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Cat’s Writing Tips: Show Don’t Tell

Welcome back to another Writing Tip Monday with Cat! My name is Cat, and I’ve been writing for 16 years. I’m by no means a professional, but I’ve learned a thing or two in my time. That being said, take this with as many grains of salt as you see fit. Let’s get into it!

Showing vs Telling

If you’ve been in any kind of writer space, you’ve probably heard this phrase being passed around with varying degrees of importance. Some say show only, never tell, but in my honest opinion, it’s a balancing act. Sometimes it’s better to just tell the reader that something has happened, and we will get to that in a minute. For the most part, however, if you want your readers to be immersed in the story, you’re going to want to show them what’s happening.

“Cat, what do you mean by showing vs telling, though?” 

If you’ve read my filtering tips, you have seen some examples of telling already, but telling is exactly what it sounds like. You tell the reader exactly what is happening or what characters are thinking and feeling.

"But Cat, isn’t that the point of storytelling."

Let me give some examples: “Character A is tired. Character A didn’t like that. Character A wants to do that. Character A is sad.” Obviously those are some very simplistic examples, but you get the gist. Let’s take that first one and contrast it with an example of showing:

Telling: Marinette was tired after fighting supervillains and going to school all day. She crawled into bed and fell asleep immediately. 

This example cuts straight to the chase. Your character is tired, and they go to sleep. Let’s try an example of showing:

Showing: Marinette pushed open the door to her bedroom, shrugging her backpack onto the desk. The herringbone floors of the attic creaked with each drag of her feet across the dark room toward her bed. Not bothering to change from her day clothes into pajamas, she collapsed into the sheets, soft linen whispering promises of rest. Her eyelids fluttered closed, the dull ache of her muscles melting into the mattress, and the lure of sleep’s lullaby overtook her. 

That example was a little flowery, but you get the idea. Let’s take a look at a few details here and talk about why this shows the reader that Marinette is tired after a long day of school and crime fighting without explicitly stating it. 

First and foremost, she enters her room and drops her backpack. Presumably a scene like this would be after other scenes where she was at school and fighting supervillains, so restating that she is tired after those specific events that the reader has already experienced is redundant. They can glean that from having already read those scenes. 

Next, the room is dark signaling that it’s probably nighttime. People tend to be tired at nighttime. She’s also dragging her feet. Body language can say a LOT about how a character is feeling. Also, the first thing she does upon entering her room is head straight for the bed. She doesn’t bother to change out of her clothes because she’s too tired. I don’t have to explain that, you can infer it from the rest of the scene. Collapse is a specific verb. Most people don’t collapse when they’re fully rested. Marinette is exhausted in this scene, and the language you use to describe that can convey that without telling the reader outright. 

Most people can relate to an experience like this and picture a time in their mind when they’ve been so tired that their bed felt like the best thing in the world. That’s what you want. It engages the reader and allows them the opportunity to relate to what your character is feeling. It puts them right down into the story next to your character, which is exactly where you want them to be. 

The main difference between showing and telling is distance from your characters. What do I mean by that? As I stated in the showing example, by describing the ways that your character is tired rather than just saying they’re tired, you allow the reader to put themselves into the character’s shoes. They can picture what the character is going through and imagine exactly what that feels like. It brings the reader close to the character. Telling the reader a character is tired holds them at a certain distance. It prevents the reader from getting in their head. 

Think of telling like an old fairytale narrator. “Once upon a time, your characters did this, and then this happened, and they all lived happily ever after.” Seeing as you most likely aren’t narrating a fairytale and are instead letting the character tell the story, you’re going to want your readers to experience the story through that character. You want them down in the action as much as possible, and you do that by showing them what’s happening and letting them experience it with the character. 

