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Cohesive Reflection

During my second writing project I think I did a very good job this time around and I improved so much with the skills I already had and the ones you installed in me. Let's start by talking about the process. The very first thing I started with was my research because in my opinion why would you start typing a paper if you do not even have a source of where you are even going to start and\or any information. So, when I started my research I asked myself what is was about London that I was interested in writing about and that came out to be basically the culture and the places they have to offer. I can say I was really happy about getting to choose this topic because I actually love England and talking about it. But I went to the library multiple times throughout this project. My research took a lot of positive turns and I ended up finding a lot of useful information that i think I kind of slacked of on the first project. Like last time I had ideas all written down now it was the problem of writtining everything onto paper, i did not stumble into that this time. The big difference I think you will see between the two is most definitely the organization because this time I actually took the proper steps I felt was necessary to make this paper look, sound, even smell good. When it came to having the in class peer review this time around I liked how we did it because for Project one we kind of just passed the papers around and mind ended up not even getting looked at by anyone but one person because they really didn’t know what they were doing and that was over all kind of frustrating cause I was eventually thinking to myself well what am I supposed to do now I really do not even know what is wrong with my paper. But thankfully this time around I was able to get better feedback thanks to for you switching up how we did in class peer review. It was better this time around because I feel like you guided us and actually let us know what it was we needed to look for and not only did you do that but you walked around and made sure everyone was doing their job correctly. This time after class instead of leaving dissatisfied I left feeling like my classmates had actually done their job and like i could trust them more. On November 28th after the in class review I took my paper immediately up to my dorm and made the necessary changes I needed to make in order to make this an A paper instead of maybe a B paper. Now about the presenting part I guess it was pretty helpful because this gave us a chance to share our work with our fellow classmates and even receive feedback on what they felt could either be better and or done more proficiently to help our paper get better feedback from you as well. Another thing i thought I did pretty well with was taking the criticisms towards my writing and actually putting them into the final paper. Although I did all of this in the first writing project I feel they were more put to use this time. It is true when you said this time it should go smoother because i did feel like i knew more of what it was i was supposed to be doing and i feel absolutely ready to take on one of your English A classes. Overall I think i did a much better job this time with the whole project and i really had more fun writing this time as well because I felt prepared and ready to write and although I did miss us doing and working on most of the paper in class the first time around i am kind of glad I must admit that you forced us to do it on our own this time because it actually forced us to focus and make sure we got the work done, well most of us.

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Here are my reflection pieces from Projects 1&2

PROJECT 1-

Dear Reader,                                                Reading, thinking, and writing all have to do with the process that goes into trying to perfect a class assignment like an essay. On my essay I took a lot of steps to try and make my final product phenomenal.  The first day to me was the hardest because this is the day I had to come up with what I wanted to write about and to me coming up with ideas is the hardest. Do not get me wrong I knew exactly what I wanted to do my essay over but that was the problem we had to have more than one example and so far, I had one really good example but that was not enough. So, I asked my cousin Trenisse Murphy to give me some ideas on what she thought were various characteristics of me.  That day in class I did not have enough time to finish my first draft so after class I went right away to my room and started jotting down more characteristics and boom I had it, I figured I would write about how determined and focused I was when it came to life and volleyball. I had my ideas all written down now it was putting the thoughts and ideas into words that was not a huge problem but was still kind of a problem.  This was the day I came up to you in class and had asked about those sentences that just did not make sense and you helped me reword them.  Also, this day in class we ended up doing a peer review which I think did not help at all because the girl that sits behind me kept my paper the whole time so no one else really had the chance to edit the other aspects of my paper which was extremely frustrating. After class I went to the writing center and retyped my final draft. Came to class Friday so confident on everything, we did our last edit that day and turned it in on blackboard later. For this writing assignment I think I was very prepared and interested. I think I did a very good job revising and getting help, considering the fact I suck at revising. One thing I could have did better was adding more ideas I think.

