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[starryseth]

Attention Grabber

Seth Borden x Reader

Sam, Colby, Nate, Seth and Reader are doing an investigation. What happens when the Reader faints by Seth?

Content: established relationship between Reader and Seth, mentions of murder, evil beings, harm to people, sickly but mostly fluff for Seth.

If any of these things mentioned above makes you feel bad or something along those lines, please click away

Sam, Colby, Nate, Seth and I walked around the Villisca Ace Murder House before Sam and Colby started their video. The house had a very dark entity and it did well to make itself known. Even during just the tours during the day the guide explained that people would get scratched, pulled and sick.

"When we initially walked into the house I was like okay it's creepy in here, little spooky but I'm fine. When we went upstairs, it wasn't when we went into the parents room, it's when we walked into the kids room, I felt the same feeling in my back that I felt when I had that experience at the seance at the conjuring house when I got an attachment. When a spirit is trying to attach itself to you it starts by making like a back pain in the bottom of your spine and it goes all the way up. That's legit what I felt and I just felt that same thing upstairs." Seth begins their video by explaining how he felt during the tour.

"That's crazy because I noticed the shadows around you but didn't say anything because they didn't seem ill intentioned. There were three around us in the kids room and were trying to play. I don't necessarily think that they were trying to attach themselves per say but they did look very curious." I told the boys what I saw when we were touring. They all looked a little scared when I was finished but they nervously laughed it off. I thought it was hilarious because the kid spirits were super friendly. Yes they had a bit of sadness and anger but they were residual emotions from the murder.

"I definitely felt like how I did during the conjuring house." Colby added onto what Seth told us.

"To be quite honest when I was like alright we're gonna go to these haunted houses, alright, but compared to like Hell Week we're chilling. After all of these stories and interviews we've done today I'm like thinking this might be one of the more scary places we've actually been to" Sam confessed to us.

"Seriously it feels like it too." Colby responded.

"This feels like you walk into the room and there is a psychic oppression. I noticed (y/n)s shift of mood really quick." Nate noted. I got nervous for a second because I hadn't even realized I did that.

" I'm not trying to hype this place up for the camera. I'm being so serious right now, like I have not felt that feeling since I had thy experience. " Seth chimed in. Reconfirming that this house was full of bitter emotions.

"He said that this house was actually known for physical touch, scratches and things happening. Most paranormal occurrences are like sounds or like you see apparitions. This is physical it's different." Sam pointed out. He was right. Most paranormal occurrences don't result in poltergeist activity.

"Oh and what's freaky is its not even the axe murder that's freaky. It's the fact that there's an energy that's been here for a long time. But that entity is still here. So that technically means that the murder is still here. " Nate pointed out.

"You guys all have great points. Now let's see if we can get anything. But we have to remember, we were told that this entity, spirit, being, whatever you may call it. It is a trickster. We may not come to the official conclusion like we hope. " I commented. The boys all agreed but we are all in the best spirits to keep hope that we can help shed some bit of light on the story.

Time skip to after the attic Estes Method

"That was crazy. I feel like it's still with us. Maybe we should try to go down to the guest room to do another one. I feel sick being up here. Something definitely wants us to leave." I proposed. The boys agreed luckily and we left the attic. I was feeling dizzy. "I think I am gonna get sick. I need to sit." I announced. Seth looked very concerned. I grabbed ahold of his hand and sat down. I was about to talk about how I wanted to just leave because something wasn't right when the music box started going off. I stood up really quick because I was sitting right by it.

"It's like something was waiting for us to come down here. I feel genuinely sick being in this room. " Seth muttered.

"I agree. But I think it wanted us to retrace its steps. I think it's playing with us again. " Sam frowned. He was right. I looked towards the door again. I could see the figure there. It was then that I got a throbbing head pain. Not quite like a headache. It was way worse. My vision went blurry and then eventually went black.

When I woke up I was confused. My head was in a lap and my hair was being played with. I turned onto my back and saw Seth smiling at me. He looked so cute.

"You fainted straight into my arms. You know, if you wanted my attention that bad you could have just asked for it, you didn't have to go to such extremes. " Seth smiled when I looked away blushing.

"I wasn't trying to faint but we do need to get out soon. Did you guys get anything when I was out?" I questioned trying to change the subject. The boys nodded.

