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[cherrymaetinos]

This is good Dead. Good job. You are getting there. There are just few revisions

-”future leaders/educators that makes our country” examine this part, and adhere to the rules of subject-verb agreement.

Stepping up in tertiary level is a roller coaster experience and emotions. Being with a family that boost everyone’s capabilities is such a good thing. A week being with Coed family is really thrilling. I felt the excitement to meet my classmates, uppers and even teachers in this department. The excitement was there that makes the exploration deserve to treasure. Uppers are so approachable, they even laid their hands to help and interact with froshies like us. It is a great opportunity and starting pack to cope up in the new environment. It results in belongingness. Coed family was able to feel us the belongingness, the space that we have in this department. To sum it up, the Coed family indeed molding future leaders/educators that makes our country successful in the future.

#revising

#faithcolleges

#DEANHAILEYVILLANUEVA

#question2

[cherrymaetinos]

-This is great Mica Ella!

-”family are open for anyone” the use of preposition is incorrect, change it.

I felt the warm welcome of the COED family since I am a late enrollee. They assist and guide me in order to catch up on the missed events and learnings. The COED family assures that there is no student being left out, I am grateful indeed to be part of it. I love the events and programs that they were performing, there was no dead air and I didn’t feel any boredomness. They explain the concept of the program concisely and vividly. The members of this family are open for anyone in terms of issues and concerns whether in academics or personal problems. Their arms are always wide open to give guidance and lend help to those having hardships. I hope that this family remains stronger and united not just in the beginning but  also until the end of our college phase. At first, my nervous side is still there and the social anxiety is still bothering me. To the point that I am afraid to interact because there’s a gut that they don’t like me or even misinterpret me. But then, as the time went by they changed how I viewed my life in this phase. I will treasure this COED Family that I belong to. I am still looking forward to the best experience that I will surely cherish in having a family like this. I am indeed happy and overwhelmed to be part of it. The bond and lessons that COED family will bring will  never be forgotten even when I am weak and gray old.

[cherrymaetinos]

-Great job Juliene!  

-”programs which hosted by” drop the word (which)

-”In every session” drop the word (in)

-” they help us to feel entertained as well getting” (as well as)

-set of students from every course and have relationship with them”- please adhere to the rules of subject-verb agreement.

-really help us to refresh ourself in many ways- please adhere to the rules of subject-verb agreement.

From the first day of class and up until now, we always have programs which hosted by FTL's coordinators. In every session we have is very enjoyable and fun experience, they help us to feel entertained as well getting out of our shell and create interaction with others. Through the medium of online edukamustahan we are able to know different professors from different departments as well as new set of students from every course and have relationship with them. Also, through these programs it really help us to refresh ourself in many ways, like in assignments, activities and projects. By that, we received rewards and prizes. Overall, my experience in COED is best experience that I've ever had.

[cherrymaetinos]

Good job Rosalie. However, please be clear with the construction of your sentences. It is very long, consider dividing many thoughts into other sentences. 

Also, please paraphrase this “the uppers are they help the freshman and I’m happy because this family I belong.” 

How’s your first week being part of the COED family?

In the first week being part of the COED family is I’m not sure in my course I always think the whole week if this course is really for me and I’m scared and nervous because I meet another family, classmate, teachers. But I’m grateful because the COED family and the BSED-ENG family are very approachable and kind, the uppers are they help the freshman and I’m happy because this family I belong.

#revising

#faithcolleges

#rosaliepunzalan

question1

[cherrymaetinos]

-Job well done Daren! I appreciate that you considered all of my comments for the improvement of your blog. However, I would still suggest that you revise some of the parts. 

”they give me an apportunity to gane more knoledge” be mindful of your spelling. Spell it correctly.

How's your first week of being part of Coed family? When I experience being part of the Coed family , I feel that I'm not alone,and I can't feel that im out of a place because coed family makes me feel super special, they give me an apportunity to gane more knoledge, to become a good speaker and host, with that I didn't feel that im sad nor alone. To be part of coed family is super interesting and not boring , that's why for me COED IS A FAMILY.

