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nathantheauthor · 5 months ago

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I said I was going to start talking about the rewrites I have, and what better way than just start with the poster boys, and I do mean boys!

Welcome to the first entry of my Creepypasta rewrites, I introduce the rewrites for Woods, Keaton and a variant of 2015, as well as my own original Jeff! We'll talk about this in chronological order.

Before we get into it I do have to preference there is a lot of lore that I'm not going to fully dive into here, cuz as you'll notice I have excluded a Jeff variant, as I'm saving Hodek for his own blog entry. My takes on Jeff depict the variance as a cult worshiping the original Jeff the killer, with Woods and Keaton at the head of it, well, Keaton is the REAL master mind.

Hailing from 2013, we have the ever well-known and (not very) beloved Jeffrey Woods, the second ever recorded Jeff The Killer. No I actually had a lot of difficulty figuring this one out, because he needed the biggest rewrite out of all of them, and frankly, I had fun and adore the end result.

Jeffrey Woods is still a story we know, and have seen time and time again, but there is a few major updates and differences to his origins. For starters, one of the major things I wanted to do and touch up on is his relationship and dynamic with Liu, and I went a step further to switch their ages, Jeff is once again the younger brother, with Liu being only a year older than him, making most of the stuff to come later make a lot more sense.

The other major change is the incident is no longer a birthday party, I rewritten and restructured a lot of the events without changing most of the beats, and this is the event I've changed the most, and it's aftermath, you see instead of a birthday party this takes place at a 4th of July gathering. The events play out somewhat the same, with his parents sending him to find his own entertainment and ultimately he ends up playing cowboys with some of the younger kids, before Randy and crew came onto the scene, pulling him away for a "chat".

Instead of guns or the flare gun this time around, no, Jeff is hit with some illegal fireworks, the incident burning him from head to toe, leaving him worse from where when the ambulance is finally do arrive and Randy is arrested. His pale skin is actually explained by the improper skin grafts, leaving him with ghostly pale skin, and in fact, he still has his eyelids. Rather than them being removed, his eyes are unable to shut properly due to a problem with the methods used to treat him.

In fact the events of the first murder are completely different, it is instead the family of Jane Arkensaw, leading to his parents seeing him coming back from the burning the house down, forcing him to silence them as well before visiting Liu. In this version of events there is no catchphrase, instead it's Jeff struggling to find any sort of comforting words for his brother, only what their parents used to tell them... "Shh. Just go to sleep." Before smothering him with a pillow and leaving during Liu's unconscious moments. Now homeless, and on the run, he's forced to fend for himself until!

Jeffrey Keaton, the third and most vile recorded Jeff The Killer, based semi off of the MBK version. He's more violent and manipulative, and audible stutter often signifying his enjoyment of his depraved actions. Unlike Woods, there had been something wrong with Keaton deeply from the start, hell it wasn't just him, his elder brother David was equally as vile. They killed their parents together, and wreaked havoc across the small town of Ferguson,

However, similar to his counterpart in the MBK-verse, he would be trapped in Krueger asylum and meeting group of colorful individuals. Helen Otis, Natalie Outlette, Katherine Knight, Diana Angels, and Owen Allaster. Eventually they would all find themselves free in the wake of Natalie's superhuman strength awakening. They broke out as a group, ultimately splitting up as Owen and Katherine returned to Slenderman, Jeff sought to find his brother, Diana Angels left to seek out answers to what she is, and Natalie vanished into the night.

Having split ways with his asylum gang, Jeffrey would find himself lured into an abandoned pizzeria, David strung up from wires, the mad head of the asylum was waiting for him, garbed in wolf mask and trench coat. The resulting class at ultimately end in the death of David and the first of many deadly experiences for Jeffrey Keaton.

In the aftermath of this, he would be indoctrinated and resurrected by Zalgo, infected with the demonic warden's influence, and ultimately coming to die multiple times.

Present day Jeffrey Keaton is a walking corpse, malnourished and rotting, bugs crawling beneath his skin and threatening to eat him from the inside out. He can only be described as a GHOUL, a zombie. His appearance began to resemble the ugliness inside of him over time, to be a reflection of the monster within.

He's long evolved from playing serial killing, now using the existence and concept of Jeffrey Hodek, he's formed a cult alongside Woods, calling themselves The Church of Smiles, which, unbeknownst to Woods, is a way for Keaton to highly rack up the amount of kills made in the name of Zalgo. The undead abominable aims to speed up his master's arrival, using the others as his pawns.

Our next stop is Jeffrey Coleman! A reimagined 2015, which is mostly the same for now, the only difference is that rather than the flare gun... He is suffering from a chemical burn that covers half his face.

Our final stop, the original concept. Jefferson Forester! The youngest of the jeffs here, and the most short-lived. Honestly I'm still working on flushing on his backstory, and general concepts for him...

