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Final revision of season 1 hell yeah you guys know the drill patch notes are below (also apologies that this one took forever I kept walking away from the computer due to the physical full body cringe and forgetting for weeks):

Clarified some points of Joe and Andy’s plan to make it canon compliant and in line with the previous chapter

Lowered the original needlessly high emotions of Andy and Andrea in their hotel room with a not-crying baby

Made Patrick blood loss symptoms a little more apparent (what can I say i’m a stump-whump girlie before all else)

Removed pete’s weird simile about rotten fish (I literally make a joke about how he can’t lie and no human being would smell like this after not showering for a few days that’s like… a decomposition smell, not a sweat thing)

Removed implication that Pete was somehow finding time to sleep with their captor

Removed dialogue stolen from “The Social Network” 

No longer imply that patrick has a thing for hannah/pete

Attempts have been made to tone down melodrama

Fixed all the dialog in Joe vs the two vampires because my god. Why was I allowed to write.

“Living” vampire corrected to “other” vampire as vampires in my cannon aren’t “alive” per se

Added “like the world’s worst, goriest scarf” because that seems like the sort of fun descriptor that The Kids (™) are into

(y’all andy girlies must be so starved for content the andy sections were Not Well Written)

Tried to better balance Patrick being an adult man who probably does not want to have a breakdown in front of everyone with Patrick being a human teenager who graduated high school like a year before this particular trauma (aka toning down the infantilism while still making it abundantly clear that he is young and Going Through It)

Turned a lot of lengthy sentences into shorter sentences because boy howdy can I abuse commas

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The very late revision to TTTYG Chapter 9: Early Sunsets of Monrovia (famous for being the only song title I changed as a funny little pun)

Patch notes:

Made Pete's misogynistic train of thought more coherent (though not really any less sexist)

decreased amount of "sighed" dialogue tags by 80%

decreased alcoholism refs that were super irrelevant to the plot

removed multiple uses of "it's" instead of "its" as a possessive

removed a lot of little fidgety movements that did not deserve sentence space

Mikey no longer uses instalove to come down from his little exorcism

added paragraph breaks to increase general readability

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Revision to Season 1, Chapter 10 - Rock and Roll High School

Patch notes are as follows:

Removed written out stutters because the sheer number of them was obnoxious

Gave some character traits to background characters for funsies

Removed slur-adjacent and replaced it with the world’s most subtle donnie darko ref

Removed some unnecessary commas because i grew up and learned how commas work

Added some more gore descriptions for funsies

Characters smile 50% less (because I have people smile after every other dialogue tag jfc)

Did my level best to regulate tense

Removed approximately 90% of hissed/hissing dialogue tags

Switched monster of the week to match the monster from chapter one because, again, white author

Removed the weird race joke about ghostbusters

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patch notes below! genuinely had fun revising this chapter because this is my favorite chapter in tttyg and honestly probably in my top five for the whole damn thing

- Removed pot shot re: patrick’s sweat - Added some poetic embellishment - Corrected Pete’s name so it does not say “Pet” - Added italics for Drama (™) - Joe no longer performs anatomically impossible feats of holding his legs while they are tied down - Broke down several run on sentences - Fixed inconsistency with andy’s procurement of andrea’s number

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no particularly interesting or funny patch notes for this week - mostly I was just removing adverbs, replacing weird dialogue tags with “said,” average edits like that

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Patch notes on this revision below:

Removed incorrect usage of the word “homeostasis”

I added an adverb this time because it was a little bit more effective who’d’ve thunk

Removed a bunch of characters walking around for no reason (before they even enter the woods)

Removed a description of something a character wasn’t even in the room to see

Adjusted dialogue to make characters seem ever so slightly less douchey

Removed a bunch of “sighed” and replaced with a bunch of “said”

Adjusted proper religious iconography 

Reexamined some strange preposition choices

Back to removing adverbs

For real guys I did not know my prepositions when I was 17

Removed foreshadowing for a plot thread I didn’t follow (or even remember)

Why does everyone grin so much? I fixed that. A little.

Patrick no longer uses body decomposition as a topic of conversation to calm pete down because what the fuck?!?!

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The High Way to Hell (Take This to Your Grave) Chapter 11:

Dead on Arrival (part 1)

revised as of 9/13/2023

patch notes are listed below:

Waking scene made more realistic

Patrick mocks rich people

APPARENTLY THE PAST TENSE OF THE VERB “to exorcise” IS EXORCIZED?!?!?! WITH A Z?!?!?!

Clarified some strange pronouns by changing the OG meaning and making the peterick sweeter

Removed term “junkie”

Removed random amnesia patrick had re: pete’s powers

Removed “chirped” as a dialogue tag for obvious reasons

Replaced “working girl” with “waitress” as I have no idea why it didn’t say that from the start???

Restructured paragraphs to fit flow of story better

Retconned this with correct in universe mythology

Removed the phrase “Mad with grief” from the daily vocab of a young adult in the 21st century

Removed direct nazi verbiage because i’m no longer 16 and no longer thing people need everything spoonfed

Andy gets to use more expletives

Added in jab about patrick’s housekeeping (or lack thereof)

Removed some sentiment at the end of joe’s section that didn’t fit the tone

Tried rewording some concepts to make them more clear

Lmao did y’all remember I included the contemporary mayor of chicago in this fic? High school me was wild for that one

Once again matched Pete’s powers to current cannon rather than fast and loose as I did in the first season

Only use “superiority” as a descriptor once within a sentence rather than twice

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patch notes below :)

Significantly less smirking in this iteration. Plenty of smiling - less smirking

Per the rules of the universe i invented, Pete no longer tells a lie that should have been physically impossible :)

Reordered some paragraphs where i wrote stuff in a perplexing order

Removed the word “sensei” where i don’t believe it makes sense

Continually adjusting prepositions that were wrong

Joe Trohman, a whole-ass adult, no longer unironically says “Frickin”

Added some parentheses for spice

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Patch Notes below :)

Removed a weird sexist sentence that added nothing to plot or characterization

Proselytized a little more about steak n shake because i am homesick

Corrected the color of pete’s glowing eyes

No longer specify the speed at which joe’s hair grows???

Fixing prepositions as per usual

Removed unnecessary action sentences

Pete no longer reacts to the concept of dressing in drag with bloodlust????

Replaced “chuckled” with “giggled” most places because rainbow rowell gave me a complex

People do not always “hiss” when they could “say”

More paragraph breaks for readability :)

Made pete’s weird lechery is made a little bit more romantic (ish)

Made sure the band “rode” the elevator rather than “road”

Explained how the band saved andy at the hotel entrance because I missed that first time round?!?!