[cherrymaetinos]

Job well done Rebecca! This is the end of your revising phase. I appreciate that you considered all of my comments for the improvement of your blog.

I was really nervous attending our first class but also excited to meet new people and be friends with them. The first week was good, I was able to meet our mentor and have a meeting with the guidance facilitator to share how I was in FAITH Colleges. I was happy to be surrounded by people whom I can call whenever I feel down. COED family has many events that let students show their talents and some events are just to have fun and enjoy. It was amazing to have these events though it is held virtually. They were able to let students not to stress out in academics and let them experience the excitement and joy of being part of the COED family.

[cherrymaetinos]

Job well done Ashlyn! I appreciate that you considered all of my comments for the improvement of your blog. However, I would still suggest that you revise some of the parts. 

-I’m truly greatful that now- be mindful with your spellings (grateful)

-I’m in this path-  examine your incorrect use of the preposition, please change it.

-not just to learned but also- Check your verbs. Try to compare past, present and future tense of the verb

-go back in our normal days- examine your incorrect use of the preposition, please change it

In my first week in college, made me realized, that I'm really at the new phase of my life. At first I am really nervous since everything is new to me like new set of people and new environment. But I really enjoy it, and I'm truly greatful that now I have my second family. I know I'm in this path not just to learned but also to meet new people that will help me throughout my journey. It's kinda mind blowing but as time goes by, I'm slowly adjusting. I really feel the happiness even though we are just virtually meeting each other so what more if we are on face to face learning and regarding to that I know we are all hoping to go back in our normal days, and let's pray so that it will happen again in His right perfect time. So for now let's help each other to learn and surpass all the hardships that we may encounter this whole academic year.

#revising

#FAITHCOLLEGES

#EnriquezAshlynAraJoyceD

#question2

[cherrymaetinos]

This is great, no need for revisions. Good job Pia!

How's your first week being part of the COED family?

I feel grateful because this is my first experience to have a family like this in terms of organizations and school. I always feel excited when they have a program especially FTL that doesn't miss the activity and fun stories and prizes you will enjoy. At first I was nervous because the people I would meet were different because I was already a full -fledged college student, but because of the COED family I didn't experience that because they will let you know how welcome you are to them, and they are ready to help you so you won't be left behind. I'm so happy because I had a new friend who was ready to help me in my acads or in my own life and new teachers who could understand and guide all of us in everything. I wish as time goes on we will all love each other even more without competing. because teamwork measures being a good person and being a student in a school. And I knew my school year of college would be fun with the COED FAMILY<3.

[cherrymaetinos]

This is great, no need for revisions. Good job Jessa!

I graduated from Senior High School last 2016 which was 6 years ago. My first week with the COED family and my first week in college went well. I missed the feeling of being in a class though we are on the online class setup now. I'm already a mother of 2 kids and multitasking is very hard. I do the responsibilities of a mother, a wife and a student at the same time. At first, I thought I couldn't be able to fit in because of my age but I was wrong. The approach of my classmates, professors and other students in the higher years was very heartwarming. On the first week of our classes, I was so shy to answer but as the day went by, my shyness faded little by little. Our professors are very approachable and always ready to help. The students from the higher years are very friendly and fun to talk with. I have now two professors who were my teachers when I was in Senior High School, which helps to reduce the tension that I'm feeling. There is a subject that I'm not good at, it is Math. But I know I'm not the only one and we can do it with the help of each other. I hope that my college journey will be good just how it started.

[cherrymaetinos]

This is great, no need for revisions. Good job Jessa!

I graduated from Senior High School last 2016 which was 6 years ago. My first week with the COED family and my first week in college went well. I missed the feeling of being in a class though we are on the online class setup now. I'm already a mother of 2 kids and multitasking is very hard. I do the responsibilities of a mother, a wife and a student at the same time. At first, I thought I couldn't be able to fit in because of my age but I was wrong. The approach of my classmates, professors and other students in the higher years was very heartwarming. On the first week of our classes, I was so shy to answer but as the day went by, my shyness faded little by little. Our professors are very approachable and always ready to help. The students from the higher years are very friendly and fun to talk with. I have now two professors who were my teachers when I was in Senior High School, which helps to reduce the tension that I'm feeling. There is a subject that I'm not good at, it is Math. But I know I'm not the only one and we can do it with the help of each other. I hope that my college journey will be good just how it started.

