
You use your elbows to move to the top of the mattress and kick off your shoes with surprising ease. The words ‘what’s wrong’ are at the tip of your tongue when he speaks up.
“Fuck, you’re so beautiful.”
You feel the warmth of a blush form on your cheeks, and you smile at the compliment.
He climbs onto the bed, his body on top of yours and the cool metal of the small chain you hadn’t realised that he had been wearing, grazes your skin.
His hands move the thin straps of your dress down your shoulders, pulling the fabric down to rest below your bare breasts.
You hadn’t chosen to not wear a bra because you thought you would be getting laid, but because the dress showed too much of your back and front to wear one. However, it does prove to be convenient at the moment.
Yoongi groans at the sight of your breasts, a raspy sound that shoots straight to your core. He cups your mounds of flesh with his palms, rolling your hardened nipples between his fingers. You moan out, louder than before, feeling the sparks of arousal the action sends straight to your core.
“So, so pretty,” he mumbles, planting kisses between the valley of your breasts while kneading the flesh.
Yoongi flattens his tongue along one of your nipples having you arch up against his body. You gasp out his name.
“You’re sensitive tonight, baby.”
You whine at his words, knowing that he’s right. The pet name he uses has you pressing your thighs together, which he notices with a tut.
“Tsk, so impatient.”
He presses his tongue against your other nipple, taking a painfully long time to move down to where you need him the most.
He descends down your body, inching down your dress and making sure to spend time leaving an array of coloured marks across the expanse of your skin.
As the dress becomes a crumpled mess of fabric by your thighs, Yoongi lifts his body slightly, allowing you to kick it off. You’re left in just your panties, and you shiver at the sudden chill that runs through you.
You let out a high-pitched moan when Yoongi presses his lips against your clothed cunt, feeling the arousal that has stained the fabric press against you.
“Please–Yoongi–,” you whimper, desperate for more.
Your breath hitches when Yoongi pulls down your panties, hissing quietly at the exposure of your now bare pussy.
Yoongi looks up at you from between your thighs with eyes darkened with pure lust—so dark that you can’t tell where his pupils and irises meet.
The sight makes you clench around nothing, and a whine bubbles in your throat from the lack of friction. Your hips buck up in desperation and finally, Yoongi obliges.
He licks a long strip along your folds, collecting your arousal on his tongue. Your eyebrows knit together at the overwhelming sense of pleasure, your hands moving down to entangle themselves in his hair.
You mutter out a profanity of curses as Yoongi laps at your cunt, alternating between slowly licking at your juices to kissing and sucking at your nub.
His hands grip your thighs tightly, and you know that it’ll probably leave marks by tomorrow. Not that you cared; Yoongi has marked you all over already. A few more aren’t going to hurt.
It takes an embarrassingly quick amount of time for you to feel your orgasm building up, the knot in your lower stomach growing tighter by the second.
Yoongi moves his attention to your bud as he senses you getting closer, wrapping his plump lips around it and sucking lewdly. Wet sounds fill the room and it makes you flush.
“Fuck–‘m so close.”
Abruptly, Yoongi pulls away and a whimper tumbles from your lips. Your orgasm pulls away from you, straying further away from your reach as the seconds pass.
“Yoo-.”
“Gotta teach you some patience, don’t I?”
You shake your head. “I’m very patient,” you mumble.
“Are you now? So if I do this–.” He presses a finger into your hole and you gasp at the sudden sensation. “–you won’t come until I tell you to?”
“N-no.”
Yoongi pumps his finger into you easily with the help of your slick arousal, and he quickly adds another finger. You clench around his fingers, chasing your lost orgasm, when he adds his mouth to your clit.
He sucks against you feverishly and the combination of feelings has you reeling.
Soon, you feel the knot in your stomach tighten again. “Can I come? P-please?”
“Hmm, not yet.”
You would’ve cursed at him if it weren’t for the sudden onslaught of a new, rapid pace he decides to pump his fingers with.
“Yoongi, please. I-I can’t. Please can I come?”
Yoongi hums against your pussy, sending vibrations over your cunt. You take it as his way of finally giving you permission.
You arch your back off the mattress as your orgasm hits you, squeezing your eyes shut as the pleasure rolls through you.
Your walls tighten and clench hungrily around his fingers as you ride out your high. When you finally come down from it, Yoongi moves up from your thighs.