"Yes. I don't think you'll believe this but it couldn't be the rival because he was out of town. If we are thinking logical then it was Paul because of the identical crime scenes. If we are thinking more spiritually then it is the reverend. When we did the Estes method, the answers it would give us were too perfect. It would give us a trail and then cut us off. " Nate indicated that the spirit continued to mess with them.

"In any case I think we should leave. I know that we technically haven't come to a conclusion but the ghost wants us gone and I have a feeling the next attack won't be as kind to you guys. " I voiced nervously. Seth helped me up and we gathered our equipment up.

"Hey (y/n) have you scratched your leg recently?" Colby inquired. I shook my head as I looked down. I had three long claw-like marks from the outside of my calf leading to the top of my shoe.

"Ya let's get out of here quickly. Thank you for communicating with us but you may not follow us. You may not attach yourself to us. You have to stay here. " I headed towards the door and the boys followed me. "Thank you again Seth for helping me. I appreciate it." I confessed to him.

"It's honestly not a problem. I didn't want to see you get hurt. " he leaned down and kissed me.

"Awe what a cute way to end a horrifying video." Sam chuckled

[wearec4rnival]

Muses

Hello, here are the complete characters. Their bio and more things are currently under construction. I suggest you to check this regularly for any changes or new characters added. Check my wattpad too!

g i r l s

mel santiago as camila mendes

olivia pierre

sophie knight

faye pierce

olivia rodrigo as maisie monreal

maude patow as sage conklin

josephine tullis

madelyne cline as kiera nord

cassie allen

aubrey thompson

alexa demie as tessa ruiz

juliette mayfield

dove cameron as athena karlsson

lily james as amelie angel

madelaine pestch as debora blossom

blaire barakiel

abigail cowen as claire farrington

amara dawson

maddison brown as astrid howard

kahtryn newton as felicity auclair

esmery valentine

talia ryder as eloise veldair

adelaide kane as devin clemonte

ivy liguori

myra molloy as harper marucci

sidney sweeney as isabella basille

emily alyn lind as charlotte zerafi

blanche deolcour

kristine froseth as harriet windsor

fiorisce

diana silvers as kirsten chambers

halston sage as

b o y s

darrell belmont

josh jeckes

sebastian chambers

aidan marshall

nicholas corfield

olive pierre

mattheo de' bardi

jordan fisher as kaden west

aiden harlow

harley

milo devlin

asher

oscar gates

nate

[fabulizemag]

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[kresensianesa]

Kenyataan Bermimpi.

Malam itu Riska dan Nate selesai berbincang di salah satu restoran cepat saji dibilangan Jakarta. Mereka pulang secara terpisah, Nate duluan karena Riska masih ingin menulis sesuatu pada blog pribadinya. Lalu tak lama Riska pun memutuskan untuk pulang. Riska yang mengenakan rok berwarna biru mengkilap, kaos abu-abu muda dan sepatu putih, sedang bersiap memakai jaket dan helm di dekat motornya ketika seorang laki-laki melewatinya setelah membuang sampah pada tong pembuangan. Lalu laki-laki itu melirik Riska dan Riska menerka bahwa laki-laki itu berfikir meremehkan dia, “rapih, bergaya, tapi naik motor.” Sedikit menggelengkan kepalanya untuk menghilangkan pikiran konyol itu, Riska pun menaiki motornya dan melaju keluar dari area restoran cepat saji itu.

Dalam perjalan pulang, Riska tidak melajukan motornya dengan kencang, Riska berfikir untuk sedikit menikmati perjalanan malam itu yang harus ia tempuh sendirian setelah perbincangan perihal bersikap dengan Nate kekasihnya. Dalam benak Riska kosong, ia hanya fokus menyusuri jalan pulang ke rumahnya, namun entah pada jalan bagian mana Riska sedikit merasa mengantuk dan ketika terhentak, membuat Riska kembali sadar, namun anehnya ia sudah menyusuri jalan yang berbeda dari yang ia kenal.

