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itsmistyeyedbi · 3 months ago

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I've finally got the time and energy to carry on with the rewrite and I am... stuck.

I've reached the part where I need to make the kiss obvious now, Zuri can't skirt around it anymore. Not in her own head, at least💀

The problem is, the body language that Zuri and Bobby exhibit is important to the dialogue they exchange and the kiss (especially since I'm writing around the "unwanted kiss" version in the books, I'll go into detail about that a bit in the tags) but a full on flashback isn't going to work with the way I've already written this.

So... do I just keep the dialogue and leave the details out and up to imagination? Or do I keep them by having the memory be in italics and split up between her current thoughts + anything else happening around her?

#the way the unwanted kiss is in the books is a little...hm #just the words “unwanted kiss” puts it in a weird territory #and makes the detective kissing back seem...hm #but I've found a way to work with it and have it make sense for zuri #by now it's obvious that they have a lot of history #and they did have some good times before everything went to shit #bobby is gonna use that of course - and he's going to use a detail she shared in a tmi type of conversation they had #while they were...partaking in something that lowered their inhibitions lol #with the motive of hitting zuri in the “you're special” soft/weak spot he knows she has #it usually wouldn't work coming from him because she knows his game #but this is after days of adam telling her that he's around her mostly because its his job #and right after overhearing him telling nate - someone he is obviously very close to #someone that she assumes he has no reason to lie to or hide things from - that he doesn't have any type of feelings for her #and it bothers her more than she'd ever admit at this point - it stings and she doesn't like that it does #she to a certain extent knows that it's a lie #but it planted seeds of doubt around the interactions they've had where she did seem to matter to him beyond being someone he has to protec #so... kissing bobby is going to be more of a temporary lapse in judgement than something she initiates or encourages or anything #but she does kiss him back for a bit - thanks to her classic 'find comfort in someone' coping mechanism #but it's not all that comfortable because it's coming from bobby and in the back of her mind she knows he isn't being entirely genuine #but it soothes the sting a little - until the alarm bells move to the front of her mind and she stops #so how do I convey ALL THAT without it pulling people out of the story? I'm leaning towards the latter #but any input would be super helpful🥺#chichi.txt

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