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Was thinking about how Kurapika does this very specific thing several times in the ‘99 anime which led me to thinking about little Kurapika learning Kurta traditions. Which wouldn’t be Hunter x Hunter fanart without a hint of tragedy.

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Outlining: one writer’s approach

…So I was puttering around on Twitter the other day, as one does, and in mid-putter found that someone on my timeline had just RT’d some tweets from a discussion about which approach to writing a book (or other longish piece of prose) was the best: pantsing or plotting. (”Pantsing”, for those of you who may not have come across the term, indicates just sort of making up a story as you go along, without establishing an underlying structure first or (sometimes) knowing how it’s going to end. “Plotting” means having some kind of plan about where the story is going to go – which I would normally take as meaning a premise or outline of some sort.)

And the person at the core of this particular thread, Rebecca F. Kuang, said this:

wait can someone who isn’t a pantser actually explain themselves? how detailed does your outlines get? do you really know the sequence of and content of every scene ahead of time? how you figure out smaller plot threads before you’re ~in~ it?

Since I’m emphatically not a pantser, but a four-decade plotter, I thought maybe I could bring something useful to the discussion. I asked how much detail on the process was wanted? as I’d been doing this for a while.

Rebecca said: 

haha well what i’m most curious about is how you can “feel” the story’s tone/heft/urgency and connect with the characters and their plight from an abstract outline? i’d like to plan more, but i have a hard time thinking from a birds eye view

It’s a good question. But for a moment there I was brought up short, as the concept of an “abstract” outline kind of startled me. I couldn’t imagine what kind of outline that would be. And then the horrible thought occurred: Wait. Can it be that when some of these folks hear “outline” they’re thinking about that godawful high-school English kind of thing? Full of Roman numerals and numbers and capital letters and small letters – ? 

Oh gods no. No no no no no no, it’s not like that at all.

…So I got into the subject a little: what novel outlines can look like, the trick I was taught about how to structure them, and how to make them work for you. (There are some references to Scrivener in there, because that’s what I use, but the advice will work perfectly well no matter what software or other instrumentality you’re using. My outlines tend to start out with pen and writing paper, but they don’t stay on paper for long.) There are also a couple of examples of the kind of outline you would send an editor when querying.

The thread got long, and a little disjointed. So when it was over I cut my bits together and polished them a little; and at the end added one (extremely important) afternote. Then I put it up on my main blog, right here. So if this is a subject that might interest you, maybe you want to take a look, as (to my great pleasure) I’m already hearing from people who say they’re finding the info / approach in the post useful.

Just as an FYI: A copy of the post will also go up on FicFoundry.com when that site goes live at the end of the month, as that’s where all my writing stuff will be going from now on. (It was past time that whole batch of content had someplace of its own. That’s getting sorted now.)

…And now back to work. (Yet another outline, as it happens…) :)

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there was me, pressing lines into my skin

and you, resting your forehead between my shoulder blades

i can’t un-destroy myself

but you still try and breathe healing into my lungs

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a smile quietly shared

heads bent over fingers woven together

for us, we are enough

for me, you are the world

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platonic

you and me you and me

puppy love, but none of the

wanting-yearning

instead, warmth and kisses—

not on lips but pressed gentle

to cheeks and hairlines like bandaids

like something soft and trusting,

baby-down wings slowly unfurling,

no hurry to get anywhere because we’re already there

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self pep-talk

i will not call myself severely depressed, or

debilitatingly anxious, or without a future.

i would not call myself strong but i am

determined and a good liar and that is enough

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new year

red, or blue, or pale orange or

the yellows of daisies or the green of living

things or the deepest of purples or silvery-gold

skylines

i guess i have the choice,

fill the canvas with all of these colors

or none at all, you know.

or none at all.

i pick up the brush and refuse to set it down

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Spiraling

behind your rib cage

beside your heaving lungs

nestled in the gaps between blood and bone

white space festers

lost past the atmosphere

the death of a star,

bright lights and dust and dust

fingers curl around empty

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5 ways to increase/decrease suspense in your writing

Suspense is one of the trickier parts of writing to manage effectively because, as the author, you can’t experience your story the way a reader does. If you don’t have enough suspense, it can be difficult to keep your readers interested. If you have too much, frustrated and stressed-out readers might throw your book against the wall. Too much suspense can even backfire - if you try to keep your readers constantly on edge, they can stop taking things seriously and the end result is as though you never included any suspense at all.

So how can you tell if you’ve reached the right balance? Unfortunately, I can’t answer that for you. Some things really do require feedback from honest and insightful readers. Once you have that feedback, however, there are easy tricks to adjusting the level of suspense without a drastic re-write. Here are my five favorite methods.