Riska berbelok pada jalan lebar berbatu yang sedikit menurun dan diujung jalan hanya menikung ke kanan. Banyak pohon tinggi, lokasinya cukup rimbun, mungkin seperti di dalam hutan yang masih dekat dengan jalan besar. Sampi diujung jalan, persis sebelum tikungan ke kanan itu Riska berhenti dan memarkirkan motornya, dan Riska melihat ada sebuah bangunan yang tidak terlalu besar, kemungkinan ada 2 lantai dilihat dari sebuah jendela yang menghadap ke jalan tempat Riska berhenti.. Lalu Riska melepas jaketnya dan memasukkannya ke dalam tas, meletakkan helmnya pada spion sebelah kanan dan mengaitkan talinya pada stang motor. Setelah itu Riska berjalan mendekati bangungan yang terlihat cukup tua, atau bisa digambarkan seperti bangunan di dalam hutan pada umumnya. Riska mendengar ada suara keras seperti seseorang yang sedang mengajar dari dalam gedung itu, Riska melihat ada tangga dan berasumsi pasti suara yang terdengar itu datang dari atas. Riska menaiki tangga itu dan ia mendapati seorang pria duduk di pojokan ruangan berbentuk kotak persegi, mungkin 3 x 3 meter.

Riska melihat ke sekeliling ruangan itu dan ada satu ruangan tanpa pintu, Riska pun melewati pria itu dan melangkah untuk memasuki ruangan itu. Di dalamnya ada orang-orang yang duduk seperti di dalam kelas menghadap pada seorang pria yang duduknya berhadapan dengan mereka semua. Riska mengenal orang itu, Bardi Trinawan seorang penulis yang merupakan kerabat keluarganya. Bardi Trinawan berceloteh menjelaskan sebuah buku yang dipegangnya dan setiap orang yang hadir di situ mendengarkan. Lalu Riska masuk tanpa ragu dan langsung menuju samping tempat Bardi Trinawan duduk, ia melihat ke orang-orang yang fokus memperhatikan dan mendegarkan, kemudian ada satu orang yang ia kenal di sana, Arlan Burhan. Tapi baik Bardi Triawan mau pun Arlan Burhan seperti tidak menyadari kehadirannya di situ. Riska pun memutuskan untuk keluar dan ia masih mendapati pria dalam ruangan kotak persegi itu.

Dari ambang ruangan tempat Bardi Triawan, Riska melihat ada ruangan lain di sebrangnya dan saat Riska menyebrangi ruangan persegi itu, pria yang di pojokkan memperhatikan dan tersenyum seperti malu-malu sambil menutup wajahnya dengan tangan dan mengintipnya sesekali. Dalam benak Riska pria ini seperti memiliki gangguan pada pikiran dan mentalnya, terlihat dari cara dia tersenyum dan menatap Riska. Riska memutuskan untuk masuk ke sana, ternyata di dalamnya terdapat banyak sekali buku-buku.

Di dalam ruangan penuh buku Riska menyusurkan jarinya untuk memudahkan matanya melihat semua buku-buku, tapi tak ada yang menarik. Tak lama Riska keluar dan ia kembali melihat pria dalam ruangan persegi itu masih di sudut yang sama.

Riska melihat tempat duduk yang bisa ditempati oleh dua orang, ia pun memutuskan untuk duduk di samping pria itu. Lalu Riska berkata “saya mau pinjam buku”, pria itu berdiri dan tak Riska sadari ada rak di bagian atas ruangan persegi itu yang rak-raknya tertempel pada dinding, “banyak sekali bukunya” pikir Riska. Pria itu mengambil sebuah buku, sebelum kembali turun Riska berkata “tapi saya belum menjadi member”, pria itu pun tersenyum “Ah…” lalu turun dengan sebuah buku dan secarik kertas yang tak Riska baca, dalam benak Riska mungkin ini penanda ia bergabung menjadi member. Pria itu pun memberikan buku dan secarik kertas itu pada Riska dan kembali duduk disebelah kirinya.

Riska mencoba membaca judul buku yang diambilkan, tapi ia tak bisa membaca judulnya apa, namun sampul depannya bergambar Indonesia tempo dulu yang ia sadari bahwa buku itu mungkin berkisah tentang tahun 1940-1960an. Saat sedang memperhatikan buku itu dan membuka-buka halamannya, Riska merasakan ada yang meraba bokongnya, lalu ia melirik dan menebas tangan pria disebelahnya itu dan Riska berkata “tidak sopan ya”. Saat kembali memperhatikan buku di tangannya, pria itu kembali memegang bokong Riska, ia pun berdiri dan berkata “kalau seperti itu lagi, saya tidak akan pinjam buku ini”, nada suaranya terdengar seperti mengancam, lalu pria itu tersenyum dan tertawa malu-malu sambil menyembunyikan wajahnya ke arah tembok dan berkata “iya, iya”.