His mouth and chin are wet from your arousal and orgasm, and you can taste yourself on his tongue when you kiss him.
He presses his two fingers up to your mouth and you open up without him having to even ask.
“Suck.”
The authoritative tone in his voice has you tingling with lust, and you oblige eagerly.
You suck in his fingers, tasting your cum and arousal and swallowing it down. Your tongue moves along the edges of both of his fingers, cleaning them completely before he pulls out.
“Good girl.”
He kisses you again and you can feel his hardened length against your pussy, still covered by the dark denim of his jeans.
“Ne–need you–please.”
You look at him through your eyelashes, pupils dilated and blown out from your orgasm, lips plump and bruised, and Yoongi groans.
“God, you’re gonna be the death of me,” he mutters, and you smile, teeth teasingly biting down on your bottom lip.
You tug at the hem of his t-shirt and he pushes himself up to remove it, pulling it off and throwing it onto the floor in one swift motion.
Your hands automatically go to his chest, moving across the expanse of his skin as he unbuttons his pants. Your nails teasingly dig into his shoulder, hard enough to leave faint marks in the shape of crescent moons.
You trail your touches down to his clothed cock and you palm him through his jeans, coaxing a moan from him before he grabs onto your hand to stop you.
“I want tonight to be about you.”
You open your mouth to speak, but your protests are swallowed by his lips. He takes off his pants and throws them onto the floor.
He climbs over you again, and you can feel his cock against your thigh.
“You’re this hard by just eating me out?”
“Of course I am. I fucking missed how good you tasted,” he replies, not an ounce of shame in his words, unlike you who flushes at his response.
“Wait.”
Your stomach drops. “What?”
“I don’t have any condoms.”
You hate the relief that floods through you when you hear his words. You were expecting something much worse–though the situation at hand is not ideal.
“I don’t either. I–I’m on the pill though.”
“I mean, I’m clean. I haven’t done anything since- since you.”
Oh.
You’re ashamed at the raw desire that floods through you at his words, and you can’t stop the cocky smile that spreads across your face.
“Shut up,” he mumbles through a smile, pressing a peck against your lips.
“Sorry.” You’re not. “I haven’t either.”
Yoongi nods, and you watch his Adam’s apple bob up and down as he thickly swallows. “We don’t have to–.”
“Yoongi, please just fuck me.”
“Fuck, okay.”
He restrains your wrists with his hands, pressing them down onto the pillow by the sides of your head.
He positions himself at your entrance and enters you slowly. You whine as he fills you up inch by inch. He had prepped you well, but you were still tight around him. Yoongi curses as you clench around him.
When his pelvis finally meets yours, he gives you a moment to adjust to him. When you give a small nod, he rolls his hips into you.
The moan that passes your lips as he thrusts into you is almost pornographic. Your hands squirm under his grip as his pace slowly builds up, getting faster.
“Don’t stop–oh, fuck.”
“Your pussy’s so fucking perfect. All mine, hm?”
“A–all yours.”
Yoongi’s thrusts are fast, and he releases his grip on your wrists to snake his hands down to your swollen clit. He presses his thumb against your nub, applying pressure to it and around it.
The overwhelming sensations of pleasure have your eyes rolling back.
You feel the knot in your stomach begin to tighten again at the sound of skin slapping against your skin and the occasional thud of your headboard hitting the wall.
“Don’t wake the neighbours,” you mumble, though you’re too drunk on the blend of pleasure and pain to fully grasp your own words.
“Fuck the neighbours,” Yoongi growls, but he does slow down just enough so that it isn’t as loud as before.
A string of curses leaves your lips as you feel your orgasm get closer. Yoongi continues to play either your bud, slowly increasing his speed.
“Please, Yoongi–‘m gonna cum.”
Your walls tighten around his cock and Yoongi groans at the sensation. Your hands grasp at the sheets below you, digging into the mattress.
“Cum for me, baby.”
His words send you tipping over the edge, and you cum again. The sight of you creaming around his cock has him increasing his pace as you ride out your orgasm, and you find yourself whimpering from the overstimulation.
“I know, baby, just–fuck.”
It takes a few more hard thrusts for Yoongi to reach his orgasm. He pulls out, and thick ropes of cum paint your lower stomach and the sheets under you.
He falls onto the mattress beside you, and the moonlight illuminates the beads of sweat that coat his skin.
