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sardonic-the-writer · 2 years

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OK SO I WONT GONNA PUPLISHED IT ON TUMBLR SINCE IM WRITING IT IN MY MOTHER LANGUAGE but if you like i can try to upload it in english but i scared that the grammar is gonna be terrible T^T

so like the fiction is about a guy named Finn, he had been abandoned since he was 3, no home, no food and lives in a small and dark ally, no one knows how he is still alive?? then, a kind man named Bob took him home and raised him like his son. so, Finn is not a touch starved guy, he doesn't know how to express his feelings, his love for Bob, but after he got to his 13th birthday, he finally can said out loud that he want Bob to be his dad, a real dad because Bob has taught Finn from the smallest things, so Bob couldn’t be more happy to say yes- aside about the past, Bob has a son, but his son passed due to a car accident and when he saw Finn, Finn reminded him about his late son (or old son idk ;=;) so thats why he adopted him. everyday, Bob teaches Finn how to study, math and communicate to work on the farm, that helps him a lot since he's going through his old age, and Finn really a fast learner and do exactly like what Bob taught

"Finn you need to go outside, out of this house"

"wh- why dad?"

"because i dont want to harm you inside this farm and house all day! you should go down to the village too!"

thats when Finn starts to scared, he scared that the old kids in the town will laugh and bully him again, but after hearing encouragement s he is feeling better and become a shoe cleaner- he could help Bob to make money out of it. then, its his first day after days and months stay away from the village, he was running around asking people if they want their shoes to be cleaned and actually he is making money out of it, and then, a lost dog ran through him and a voice following "where are you mii?" at first he didn't want to mind about it but the voice is just running around the place so he feels a bit annoyed, then a small, fluffy thing shake around his feet, it's that girl's lost dog, Mii- its name notched on the necklace

"wow- this is so soft!! rich people take shower for this thing everyday??" and after looking at it, he decided to give it back to the girl

just walked out of the path, he found her

"hey- is it your-"

not even to finished his sentence, the cupid has struck his heart! she is so beautiful, blonde hair, blue eyes, and that pretty smile, the visions he is seeing here is one of a kind, she just like an angel

but because he was to sunned, he couldn't speak or greeting to her

after he got home, he told to Bob when its dinner time because he has never felt like this before, this emotion has crossed his limit of knowing "different kind of feelings" and of course Bob knew that he is definitely in love

but, Bob is a teasing type, he went

"oh- i know whats that feeling is but i wont tell you, you have to find out yourself"

next day, Finn went down to where he met her yesterday but cant find her, after running around, he freaked out that he hasn't starting his job so he immediately went to work. feeling tired of overworking and have to find that girl again, a voice echoed

"Hey, here's some water for you"

"Than- Woa! don't throw at me like that you weirdo"

"yeah yeah fine, just drink it already before you're dead of being dehydration"

after sitting and talking, Finn is now know this man name - Tom, a book seller, owns a very big book shop in this village, thats when Finn made his first new friend but he didn't find that girl anywhere that day

the third day,

Finn is chilling with Tom in his book shop until the door opened

"hello?"

doesn't need to look at the face, thats the girl Finn has been looking for

Tom knows when he saw Finn's face so he decided to be the one who give Finn the opportunity to make a conversation

he pushed Finn, but didn't watch his force so Finn fall and had his body on the girl

after apologized, the girl told him that would he want to go to the park? of course Finn immediately being flustered, he scared that she will punished him, (you know, rich people?) but no, instead, she started to introduce herself, she is Rose, at that moment, Finn was stunned, Rose? what a perfect name for a perfect girl like her, now she is more gorgeous than before.

they are friends until Rose's birthday, 15 years old now

Finn wanted to give her something and when Rose likes reading book, Finn rushed to Tom's book shop, but when he was struggling to find the one that Rose will definitely love, a small "cling king" (?) sound rang, it's a ring, a very normal ring but attached with it is an emerald, its color just like Rose's eyes so Finn stood up, forgot about the book and rushed to find Rose.

before he could wear it for her, a strong flash appeared and both started to float up, both of them was SHOCKED, they didn't know MAGIC does have in this world, but Rose is so hyped that she didn't even care about it, but Finn does, he's trying to think about how to explain this because he doesn't want to make Rose scared, or leave him but those thoughts blew away when Rose asked if Finn want to dance over the fields of flowers beneath them and so they did

until the sun sets down the mountains,

"Hey, we have had enough, lets go home shall we?"