Lalu Riska turun dan kembali ke motornya. Riska menaruh tas punggungnya di atas jok motor, mengambil helm dan meletakannya persis disebelah tasnya. Riska membuka tasnya hendak mengeluarkan jaket untuk dipakai, saat itu juga ia mendengar suara mesin motor yang dihidupkan dari dalam bangunan itu, Riska melihat dibagian belakang bangunan itu dan ada pintu kecil. Keluarlah seseorang dengan motor itu, orang itu sudah memakai jaket yang Riska yakin berwarna biru dongker. Orang itu melihat Riska sampai tikungan ke kanan itu dan langsung berhenti. Dari tatapannya Riska tahu bahwa itu adalah Arlan Burhan, tapi anehnya Arlan tidak menyapa Riska.

Tak lama Riska menegkok dan melihat ada seorang perempuan yang lebih pendek darinya berjalan ke arahnya dengan tatapan marah dan sedikit menggeram, Riska tak curiga, namun tiba-tiba perempuan itu menusukkan sesuatu pada paha Riska dan Riska berteriak “sakiiiit”, sambil ia mencari orang yang dimotor tadi atau yang ia kenali sebagai Arlan Burhan. Namun orang itu hanya melihat dan berlalu tanpa membantu Riska. Dan teriakan Riska seakan tidak mengusik orang-orang lain yang ada di dalam bangunan itu, terutama Bardi Triawan yang juga mengenal Riska. Lalu Riska pun mendorong perempuan itu agar perempuan itu menjauh darinya. Riska mengambil helm di atas jok dan ia memukul kepala perempuan itu. Perempuan itu tidak terjatuh tapi pukulan Riska membuat perempuan itu melepaskan tangan dan benda yang menusuk paha Riska.

Riska memukul lagi kepala perempuan itu dengan helm sampai perempuan itu terjatuh dan Riska pukul lagi hingga kepala perempuan itu membetur pada batu dibawahnya dan membuat perempuan itu tak sadarkan diri atau mungkin mati. Tanpa banyak berfikir Riska pun merapihkan jaket memakai helm dan langsung menyalakan mesin motornya dan tergesa-gesa meningkalkan lokasi itu.

Saat berkecamuk dengan pikirannya dan mencoba mencerna apa yang terjadi pada dirinya, Riska meneteskan air mata. Seketika itu ia mengedipkan matanya, menghapus air matanya dan apa yang dia lihat adalah jalanan yang ia kenal dan sudah dekat dengan rumahnya. Riska semakin tak habis pikir dengan apa yang terjadi. Semuanya terasa begitu nyata, tapi apakah tadi itu sebuah mimpi?! Fikirannya menyangkal bahwa apa yang terjadi itu nyata, namun hatinya seperti berkata bahwa ia benar-benar mengalaminya. Sampai akhirnya Riska tiba di rumah dan memutuskan untuk segera membersihkan diri dan beristirahat.

[urwarriorangel]

updated list of characters and fandoms I write for!

(you may request smut unless specified otherwise) (fandoms with *** are the ones I like writing for/the ones I write for more often)

Agents of SHIELD (all will be alive unless death works better in the storyline)***

Al Mackenzie

Antoine “Trip” Triplett

Daisy “Skye” Johnson

Grant Ward

Jemma Simmons

Lance Hunter

Leopold Fitz

Lincoln Campbell

Buffy The Vampire Slayer***

Angel

Buffy Summers

Cordelia Chase

Rupert Giles

William the Bloody aka Spike

Criminal Minds (no one is dead unless I say so)***

Aaron Hotchner

David Rossi (only father figure/mentor)

Derek Morgan

Elle Greenaway

Emily Prentiss

Jason Gideon (only father figure)

Jennifer Jareau

Luke Alvez

Penelope Garcia 

Spencer Reid

FRIENDS

Chandler Bing

Joey Tribbiani

Monica Geller

Phoebe Buffay

Rachel Green

Ross Geller

Game of Thrones (everyone is of age and alive; nothing incestuous/rapey)***

Arya Stark (mostly/only fluff)