Promises and Payoffs

INCREASE SUSPENSE by promising something huge and then giving your reader something unexpected. To borrow an example from Buffy the Vampire Slayer, imagine a teenage boy and girl sneaking into an empty building. Everything from the costumes to the lighting is designed to make you uneasy about the girl’s safety but, in the end, she’s the vampire. Give the audience something sensational and they won’t be disappointed that you didn’t deliver on what you originally promised.

DECREASE SUSPENSE by promising less than you plan to deliver. For example, if you plan to kill off a character as they walk through a dark alley, let them worry about being mugged rather than murdered. Not only is it less suspenseful, the payoff is more shocking.

Characters are Crucial

INCREASE SUSPENSE by shifting the focus to a character who’s more involved in the action or one who has more at stake. Even if you have a single POV character, another can come in and demand that character’s attention, along with the readers’.

DECREASE SUSPENSE by focusing on a character who’s more concerned with a secondary goal. Subplots are a fantastic way to give your readers some room to breathe.

Calm vs. Chaos

INCREASE SUSPENSE by cutting back on the action. Suspense flourishes in the quiet moments when your characters have time to think and to anticipate what may be in store for them.

DECREASE SUSPENSE by giving your characters a big, exciting mess to deal with. Even when that mess causes more problems and puts more pressure on your characters in the long run, you’ve still created an oasis where both they and the readers are too distracted to worry about how the big picture will pan out.

Devil’s in the Details

INCREASE SUSPENSE by concentrating on the details of the setting. Horror movies are great at this - every creak of a door, every shadow across a wall keeps the audience immersed in the experience and tense with anticipation.

DECREASE SUSPENSE by breaking the “show, don’t tell” rule and allow exposition to help you move things along. You don’t need to take readers through every aspect of your story in excruciating detail. It’s okay to gloss over some things and it helps readers relax because they know you’re not going to be springing any surprises on them just yet.

Ticking Time-Bomb

INCREASE SUSPENSE by imposing a deadline that your characters struggle to meet. It’s one of the oldest and most obvious tricks in the book, but very effective.

DECREASE SUSPENSE by allowing your characters to believe that the deadline has been met or pushed back. If they (and the readers) believe that they’ve accomplished their goal or bought themselves more time, it relieves pressure and allows everyone to relax until the truth’s revealed.

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Using Real Psychology in Your Writing

What Will Your Character Do When Disaster Strikes? by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

Characterization and Conflict: Using Psychological Tests to Improve Your Writing by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

Gathering Information from Characters: Types of Questions by JJ Cooper 

Using Body Language in Writing by JJ Cooper

Body Language Cheat Sheet by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

USING ARCHETYPES IN YOUR STORIES

A Primer on Archetypes and the Collective Unconscious by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

Writing Better Romantic Relationships

This series looks at the Anima/Animus archetype, which is most often seen in romantic relationships, and how to use it to create more compelling romantic relationships, regardless of genre. Looks at what the anima and animus are, how they’re formed, and why fiction writers need to understand them. There’s also some and what makes love grow - and how happily ever afters really work.

Creating Riveting Romances: The Anima/Animus Archetype Defined by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

Writing Romance: Three Influences on the Anima/Animus Archetype by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

The Perfect Hero and the Perfect Heroine: Dark and Light Sides of the Anima & Animus by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

What Does it Really Take to Live Happily Ever After? A look at the psychological research on what makes or breaks romantic relationships. - by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

Creating Better Antagonists

Three-Dimensional Villains: Finding Your Character’s Shadow Using Jungian archetypes and hands-on exercises, this article teaches fiction writers to tap their own dark sides to create realistic villains who will really challenge the hero/es and keep tension high.��- by Carolyn Kaufman, PsyD

FORENSIC PSYCHOLOGY

Basic Information on Forensic Science by Juan Salvo

The Truth about Forensic Psychology by Lisa Featherston

archetypewriting.com

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Character Mannerisms

Here’s some considerations for the tiny little details that can add a lot to a character. Figuring out these mannerisms can do a lot for conveying character traits through their normal actions rather than just their thoughts, dialogue, etc.

How’s their posture? There are more options than just sitting up straight or slouching a lot. What’s their most comfortable sitting position? Do they have a consistent posture or does it change depending on situation / present company? 

How’s their etiquette? Do they hold the door for people behind them? How do they handle handshakes and other kinds of typical contact? Does their language change or become more formal when speaking to strangers? To their elders? To their superiors? 