Rose asked and Finn is now remember that he still have to explain to her

after thinking and decided to tell her the truth, Rose was shocked

and thats when the ring stops its power, both of them fell and luckily there's a large lake, Rose cried because she doesn't want to end her life here, she's just 15, still got a whole long life ahead, Finn felt guilty, she hugged her tight, holding his tears and spoke with his shaky voice

"Don't worry, i will get us home, i will make sure that you will be safe"

and thats how they made-up. far away a bit, Rose saw a small village, they were so happy, God blessed them.

So they went and knocked on a house, a lady show up and introduced her name (i forgot her name oml xD)

Finn and Rose asked if they can stay here and she agreed, no one has passed by this village for ages so she's very happy to have guests

but after that she WAS FRIGHTENED when saw the ring on Rose's finger, so thats when she tell them the story,

an ancient story about a god, who makes people believed that he created the world separated it into 4 lands- water, fire, air and earth, he gave humans privilege and everyone is powerless against him, but he is a villain and he is VERY GREEDY, he gives people lands, water, food but for the trade, no one can make him distrust, especially when talks about his gold and diamond, but then, a wizard came and stole his precious ring- that ring Rose is wearing, and he went MAD, he is now acting like a crazy man, cursed on that ring that if anyone has it, they will be stuck with that ring and it will absorb their souls until they're dead and when the amount of souls are full, the ring will automatically go back to him, because of this, 4 leaders of the lands suspicious that people from the other lands made the god went mad, so they closed the door, and NO MORE welcoming people from others lands

Rose was again cried because why all of the sudden, bad things happen to her? the old lady told that there's no help-

unless, they have to return the ring.

return? did Finn and Rose misheard that? there's magic in this world?

the old lady laugh

"of course, people will never discover how magically this world is"

after hearing that, Rose went outside to breath, too much things had happened while Finn found out that there's someone who teaches sword in the village,

"Yes!! this could help me to protect Rose!"

so he learnt and they spent half of a year living in the village

when the time came, they have to go and started their journey, a brand new start, turning their life to a new chapter and will fate's gonna play with them or will they actually going to beat the prediction that people believed they can't?

- end of chapter 1 -

OKAY THATS IT, IM STILL TRYING TO THINK ABOUT THE FIRST ADVENTURE, IM CURENTLY HAVE FINN AND ROSE TO MEET A GUY NAMES STEPHAN HE HAS EARTH ABILITY AND FINN AND ROSE HAVE TO SOLVE HIS PROBLEM FOR HIM I MEAN LIKE THATS HOW THEY MAKE FRIENDS AND THE FICTION GOES THIS WAY, IM THINKING ABOUT HE LOVES A GIRL IN ANOTHER LAND AND I THINK THAT WE NEED TO SOLVE THAT!! I NEED YOUR HELP!!!!!! SOS

SECOND, ABOUT THE RING, THE RING ONLY ABSORB BAD PEOPLE'S SOUL, BUT ROSE, I THINK OF SHE MIGHT HAS A SECOND PERSONALITY, BECAUSE HER PARENTS IS SUPER STRICT SO SHE GOT ANXIOUS AND BLA BLA THINGS STARTED TO MADE A NEW PERSONALITY BUT SHE DIDN'N KNOW

SO YEAH!! IM STUCK AT THIS POINT RIGHT NOW, IM WRITING TO WHERE ROSE IS SEARCHING (ASKING STEPHEN QUESTIONS)

BUT IF YOU CAN HELP ME, IM GONNA CRY ACTAULLY 😭😭😭

HAVNT GOT MOTIVATIONS IN ALMOST SINCE JULY 2021

Compliments: A wonderful plot and pretty solid names. That's a huge compliment, the names part. I applaud you for not coming up with basic ass titles for the mc. The plot is also very sewn together and has much promise. I enjoy the representation with D.I.D (I think that's what you've done however.)