That being said, there are times when telling is probably better. For instance, if you’re including a time skip or if you’re providing details that don’t really need to be shown like character relationships. You can say that a character is another character’s mom. That’s fine. You can say things like “The next day” or “Later that night.” That’s totally fine. Obviously, there are other instances than just these, so use your judgment when writing. It's a balancing act, but if your objective is to pull your reader down into the action, you’re going to want to show them the action. 

Showing isn’t as hard as you might think, but it does require you to think a little bit. Put yourself in your character’s head and go through all of their senses. What can they touch? How does that feel? What can they taste or smell or see or hear? How are they feeling emotionally? What do those emotions feel like physically? What tole is their exhaustion taking on their body? Get specific, especially if you are dealing with more abstract concepts like anxiety for example. 

Telling the reader that a character feels anxious isn’t going to convey the same experience for everyone. Maybe the reader doesn’t have anxiety and has never felt it before, so knowing that a character feels anxious doesn’t do a whole lot for them. But if you were to say that your character’s hands were shaking, their heart is pounding, their stomach is churning in knots, their breaths are shallow and rapid, their eyes are watering, etc. That gives the reader a much clearer picture of what anxiety feels like to the character. Details matter. 

This isn’t to say that you need to include every sense all the time or go into excruciating detail about every little thing. Like I said, this is a balancing act. Finding that sweet spot of giving just enough detail to set the scene is one of the main challenges of writing. Pick a few to ground your reader and help them down into the narrative. Reading is all about escapism for most people. They want to experience what it’s like to fight bad guys with superpowers or to kiss the boy they like. That’s why they’re here. Your job is to take them there. 

Hopefully this makes sense and gives you a bit more insight on how to pull your readers closer to your story. Showing will be far more engaging and rewarding for the reader in the long run, and it will allow them to relate to your characters even more. If you have any further questions on this topic, or have another topic you’d like to see me cover, let me know in a reply, reblog, or shoot me an ask! I’m happy to talk writing anytime, not just on Mondays. See you all next week! 

[chickycherrycola]

"The difference between the right word and almost the right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug."

-Mark Twain

[wibzenadarksiderwithasoftheart]

Makin of Monday

If you want to know what it's all about, see the post here.

For this week's Making of Monday, I'd like to share a few of the tools that I rely heavily on when writing.

Since I write in my second language, a good translation site is essential.

I was recommended DeepL tanslator a couple of years ago, and it's a tremendous help. The site is my most important tool and I use it every day. It's a great help that I can translate entire documents at a time, but also work with individual sentences. The site can provide different suggestions for individual words.

Another important tool is an AI reader app, @voice, which I can transfer documents to and have them read aloud. This is the best way for me to find typos and hear if the flow is correct.

[fuckthisshitimin]

OK, it's over ten days of almost not drawing can the tendonitis go away now plz plz plz

[enluv]

also sorry for being so inactive today I’ve been doing a lot of errands and then later I’m headed to my abuelos house for a little family dinner/hang out!

[storiesgoeveron]

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[storieswithliliana17]

" She was just like a butterfly, colourfull beautiful and free."

The difference of perspective leads to greater difference in views.

"she was just like a butterfly, frail , weak and short lived."

[laurelindebear]

Oh good I've hit the 'I hate my characters, I hate my story, I have to change the entire plot because otherwise I'm forcing my character to accept the Christian god, there's no way these people would fall in love, the timelines make no sense, this character can't be French because their worldview is fundamentally different, and the family situation falls apart unless you add a much bigger conflict or rift than you currently have or want' stage of proceedings.

If anyone wants a few garbage paragraphs to try build something even vaguely worthwhile out of, just check my recycling bin before I delete it all.