You both lie on the bed in silence, simply staring up at the ceiling for a few minutes. Eventually, Yoongi gets up to rummage through the pile of clothes on the floor and you feel your heart sink in disappointment.
“Are you leaving?”
Yoongi stills his movements and turns his head to look at you. “Not right now, but–uh–yeah, after I clean you up.”
“Oh.” Another beat of silence. “Don’t leave. Stay.”
You hate how your voice is suddenly so quiet, how you know that you’re asking him more than just to stay for the night, though you don’t know whether he realises it.
Don’t leave me again. Stay with me.
You can see the outline of his body as he stands up and tugs on his boxers. He walks over to you and presses a kiss to your forehead.
"Okay.”
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perpetual-stories · 3 years
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Story Structures for your Next WIP
hello, hello. this post will be mostly for my notes. this is something I need in to be reminded of for my business, but it can also be very useful and beneficial for you guys as well.
everything in life has structure and storytelling is no different, so let’s dive right in :)
First off let’s just review what a story structure is :
a story is the backbone of the story, the skeleton if you will. It hold the entire story together.
the structure in which you choose your story will effectively determine how you create drama and depending on the structure you choose it should help you align your story and sequence it with the conflict, climax, and resolution.
1. Freytag's Pyramid
this first story structure i will be talking about was named after 19th century German novelist and playwright.
it is a five point structure that is based off classical Greek tragedies such as Sophocles, Aeschylus and Euripedes.
Freytag's Pyramid structure consists of:
Introduction: the status quo has been established and an inciting incident occurs.
Rise or rising action: the protagonist will search and try to achieve their goal, heightening the stakes,
Climax: the protagonist can no longer go back, the point of no return if you will.
Return or fall: after the climax of the story, tension builds and the story inevitably heads towards...
Catastrophe: the main character has reached their lowest point and their greatest fears have come into fruition.
this structure is used less and less nowadays in modern storytelling mainly due to readers lack of appetite for tragic narratives.
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2. The Hero's Journey
the hero's journey is a very well known and popular form of storytelling.
it is very popular in modern stories such as Star Wars, and movies in the MCU.
although the hero's journey was inspired by Joseph Campbell's concept, a Disney executive Christopher Vogler has created a simplified version:
The Ordinary World: The hero's everyday routine and life is established.
The Call of Adventure: the inciting incident.
Refusal of the Call: the hero / protagonist is hesitant or reluctant to take on the challenges.
Meeting the Mentor: the hero meets someone who will help them and prepare them for the dangers ahead.
Crossing the First Threshold: first steps out of the comfort zone are taken.
Tests, Allie, Enemies: new challenges occur, and maybe new friends or enemies.
Approach to the Inmost Cave: hero approaches goal.
The Ordeal: the hero faces their biggest challenge.
Reward (Seizing the Sword): the hero manages to get ahold of what they were after.
The Road Back: they realize that their goal was not the final hurdle, but may have actually caused a bigger problem than before.
Resurrection: a final challenge, testing them on everything they've learned.
Return with the Elixir: after succeeding they return to their old life.
the hero's journey can be applied to any genre of fiction.
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3. Three Act Structure:
this structure splits the story into the 'beginning, middle and end' but with in-depth components for each act.
Act 1: Setup:
exposition: the status quo or the ordinary life is established.
inciting incident: an event sets the whole story into motion.
plot point one: the main character decided to take on the challenge head on and she crosses the threshold and the story is now progressing forward.
Act 2: Confrontation:
rising action: the stakes are clearer and the hero has started to become familiar with the new world and begins to encounter enemies, allies and tests.
midpoint: an event that derails the protagonists mission.
plot point two: the hero is tested and fails, and begins to doubt themselves.
Act 3: Resolution:
pre-climax: the hero must chose between acting or failing.
climax: they fights against the antagonist or danger one last time, but will they succeed?
Denouement: loose ends are tied up and the reader discovers the consequences of the climax, and return to ordinary life.
