#this is unedited. and i think my ability to describe. well you can guess. needs more work

[sunflowersandscreams]

ok can't stop thinking about it and i've decided to get over being embarrassed about it. so very mildly smutty (mostly them talking about sex) snippet of adansey teacher roleplay below.

warning for discussion of non-consent. they are having consensual sex (or like foreplay, whatever) but they talk about non-consent.

Gansey kisses Adam's neck, his hand squeezing the bulge in Adam's pants. He rubs over it teasingly, and Adam gets his head on straight enough to seek Gansey's bottom lip with his teeth and bite down.

When Gansey gasps in pain, the hand on Adam's crotch twitching deliciously, Adam leans in and whispers in Gansey's ear, "If our little agreement doesn't work out, I will go straight to the school and tell them that you coerced me, and you will go to jail for a very long time."

Gansey stills totally and completely. There's several awkward moments of silence, then Gansey says, "Adam, what on Earth?"

He doesn't sound very in-character. Adam drops the act and backs up a bit to look at Gansey's face. "What?"

"Why would you bring up me forcing you to have sex? While we're having sex?" Gansey exclaims and throws his hands up. "I- Jesus."

Adam frowns properly now. "I'm altering the power dynamic. Now I'm the one in power because I'm blackmailing you, even though as a teacher you systemically have power over me."

Gansey makes a strangled noise and gestures incomprehensibly. "I would never want to force you into anything!"

"It's roleplay, Gansey. It's not real. If it was it'd be highly unethical and unprofessional, to say the least." Adam was still painfully hard and getting frustrated. "Can we just go back to before?"

Gansey wavers. "I don't think this kink is very healthy."

Adam groans. This is not getting them anywhere. "I know you're not forcing me. It's not about the force."

Gansey eyes him. "Are you sure?"

"Yes!" Adam, exasperated, slides a hand into Gansey's hair and twists. Gansey makes a little, cut-off noise at the sensation, his eyelashes fluttering. It's as Adam expected; he already knows about Gansey's love for having his hair pulled. "It's about this. Power." Voicing it makes his mouth dry and his neck hot with embarrassment. Poor Parrish, who's never known real power a day in his life, getting off on it. How predictable.

[momocicerone]

For the meme fic writer thingy! 8, 7 and 20

Meme for Fic Writers 

This turned out super long orz sorry

7. Share a snippet from one of your favorite pieces of prose you’ve written and explain why you’re proud of it.

THIS IS A HARD ONE. Because I write a lot but A LOT of prose and yes some don’t age that well but they all have a special place in my heart.

I’m still very fond of some of my early edo gr.uvia prose lmfao, altho I’ve changed a lot in my perception and affinity towards (un)healthy relationships and whatnot, I guess some of these can still be relevant （？）

“She’s a ragged doll, stuffed with broken dreams and patched up with cynicism.”  — Into your gravity

“Her heart might be crippled, yes. Dysfunctional and arguably inoperative as far as romance is concerned, but she doesn’t need a heartsmith— broken suits her well.”  — Where all broken things go

From more recent stuff, namely coai stuff,:

“Saying we were friends is a stretch, saying I loved you is insanity.” — Vacancy

“…dream as she may, heroes don’t fall in love with mad scientists.” —Chasing clouds

I’m proud of these in particular because I think I managed to convey a sense of insecurity, fear, regret, yearning or desperation when I needed, using few words to get that imagery. They also kind of roll off the tongue easily.