[astonmartinii]

undercover verstappen | charles leclerc social media au

pairing: charles leclerc x fem verstappen!reader

get you a girlfriend who will threaten mutiny to get you a seat at a competent team

based on this request: HI BABES I HOPE YOU ARE WELL! I LOVE YOUR WRITING SM! So basically I have an idea for a (possible?) Smau series, so basically it's Charles leclerc × verstappen!reader, she is a reserve driver for redbull but is also maxs race engineer (idk if you call it that? The person that talks to them that one) so she's very involved with the team and f1 in general. The public doesn't know that her and Charles are dating, and they don't even think it as Charles and max "hate" eachother (they are both doing this to protect readers and Charles relationship, they are actually besties) and basically, reader has enough if ferraris tractor, so she's like 'I will get you too redbull' and then checo retires at the end of the 2023 season, and instead of taking the job when she was offered it, she asks if Charles could have it (obviously not publicised) and Christian is like "Yes very good idea" so he asks Charles who is uncertain at first but is then OK with the idea (he is worried about becoming a second driver to max but there is lots of reassuring that he won't be nd so he accepts) and then he goes on to win 2024 wdc (and wcc but irrelevant) and he's sad that he couldn't do it with ferrari omg that's long sorry babes - @lillians-world-is-f1

MASTERLIST | TIPS | F1 SMALL BUSINESS

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redbullracing: checo has informed the team that he will be retiring from the sport at the end of the 2023 season. we thank checo for his service and all the good times, he will forever be a legend of this sport. VAMOS CHECO 👏

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user1: EXCUSE ME?

user2: they really thought they could drop this on a monday and we'd all be chill

maxverstappen1: i've heard tequila tastes even better when you're retired, congrats mate - we'll miss you

user3: wait does this mean it'll be double verstappen on the grid now?

user4: there's more than one of them?

user5: max's sister is the girl you'll hear on his radio and she's technically the reserve driver as well. so she might step up to the second seat now checo has retired

user6: idk about you but that spells trouble to me

yourusername: congrats checo! will miss you, carola and all the little ones x

schecoperez: you won't be able to get rid of them that easily, i'll be cashing in on some well earned babysitting hours

yourusername: can't wait !!!

user7: what i'm hearing is that there's a chance for a daniel return to red bull?

user8: double verstappen or maxiel i don't want to choose they're both my children

user9: i'm making an outside shout for a charles leclerc red bull era

user10: i am seeing the lestappen vision

user11: my personal headcanon is that both verstappens and charles are all besties and have always been besties

christianhorner: thank you for your service checo, first drink on me 👍

user12: i know christian is sweating having to make a choice between child no 2 y/n and child no 3 daniel

user13: idk i think daniel might have the edge

user14: if geri or max have anything to do with it we might have a team so dutch that the car will be orange next season

user15: christian punching the walls cause lando extended his mclaren contract literally last week 😭

EXCERPT OF RECORDING OF THE RED BULL GARAGE, ABU DHABI

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yourusername: verstappens take the city

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user18: i just know they are simultaneously the best people to party with but also the people you probably don’t want at a house party

yourusername: i’ll have you know i once plunged a toilet at a house party and disposed of a “sick sandwich” i am a DELIGHT

user19: and max?

yourusername: no comment

maxverstappen1: as if ! i don’t care if we’re blood im suing you for slander

yourusername: i watched you volley a vase at AD21

maxverstappen1: i paid for it !!! and you said it was a sick shot anyway FAKE

yourusername: you can say that cause personally i was not at fault of any of my actions that night x

user20: PLEASE MA'AM AT LEAST ONE SEASON OF DOUBLE TROUBLE PLEASE

user21: idk if i could deal with seeing jos verstappen every weekend tho...

user22: obsessed with how neither verstappen follow charles but here he be in her notifications again

user23: someone add it to the interaction spreadsheet i am CONVINCED it will one day lead to more

landonorris: lando norris erasure once again

user24: DID YOU WRITE THAT NOTE???

landonorris: hell no i'd rather peel my skin off than call the three raccoons disguised as a woman pretty

yourusername: good gosh we would've got the point without all of that

maxverstappen1: yeah lando only i'm allowed to call y/n the raccoons in a trench coat. know your place.

user25: so you do wanna tell us who wrote the note then?

yourusername: nope ;p

user26: only y/n and max have been spotted out so maybe it's just brotherly love

user27: LOL? MAX? BROTHERLY LOVE?

danielricciardo: invite seemed to get lost in the mail again

yourusername: either get a room or get out of my comment section

maxverstappen1: ???

user28: no maxiel red bull again. i don't think y/n's blood pressure can take it

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f1: ready to see them as teammates? charles leclerc has signed a deal with red bull to keep him at the team until 2028.