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4. Dan Harmon's Story Circle
it surprised me to know the creator of Rick and Morty had their own variation of Campbell's hero's journey.
the benefit of Harmon's approach is that is focuses on the main character's arc.
it makes sense that he has such a successful structure, after all the show has multiple seasons, five or six seasons? i don't know not a fan of the show.
the character is in their comfort zone: also known as the status quo or ordinary life.
they want something: this is a longing and it can be brought forth by an inciting incident.
the character enters and unfamiliar situation: they must take action and do something new to pursue what they want.
adapt to it: of course there are challenges, there is struggle and begin to succeed.
they get what they want: often a false victory.
a heavy price is paid: a realization of what they wanted isn't what they needed.
back to the good old ways: they return to their familiar situation yet with a new truth.
having changed: was it for the better or worse?
i might actually make a operate post going more in depth about dan harmon's story circle.
5. Fichtean Curve:
the fichtean curve places the main character in a series of obstacles in order to achieve their goal.
this structure encourages writers to write a story packed with tension and mini-crises to keep the reader engaged.
The Rising Action
the story must start with an inciting indecent.
then a series of crisis arise.
there are often four crises.
2. The Climax:
3. Falling Action
this type of story telling structure goes very well with flash-back structured story as well as in theatre.
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6. Save the Cat Beat Sheet:
this is another variation of a three act structure created by screenwriter Blake Snyder, and is praised widely by champion storytellers.
Structure for Save the Cat is as follows: (the numbers in the brackets are for the number of pages required, assuming you're writing a 110 page screenplay)
Opening Image [1]: The first shot of the film. If you’re starting a novel, this would be an opening paragraph or scene that sucks readers into the world of your story.
Set-up [1-10]. Establishing the ‘ordinary world’ of your protagonist. What does he want? What is he missing out on?
Theme Stated [5]. During the setup, hint at what your story is really about — the truth that your protagonist will discover by the end.
Catalyst [12]. The inciting incident!
Debate [12-25]. The hero refuses the call to adventure. He tries to avoid the conflict before they are forced into action.
Break into Two [25]. The protagonist makes an active choice and the journey begins in earnest.
B Story [30]. A subplot kicks in. Often romantic in nature, the protagonist’s subplot should serve to highlight the theme.
The Promise of the Premise [30-55]. Often called the ‘fun and games’ stage, this is usually a highly entertaining section where the writer delivers the goods. If you promised an exciting detective story, we’d see the detective in action. If you promised a goofy story of people falling in love, let’s go on some charmingly awkward dates.
Midpoint [55]. A plot twist occurs that ups the stakes and makes the hero’s goal harder to achieve — or makes them focus on a new, more important goal.
Bad Guys Close In [55-75]. The tension ratchets up. The hero’s obstacles become greater, his plan falls apart, and he is on the back foot.
All is Lost [75]. The hero hits rock bottom. He loses everything he’s gained so far, and things are looking bleak. The hero is overpowered by the villain; a mentor dies; our lovebirds have an argument and break up.
Dark Night of the Soul [75-85-ish]. Having just lost everything, the hero shambles around the city in a minor-key musical montage before discovering some “new information” that reveals exactly what he needs to do if he wants to take another crack at success. (This new information is often delivered through the B-Story)
Break into Three [85]. Armed with this new information, our protagonist decides to try once more!
Finale [85-110]. The hero confronts the antagonist or whatever the source of the primary conflict is. The truth that eluded him at the start of the story (established in step three and accentuated by the B Story) is now clear, allowing him to resolve their story.
Final Image [110]. A final moment or scene that crystallizes how the character has changed. It’s a reflection, in some way, of the opening image.
(all information regarding the save the cat beat sheet was copy and pasted directly from reedsy!)
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7. Seven Point Story Structure:
this structure encourages writers to start with the at the end, with the resolution, and work their way back to the starting point.
this structure is about dramatic changes from beginning to end
The Hook. Draw readers in by explaining the protagonist’s current situation. Their state of being at the beginning of the novel should be in direct contrast to what it will be at the end of the novel.
Plot Point 1. Whether it’s a person, an idea, an inciting incident, or something else — there should be a "Call to Adventure" of sorts that sets the narrative and character development in motion.
Pinch Point 1. Things can’t be all sunshine and roses for your protagonist. Something should go wrong here that applies pressure to the main character, forcing them to step up and solve the problem.
Midpoint. A “Turning Point” wherein the main character changes from a passive force to an active force in the story. Whatever the narrative’s main conflict is, the protagonist decides to start meeting it head-on.
Pinch Point 2. The second pinch point involves another blow to the protagonist — things go even more awry than they did during the first pinch point. This might involve the passing of a mentor, the failure of a plan, the reveal of a traitor, etc.