8. Share a snippet from one of your favorite dialogue scenes you’ve written and explain why you’re proud of it.

aight, hear me out: I DO NOT recommend anyone to read back into your gravity because, ermmm well it aged terribly and I certainly overdid it like i threw every freaking, ounce of corny bone in my body and stuffed it in that fic. HOWEVER. If we look past all the,, ugh, cringe purple prose and, extremely, overdone *incoherent muttering* romance cheesiness overload, there are parts of it that are actually… mm… worth noticing. Like I think the message was , um ,, it was kind of an okay message but the execution was horrible to look at. This is one of these fics I can’t even open because I die of embarrassment reading the first line. And it’s uneditable. Because… there’s nothing I can do for it. I can’t fix it. It is what it is. That said, this is an excerpt from that fic, and if you’ve read my recent stuff (namely Chasing Clouds) you’d see how I’ve improved in the art of writing long monologues:

And I still love this (despite it being horribly written al;sdfj ) because I love calling out characters in fanfiction as;lf CERTIFIED FACT. This was a fic about unbalanced relationships where I explore my always favorite topic: the (in)ability to move on. Because I want to tell my readers that YOU CAN live without that person who broke your heart and yes it’s going to suck ass at first but like don’t die. Sometimes you have to say enough is enough and take that step for yourself, love isn’t worth it when you’re giving all of yourself and getting nothing in return. Love so as you’re loved back.

I would argue that Chasing Clouds might have WAY better dialogue than IYG (Because let’s face it, IYG is like the prototype draft tryout rough sketch of CC), like Shinichi’s “not all kinds of love make for a good romance” part, but I think as far as deep meanings go, IYG even tho badly written, it might have a… say, more profound message. And thus this is my choice.

20. Describe your perfect writing conditions.

Nice weather temperature. Nobody’s home. Drink in hand. Chat’s gone silent.

[illuminatingcomics]

Before you give up on capes can you describe the problems with Riri's egocentrism/smugness and that one "supervillain monologue" of Moon Girl? I hear people dig into things like that, but I never really understand why.

Anon istalking about the infamous flashback of Invincible Iron Man #8 where RiriWilliams wants a teacher to tell her dreams won’t come true so that she feelsmore driven, and when she doesn’t, just stands there and creepily stares at heruntil she gives in.

Long ass dissection + other questions underneath the cut

I have avery big problem with this scene for a couple of reasons. I decided to puttogether three, from less to more important:

1) Beyondeverything else, this is just Bendis trying to be funny in his usual way andnot delivering. Beat panels in of themselves are funny, even beat panels that arereused endlessly and continuously for pages and pages (Preacher comes to mind),but Bendis never has anything even remotely close to a punch line at the end ofthese scenes. It’s just a repeat of the “awesome facial hair bros” or whateverhe did on Iron Man. So, strike one, poor attempt at humor thatfails.

2) Itpaints Riri as really obnoxious and unpleasant. I’ve seen people argue that “kidsdo stuff like that”, well, I’m sure some kids do these things, and the onesthat do deserve to be smacked across the head for being such little shits. Italso portrays Riri as someone who cannot properly function if things don’t go exactlyhow they planned, and a person that MUST have someone opposing her to drive her.An actually interesting set of character flaws if properly used, but again,this is not the introduction of a character flaw, just a comedic scene thatdoesn’t deliver. Strike two, character is obnoxious.

3) Thisthird point is complex and sticky, and a lot more serious that the stuff Iusually post, so bear with me. I may be entirely talking out of my ass I recognizethat, but it disturbs me how Riri Williams mentions “the first female African Americanastronaut” without saying her name. I actually got curious, and looked up thestory, and it turns out it’s all true, and the astronaut name is Mae Jemison. link

Why doesn’t Riri say her name? It disturbs me, because it seems theastronaut ethnic background is the only thing Riri (and by extention Bendis)care about. Riri doesn’t seem to consider Jemison some kind of hero, she doesn’tseem to be inspired by her story, she just want to live through an identicalsituation to fuel a little movie she made up in her head. Jemison is just a prop,forgotten and discarded as soon as the scene ends. Riri doesn’t care about who the astronaut is, she cares about what she is, and how SHE can benefit from a similar set up.

