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Bedtime Stories: Series Set #2 | Long Way From Home

I've just released a new poetry mixtape, titled "Long Way From Home."

In essence, it's a series of fever dream musings on travel (the journey, the destination, the baggage) - written, ironically, in the age of quarantine.

All the writing is by me, recorded and edited my me, overlayed with instrumentals (not by me). This marks my fourth poetry collection - I haven't made any in a while, but was feeling inspired.

Here's the full album:

I'll be releasing a mini digital booklet that will include the full text + some accompanying visuals created for this project.

Please share! All tracks are available for free listening and download!

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How To Write A Book Pitch

This is what you say when someone says ‘what’s the book about?’—a paralyzing question, and you need a compelling answer.

If you don’t know where to start,

A very basic formula for a book pitch can go something like this—

Character, conflict, setting, hook

Character

Most pitches start with character.

A charming cyborg…

A relentless assasin…

A battered detective…

(Try to keep it to one interesting character, too many characters at once can be confusing.)

Conflict

This is the problem your character faces. This is whatever your plot is.

…gets stranded on mars…

…falls in love with the man she’s supposed to kill…

…uncovers a dangerous secret…

Setting

…in a world ravaged by famine…

…lost in an unforgiving sea…

…at an elusive liberal arts college…

Hook

THIS is the part that is tricky, because there’s no easy formulaic way I can suggest you end your pitch—but you should have a hook, something snappy that pulls you in.

Example:

Under this formula, the pitch for my novel, ‘The Runaway’s Promise’ would look something like this…

Creative foster kid Beverly wants nothing more than to run away from her fatally dull small-town home. In trying to make an escape plan, she gets caught in a dangerous town secret that threatens to keep her there forever.

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Advice for writing about small towns

So I come from a small (midwestern) town. And I mean - an actual small town (less than 1,500 population). I’ve lived in towns of under 500 population, and in towns of about 2,500 population, and in towns of 15k population, and in cities of 100k, and currently in a 700k city. 

So here’s some things about small towns you might not know if you’ve never lived in one:

If it’s got a population higher than 30 thousand, it’s not a small town. It’s just a town. Hell, I’d probably argue that if it has a population higher than 10 thousand it’s not small town, but I’m being generous. However the people in towns 30k–50k probably think they’re in a small town (they’re not).

The experience is vastly different depending on how far you are from a small-large city. And by that I mean - the people are vastly different. 

Are you less than 60min drive to a city of 80k+ population? the people are probably less likely to be farmers, more likely to work in said small-large city and commute (which doesn’t mean that everyone commutes or that no one is a farmer). The people probably lean slightly to the right of the closest city, but aren’t necessarily staunch conservatives. The town sizes probably bottom out around 2k min. 

Are you more than 2hrs drive from a city of 80k+ population? The town is more self-sufficient. Most work within their small town or a nearby small town. Depending on the terrain, more people are farmers. They’re probably mostly conservative, both socially and fiscally. The town sizes could be as small as 300 people.

The farther from the city, the more likely to be conservative, more likely to be farmers (depending on the terrain).

Population 15k+:

This town probably has a (singular) hospital, several doctor’s offices, probably a dozen department stores - and if it’s rural enough, probably a couple kinds of hardware/diy type stores (lowe’s, menard’s, home depot etc.)

There are several options for vets and at least one emergency vet 

1-2 dozen hotels

If it’s got anything touristy, double the hotels (2-3 dozen) - touristy being water, especially large lakes, hiking trails, fesitvals, nearby ski resort - any thing that would draw people there on vacation, even if it’s only people from that region 

Also add a “down town” area - boutiques, nice restaurants, probably a theatre

It has at least 4 options of elementary schools, and 3 options each for middle and high schools. It might have a community college (but probably not). There are private or charter options, specifically for religious students

There are multiple denominations of churches (catholic, lutheran, baptist, episcopal etc). Depending on ethnic make-up, it may or may not have a synagogue. It probably won’t have a mosque.

If it’s in a rural-ish area (the closest towns are all smaller) it probably has some kind of shopping mall. If it’s the smaller town, it may not.

It’ll have several bars, probably clustered in a central location, with a few others a little farther out from that area. 

This town has a few coffee shops (3-10), but may or may not have an actual starbucks. At least one is a local place, at least one is a chain (starbucks, dunkin, biggby). 

People drive everywhere. There is a bus system, but only the “down town” area would have issues finding parking. Most businesses/hotels have their own parking lot.