Benjen Stark

Daenerys Targaryen

Eddard Stark

Jaime Lannister

Jon Snow

Khal Drogo

Robb Stark

Samwell Tarly

Sansa Stark

Tyrion Lannister

Gossip Girl***

Blair Waldorf

Carter Baizen

Chuck Bass

Dan Humphrey

Nate Archibald

Serena Van Der Woodsen

Vanessa Abrams

Harry Potter***

Draco Malfoy

Fred Weasley

George Weasley

Harry Potter

Hermione Granger

Ronald Weasley

Sirius Black

(YOUNG) Tom Riddle

Jane the Virgin

Adam

Jane Gloriana Villanueva

Rafael Solano

Lucky Number Slevin***

Slevin Kelevra

MCU (all alive and ALL  (esp Peter Parker) are 18+)***

Bruce Banner

Bucky Barnes

Natasha Romanoff  

Peggy Carter

Peter Parker

Pietro Maximoff

Sam Wilson

Sharon Carter

Steve Rogers

T’Challa

Thor

Tony Stark

Wanda Maximoff

Medici: Masters of Florence

Contessina de’ Bardi

Cosimo de’ Medici

Lorenzo de’ Medici

New Girl

Coach

Nick Miller

Pretty Little Liars

Aria Montgomery

Caleb Rivers

Emily Fields

Ezra Fitz

Hanna Marin

Jason DiLaurentis

Mona Vanderwaal

Noel Kahn

Spencer Hastings

Wren Kingston

Reign

Francis

Mary Stuart

Nostradamus

Sebastian

Riverdale (all will be 18+ and alive, unless it’s a story surrounding their death)***

Archie Andrews

Betty Cooper

Cheryl Blossom

FP Jones

Fred Andrews

Jason Blossom

Josie McCoy

Jughead Jones

Kevin Keller (only boyxboy or fluff)

Reggie Mantle

Valerie Brown

Veronica Lodge

Shadowhunters

Alec Lightwood (only boyxboy or fluff)

Clary Fray

Isabelle Lightwood

Jace Herondale

Lucian Grey

Magnus Bane

Simon Lewis

Star Wars

Kylo Ren

Supernatural

Castiel

Dean Winchester

Sam Winchester

Teen Wolf***

Derek Hale

Isaac Lahey

Jackson Whittermore

Jordan Parrish

Kira Yukimura

Lydia Martin

Malia Tate

Scott McCall

Stiles Stilinski

Theo Raeken

The 100 (all 18+ and alive unless stated otherwise)***

Bellamy Blake

Clarke Griffin

Echo

Finn Collins

Jasper Jordan

John Murphy

King Roan

Lexa

Lincoln

Monty Green

Nathan Miller (only boyxboy or fluff)

Octavia Blake

Ontari

Raven Reyes

Wells Jaha

The Originals***

Davina Claire

Elijah Mikaelson

Freya Mikaelson

Hayley Marshall

Kol Mikaelson

Niklaus Mikaelson

Marcel Gerard

Rebekah Mikaelson

The Vampire Diaries***

Bonnie Bennett

Caroline Forbes

Damon Salvatore

Elena Gilbert

Jeremy Gilbert

Katherine Pierce

Malachi Parker

Mary Louise

Matt Donovan

Nora Hildegard

Olivia Parker

Tyler Lockwood

Stefan Salvatore

Sybil

X-Men***

Alex Summers (Havok)

Charles Xavier (young!Professor X)

Erik Lehnsherr (Magneto)

Hank McCoy (Beast)

Jean Grey (Phoenix)

Logan (Wolverine)

Mystique

Peter Maximoff (Quiksilver)

Ororo Monroe (Storm)

[lotrewrite]

Recap of 8.26.17 Chat

So in this chat, we started out with some general points which all writers should take into account when revising their episodes, and then went episode by episode. This time around, episode-by-episode, I've focused more on the substantive comments rather than the love (there was love for all the episodes)

First: for everyone's convenience, someone apparently wrote a script to put in all of the html code needed to transition your fic from gdrive to ao3: https://docs.google.com/document/d/19eZnBQ4989Dr17v2ODFgE8QWAo9Oahi4USDNS3hOSvM/edit

Second: We’re going to be using TV Rules in terms of rating – no sex/full nudity, avoid swears like ‘fuck/shit’, but ‘damn/hell/crap’ are OK. Seemed easier to have everyone try to keep this in mind for a consistent tone than to try to figure out how many f-bombs we can drop in an episode

Third: The “basic” introduction we’ll be using is "Time travel is real, and all of history is vulnerable to attack, which is why we must travel through time to keep anyone from damaging it. We are a team of outcasts and misfits. So please don't call us heroes, we're legends."  If you’ve already come up with an alternative intro, feel free to keep it! if you want to alter the above intro, feel free! This is just the most basic, unadorned version.

