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Restructuring the same sentence to be more interesting

Original Sentence:  Melody nods and together they somberly depart, while Gustavo watches them exit with poorly hidden worry.  Example 1: A nod assures acceptance to the proposal, and subsequently Rachel wordlessly escorts Melody towards a more solitary space, as the spectatorship of Gustavo trails them.  Changes that were made: - The sentence is opened with a verb rather than a noun, drawing the reader's focus toward what is happening rather than who - Additional descriptor words provide more context to the meaning of the exchange, and simple words are replaced with more detailed language. Spectatorship replaces Watches, the word Trails describes the way that they are watched as being close and attentive as if with intrigue. - The use of both active and passive voice engages the reader to utilize context to determine who is doing what, and draws interest when names are mentioned. It also breaks up the monotony of overusing the same nouns and pronouns in the surrounding texts to avoid repetitiveness Example 2: Gustavo studies the resulting unspoken exchange, as Melody and Rachel communicate mutual intentions, and pair off towards the suggested realm for greater privacy. Changes that were made: - The simultaneous events being described are rearranged to allow the reader to experience them from Gustavo's perspective, alluding to the sense of uncertainty and nervousness he feels about what Melody urgently wants to talk about before pulling focus onto the more notable actions being taken in the scene - Verbs are swapped for more metaphorical terms, such as "unspoken exchange" and "communicate mutual intentions," to describe the meaning of the body language used rather than the physical movements themselves. It allows the reader to subtly assume what kind of expressions and gestures were performed to express their thoughts to each other.

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Descriptor Words To Use for More Detailed Prose

Opponent

rival

competitor

challenger

combatant

enemy

target

antagonist

prey

attacker

opposer

aggressor

offender

foe

Adversary

Assailant

Antagonizer

hostile

match

victim

Pursuant

Tail

Chaser

Pursuer

Hunter

Quarry

menace

villain

oppresser

resister

battler

enslaver

abuser

threat

predator

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Descriptor Words To Use for More Detailed Prose

Bullet

beam

projectile

blast

shell

eruption

firing

Exhaust

detonation

blaze

lazer

missile

emission

expulsion

onslaught

ejection

barrage

blitz

hail

rocket

ammunition

round

Pellet

Quill

expense

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Descriptor Words To Use for More Detailed Prose

Shoot

fire

discharge

unleash

expel

blast

burst

execute

defeat

eliminate

disperse

Assail

Assault

attack

pierce

perforate

penetrate

project

propel

administer

deliver

ignite

initiate

effectuate

implement

activate

trigger

emmit

incite

catalyze

mechanize

spark

instigate

spur

terminate

evict

snipe

barrage

bombard

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Descriptor Words To Use for More Detailed Prose

Grab

Snatch

Grip

Grapple

Manipulate

Latch

Force

Squeeze

clutch

claim

take

comandeer

confiscate

Rip (from)

Tear (from)

steal

swipe

snag

Gather

Collect

hook

snare

seize

capture

arrest

apprehend

fist

clasp

posses

hold

embrace

entrap

whisk

behold

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Descriptor Words To Use for More Detailed Prose

Hit

Thrash

Trottle

Jostle

Jab

Beat

Punch

Pound

Slap

Crush

Smash

Assault

Mash

Rattle

Sock

Batter

Pummel

Swat

Smack

Strike

Bash

Knock

Bump

Blow

Slam

Slash

Swing

wallop

ram

whip

stab

bludgeon

shatter

tear

bat

box

lash

level

retailiate

rebuke

scrape

land

crunch

crack

rack

lacerate

eviscerate

brutalize

overpower

attack

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Descriptor Words To Use for More Detailed Prose

Movement

Lunge

Surge

Soar

Dash

Dart

Bolt

Jolt

Evade

Elude

Escape

Maneuver

Vault

Swoop

Flit

Flail

Recoil

Dodge

Rock

Weave

Careen

Snake

Heave

Thrust

Catapult

Pivot

Launch

Tumble

Veer

Plummet

Plunge

Dance

Roll

Swivel

Charge

Rise

Flutter

Slide

Sway

Sweep

Dive

Dip

Coast

Float

Drift

Fall

Crash

Rocket

Hurtle

Sink

Ascend

Descend

Stagger

Flourish

Flee

Spiral

Orbit

Encircle

Pursue

Advance

Race

Zoom

Barge

Flash

Scramble

Ricochet

Rebound

Glide

Swerve

Speed

Splash

Slither

Bound

Bounce

propel

gravitate

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More art themed around Volition because why contain ourselves to one kind of medium? Oh and by the way- Chapter 2 is in progress and updates are being published! Stay tuned!

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Updates On Volition

Chapter 1 is finally complete at 11,000 words! When I started writing Volition again, I had no idea I'd wind up writing this much and sticking to it for this long as I've always had writer's block kick my butt in the past! This is super exciting for me! If you'd like to check out the first chapter, please do! Individual segments and scenes have been posted, but there is also a dedicated tab on my main blog page where you can read chapter 1 in its entirety! Now we can begin chapter 2!

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Reading to keep my brain fresh and keen! I've started re-reading classic literature to improve my prose and help the words flow more easily. It's shockingly easy to develop a habit of skimming long paragraphs and losing focus when it comes to long-form written form creative works. It truly is a use-it-or-lose-it type of skill. Currently I've picked up Little Women, and I'm also planning on revisiting Fahrenheit 451, The Giver, and Brave New World if I can! I will update as I progress!

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Updates On Volition

Due to my personal struggles with ADHD I ended up making myself a personal thesaurus of words I use most frequently. Sure I could search them up on an online thesaurus, but I've found it didn't exactly give me the answers I was looking for when it comes to descriptive vocabulary so I made my own!

Every day I try my best to get the ideas flowing, sometimes it feels like my brain is mush, but I remind myself that language is a skill that can be strengthened and trained with effort and that it's okay to write total drivel and edit it later rather than simply create nothing at all.

Ultimately the most useful thing that has helped me thus far is break big overwhelming ideas into smaller and smaller parts to make them easier to accomplish. It started as "just write out general bullet points of the plot as a whole so you know what events lead to what" then it turned into "Just finish your first chapter" and then it turned into "just finish this one scene in this chapter!" and some days it is "just write the next sentence." Organization helps me regain a sense of clarity and control over the process and it has helped so much pushing through executive dysfunction. So if you're reading, know that I am making an effort every day to give you a compelling story and not giving up when it gets tiring or hard!

Thank you and keep reading!

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Hello Fellow Tumblr Writers!

This is my official blog for my long term project Volition! This is where I will be sharing full length chapters of the novel in it's latest draft and additional details about the world and it's characters as well as answering any questions people have (MINUS SPOILERS) if I can manage it! I also draw a lot of art inspired by this series as I've been working on it for a very long time!

Please enjoy if you're a fan of epic Science Fiction stories! Feel free to read what I've written and interact in anyway you desire!

Stats about my novel so far: Volume One Total Word Count: 13,284

Goal Word Count for Volume One: 120,000

Percentage Complete: 11.07%