Plot Point 2. After the calamity of Pinch Point 2, the protagonist learns that they’ve actually had the key to solving the conflict the whole time.
Resolution. The story’s primary conflict is resolved — and the character goes through the final bit of development necessary to transform them from who they were at the start of the novel.
(all information regarding the seven point story structure was copy and pasted directly from reedsy!)
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i decided to fit all of them in one post instead of making it a two part post.
i hope you all enjoy this post and feel free to comment or reblog which structure you use the most, or if you have your own you prefer to use! please share with me!
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OMG UR CAIUS FIC WAS SO GOOD COULD YOU DO SOMETHING AB ARO PLEASE
a/n: Thank you so much! I’m very excited to write for Aro, he’s one of my favourite characters, more so because of Michael Sheen’s performance. I put a slight reference to something in this, you might catch it if you know other projects Michael Sheen has been in, but you might not, and that’s alright. Hope you enjoy <3
another a/n: I did put one or two feminine terms in this work, such as ‘mia regina’ which is ‘my queen’ in Italian, so do skip over it or replace it with something else if you’d like. I love writing this type of material in the middle of my classes, it adds so much adrenaline to not get caught.
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Aro Volturi With A Human Mate
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Instead of being angry and frustrated like Caius, Aro was more excited.
Like as if he was getting ready for a big party.
A human for a mate was inevitable for some vampires, of course, but Aro didn’t expect to be included in the some.
He was excited since it was rare for such high profile vampires to socialize with humans.
Aro often gushed to his brothers, excited to meet you, but also for them to meet you.
He wanted to host a ball for your welcome.
But Marcus noted that it would probably be slightly frightening for you to be in a room full of vampires.
Most of the vampires would look at you as if you were some sort of a snack.
Because it Marcus’ comment, Aro assumed it would be a greater choice to send an invitation to a tour of the castle.
Free of cost, of course.
When you had received the invitation, you were beyond excited.
An invitation to a tour of an ancient castle with endless legends, for free?
Absolutely.
The tour was the next day, so of course you were slightly nervous.
When the tour commenced, a very pretty woman named Heidi lead the tour group.
She began to speak of secrets of the castle, as well as secret corridors and legends.
Some things a normal tour guide would most likely have no idea about.
Heidi then looked in your direction, and smiled brightly at you.
“It’s very lovely here. I’m sure you’ll love it.”
Just when she had finished her sentence, she opened the doors where there were three men sitting in thrones, and what seemed to be 4 guards.
The man who sat in the middle, greeted everyone and began speaking greatly of the castle.
He had only stopped when he motioned for your tour guide, Heidi, to come forward.
She did as told, and held her hand out towards him.
You would have thought it was to greet him, but it seemed like he was concentrated, or zoned out.
“Magnifico! I will get Demetri to escort them.” (Translation: “Magnificent! I will get Demetri to escort them.”
A man who you assumed was Demetri, walked in your direction.
“Come with me, all will be alright, rest assured. However, do not look behind you.”
You went with him, doing as he said, but immediately turned around when the rest of the tour began screaming.
“What the hell was that?!”
Demetri just grabbed your wrist and brought you upstairs.
“Just stay in here, I’ve been instructed to keep you under my eye. Aro will explain everything to you.”
“Aro?”
“The man who sat in the middle throne.”
You nodded, and decided to sit on one of the window seats.
You wanted to ask Demetri as many questions as you wanted to, but you didn’t want to bother him, or disrupt him from his job.
When the door had opened and Demetri bid his farewells, you had turned around and saw Aro.
“You must be Y/n, correct?”
“Yeah, and you’re Aro?”
“I am, I assume you have a good amount of questions?”
You nodded, and Aro moved swiftly but smoothly towards the opposite side of the window seat.
“May I?”
“Of course.”
He sat opposite to you, and smiled slightly at you.
“There’s no need to be afraid of me, or the others. You’re the most safe you could ever be in the castle. I promise you, I will keep you safe.”
“May I ask why the rest of the tourists were screaming when I left?”
“I sense that that question should be answered later, appropriately.”
You were slightly frightened as to what the final answer would be, it could be anything.
Perhaps there was a reenactment of the past after you had been escorted, one of the tourists got pushed and the rest screamed since one of them fell, or the worst:
They were murdered.
“I feel like I already know what happened.”