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user29: excuse me *clears throat* WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK

redbullracing: welcome charles!!! no inchidents please

charles_leclerc: will we ever hear the end of that joke?

redbullracing: we know what the girlies want charles

maxverstappen1: you get used to it after a while. no ice bath thirst traps here though

charles_leclerc: phew 😥

user30: this little hoe pretending he didn't love it

user31: wait ??? does this mean what i think it could mean? GIRLFRIEND?

user32: i can't take leaving ferrari and a girlfriend in one day sorry

yourusername: welcome to the team charles :)

user33: don't think we forgot about the recording babe... IS THIS WHO YOU RECOMMENED?

danielricciardo: it better not be because if you recommended your lil boyfriend over sexy ol' me i'm gonna be real mad 😭

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user34: WE SAW THAT WHAT THE FUCK

maxverstappen1: daniel you are so fucking dumb

yourusername: MAX? IGNORE IT?

maxverstappen1: bro it's all over twitter you might as well take the moment to curse out daniel before christian confiscates our phones

yourusername: DANIEL JOSEPH RICCIARDO YOU RAT BASTARD I'M GONNA RIP WHATEVER REMAINING HAIR YOU HAVE LEFT AND SHOVE IT UP YOUR SURPRISINGLY PERKY ASS. IF I HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH IT YOU AND YOUR CHILD BEARING HIPS WILL NEVER GET CLOSE TO A RED BULL EVER AGAIN FOR EXPOSING A SECRET US THREE HAVE KEPT FOR SEVEN FUCKING YEARS

charles_leclerc: what she said

maxverstappen1: oop.

user35: well. can we keep going this is quite fun.

christianhorner: they're all in time out sorry

user36: okay well now that happened... when can we get "who knows me better my boyfriend or my brother" lestappen version 🤨

charles_leclerc: i would wipe the floor with him

maxverstappen1: of course you would you BIG FAT NERD

charles_leclerc: i thought christian took your phone?

maxverstappen1: as if he doesn't fall for the verstappen puppy dog eyes every time

charles_leclerc: you'll use them for me right babe, RIGHT BABE?

yourusername: idk charlie, this is family business

christianhorner: i've taken their phones again

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yourusername: my favourite men in the world doing what they do best

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user37: take me out back and shoot me already

christianhorner: interesting i don't see myself here and considering i pay your wages...

yourusername: dads go in different categories?

christianhorner: don't use my paternal instincts against me y/n

yourusername: say goodbye to your father's day card

christianhorner: NO I'M SORRY

user38: the way this proves that second red bull really was y/n's ...

user39: for real imagine loving a MAN so much you give it to HIM 🤮

user40: she also said in that recording at jos made it so bad for the two of them when they did compete that she no longer wanted to give the fans and the media the chance to do it either

charles_leclerc: oh wow that's crazy, you're my favourite woman ever

yourusername: don't be so rude to mama pascale

charles_leclerc: well other than mama obvioysly

yourusername: so i'm not your favourite, i see how it is

charles_leclerc: I AM SO CONFUSED SO I'M JUST GONNA SAY I LOVE YOU

yourusername: awww charlie i love you too

user41: okay i've known about them approximately two weeks and i love them your honour

maxverstappen1: i'm so much better than him y/n be real

yourusername: don't be such a sore loser maxy

maxverstappen1: don't get it twisted, i still won on track

charles_leclerc: not for long

yourusername: okay girlies leave the trash talk for the weekends this is being normal for the sake of y/n's mental health time

user42: good lord this trio is so dear to me

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maxverstappen1: best thing about winning is choosing the restaurant after - closely followed about the worst thing: third wheeling them.