[cherrymaetinos]

-”Stepping up in tertiary level” make it “Stepping up to the tertiary level”

-”Being with family that boast “ make it “Being with A family that boast “

-try checking the proper context of the words “boast” “successful”

-review the correct spelling of words “forshies”

-”It results belongingness.” make it “It results in belongingness.”

-”Coed family able to feel us the belongingness” make it “Coed family was able to feel us the belongingness”

-review the correct usage of punctuation marks.

-I suggest that you proofread first so that you won't be having issues when it comes to writing.

-I get your points, but I would suggest that you improve and/or paraphrase some of the parts of this blog entry. 

-You are doing well. Good job.

Stepping up in tertiary level is a roller coaster experience and emotions. Being with family that boast everyone's capabilities is such a good thing. A week being with Coed family is really thrilling. I felt the excitement to meet my classmates, uppers and even teachers in this department. The excitement was there that makes the exploration deserve to treasure. Uppers are so approachable, they even laid their hands to help and interact with forshies like us. It is a great opportunity and starting pack to cope up in the new environment. It results belongingness. Coed family able to feel us the belongingness, the space that we have in this department. To sum it up, the Coed family indeed molding future leaders/educators that makes our country successful in the future.

#drafting

#faithcolleges

#DEANHAILEYVILLANUEVA

#question2

[cherrymaetinos]

-”I felt the warmth of welcoming” make it “I felt the warm welcome”

-”I am late enrolee” make it “I am a late enrollee”

- try to examine this part “COED family will brings will  never be forgotten” it seems that the verb form “brings” here is incorrect

-”concisely and vivid” make it “concisely and vividly”

-”widely open” make it “wide open”

-review the correct spelling of words  

-review the correct usage of punctuation marks.

-I suggest that you proofread first so that you won't be having issues when it comes to writing.

-try checking the proper context of the words

-I get your points, but I would suggest that you improve and/or paraphrase some of the parts of this blog entry. 

-You are doing well. Good job.

Question* Part 2 How’s your first week being part of COED family.

I felt the warmth of welcoming of COED family since I am late enrollee they assist and guide me in order to catch up the missed events and learnings. The COED family assures that there is no student being left out, I am grateful indeed to be part of it. I love the events and programs that they were performing, there is no dead air and I didn’t feel any boredomness. They explain the concept of the program concisely and vivid. The members of this family are always open for anyone. Their arms are always widely open to give guidance and efforts to those having hardships. I hope that this family remains stronger and united not just in the beginning but  also until the end of our college phase.At first, my nervous side is still there the social anxiety is till bothering me. To the point that I am afraid to interact because there’s a gut that they don’t like me or even mis interpret me. But then, as the time goes by they changed how I viewed my life in this phase is. I will treasure this COED Family that I am belong I am still looking forward to the best experience that I will surely cherish in having a family like this. I am indeed happy and overwhelmed to be part of it. The bond and lessons that COED family will brings will  never be forgotten even I am weak and gray old.

[cherrymaetinos]

-”we are getting know new teachers and new classmates” This happened already, make this line in the past tense.

-review the correct spelling of words  

-review the correct usage of punctuation marks.

-I suggest that you proofread first so that you won't be having issues when it comes to writing.

-try checking the proper context of the words

-I get your points, but I would suggest that you improve and/or paraphrase some of the parts of this blog entry. 

-You are doing well. Good job.

From the first day of class and up until now, we always have programs which hosted by FTL's coordinators. In every session we have is very enjoyable and fun, we are entertained as well getting out of our confort zones. Through the medium of online edukamustahan we are getting know new teachers and new classmates in every year level and courses which help us to really adjust in this new set of environment. Also, through these programs we are having surprised and activities that really help us to refresh ourself in many activities, assignments and projects, and by that we receive prices as a reward. Overall, my experience in COED is best experience that ive ever had.