“I sense that you do know, too. I will tell you everything in a moment. But for now, would you care to lend me your hand?”
You trusted Aro, though you were positive your ancestors were screaming from above or below not to trust him.
You held your hand out in front of him, and before he held your hand in his own, he asked for permission or something else.
“I want you to think of the happiest memory you have stored in your mind, I will describe it to you. I will not see anything else besides the things you want to show me, unless I have your permission.”
You thought of a memory, and then placed your hand in Aro’s palm.
He covered the back of your hand with the palm of his other hand, then he began telling you small details of your chosen memories you had even forgotten about.
When he was finished, he brought his head up from looking down, and smiled at your face of bewilderment.
“That is so cool! Is that like your superhero power?”
Aro smiled widely at your interest in his gift, and began explaining what his was.
“I have a gift, it’s called tactile telepathy. I can read everyone’s thoughts and memories with a single touch. The others in this coven have multiple different gifts, they help keep us safe.”
“So you’re all like superheroes?”
“Vampires, darling.”
After that, Aro enjoyed seeing your memories whenever you two were apart for some sort of time.
Especially say you were having a difficult time attempting to explain something to him, he would hold your hand and immediately understand what you were trying to say.
“I understand you, cara mia. I always will.”
And he was right, he understands you in every way possible.
Aro memorized your body language on how you react to different things, as well as your facial expressions.
When you’re uncomfortable with something, he will do absolutely everything in his power to make you comfortable.
Aro will burn down the entire world for you.
When it’s time for you to go to sleep, you best believe that Aro set up the most lavish and comfortable room for you.
The best and most comfortable bed, of course.
You lay down on his chest, and he brushes the hair out of your face, admiring your tired eyes looking back at him.
“Would you like for me to read to you, dearest?”
You nodded your head, and Aro would get up from wherever he was seated, swiftly retrieve a book, lay back down next to you, and begin reading.
He loved having you hold his hand while he read, it lets him see what you’re imagining the scene that he’s reading to you.
And when you fell asleep while he was reading, he would be so very content.
You curled up next to him, sound asleep on his chest.
Aro adored seeing what you were dreaming.
He loved how humans brains worked while they were sleeping, keeping your mind entertained with multiple little scenarios.
When you woke up, however, Aro would prefer to have you describe your dreams, if you remembered them.
He loved to learn more about humans, especially in the modern age.
And you loved to learn more about vampires, especially in the ancient times.
Aro would often tell you stories of each coven he encountered, his old family and friends, and his past human life.
As much as he wants you to be changed into a vampire like the rest, he can’t help but smile whenever you got slightly nervous around him, stuttering over your words, and hiding your face with your hands out of embarrassment.
He pays attention to little details about you.
Especially your eyes.
Even the shade of your eyes stops him from changing you. Your eyes wouldn’t be as unique anymore, they’d be the same red as everyone else’s.
“You have the most magnificent shade of colour in your eyes, mia regina. I simply cannot get enough of them.”
Being absolute best friends with Demetri.
But wherever Demetri was, Felix wasn’t too far behind.
You three are like a troublemaker trio, always causing trouble and pulling pranks on different members of the guard.
Never Jane or Alec, though. Unless it was a scheduled board game night or something along the lines.
Which Alec loved to take away different players senses, allowing him to cheat in the games you’d play.
He doesn’t do it all the time, though.
Marcus was a lot more welcoming towards you, perhaps more than anyone else.
Whenever Aro couldn’t, he’d show you different areas of the castle you hadn’t seen yet, and would give you wonderful pieces of advice along the way.
“Remember to stay true to yourself, never let anyone think for you.”
Aro will spoil you insanely.
If you mention a specific piece of clothing even once, you better expect that when you wake up the next morning, Aro has an elegantly wrapped package placed at the foot of your bed with a note written in fine handwriting.
“Mia amato, I have seen you speak of this article of fabric, and I have gone out of my way to make sure you have every little thing you admire. I need you to be the happiest you can possibly be. Please accept my gift, and meet me by the gardens by noon. I’ll see you then. Cordialmente, Aro.”
You two have annual walks throughout the garden, usually during golden hour. The sun still above, but setting at the same time, making it seem like Aro was made of a trillion Tiffany Yellow Diamonds.
He loved finding a flower that suited your mood for the day, and putting it behind your ear.
“My beautiful.”