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user43: max coming through with the y/n and charles content as he should

user44: i need him to open the vault cause i have not forgotten that y/n said this relationship is seven years old

yourusername: i think i had a wet dream about this sushi spread last night

maxverstappen1: as long as that's it, good.

yourusername: i don't need to have wet dreams anymore, the real thing is so much better

maxverstappen1: BLOCKED.

user45: i know y/n is elated to be able to publicly terrorise max with her relationship

user46: so does this mean that this is a system they've had for a while?

yourusername: room service is our middle names

charles_leclerc: maximilian can you please send the last pic to the shared album

maxverstappen1: on it 🫡

user47: SHARED ALBUM? I MIGHT DIE

yourusername: you two are such cutie patooties

maxverstappen1: but for real no being so cute on my jet again or just wait for me to go for my nap

charles_leclerc: heard and understood

yourusername: or maybe just get a life and stop being so lonely

danielricciardo: can i join for sushi or am i still banned?

maxverstappen1: eh, you could take y/n in a scrap

danielricciardo: she read my ass for filth on main i'm scared of her

charles_leclerc: she had you gagged

danielricciardo: and this litlle guard puppy agrees with whatever she says :(

yourusername: as he should !

maxverstappen1: don't try and fight it daniel, i've been in this losing battle for seven years

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charles_leclerc: life in blue could never be blue with you. i love you baby, thank you for giving me this opportunity, every trophy is for you x

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user48: GOD PLEASE SAVE ME PLEASE GOD SAVE ME FROM THIS SINGLE LIFE.

yourusername: i love you too charlie, i'd do everything and more for you. i'm happy you're happy x

charles_leclerc: you can't get rid of me at this point

yourusername: seven years strong, i'm stuck to you like glue

charles_leclerc: you'll have my last name (or i can take yours) next

maxverstappen1: you can give her a ring but you'll NEVER TAKE THE VERSTAPPEN NAME AWAY

yourusername: you good?

maxverstappen1: yeah but we must always be double trouble. not even THAT man will come between that

user49: this is the trio of my dreams i need a whole drive to survive ep or even spin off just following these losers around

danielricciardo: see how could you be angry that i would want to talk about all this cuteness ?

yourusername: we are cute, correct.

charles_leclerc: i'd use the words incredibly sexy but okay

danielricciardo: are you guys still angry? I'M TRYING TO COMPLIMENT YOU

yourusername: we forgive you daniel.

charles_leclerc: i was also kissing her on my first podium REGARDLESS

yourusername: you're so romantic 🥰

maxverstappen1: GAG.

user50: convinced that max will still be the biggest big brother asshole until he is in the retirement home

alexalbon: flexing the alex albon and lily mun he photography i see

yourusername: thank you for your service

lilymunhe: we can also keep a secret 🤫

danielricciardo: I SAID I WAS SORRY

charles_leclerc: we're gonna hold it over you forever buddy

danielricciardo: was taking the red bull seat not enough?

charles_leclerc: until i win a championship? yes.

fin.

note: I'M BACK!! hope this was what you were looking for xx also, if you guys ever want to support me in any way i have a tip jar on kofi and also my small business @badlydrawnf1cats that has a sticker sheet available right now - love you all xx

[malusokay]

Little things to upgrade your morning routine

Always start your morning with a nice drink like a coffee, matcha, or tea.

Say good morning to your pets, you can also text your friends and maybe, make some plans!! <3

Set an alarm so you wake up on time and don't feel rushed, for me, it's usually enough to just sleep with my blinds open!! :)

Open your windows to let some fresh air in, also make sure to check if any of your plants need water!!