Fourth: Things we should include more references to in various episodes:

Mick being a pyromaniac

Ratigan exists (post episode 9)

References to Nate and Lisa once they’re gone (i.e. "Lisa would've liked this" and "Nate's going to hate us all SO BAD when we tell him" and "wish we had Nate/Lisa here")

Mentions that Oculus!Len has attempted to make contact with the others and failed (post episode 12 only)

Fifth: Names (for consistency)

Len: In episodes 1-12, we call him "Len" in narrative and "Snart" in speech (except Lisa, who refers to him as "Lenny"); post episode 12, Len is introduced as "Legion!Len" and "Oculus!Len" respectively - use the full names (i.e. Oculus!Len not O!Len) for clarity; this applies even when a given Len is alone on screen, but exceptions can be made if you're deliberately trying to confuse the issue of which Len is which

Eobard Thawne: "Eobard" in narrative, "Thawne" in text; Legion!Len starts calling him "Bard" or "Bardy", followed by Oculus!Len once he hears it, but Legion!Len stops once he has been brainwashing only to slowly resume once it begins fading

Damien Darhk: "Darhk" in narrative, "Darhk" when the Legends are talking about/to him, "Damien" when the Legion is talking about/to him

Queen Bee: always referred to as Queen Bee unless someone is explicitly making a joke

ASIDE: I feel like we're missing a lot of jokes for Queen Bee's name

Someone needs to tell her to buzz off

"You've been busy." "...is that supposed to be a pun?"

"Queen Bee? Yeah, Queen B-rated"

"BeeGees"

"It's the Bee Team" that's DEFINITELY a Ray comment, which he'd ruin by going "Get it? 'cause we're the A Team???"

these puns are giving me hives

she needs to call everyone honey

crowdsourcing puns, who would BEE-lieve it??

(also at some point you should also make a joke about there being "Lenses". You can see better with two Lenses.)

Let’s move on or we’ll bee here all night (sorry)

Gideon and Rip call everyone by Mr./Miss, except for “Captain Hunter” and “Captain Lance”

Everyone calls Jax "Jax" except Stein (Jefferson) and Gideon/Rip (Mr. Jackson)

Mick has nicknames for everyone: Ray (Haircut/Pretty), Nate (Pretty), Sara (Blondie), Stein (Professor), Len (Boss, Len, Lenny), Kara (Skirt), Jax (Kid), Amaya ("Rules"), Lisa (Goldie), Rip (Englishman)

For historical characters, use whatever works for the historical time period but is understandable to readers of a modern audience (i.e. use "Octavian" not “Gaius Octavius/Octavianus”)

Episode 10

They should look Queen Bee up at some point after the initial fight

Gideon confirms that Queen Bee is an enemy of Mari’s and thus would know something about Amaya’s future, making Amaya more anxious

Episode 14

It'd be great if Amaya could look up her future at the end of the Tudor episode, maybe while Mick and the others go burn down the Globe; that way, Amaya can struggle with it and Queen Bee’s comments in the next episode

maybe in Episode 14, after O!Len's shock at seeing his "other" self we might want to have a short scene where he asks Gideon what the hell was that, and Gideon explains that he was picked up in 2014 and he has a moment where he goes "wait, so that's...me? that's really me? a me that's not DEAD yet?"

