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🗣 MAAM YOUR THOUGHTS ON THE M ROUTE 🗣 SHARE THEM NOW BESTIE PLEASE 🗣

hi esme, thank u for the ask! i’m lowkey trying to remember how to use this goddamn site

i’m going to use your ask to leave my thoughts on everything so, here we go

hi jade, here u go LMAO @masonscig

some disclaimers to anyone else who wants to read this shit:

this is my opinion, you can disagree lmao

i only played one route (m’s) as i’m writing this, so i understand that there may be some scenes that i didn’t unlock

i didn’t dislike the book but i also… didn’t like it LMFAO

also minors pls dni

the plot

the overall plot was honestly very confusing. it had a clear beginning, but as she introduced more characters and events, she lost sight of the actual plot. i continued reading in the hopes that some, or all, of it would be explained somewhere down the line, but that never happened. instead, she just kept tossing more and more things at us that didn’t seem at all relevant or connected.

some questions / concerns i personally had/have are:

why did we have to meet unit victor? they did not add any sort of value to the plot other than that they came during the ambush. even so, they could’ve just been left unnamed agents

why did she keep hinting that sin was guilty and only doing this because he had no choice, but did nothing to let us save him? we couldn’t convince him to take our side during the ambush, we couldn’t convince him that his soul bond was a fake one, we couldn’t do anything to him except punch him in the face (oops)

why did we have the blood drive? i thought that it would lead to some more of murphy / his successors wanting to take her blood. wasn’t he a doctor? wouldn’t it have made sense for a team of nurses / phlebotomists stationed at the library, trying their hardest to get a singular drop of blood? nothing happened. kira didn’t end up having to give blood, but if she did, i doubt we would’ve seen any of the aftermath until books 4 or 5

why did we randomly remember murphy mid battle and then forget about him again until the next one? what happened to all the nightmares? even if ya girl repressed it, it still should’ve affected her more than just in the middle of a fight lmfao

what was the point of the chamber arc? they called up this big meeting just to say that we shouldn’t have told someone about supernaturals? couldn’t they have passed along that message? why was rebecca part of it? what does this add to the plot

i’m sure there’s more, but i can’t think of it right now

maybe i didn’t unlock the scenes that actually contained the answers to these questions, but i honestly doubt it. even if those hidden scenes did provide a bit more clarity, more of it should’ve been part of the overarching plot.

the plot was too complicated and, frankly, not executed very well. we had too many side stories and not enough answers. if it had been a tad simpler, it would’ve been a better read. we shouldn’t be finishing a book with more questions than answers. (to be fair, books 1 and 2 did also leave us with many questions, but the overall plot wasn’t nearly as confusing.) overall, we should be wanting to read more, on the edge of our seats for the next book, not confused as to what the fuck even happened

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the writing itself

it’s honestly something that bothered me while reading the whole series, but i just brushed it off in the name of the plot. now that the plot isn’t so strong, i can’t ignore it anymore lmfao

my main gripe is that she uses too many metaphors — so many that it’s distracting

to be honest, i don’t have many examples because i eventually just started skimming those instances, which ended up being most of the book, but a couple of lines that i simply could not forget:

“it’s a vital organ within the body of the community”

“sets my body alight”, or something like that

“my heart beats with a sudden warmth that fills my body”

i physically cringed when reading these. metaphors can be a very useful tool, but it loses its impact when you use them so often, which, i think, she did

honorable mention: “that’s it! that’s why we’re splitting up! they’re trying to make it impossible to save them all!” well, no fucking shit, detective

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saving the best for last, my little ray of sunshine

i may be biased, but i did enjoy the m scenes. BUT! i don’t think they should’ve happened when they did

we started off (generally) in character with the grumpy, angry little shit we’re only seeing naked. i think it makes sense that he got confused / guilty, but i honestly don’t think it makes sense that he apologized, at least not that soon. there definitely should’ve been a lot more tension / arguments before he realized “oh shit, i fucked up”

even after finding out that kira and bobby kissed (unwanted), it makes sense that he got angry and jealous, but… idk, why did he so easily admit that he was concerned about her? baby i thought you were just seeing her naked

i chose the research scene because we did combat in book 2 and I LOVED IT, this is how i think he should express his not-feelings towards her. he doesn’t know why he suddenly gives a shit about whether she’s safe or not, but he does know that nothing’s gonna happen if he just loafs around all day. maybe it’s cause she’s part of the team now. he doesn’t want them dead either. yeah, that’s why…

i also think it was a tad too easy to convince him to go to dinner. like i thought we’d ask once and he’d be like “fuck no” and then we’d ask again and then he’d agree

the sex scenes seemed kind of… forced. the timing was pretty off. don’t get me wrong, miss kira still took the opportunity to fuck him, but i think the whole dinner scene could’ve been done a little later. or at least just skipped the dessert.

i think it would’ve been better if kira had been able to use sex as a distraction later on when things (sort of) ramp up, which is what she’d be more likely to do. even then, it’s still a little weird. it just seemed a little strange that we’d just found out that all twelve or so kidnappings were her fault and now we’re fucking in her car. on one hand, i kind of get it, let off the steam, but it’s just too soon.

on the topic of sex, i’m not sure why we had a sex scene after everything was (sort of) resolved. i thought he came to her room to cheer her up in his own way, not dick her down. i can kind of see that she was trying to make it an emotional scene, where he shows her how much she really means to him, but it didn’t really come off that way to me

if it were up to me, they probably should’ve fucked in the beginning before the fiasco at hayley’s bakery and shortly before we attend the auction party(?), as a last go before kira maybe doesn’t come back. but even then is a little weird, but i’d say less weird than where the car sex scene currently is. maybe.

i did also enjoy his random “i care about you” lines, but, again, it happened too soon. i think she should’ve dragged out the confusion even more, to the point where he gets so confused it just comes out as anger. almost like he’d start to act the way he did in book one. maybe kira kicks his ass during combat training and then he takes it a little too personally or something, then he’s like why do i give this much of a shit?

i also loved the antique shop date. it was honestly the cutest shit ever. that definitely should’ve happened before car sex LMAO. it was nice to learn more about him and to see him a little (a lot) more vulnerable. it was also such an ego trip to have him so clingy, though it did feel a touch out of character. in this case, i think it did work and it made sense in the context, so i’m not mad at it

i still love this man, but like i said earlier, i think the pacing was off. if things had been rearranged or just… done after the overarching plot, it would’ve been a lot more palatable

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okay thank you so much for reading all this, i didn’t think this would get that long 💀 please feel free to discuss

#youre so right bestie #the plot has us so damn confused i mean we have only played twice but still !!#also rebecca being a member of the chamber girlies literally did nothing for the plot it was just a lil side quest and it gave us nothing 😭#so many unnecessary quests that gave us nothing #and on the m thing they should have fr waited until later to realize their feelings this feels **too** soon #pls write the scene with kira kicking his ass thanks #twc spoilers #twc

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