Most people live in houses but there are a few (3-7) apartment complexes, most of which are several buildings

There will be lots of restaurants, mostly chains or small mom & pop places, with at least a couple niceish options

This town might even have its own airport, but likely only serves regional flights to “nearby” larger towns/cities. Regional means like, less than 2hr flights, so that’s probably a bigger distance than you’d think.

There are dozens of gas stations and at least a dozen fast food places

Is it on a freeway? increase the gas stations, fast food places, department stores etc. 

This town probably has a rec-type center with a community pool and courts and what not. There are several options of gyms.

Population 10k ish:

May or may not have a hospital - if it does, it’s small. A few doctor’s offices, a couple of department stores, at least one hardware/diy type

A few vets, may or may not have an emergency vet

a dozen or so hotels. again - double that if it’s got smth that would attract people, especially water.

may or may not have a “down town” area

2-4 options at least of elementary, 2-3 options of middle and high school. No community college.

Still at least a few options of churches. Still might have a synagogue, still probably doesn’t have a mosque.

Probably doesn’t have a shopping mall, but might have a “business district - basically a few intersections with most of the stores, hotels, and restaurants.

Probably has at least two, maybe three coffee shops. At least one is a chain.

Probably doesn’t have its own bus system unless it’s near enough to a town of 15k+ or more - people drive everywhere. There’s plenty of parking.

Most people live in houses, but there are a couple of apartment complexes. Mostish of the houses have yards, but some might not.

A few options of restaurants, but maybe only 1-2 niceish places. A couple chain, a couple mom & pop. 

It would be strange for this town to have an airport. May have a landing strip at most, but unlikely.

There are probably half a dozen to a dozen gas stations. Several fast food places.

Is it on a freeway? increase the gas stations, fast food

This town might have a community rec center w/pool. Still a couple options of gyms.

Population 5k ish:

This town doesn’t have a hospital. It probably has 1-3 doctor’s offices. At least one department store

2-3 vets, likely no emergency vet

3-8 ish hotels or inns 

Might have a quaint but very small “down town” area

Likely only 2 options of schools, maybe only one high school. Possible to go to school with same people your whole life

2-3 options for churches. Probably doesn’t have a synagogue unless there’s a large Jewish population 

There’s no shopping mall of any kind, but probably has an area where most of the businesses are - at most 2-3 intersections worth

Probably has a coffee shop or two, but might not. Could be a chain or a local - but probably a local.

There’s no bus system unless it’s near enough to a town of 15k+. People drive everywhere.

Most everyone lives in houses. Most if not all have yards. There might be 1-2 apartment complexes but maybe not.

There are a few restaurants - mix of chain and mom & pop places. Might have a nice restaurant, but only one.

There’s no airport.

There are probably 2-6 gas stations, maybe 1-2 fast food. 

Is it on a free way? increase the gas stations and fast food.

Likely does not have its own rec center/pool, but probably has 1-2 options of gyms.

Population under 2k ish:

No hospital. Probably has one doctor’s office, but might not if it’s close enough to a larger “small” town. No department stores, but probably at least one, maybe 2 decent grocery stores. Could be a local chain or a mom & pop.

Probably has a vet’s office, but just one. 

1-2 inns/motels. If it’s an older town, it has like, a street that’s mostly made of older style buildings and is the “down town” - just a couple of blocks

Just one school system - elementary through high school. Everyone goes through the same school - you probably graduate with the same people you went to kindergarten with

1-2 churches. Probably no synagogue

There is probably a generalish area where the store/post office/school/etc is, but those are probably just as surrounded by homes and yards as everything else.

This town probably doesn’t have a coffee shop, and if it does, it’s local, not a chain.

There’s no bus system unless it’s close enough to a town of 15k+. People drive.

There might be an apartment complex. Everything else is houses. The houses pretty much all have some kind of yard.

There are probably two restaurants, probably both local. Nothing fancy. 

No airport.

Probably 2ish gas stations.

Is it on a free way? add a gas station and a fast food restaurant.

There’s no rec center (unless maybe an outdoor like, field type rec center), but still likely has at least one gym.

I could keep going down but I think you get the idea. If you’re writing about an actual town, do research on its population. If you’re making up a town, think about what size you need it to be to have the things you want (or don’t want). 

If your “small town” has more than one hospital, it’s not a small town. If it’s got a population above 10k, there is definitely more than one (and likely, many) hotels. 