Constructive criticism: I know English isn't your second language, so maybe you could put up an editor for hire? Or just find a mutual to use as an editor? Also, be sure to separate paragraphs based off of speech and text. Example;

WRONG

"John walked down the street, shining an apple on his clothes. "GOOD MOROW!" He yelled at a passing begger on the streets, smiling with his yellowed teeth. "Good morow." They sang back. "How are you this fine morning?" John questioned."

RIGHT

"John walked down the street, shining an apple on his clothes.

"GOOD MOROW!" He yelled at a passing begger on the streets, smiling with his yellowed teeth.

"Good morow." They sang back.

"How are you this fine morning?" John questioned."

Hope this wasn't too rude 😭

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drangues · 4 years

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Work was good! I’ve gotta do a lot of walking around for it cause I’m,, a frontline worker, technically? So it’s bad for the anxiety BUT I like to think that it helps people at least a little bit? Even if it isn’t super glorious haha. And I saw Atsushi in the dress!!! He looks very pretty, 10/10, would gaze at again. (And really, don't we all want a bit more of him waving off gender norms because he likes how swishy skirts feel???) (Nyanon, 1/5)

But! Yes yes yes, baby boy deserves so much more love and support than he gets, and more of a relationship with Fukuzawa, and seriously WHATS UP WITH THE NARRATIVE TRYING TO GLORIFY THE HEADMASTER WITH ATSUSHI’S FRIENDS??? Anyways. Moving to the Cooking (and Eventual Baking) Concept: At first, he wasn’t like. A prodigy at it? He’s wasn’t bad, and he picked it up quickly! He just... Mostly focused on simple, easy to make things? And things that were easily stored! (Nyanon, 2/5)

But then he all but adopted Kyouka, who liked sweets and tofu and he wanted to make her happy, he wanted to make foods that would make her smile! And from what he saw, what made her smile was sweet things, or some of the harder to make things. So... He tried, and maybe failed a few times- But he’s a big brother now! It’s his job to make her smile!!! (Nyanon, 3/5)

And maybe it takes him a month to get the hang of making something like a cupcake without adding too little sugar, but the smile he gets for it makes it worth it,, Anyways I’m very passionate about happy big brother Atsushi can you tell. Oh! And have another Nyatsushi Concept while I’m here: So you know how cats bat at your hand when you touch their belly, because they’re trying to play around with you??? (Nyanon, 4/5)

Please imagine Atsushi doing that without thinking about it when someone brushes against his stomach and he’s laying down, or when someone (Dazai) tries to tickle him while he’s relaxing. Just. Little flails and nips at the offending appendage. And he starts apologizing once he realizes but the offender (DAZAI) is too busy laughing to respond. (Nyanon, 5/5)

how dare you have such big dick energy with all that immaculate brain power and imagination W O W (also im glad that youre facing your anxiety head on youre braver than the us marines we stan)

AND YES YES IM SO PASSIONATE ABOUT GOOD BIG BROTHER ATSUSHI WHO CARES AND DOES EVERYTHING FOR KYOUKA IK SHE’LL BE A GAMER GIRL AND SHE BE TRYNA HELP ATSUSHI WITH HIS LOVE LIFE (AND CRUSH ON DAZAI UWU) SHES HIS WING WOMAN AND WOULD KILL AGAIN FOR HER <333

atsushi cooking is the C U T E S T concept ever im in LOVE. i would like to think that atsushi just feel so wonder at “woa!! i can make all this food M Y S E LF” and since he must be a Cheap person (cus he didnt have much access to stuff) it makes sense that he’ll try and make it himself so he doesnt need to go buy every time

and U G HHHH i love the nyatsushi concept again,,,and dazai just loving his cat like behaviours,,i wanna See It Happen,,,AAA DAZUTSHI <333 (thats what i love about the cat concept as well and that is that dazai be finding it all out and loving it- G A S P A FIC WHERE DAZAI DISCOVERS ALL ATSUSHI’S CAT LIKE BEHAVIOURS AND JUST <33 WOA)

#anon #ask #anon ask #ask anon #nyanon #nyatsushi anon #bsd

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