Make-up and music. I love doing my make-up while listening to one of my playlists, it's the perfect way to set the mood <3

Positive affirmations!! You can write them on sticky notes and put them on your mirror so you'll see them while getting ready!! :)

Prepare a cute outfit the night before, and make sure to check the weather so you can plan ahead!

Don't skip breakfast, If you are busy, you can meal prep some overnight oat or chia pudding the night before.

Try reading at least 10 pages in the morning, it will help you feel more refreshed.

Make sure to check your bag, so you don't forget things like your lip combo, keys, and headphones!! Nothing worse than sitting on the subway without headphones (me rn) :((

As always, please feel free to share your own suggestions and tips in the comments!! I hope you all have a beautiful Monday/Week <3

✩‧₊*:・love ya ･:*₊‧✩

[grandmatapati]

As soon as I read this article I ordered a copy for myself. I prefer physical books for cookbooks so I am waiting for it to arrive next Monday. (I enjoy flipping through, discovering interesting recipes and seeing the pictures without being online.)

This is the book I've been dying to read, as I told Jules when I found him on twitter. He's very kind and says he looks forward to hearing what I think after I've had a chance to read and use it.

Before this the only thing I found was a guide to baking with brain fog on the King Arthur's flour site. Useful but I needed so much more.

I look forward to more volumes, such as Cripping Your Outdoor Kitchen. I'm guessing this first book will start many conversations and that will lead to a mass sharing of tips and tricks throughout the Disability Universe. We Spoonies already discuss getting calories in on days when it seems impossible. But this makes me think that cooking more often may be doable with a bit of guidance.

[purrincess-chat]

Cat’s Writing Tips: Filtering

Welcome back to another Writing Tip Monday with Cat! My name is Cat, and I’ve been a writer for 16 years. I’m not really a professional, but I’m also not a noob, so take this advice with as many grains of salt as you see fit. Today I want to talk about filtering, and no I don’t mean the kind that make it look like you have a giraffe head or a butterfly crown. 

Filtering in writing refers to words that filter your experience through the character. Words like saw, felt, thought, watched, looked, decided, touched, etc. In general, filtering is considered weak writing because it typically tells the reader what’s happening rather than showing the reader what is happening. Filtering is an easy enough fix, but it does require you to brush off your description skills. I’ll give some examples.

Filtering: Adrien felt his hands shaking at his sides. (weak)

Not filtering: Adrien’s hands shook at his sides. (stronger)

Filtering: She felt her heart hammering in her chest.

Not filtering: Her heart hammered in her chest.

Filtering: She looked at the boy sitting across the room and saw that his hair was black.

Not filtering: The dark haired boy across the room leaned back in his chair with a yawn. 

In general, filtering can easily be fixed by just removing the filter words and literally describe things as if you were that character experiencing them. Pick stronger verbs and lean more into descriptions. This will help make your story more immersive for the reader, for instance the last example I used, you don’t learn much about the boy in the filtering example other than that your character is looking at them and his hair is black. In most cases, it’s understood that your character is seeing/feeling/experiencing these things (unless they’re blind or have their eyes closed). Typically people don’t just walk around in the world with their eyes closed though, so you don’t have to tell us that your character is looking at something. It’s understood. Instead of saying that your character saw a mountain, describe what specifically they are seeing. “Rolling hills climbing to a snowy peak. Jagged rocks jutting along the cliffside. A purple sunrise peeking over the summit.” Get creative. Put yourself in their shoes. In real life, if someone asked you to describe a sunset, you wouldn’t say “I see orange and yellow colors and think they’re very beautiful.” You’d describe it. 

You don’t have to get overly flowery with it, but 9/10 times, you do not need filter words, and your writing will be much stronger without them. In very few instances, it’s probably fine, but I typically make it a goal to eliminate as many of them from my writing as possible. Sometimes it is better to tell vs show, but not very often, especially during key moments when you really want to ramp up the tension or really hone in on the character’s experience. This will also help develop your character’s voice within the story (a topic I’ll touch on another day). 