Is it near decent-sized water (largeish lake, ocean)? People probably have vacation homes there. That increases property value and tourism. Even if it’s not a like, nationally-known vacation spot, people within 100-200 miles could likely make weekend trips there.

Is it the largest town within 75-100 miles, even if it’s under 20k? it’s probably got more department stores and other such industry bc it’s serving a population greater than its own. if there are other towns nearby of equal-to-larger size, it might need less of those things.

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Friendly reminder to breathe and treat your first draft kindly. This is a time for you to get to know your characters and find their voices. Making sense of their journey comes later. 

Remember: You can’t polish what you haven’t written. 

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In my novel, Hystoria:

Amy, 26, Chinese, adopted, former "journalist," full-time sad girl. Making a documentary about Mallory's suicide. Envious of ghosts.

Mallory, deceased, Indo/Afro-Trinidadian, artist. Pretty girl with humility and strange dreams. Created paintings for secret, wealthy clients. Lived multiple lives. May have been involved with a cult.

💔

💔: give a brief character bio of your 3-5 MCs

(This is for Part I of the duology, which takes place 15 years before Part II.)

John Mark, 16, Filipino, bedroom full of plants and psychology books. He fell in a sinkhole and came out of it a minor cult sensation because of what he found down there. Dark moods sometimes. Haunted by his doppelgänger. 

Martina, 16, Italian, bedroom full of candles and empty wine bottles. Quiet and reserved until her older sister died in a sailing accident in the Mediterranean. Then she opened up like a rose. John Mark’s study partner in Chemistry class.

Heinrich, 18, German, bedroom full of workout equipment and secret polaroids. Possible victim of demonic possession. Alienated from most of his schoolmates because of this horrifying thing he did at a party. Fascinated by John Mark; fearful of Martina.

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When I was younger, when being myself was too heavy still, sometimes I tried to model myself after my mother in the way that little girls tend to—emulating something they don’t understand, playing dress-up and painting their faces in bright swatches of colors, all of it dripping off the slippery canvas of them: when you are too young for anything yet to stick.

"Animale," Wet Sand in an Hourglass by Lana C. Marilyn

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And later, even when you made the decision to abandon those bonds, you knew that it was a quiet severance, that home would keep you, that to leave it at all was more an elaborate performance than an ending. The arrogance and the futility were clear to you, but all the same you needed to go, and now inevitably you were back.

Hystoria, chapter two (excerpts from a WIP) by Lana C. Marilyn

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The Habits and Routines of NaNoWriMo Winners

Every year, we’re lucky to have great sponsors for our nonprofit events. After November 2018, our sponsor RescueTime put together some stats from NaNoWriMo writers who used their platform during the month. Here are a few of the interesting facts that RescueTime unearthed about the NaNoWriMo writers they surveyed:

What makes NaNoWriMo so special is that no matter what level of writer you are—amateur or professional—everyone has the same 30 days to write a staggering 50,000-word novel.

And while the time constraint makes NaNoWriMo a massive undertaking, it’s also an opportunity to see how those who hit their goal effectively spend that time.

With 58% of RescueTime users reporting that they hit their NaNoWriMo goal in 2018, we dug into how they spent their time, built routines, and stayed motivated through the entire month.

Keep reading

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mini intro

I established this Tumblr page a while ago but I think it would be really nice to really get more in touch with the writing community.

About me:

My name is Lana. I am a self published writer of a collection of memoirs and poetry

I produce and release a zine series, GLXTCH, which consists of original collage art + poetry / essays

I also record and release audio poetry online as part of a series called Bedtime Stories

I'm from Brooklyn, NY and I engage with my local writing community by performing poetry and hosting writing workshops and literary events, including The Lit Exhibit. I also have dabbled a lot in the documentary sphere because I love all forms of storytelling.

The Lit Exhibit is a writing gallery I organize and curate once a year. We're actually currently accepting submissions for next year! More info: @thelitexhibit

I'm working on two novels simultaneously. One is a sci-fi about dealing with natural death in a future where the consciousness of the deceased gets uploaded into a virtual reality. The second piece is a speculative fiction story about a girl investigating the mysterious death of a former classmate.

I'd like to follow / engage with other writers of poetry, speculative fiction, essays, zines, scripts, etc.

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"Slope" by Lana C. Marilyn - Mechanisms (Series Set #2) | Bedtime Stories

Mechanisms was originally conceived as an exploration of deconstructions. Series Set #1 explored this concept thematically and Series Set #2 kicks off as an experiment with the relationship between content and sound effects & composition.

