#SO. i need a second example. maybe something that is also quantico-centric like the first one is | Explore Tumblr posts and blogs

gingerpeachtea · 14 days ago

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there are two moments that are too anticlimactic that are driving me up the FUCKING WALL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! bc other than that the fic is READY TO POST. BUT THOSE TWO MOMENTS. GOD

#and they're Important Moments so i can't just say fuck it and post it anyways #fic: loves like a kicked dog #i also need a synonym for the word caught. but besides that the fic is FUCKING READY. ITS SO CLOSE. I FEEL INSANE #also i kind of don't know if i'm being too heavy-handed with this one Moment of Realization that amber has #or if i'm crazy for expecting ppl to pick up what im putting down without the heavy-handedness #it's not even like overly heavy-handed it's just DIRECTLY stating the conclusion amber comes to. BUT THAT FEELS HEAVY-HANDED TO ME #bc 'show don't tell' has drilled a hole in my skull #wait fuck okay there's also a fourth thing. which is just. amber listing [redacted] and i needed a second thing #bc my current second thing is way too long-winded and has zero flow and distracts from the focus and is just not what i want #u know what fuck it. here's the sentence (w semicolons as stand-ins for commas):#He had to have a hell of a lot more experience with this—parties that went too far at Quantico; the literal heroin withdrawal Charlie'd let #slip during a drunken night on Amber's couch; years of holding her hair back and calming her down.#like okay first off. 'had to have a hell of a lot' say that five times fast. stupid ass tongue twister. gotta fix that #two. i feel like the 2nd example i give w the heroin withdrawal distracts from the charliebriggs focus that the examples r supposed to have #bc they're supposed to highlight their history in comparison to amber's lack thereof #i also jsut feel like it's too wordy but i already kinda said that #(side note. i feel like there is no way that charlie doesn't eventually tell amber about whistler. but that's like in a world where #amber doesn't go to fucking jail lmao. but with that being said i feel like there just isn't room to explore that headcanon in this fic)#SO. i need a second example. maybe something that is also quantico-centric like the first one is #wait actually yes def quantico-centric. bc then it's about IMAGINED scenarios between charlie and briggs #also briggs wasn't even actually there for any of the times charlie threw up. which they did just to fuck with me bc they hate me #she was ALONE for it and MISERABLE :( anyways. my jeff beefstin (beef w jeff eastin) aside #i also don't know if the end of this one scene gets across what it needs to or if the Moment (bc trust it is a Moment) it ends on #needs to be continued to be explored for like a few sentences after. or maybe the impact alone is enough and everyone will pick up #what im putting down bc im sooo beautiful and smart and cool #so basically. just those four things (two moments that r too anticlimactic; a synonym for caught; and a 2nd cb quantico moment)#and then the fic is FUCKING DONE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!#i REALLY REALLY REALLY wanna post tonight rawrrrrrrrrr

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