In a crowded space, do they get out of people’s way, or do people get out of THEIR way? 

How do they point something out? Pointing their finger? Nodding their head? A flippant wave of the hand?

What are their comfort gestures or self-touch gestures? Common comfort gestures include rubbing the back of the neck or gripping their own arms. Can they suppress these gestures or do they do them often?

Also consider the character’s common reactions to common emotions. Do they whoop when they’re excited? Do they tremble when angry? 

What parts of the body are the most expressive? Do they shuffle and stomp their feet a lot when agitated or excited? Are they a hand talker? Do they have an impressive range of motion with their eyebrows?

How do they sound? Do their car keys jingle as they walk? Do they drag their feet? Do their heels clack resoundingly on hard floors? Do they breathe loudly? Do they fidget in ways that make a lot of noise?

How do they handle eye contact?

Any behaviors they reserve for moments when they’re alone? (Or possibly among family/friends that don’t care?) Do they pick their nose? Do they bite their toenails? Do they sniff their armpits? Or do they not care if people see behavior like this?

Apart from comfort gestures, what else do they do to comfort themselves in trying times? What’s their go-to self care? What’s their comfort food? Where’s their safe space?

What are they doing with themselves as they’re suppressing emotion? Lip biting, fist clenching, and avoiding eye contact are common methods of coping with strong emotions.

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Writing Tip: Don’t Be Afraid of Mixing Dialogue and Action

So I’ve been reading a lot of amateur writing lately, and I’ve noticed what seems to be a common problem: dialogue. 

Tell me if this looks familiar. You start writing a conversation, only to look down and realize it reads like: 

“I’m talking now,” he said. 

“Yes, I noticed,” she said. 

“I have nothing much to add to this conversation,” the third person said. 

And it grates on your ears. So much ‘said.’ It looks awful! It sounds repetitive. So, naturally, you try to shake it up a bit: 

“Is this any better?” He inquired. 

“I’m not sure,” she mused. 

“I definitely think so!” that other guy roared. 

This is not an improvement. This is worse. 

Now your dialogue is just as disjointed as it was before, but you have the added problem of a bunch of distracting dialogue verbs that can have an unintentionally comedic effect. 

So here’s how you avoid it: You mix up the dialogue with description. 

“Isn’t this better?” he asked, leaning forward in his seat. “Don’t you feel like we’re more grounded in reality?” 

She nodded, looking down at her freshly manicured nails. “I don’t feel like a talking head anymore.” 

“Right!” that annoying third guy added. “And now you can get some characterization crammed into the dialogue!” 

The rules of dialogue punctuation are as follows: 

Each speaker gets his/her own paragraph - when the speaker changes, you start a new paragraph. 

Within the speaker’s own paragraph, you can include action, interior thoughts, description, etc. 

You can interrupt dialogue in the middle to put in a “said” tag, and then write more dialogue from that same speaker. 

You can put the “said” tag at the beginning or end of the sentence. 

Once you’ve established which characters are talking, you don’t need a “said” tag every time they speak. 

ETA: use a comma instead of a period at the end of a sentence of dialogue, and keep the ‘said’ tag in lower caps. If you end on a ? or !, the ‘said’ tag is still in lower case. (thanks, commenters who pointed this out!) 

Some more examples: 

“If you’re writing an incomplete thought,” he said, “you put a comma, then the quote mark, then the dialogue tag.” 

“If the sentence ends, you put in a period.” She pointed at the previous sentence. “See? Complete sentences.” 

“You can also replace the dialogue tag with action.” Extra guy yawned. “When you do, you use a period instead of a comma.”

So what do you do with this newfound power? I’m glad you asked. 

You can provide description of the character and their surroundings in order to orient them in time and space while talking. 

You can reveal characterization through body language and other nonverbal cues that will add more dimension to your dialogue. 

You can add interior thoughts for your POV character between lines of dialogue - especially helpful when they’re not saying quite what they mean. 

You can control pacing. Lines of dialogue interrupted by descriptions convey a slower-paced conversation. Lines delivered with just a “said” tag, or with no dialogue tag at all, convey a more rapid-fire conversation. 

For example: 

“We’ve been talking about dialogue for a while,” he said, shifting in his seat as though uncomfortable with sitting still. 

“We sure have,” she agreed. She rose from her chair, stretching. “Shall we go, then?” 

“I think we should.” 

“Great. Let’s get out of here.” 

By controlling the pacing, you can establish mood and help guide your reader along to understanding what it is that you’re doing. 

I hope this helps you write better dialogue! If you have questions, don’t hesitate to drop me an ask :)