"Slope" is a very intimate poem that, fair warning, concerns the subject of sexual assault which may be triggering to some, so listener discretion is advised.

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Body Language Cheat Sheet for Writers

As described by Selnick’s article:

Author and doctor of clinical psychology Carolyn Kaufman has released a one-page body language cheat sheet of psychological “tells” (PDF link) fiction writers can use to dress their characters.

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Congratulations, NaNoWriMo Writers!

Whether you reached 50K this November or not, one of the most important things that NaNoWriMo can help you do is jumpstart a creative habit. It doesn’t matter if it takes you one month or ten years to finish a draft; the fact that you’ve taken the time to tell your story makes you a winner in our eyes. Join us in January and February as we take you through the revision, editing, and publishing process during our “I Wrote a Novel… Now What?” months!

“NaNoWriMo is… just the beginning.” –NaNoWriMo participant K. J. Middleton

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Im just, Im so in love with writing, you know? Like, I honestly just love talking about my writing and creating characters and plots and worlds- its the most fantastic thing ever and my heart just swells thinking about writing and I just am so thankful that Im this passionate about something. I pray everybody gets this heart-fluttering, mind-boggling, childlike happiness feeling about something they love. Its just so nice and warm. Im just so in love with writing.

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I am nowhere close to the target word count.

But. For the past few weeks, I've spent every day thinking actively about ideas for my novels, have outlined extensively, and I've made a lot of progress in developing my plots and characters.

I'm not a fast writer. It does, admittedly, take me a long time to get into a groove and to get to the middle part of a story. Other people I know are way more skilled than me when it comes to this. I'm working on pushing myself to churn out more content and finish my chapters, but I also feel just as content that tendrils of the book are coming to life bit by bit.

Previously, I wasn't really writing anything at all, period, so it does feel good to be excited about things.

It also is helping me gain a sense of my average for pacing. My chapters seem to nature find a closing point about 2,000 words in. Each scene is brief. I often feel like I'm writing more of a screenplay but that's okay--those habits are helpful too because my strength has always been writing solid dialogue and fun character interactions. Which is why having a storyline with only one main character is a big challenge for me. There's only her, and not much of anyone to talk to for a lot of the book, which is interesting. Characters in solitude are tough. I'm trying.

Anyway, this is my Nano update. I'm really happy that this has been such a great push to get me writing again.

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As an editor, I know when I am reading someone’s first novel. I have nicknames for the four give-away faults beginners make: (1) Walk and Chew Gum (2) Furry Dice (3) Tea, Vicar? (4) Styrofoam. I see at least one of these in every manuscript where the author has not mastered the craft of writing before submitting in his or her work. What are these four faults and, more importantly, how can you cure them?

(1) Walk and Chew Gum The writer has not integrated action and dialogue, internal monologue and action, or internal monologue with dialogue. It is as if the characters can do only one thing at a time. An example:

   "If you think you’re going to town you’d better thing again,“ said Ralph.    He put down his can of beer.    "I’m not having any daughter of mine going to a Cantrell boy’s party, and that’s final!”    "Oh, Pa! How could you be so cruel!“ JoBeth cried.    Then, hunting in her pockets for a tissue, she dried her eyes and stared at him defiantly.    "If I want to go, how can you stop me?” she demanded.    Ralph knew this would happen. She had always been independent, like her mother. He half-lurched to his feet.    "You little hussy!“ he bellowed.    Running up the stairs, JoBeth turned at the landing.    "I am going, do you hear? I am.”

Not integrating action and dialogue makes for jerky, lifeless prose. Combine, combine, toujours combine:

   "If you think you’re going to town you’d better think again,“ Ralph snapped, putting down his can of beer. She was too damn much like her mother. “I’m not having any daughter of mine going to a Cantrell boy’s party, and that’s final!”    "Oh, Pa! How could you be so cruel!“ JoBeth hunted her pockets for a tissue, dried her eyes and stared at him defiantly. "If I want to go, how can you stop me?”    Ralph half-lurched to his feet, bellowing, “You little hussy!” But JoBeth was already upstairs. “I am going, do you hear? I am.”

This might not be award-winning prose, but it reflects the reality of the action and feelings better by having action, thought and dialogue knitted together.

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NaNo Update

My word count is still pretty low. But today I took some time to do more outlining. Both of my WIPs need it.

But I'm feeling okay with this, because I think it's helping me a lot to flesh out my character motivations and such. The story really needs it.