Episode 15

Make Amaya being picked up by British/white colonialist forces to be used by them, so she was fed a lot of propaganda, and most of the lessons about the British should come from Ching; possibly also a conversation with Sara in which Sara explicitly notes that she can’t understand the experience of being colonized - "I can give you examples about what they've done but I can't tell you how you or anyone else they affect should feel about it" kind of thing

Amaya should be struggling with her knowledge about her future - I really like how you have Amaya resisting Queen Bee's offers; but I think the resolution might work better with Amaya deciding against making Sara's mistake from Episode 4 rather than not looking it up at all? That would explain the dialogue where Amaya’s considering changing the future

Lily aberration arc: the end of episode 15, she forgives Stein for keeping it from her, but she's still upset and "needs space" because she's still an aberration and scared - leave it ambiguous at the end of 15, so the audience initially thinks she's still angry about Stein hiding it from her

Shay Hannibal Houlihan - immigrants were told (or forced) to change their name, maybe he could mention that, you can mention that they changed his name to Hannibal at Ellis Island, but he still prefers Shay, you could also have Josephine calling him Hannibal; Maybe his bar is name Hannibal and when asked, he explains that's his legal name

Len arc: Len starts encouraging Mick to go talk to his other self so that he can tell him not to die - the emphasis should be Oculus!Len wants Mick to go to his other self rather than the Legion

Episode 16

I really liked the characterization in this episode; I thought it was really spot on

Lily aberration arc: at the end of episode 16, when Stein gets back to her, he basically announces that he will fight ANYONE who tries to hurt her even a little and the Legends back it up and agree that no one will be "fixing" her aberration

Lily needing a bit more to do this episode, maybe a conversation with Jax, who she can have that "I don't know what being an aberration means and it's freaking me out" conversation with. The conversation could maybe go while they're following Rip to the place with the ship parts

Len arc: the emphasis should be Oculus!Len wants Mick to go to his other self rather than the Legion

Episode 17

Fantastic episode, emotional whiplash, so much fun

They're dropping Lily off - do we make it clear enough that happens before episode 17 starts? maybe we could put in a brief comment about how it's been a few days since they dropped Lily off or something?

Episode 18

Legionnaire Len joke

Len calls Eobard ‘Bard’ at the end, causing them to comment about possibly needing to reinforce the brainwashing, but Queen Bee resists because how dare they question her

Gag reel: Darhk in a leather skirt with lace up sandals; "Show some leg, Damien! That'll distract her!" "Shut up, Snart!"

They can’t read the graffiti because it’s slang/graffiti, not because they can’t read the foreign language - the babelfish applies to that too

Episode 19

Awesome representation, superpowers, fantastic battle sequences, emotional moments; it was a great episode AND it felt like a great backdoor pilot for a Ystina-themed episode

the only section I had any issue with was there was one or two that had no Legends

scabbard – Nimue stealing it or maybe when she's knocked over (iirc?) it can fall under her or some other object and out of sight

can mick just watch the cigarette burn down? Yes

Doomworld:

Jessica Cruz should show up as a Green Lantern, since she shows up in episode 17

Jax goes to QB's place in Africa to get Amaya, but it seems like this is really far to travel and be back in time within an episode. should she have a hq somewhere closer, just for visiting while at board meetings? Yes, they should go to Queen Bee’s local embassy

I really liked Mick's opening.

I also like that Nate bursts in but they don't even humor him

what exactly is the brainwashing cure? don't think we had one; I think we just planned to have Ray design a mind-fixing gun again - I did make a note that they could pick up Ted's BB gun which works on light spectrum; it also used the emotional spectrum in the comics; that could work

The second part seemed short – maybe add the part where we picked up Rip again - there should be a scene where they break in and steal him and the waverider

also there's a comment about the lanterns going away to space and coming back to a mess, but it contradicts Queen Bee complaining about her 'pest' problem in the first half

There should be a moment where Len weakens the brainwashing and becomes aware that he’s being brainwashed, and is now resisting unsuccessfully

what O!Len's motivation is for not revealing L!Len's brainwashing to Mick - O!Len can dance around the subject until he tries to warn Mick about L!Len going to kill him; Mick probably wouldn't believe that so easily until O!Len blurts out "He's been brainwashed! Since before all this happened!" "...Why didn't say that earlier, I would've listened to you then!" I don't think Len would ever be able to actually say the words brainwashed about himself, too horrifying maybe some reference to "remember what the Time Masters did to you? to make you Kronos?" "yeah?" "that's what they did to him. to make him like that." That scene would fit in well in Doomworld and explain his earlier reluctance to speak

Finale

after Rip, Len and Mick decide to take a break, maybe everyone feels they deserve a vacation until, whoops- dinos in LA they do still have family outside the Legends after all!

can Bambi be our new mascot?

Queen Bee says something like "It is beneath my dignity to brainwash people like you!" I can add a line to mine where they comment on "you did it before" and she tries to bluster