You two often walked either arm in arm, or hand in hand, but sometimes you would hold him closer with your arm wrapped around his waist, your head leaning on his side or shoulder.
Often times, when the moon is visible, you would slow dance together, looking at each other with smiles on your faces, just appreciating each other’s presence.
Usually, Aro would come back into the castle around 2 in the morning, carrying your sleeping self up to your shared room, after you had fallen asleep on his shoulder while sitting in the garden.
The rest of the kings and guards would be predominantly more happy than from before you had arrived.
You had given Aro something to look forward to after trials and mountains of work, something he didn’t have for hundreds of years.
Though, Caius was still slightly jealous of you.
You had practically stolen one, if the not the most, needed member of the vampire world. Aro was nearly as focused on you than he was on trials and legislature.
He’d warm up to you eventually.
At least, you hoped.
Speaking of trials, you wanted to sit in and watch the trials, to see what it was about, and how it worked.
You knew the most of it, of course, Aro had already told you. But you wanted to see it live.
Aro was quick to say no, he didn’t want you to get hurt, or worse, killed.
He understood what would happen to him if his mate was killed, Marcus was the example. He couldn’t even bear the thought of you not being by his side.
Though, you owning the key to his heart, convinced him to let you watch, letting both Jane and Alec stay on either side of you, protecting you if anything were to go wrong.
You would usually sit on Aro’s lap, and then the throne when he had to see what was truly going on by using his gift.
Jane usually stood on the left of the throne, and Alec on the right.
Mainly since Caius sat on the throne in the left, and Jane loved to torture the criminals.
He loved the front seat view.
Constant look backs of reassurance to make sure that you’re alright.
Nearly always having your hand in his.
Forehead kisses.
Constantly bringing the back of your hand up to his lips.
Getting the absolute best care in the world, health wise especially.
When Aro proposed, it was in the bedroom the both of you share, and he was reading some poetry to you.
All was going swell, and then he got to one page.
“I can write no stately poem
As a prelude to my lay;
From a poet to a poem
I would dare to say.
For if of these fallen petals
One to you seem fair
Love will waft it till it settles
On your hair.
And when wind and winter harden
All the loveless land.
It will whisper of the garden,
You will understand.”
At the end, you were leaned up closer to him, looking at him in awe.
He closed the book, and placed it aside gracefully, before leaning slightly closer to you. Placing his hands overs yours.
“Do you remember who wrote that, cara mia?”
“I do. That’s Oscar Wilde, right?”
“That’s right. There’s so much I want to say to you, especially in this particular moment, but I don’t think there’s enough words to express my love and affection towards you. I’ve known you for a little while, and I can feel the bond between us, and I know you can feel it, too. The universe has guided us together, and I am so very thankful for every second we have spent together, and I’m even more thankful for the rest of eternity we have. However, I am the most thankful of the fact that I have the most gorgeous human as a mate. I love you so much, anima mia. Will you do me the best thing that could ever happen to me in my thousands of years, and marry me?”
You said yes, obviously, who wouldn’t?
You leaned over to press your lips against his, as he held one side of your face with one hand, and the other hand slid a ring on your ring finger.
While Aro wanted an extremely lavish wedding, with all the diamonds in the world, you wanted something more of a homely essence.
So you compromised, and had a bit of both.
Aro invited nearly every vampire to the wedding, wanting to show you off in every way he could.
The Denali’s, Cullens, Irish coven, everyone was invited.
Except for the Romanian coven, Vladimir and Stefan. Not trusting them to be in your presence.
The wedding was held in the garden, the arch where Aro stood had your favourite flowers intertwining around it, with diamonds pressed in the centre of each individual flower.
Demetri walked you down the isle, smiling proudly when he handed you over to Aro.
Proud that his leader had finally found true love, and that one of his best friends is finally where they need to be.
After the official wedding ceremony, the rest of the night and day were spent smiling and showing off each other to the guests.
When the night ended, it was finally time for you to be changed to a vampire.
Aro sat by the bed were sitting on, making sure that you were absolutely ready to be converted to a vampire for the rest of eternity.
“Are you ready, my darling?”
You nodded your head, and Aro took one final look into your coloured eyes, attempting to remember every small detail of them.
Aro then moved your hair away from your neck, before placing his lips over where he would finally bite down and turn you immortal.
“Just say when, and I’ll see you after.”
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