If you have any questions about filtering or if you have another writing topic you’d like to see me cover, feel free to let me know! I’ll see you all next Monday with more writing tips ;)

[chickycherrycola]

"The muse visits during the act of creation, not before."

-Roger Ebert

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Writing a Book Isn't Hard

Writing a Book Isn’t Hard

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[obsessivevoidkitten]

At the Movies

Male Alpha Yandere x Transfem Omega Reader

CW: Noncon, extortion, coercion, cum licking, panty sniffing, a/b/o dynamics, stalking, general yandere behavior, musk, pheromones, knotting

Word Count: 866

(I had a dream that this happened to me last night and decided to write it as a story. Not beta read. Sorry for errors. I don't think transfem readers are really catered to that often, so hopefully some people feel represented without feeling fetishized in this. <3)

You were an omega. You had decided to go see a movie by yourself because the theater was playing old classic horror films every night this week. This was the first time since coming out as a trans woman that you had been out in public and you were extremely nervous. You had worked very hard on your makeup and had put on a cute skirt. Though you had a lot of anxiety, you also felt more yourself than you ever had before.

It was a Monday night and still a bit early, so there was no one else viewing the same movie that you were. You picked a good spot to watch from and settled in with your popcorn and drink. After a few good minutes, you felt more and more comfortable, until halfway through the film, you heard someone come in.

You didn't pay the person any attention until they were close enough for you to catch their scent. You recognised who it belonged to immediately. Your stalker, Shaun. He was a persistent alpha who had been after you for months. A total creep who thought you were meant to belong to him.

By the time you could smell him, he was already too close for you to escape. He sat down beside you and grabbed your wrist so you couldn't get away. With his other hand, he muffled your mouth so you couldn't scream. He leaned close, and his scent made you dizzy.

"Sorry I'm late for our date. I had to pick up Mr. Sir Squiggles."

Your blood ran cold. Mr. Sir Squiggles was your beloved hamster. The implication was clear. Stop struggling, or else he'd do something to your pet.

"Don't look so horrified, baby. I'd never hurt our pet. But I have custody, so if you want to see him, you'll have to do what I want with you and move in with me."

Shaun sounded so smug. He knew he had finally won. His romantic advances had failed, so why not keep your pet hostage? You cried silently and nodded so he knew you understood what you had to do. He released you from his grip and pulled you close with his arm around you. His pheromones were suffocating, and you could smell how aroused he was.

After a while, he noticed you shaking with nervousness but misinterpreted it as you being cold.

"You look cold, here~"

"N-no I'm fine." You sputtered.

He ignored you and draped you in his sweaty jacket. It did nothing to soothe your anxiety though his musl did make your body betray you in a humiliating fashion. Your cock was hard and slick was starting to leak from your ass. He could smell it as soon as it happened.

"Well I was going to wait until we got home, but if my girl needs it now, I'd be neglectful if I said no."

The tip of his cock was already visible poking out the leg of his shorts as he reached under your skirt and rubbed your soft thighs before ripping off your panties. He brought the tattered underwear to his nose and inhaled deeply before stuffing it into his pocket for later. You had to suppress the urge to run away and just let it happen.

Shaun pulled his shorts down enough for his eager prick to bounce free. Then he hitched up your skirt and pulled you on his lap, lowering you on his length in one smooth motion.

"I fit so well~ you were made for my cock."

You whimpered but he shushed you and kissed up your neck.

"Shhh, relax. Just watch your movie and enjoy my cock."

You tried to focus on the movie, to focus on anything but this gross violation. But it was impossible with him sliding so deeply into you while claiming, biting, and kissing your sensitive neck over and over. Je began to gently stroke your weeping cock. You couldn't help but moan softly as his knot swelled and brought you to orgasm. Your insides clenched and throbbed around his dick and finally made him drain his balls into you. He took the cum you spilled into his hand and smeared it on your lips before licking it off.