PROJECT 2-

 During my second writing project I think I did a very good job this time around and I improved so much with the skills I already had and the ones you installed in me. Let's start by talking about the process. The very first thing I started with was my research because in my opinion why would you start typing a paper if you do not even have a source of where you are even going to start and\or any information. So, when I started my research I asked myself what is was about London that I was interested in writing about and that came out to be basically the culture and the places they have to offer. I can say I was really happy about getting to choose this topic because I actually love England and talking about it. But I went to the library multiple times throughout this project. My research took a lot of positive turns and I ended up finding a lot of useful information that i think I kind of slacked of on the first project. Like last time I had ideas all written down now it was the problem of writtining everything onto paper, i did not stumble into that this time. The big difference I think you will see between the two is most definitely the organization because this time I actually took the proper steps I felt was necessary to make this paper look, sound, even smell good. When it came to having the in class peer review this time around I liked how we did it because for Project one we kind of just passed the papers around and mind ended up not even getting looked at by anyone but one person because they really didn’t know what they were doing and that was over all kind of frustrating cause I was eventually thinking to myself well what am I supposed to do now I really do not even know what is wrong with my paper. But thankfully this time around I was able to get better feedback thanks to for you switching up how we did in class peer review. It was better this time around because I feel like you guided us and actually let us know what it was we needed to look for and not only did you do that but you walked around and made sure everyone was doing their job correctly. This time after class instead of leaving dissatisfied I left feeling like my classmates had actually done their job and like i could trust them more. On November 28th after the in class review I took my paper immediately up to my dorm and made the necessary changes I needed to make in order to make this an A paper instead of maybe a B paper. Now about the presenting part I guess it was pretty helpful because this gave us a chance to share our work with our fellow classmates and even receive feedback on what they felt could either be better and or done more proficiently to help our paper get better feedback from you as well. Another thing i thought I did pretty well with was taking the criticisms towards my writing and actually putting them into the final paper. Although I did all of this in the first writing project I feel they were more put to use this time. It is true when you said this time it should go smoother because i did feel like i knew more of what it was i was supposed to be doing and i feel absolutely ready to take on one of your English A classes. Overall I think i did a much better job this time with the whole project and i really had more fun writing this time as well because I felt prepared and ready to write and although I did miss us doing and working on most of the paper in class the first time around i am kind of glad I must admit that you forced us to do it on our own this time because it actually forced us to focus and make sure we got the work done, well most of us.

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Here are all of my rough drafts 

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Insert from my “If i were to visit London, England” writing

“All Right?” is a UK slang used to express “Hello” or “How Are You?” and is one of the many things that makes England so cool. Literally ever since I could remember I have always wanted to be a part of the tremendous British culture, given this opportunity to even talk about this country excites me all too well. So, sit back and relax as I take you on a journey through the wonderful country they call London, England.

-Here i show that i can express a tone that enhances purpose. I chose this paragraph because here you can tell that i was over all excited about what i was about to write about, and that was the overall tone was being excited and starting to give information

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This is an insert  from my “Who I Am” writing

Fast forward to my Junior year of high school I had become so good at every sport I participated in. However, my future prospects were nonexistent. I would think things like “College is just around the corner so why are no schools looking at me? Maybe I’m not good enough to play college ball.” Things were starting to look up. I had gotten nominated as an All-Star and was selected to participate in the annual All-Star Game. Along with the game I received my first volleyball ring, I was so excited.

Now here it is Senior Year, man I was on top of everything. Grades were looking up and sports? Don’t get me started I was the star of my school’s volleyball team and I was leading us towards many victories in the other two sports I previously mentioned. The only problem was that colleges still were not looking at me and I was determined to play college ball. Luckily, I put in a bit more effort and got a wonderful Coach to reply to me and boom I was signed to play at Ouachita Baptist University. I know the school was kind of expensive but hey I was getting to play volleyball in college so that was the only thing that really mattered to me. I soon learned that I was way in over my head

-Here i show that i can properly use artful transitions. To transition i used the words/phrases “Fast forward” and “Now here it is” to go from time to time in my paper. 

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In this screenshot from my “If i were to visit London, England” writing i show varied sentence structure because i do not repeat the same words over and over again and i use different grammar. 

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Thoughtful conclusions that appropriately summarize and tie together ideas

Who I Am- I guess you guys could now agree that I am pretty determined and was willing to give up on my passion by making excuses. Not only did God watch over me, but he blessed me with another amazing opportunity for redemption. I spent the past seven years listening to how determined I was and I am actually starting to see it.

If i were to visit London, England- “Cheers” is a UK slang used to express “Goodbye” or “See You Later?” and is one of the many things that makes England so cool. Whether it was the diversity, tourist attractions or even the many languages/accents that come with The United Kingdom, you now know a foreign country I would not hesitate to visit if given the opportunity and why it is so appealing to me.

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Here is a screenshot of my “Who I Am Story”, here i show well developed paragraphs with quality topic sentences and adequate support the thesis statement 

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This is an insert from my “Who I Am Story”

Even though it is irritating I would have to agree, volleyball was all I had so if I could not play that then what would I do?  

-Here is a Quality Thesis Statement from the end of my introduction paragraph

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This is an insert from my writing “If i were to visit London, England”

If I Were to Visit London, England

“All Right?” is a UK slang used to express “Hello” or “How Are You?” and is one of the many things that makes England so cool. Literally ever since I could remember I have always wanted to be a part of the tremendous British culture, given this opportunity to even talk about this country excites me all too well. So, sit back and relax as I take you on a journey through the wonderful country they call London, England

-Here i show that i can create engaging titles and an engaging introduction

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This is an insert from my writing “If I were to visit London, England”

. Literally ever since I could remember I have always wanted to be a part of the tremendous British culture, given this opportunity to even talk about this country excites me all too well. So, sit back and relax as I take you on a journey through the wonderful country they call London, England.