[cherrymaetinos]

--review the correct spelling of words  

-I suggest that you proofread first so that you won't be having issues when it comes to writing.

-try checking the proper context of the words

-”In the first week being I part” drop the “I” its unnecessary 

-”I’m not sure to my course” It seems that preposition “to” may be incorrect here.

-”the COED family and the BSED-ENG family is very approachable”- Change the linking verb “is” for subject and verb agreement.

-I get your points, but I would suggest that you improve and/or paraphrase some of the parts of this blog entry. 

-You are doing well. Good job.

How’s your first week being part of the COED family?

In the first week being I part of the COED family is I’m not sure to my course I always think the whole week if this course is really for me and I’m scared and nervous because I meet another family, classmate, teachers. But I’m grateful because the COED family and the BSED-ENG family is very approachable and kind, the uppers are they help the freshman and I’m happy because this family I belong.

#drafting

#faithcolleges

#ROSALIEPUNZALAN

#question2

[cherrymaetinos]

-”When I experience to be part of the Coed family” make it “When I experienced being part of the Coed family

-” Im not alone” make it “ I’m or I am”

- “im out of a place” make it “I’m out of place”

-”I can’t feel that im sad and to be part of coed family is boring” What do you mean? Consider paraphrasing this part.

--review the correct usage of punctuation marks.

-review the correct spelling of words  

How's your firat week of being part of Coed family?

When I experience to be part of the Coed family I feel that Im not alone,and I can't feel that im out of a place because coed family makes me feel super special, they give me an apportunity to gane more knoledge, to become a good speaker and host, And with that I can't feel that im sad and to be part of coed family is boring , that's why for me coed is a family. #drafting #faithcolleges #DARENOJALES #question4

[cherrymaetinos]

- For the revision of this blog, I suggest that you proofread first so that you won't be having issues when it comes to writing. There are words that were used out of context so I would like you to work on that. Consider paraphrasing some of the parts. 

-”I was happy to be surrounded by people whom I can call whenever I feel down whether because of personal issues or about academics.” paraphrase

-let experience the excitement and joy- “let them”

-and joy being part of COED family.- “and joy OF being part of THE COED family

-Job well done

Blog #2 :>

How’s my first week being part of COED family?

I was really nervous attending our first class but also excited to meet new people and be friends with them. The first week was good, I was able to meet our mentor and have a meeting with the guidance facilitator to share how I was in FAITH Colleges. I was happy to be surrounded by people whom I can call whenever I feel down whether because of personal issues or about academics. COED family has many events that let students show their talents and some events are just to have fun and enjoy. It helps me balance my time to study and also to have fun. It was amazing to have these events though it is held virtually. They were able to let students not to stress out in academics and let experience the excitement and joy being part of COED family.

[cherrymaetinos]

-review the correct usage of punctuation marks.

-review the correct spelling of words  

-”Being a college for the first week” paraphrase

-try to examine this part “I’m at this path” it seems that the preposition “at” here is incorrect

-try to examine this part “I’m at this path not just to learned” it seems that the verb tense used here is incorrect

-try to use short and concise words to avoid wordy phrases and redundancy of ideas and terms 

-Job well done

Being a college for the first week made me realized, that I'm really at the new phase of my life. At first I am really nervous since everything is new to me, new set of people and new environment. But I really enjoy it, and I'm truly greatful that now I have my second family. I know I'm at this path not just to learned but also to meet new people that will help me throughout my journey. Almost everything is new to me, and it's kinda mind blowing but as time goes by, I'm slowly adjusting. I really feel the happiness even though we are just virtually meeting each other so what more if we are on face to face learning and regarding to the I know we are all wishing to go back to our normal days, and I know that, it will happen again in His right perfect time. So for now let's help each other to learn and surpass all the hardships that we may encounter this whole academic year.

#drafting

#FAITHCOLLEGES

#EnriquezAshlynAraJoyceDeleon

#question2