Shaun held you tight in his lap while waiting for his knot to stop swelling so that the two of you could uncouple. You panted and blankly watched the film while not really watching it as your head was overloaded with all that had just transpired. Occasionally, Shaun would kiss your neck gently or rub your legs in what he thought was a soothing manner.

Every once in a while, he'd whisper praise softly into your ear.

"You're so good at taking me."

"You look so pretty in a skirt."

"You're such a good girl."

When the movie ended, and when his knot decided to dislodge itself from your rear, Shaun led you out of the theater and into his car, cum slowly dripping down your legs the entire time. You were a mess, but too numb to really pay attention or care, but that was okay. Your new alpha boyfriend would take care of you.

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Abuse of Power

in which Captain Price goes on a fucking power trip over his new recruit, you ♡

tags: MDNI!, power abuse, bdsm, bondage sorta, gags, whips, spanking?, reader giving blowjob as punishment, cum on face, basically Price being a big bully because he has the power to do so

a/n: slight changes to wording, wanna change more but dk what to add you know? hope you guys enjoy this ^^ i don't think reader's gender or any genital body part is specified but i had fem!reader in mind when writing (so watch out for that, pls tell me if there's any)

you're just a rookie and have so much to learn, it must be soo stressful, yes? don't worry because Captain Price here will guide you all the way. he's your very reliable captain, so trust him won't you?

all those tasks that only you seem to get? the ones that somehow end up with you on his lap or in some odd position that could easily be misinterpreted? don’t worry about it, just listen to him! remember to call him captain or sir when talking to him, he is your superior. he’s teaching you the ropes ‘cause he’s sooo kind. you’ll need what you’ve learned with him later on ;>

monday mornings are now spent on your knees in front of him. you're tied up, hands behind your back, gagged and you have to show him you can break free. oh but the ropes are too thick.. and you can't move... and oww they dig into your skin. it hurts! too bad, Captain Price isn't going to stop practicing this with you until you manage to break free. and even then, more practice doesn’t hurt.

thursday evenings have you half naked, bent over his desk as he whips you. gosh.. you really need to build your pain tolerance, you're a crying, whimpering mess on his desk! how will you handle yourself in case some awful person tortured you for information? Captain Price realizes you need a lot of training, so why don't you come on saturdays too?

oh be careful, don't let your tears spill on the documents... geez, you really had to get the papers soaked, didn't you. guess you need a punishment.

you know how he's always palming himself during your training? well now your punishment is helping him out with that. on your knees, half naked, hands tied behind your back, ropes digging into your skin, and guess what? you're going to stay this way until he says so.

he sits in front of your kneeling body on his office chair. his cock growing harder as he lazily strokes himself. his thumb pressed on your lips telling you to open your mouth, his hand holding the side of your head. he guides you closer until the tip of his cock is touching your lower lip.

Captain Price starts slow, he's pretty lenient about your punishment, at first. but god, he's getting more and more frustrated. you are not doing it correctly. the only thing happening is his cock slipping in and out of your mouth. god, you really are dumb. well, that means he just has to teach you, so listen up. he barks out orders between groans; "suck it, rookie. just fucking- ugh, don't use your teeth" but you're a little slow on understanding his verbal orders so he has to start getting physical.

a hand on the back of your head pushing you to take his cock deeper and deeper, until your nose is in his pubic hair. you're gagging and tears begin forming in your eyes. you look up at him, teary faced and you're moaning around his cock. he grunts out a string of curses before letting you go and cumming all over your pretty face.

he'll take off your restraints, look at the bruises and red markings caused by the ropes, tells you to clean yourself up and go to med bay. how will you even explain the marks? ah, doesn't really matter either way. if they find out, that's fine by Price. he doesn't mind if others see his handiwork.

"... next week, same day, my office, at 5."

"yes sir,"

is all you say, because what else can you do? he is your captain, afterall.