-Here i show you all that i know how to correctly use grammar with little to no mechanical errors

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Response to “Stedman’s annoying ways people use sources”

The word annoying in the title of this chapter draws attention to the rhetorical nature of a writer’s choices when citing sources, emphasizing that readers may feel emotions like annoyance (or worse) when authors fail to cite in the ways expected by the audience. This reading humorously describes poor decisions that academic writers can make when incorporating outside sources into their texts. You can help your students avoid “annoying” rhetorical behaviors with this chapter, a brief primer on citation conventions for the Modern Language Association style.I feel like this writing by Stedman is targeted towards Students who will enjoy reading about each “annoyance,” illustrated through positive and negative examples designed to show both the most common ways that writers make these mistakes and practical ways to fix them and they will also be leaning useful tips kinda at the same time. What i liked the most about this article was that it was funny and it did not get boring to me. Because of this Stedman’s writing was extremely easy to read. I could not find anything that i disliked about it honestly. 

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Response to “Googlepedia: Turning Information Behaviors into Research Skills” (Logbook 9)

I never really thought of it this way but many teachers question themselves and ask how they can help students improve their research, basically going from virtual websites that are legit to even going to a library. That is not the hard part the hard part is getting them the research skills needed, while respecting and understanding the information behaviors they practice and prefer. Growing up in the digital age, students often come to many first year writing courses with bad behaviors.Students may already know how to search through multiple websites for information and interact through multiple devices and formats (Facebook & Twitter). Instead using certain information sources on the Web, such as Google and Wikipedia. What i really like about this reading is that he using students and make them the example. This actually gives the reader a chance and shows us how young adolescents my age think when it comes to performing actual research and how we may get stuck or impatient. 

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(Logbook 8) Response to Hewitt’s “From Topic to Presentation: Making Choices to Develop Your  Writing”

In this writing Mr. Hewitt observes that Students need to learn how to revise their writing based on readers' feedback, but they rarely know how to make such decisions because most are not properly taught how to. This reading not only teaches students how to make decisions about essay development and revision by modeling and explaining a writing teacher's decision-making process but it also kind of guides them on how to do so in a way. I believe in the writing he says something like every semester, he asks his students for topic ideas and then to write an essay for them. They provide feedback on the draft, and I revise it based on their comments. This writing also draws on one of the writing experiences that many students face. Students will see various stages of an in-progress essay that demonstrate and explain how student writers can employ these strategies in their own preliminary writing to presentation-quality writing. I like this writing because It really involves students, It gives them a chance to pick their own topics, brainstorm, and begin to write on their own. I couldn’t really find anything I did not like about this article.

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(Logbook ) So You’ve Got A Writing Assignment Now What ?

Interpreting writing assignments can be a challenge for anyone. For first-year college students, however, it can be an overwhelming struggle as students learn to adjust to new academic pressures and expectations.What is my instructor evaluating? Do I need an argument? How do I structure my response? Questions like these trouble the minds of many undergraduates and, for several reasons, they frequently go unanswered. This chapter gives students practical strategies for interpreting writing assignments, including how to identify important rhetorical elements, how to calculate and respond to common expectations, and how to recognize and discuss specific points of confusion. This writings strong points is the amount of information giving and how good it is broken down so it does not really leave you guessing on what something meant. I Also loved how is this writing Corrine Hinton gave many guidelines for interpreting writing assignments and that i found to be extremely helpful. 

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Giles"Reflective Writing and the Revision Process: What Were You Thinking?" (Logbook 6)

The main point of this reading is that the editors and/or teachers characterize this unique writer-reader relationship by speaking on their own experiences and in counters they have had. These teachers-as-writers invite students join in the conversation about developing nearly every aspect of the craft of writing. In these essays, writers speak directly to students in their capacity as agents of their own writing development. What makes this reading so strong is that Giles takes many other teachers opinions and experiences and gives them a chance to talk and reflect back on them. So it is like you get different variation of material. There is nothing in this reading that i did not really like, in fact i think this is one of the best readings we have done that actually stuck with me and has given me and opportunity to actually remember what i read.  The connections i can make with this is that sometimes us as students do not really understand how our reading and writings (essays) may sound or look to teachers mainly English teachers who actually take the time to read and grade our work.

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Response  to “Reid’s Ten Ways To Think About Writing..” (Logbook 5)

In this article, Ten Ways To Think About Writing: Metaphoric Musings for College Writing Students by E. Shelley Reid, Reid lists and explains in great detail ten key points to keep in mind when writing a college essay. Her key points were mainly revolved around the writer understanding their audience and properly communicating their ideas with sufficient way and while also still maintaining the reader’s attention, and avoiding writing papers in a formulaic fashion. Also in this writing, Reid follows all of the ten points which she laid out, giving clear, concise yet detailed information, while showing great understanding for her audience of college students who have been taught many different and absurd ways for writing essays back in middle school. I like that she rather than overload the reader with a huge number of rules to follow in an already complicated and regulated standard old fashion way, she decides to break her advice into ten easy to follow rules, complete with very memorable and easy to understand titles. In this way, she succeeds greatly. She understands who her audience is, how they think, and what would make it the easiest for her message to connect and stick to the desired audience, the reader. In doing so, she displays the benefits of these concepts, once again reinforcing how powerful they can be when put to good use correctly.  There is also nothing about this article that I did not like I think she did everything right.