#i reordered the first section -- the rib stuff -- a lot while i was writing it because i kept losing count of how many ribs had been remove
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went back through and added and changed some stuff with anatomy because i reread it last night and found some inconsistencies
#dove took off her top in my second edit but then there was a line about her shirt later :pensive: it's fixed now#changed some tone stuff#now that i've fleshed out a little more backstory for her as well there are references to her former domitor and also to her ex girlfriend#mostly just tone stuff and few-word additions#i reordered the first section -- the rib stuff -- a lot while i was writing it because i kept losing count of how many ribs had been remove#which. funny. she loses six btw.#so there were a few phrases that don't actually make a whole load of sense because i had shuffled them and not caught the weird changes#i also fixed some dialogue that had been bothering me#again small stuff i think i added like 100 words total so not much at all#it just reads better i think#this is all to avoid study because i am watching i film i don't like#anyway. anatomy is on ao3 under thebreathofafeather and it is very weird
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