I mean, isn’t it a bit fucked up that I had to google “first female African-americanastronaut” to find Jeminson, when I could’ve easily googled her name if it wasgiven to me? It reminds me how just a couple of years ago, a new female writergetting handed a series was announced just like that by media outlets “NEWFEMALE WRITER”. I understand that it’s important for people, representation andall that, but I’m certain the very protagonists of these announcements would’vepreferred their given name to be written in all caps on the headlines.

I guess itstuck out to me so much, because reminded me of an another article from acouple of years ago, written regarding Cyborg.

The maingist of the article was that western media dehumanizes and mechanises black men,primarily their body, and that Cyborg has been chosen by DC as the black guy topush (subconsciously or not) because he represents a perfect conflux of bad stereotypesand roles whites associate with black characters, namely the fact that he’s anathlete thus he’s a working mule all body and no brain, and he doesn’t have adick, so he’s all body and no brain yet he’s not sexually threatening for the whiteaudience… and he concludes this article by stating that now Cyborg will be portrayedand I quote “an actor that is atleast three shades lighter than Cyborg’s color in the comic books”…

So, after atirade on how the white man dehumanizes blacks, the author of the articledehumanizes actor Ray Fisher by 1) not stating his name, thus making him anonentity b) reducing him not even to a skin color, but a shade of it.

Again, I haven’t read a lot of issues of Riri’s series, perhaps I’mmistaken, and Mae Jemison is namedropped every other page of every other issue,but it seems to me Tony Stark is the one treated as her hero and inspiration. It just feels wrong to me. I’m justsome euro trash comicbook reader, but I think this scene would’ve been ahundreds times better if you simply added the name.

“That’swhat they said to Mia Jemison, the first African-american female astronaut”. Itdoesn’t sound that much more clunky than the line already was.

Strikethree, Riri is an egocentric that uses living people as props in an attempt tolive a story she made up in her mind. 

On thesecond question:

Anon is nowreferencing a scene from the much missed Americaongoing written by Gabby River. In issue #2Lunella, AKA Moon Girl, a child genius, makes a cameo appearance to give alecture at America’sschool. Everyone in the book, at least everyone that the author wants us toconsider to be the good guy, including he main character is in awe in front ofthis speech. At one point there’s even an extra that some consider is meant to be an author self-insert,claiming that “Lunella is the truth”.

Ok, What’sthe problem with this lecture? Well, to make it really simple, here’s part of it, unedited (only Lunella’s name is removed when she’s referencingherself) but put in the mouth of other characters. See if you can spot theproblem.

We canenter long philosophical socio-political discourses on how villains have alwayssaid subversive things, and it’s all a scheme by the Illuminati to make theheroes the defenders of the natural order and portray anything deviating fromthat as evil and impure, but that doesn’t change the fact that a small child isgiving a speech about how society and rules that govern us need to be destroyed,and the supposed hero of our ongoing applauds that.

Hey anon, thanks… I saw the thread on /co/, hope you don’t take this the wrong way, but maybe next time give a little bit of context on who or why wrote that thing, because you confused quite a lot of anons there.

As for my webcomics, hey, don’t need to tell me, there’s  >MAD MAGIC< there’s >Heromaker (on Tapas)< and there’s a THIRD ONE coming very very soon…

Krees don’t have powers of their own, Mar-vell was special and his abilities came from other sources, nega bands etc, can’t remember all his details, and Carol got his powers. That’s yet another retcon Stohl had to cram in to make everything work, kree genetics…

It’s worth mentioning yet another problem with Stohl run, how the Kree seems almost romanticized and nobilitated, while in fact they were a bunch of warmongering imperialistic assholes that fucked with other people DNA for kicks, and Mar-vell turning against them was a one in a million novelty showcasing his good soul… but I guess Marie Danvers did all that before him.

Dude, Jim Shooter is the guy that thought “Have Carol get pregnant by her own incest baby then exiled to another dimension while the Avengers are tots ok with it” was a perfect, harmless way to write the character out of a team book… instead, of, y’know, “She had other things to do and is not gonna be part of the Avengers anymore”.

Sad.