I can't over say that I do have a lot of concepts for what he was during his time alive, but I do want to talk about him because he's how I started to like Jeff The Killer again. I actually originally hated the guy, and that just spawned from how I written a lot of variants were, and just the damage he did to the fandom as a whole. But, the goal for Forester was to create what I would like to see as the ideal Jeff The Killer.

Forester is an amalgamation of all that came before him, the stutter from keaton, a more thorough burning than 2015, leaving him a SCARRED mess, and he is the only one that actually has the catchphrase penned by Woods. He's twisted and chatty, he'll break you down psychologically before he takes your life.

Forester is egotistical and short sighted, he was the first one to come up with the idea of leaving carved Smiles as a sort of calling card for the church, and it's ultimately he that ends up creating this world's Nina. Ultimately, it's his ego that got some killed, for when Jack Revver came for him, he thought that nothing could stop him. I'll probably make a blog for him when I eventually return to fully flush him out.

So, yeah, I figured we start off strong with the poster boy(s) of the community. And I'm sure you've noticed them in the tags and their real names in thread, but there are plenty of pastas mention here that will get their own blog entries with time. Bloody Painter, Clockwork, Killing Kate, Zalgo Judge Angels and Nina Hopkins, all already have their own rewrites, and I'm actively working on the rewrite for The Red Artist

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nathantheauthor · 5 months ago

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With Toby already done, and Ann on her way... I present at least one change from each of the members of the main branch of Ripper Inc, I'll see the original characters from when I get to their entries.

Clockwork.

She has two major changes from the source material that I'll discuss here, one of them is he design change, I'm sure a lot of people might be mixed on. I've completely ditched her iconic Green jacket, replacing it with a dyed green and torn straight jacket. The very one she wore when held captive by the asylum.

The other change is her being a proper superhuman, between physical enhanced and across the board, I've also given her low level chronokinetic abilities, the watch eye is no longer just for show. Natalie is able to see up to five minutes into the future, as well as rewind and fast forward up to 10 seconds, sometimes a minute if she pushes herself. The clock moves through time with her! It shows the time she traveled to last.

Eyeless Jack.

Probably the biggest change I've done to him is his physical journey, I very much early on decided that my approach for his physicality was going to be starting out like the fandom depiction, but the longer he is what he is... The longer his body contains Chernabog... The more monstrous and malformed his body becomes, resembling more of a creature than a man.

Jane Richardson.

The two major things I've kind of done for her are that she has not and will not kill Jane Arkensaw as she feels somewhat responsible for her existence.

The other is streamlining her career, because of her from government agent... Her original Creator just kinda shoved and made her do countless things. So, yeah, she's got a lot of hobbies still, but I've significantly cut down her actual work.

Nina Hopkins.

Two SIGNIFICANT changes. Due to the new back story and character concept I refuse to call her Nina The Killer, instead throughout her hometown she was dubbed The Ashton Slasher. The town's first serial killer in over a decade.

Secondly, she's a recovering multiple, with what was the Nina alter being a form of protection from the trauma regarding Jeffrey Forester and the death of her family. Nina is not evil, she's a personality without a grasp of consequences, a goofier side that's lashing out without understanding. Her original legal name was Bethany Gent.

Zero.

I'm fully leaning into the idea of her being a Tulpa, a creature given Life by our own will and imagination.. and she's fully taken over Alice's body, stranding the girls somewhere deep within her subconscious much like Alice had to done to her. She's a cautionary tale, a lesson in not playing with forces beyond our control.

Homicidal Liu.

His quest to stop his brother is no longer a revenge story, I'm very much depicting it as more an elder brother feeling responsible for not being there to prevent it, so Liu Woods has taken it upon himself to bring his brother to judgment, to end the reign of Jeffrey Woods. An older brother needs to look after his younger brother, and this is the only path left he can find. The monster is his responsibility, a Woods must end the cycle brought on by another Woods.

Korbyn JumpingEagle.

I honestly haven't changed too much of her core character, it's more her story that's completely changed, as in this version of events Slender was too late to send an operative to get her, with Jack Revver sending Toby to come and bring her to his offices. She was officially secured and placed under the protection of Ripper Inc, with Ripper Inc employing her full time to train her as The Seer.

Scarecrow.

I've been giving a lot of work in general, and one of the major things I've been working on is furthering the concept for her brought on by The Seer webcomic, and that's tackling her guilt and the situation she's trapped in. Everything prior to Ripper Inc for her is a tragedy, a horror story where the monster is sympathetic.

Sally Williams.

It goes without saying I've completely changed the structure of her story, and one of the things I can say early is that... Uncle Johnny got what he deserved, and we can thank The Rake for it. Sally's death happened a LOT earlier on, and way before the detestable and fetishized stuff the author wrote could EVER occur. We don't fuck with that in this household.

Lazari.

Zalgoids ARE demons. She's a half demon. And there's going to be no weird sudden agent now, I'm going to actually see the progression of her life.

Jeffrey Hodek.

Well, to be put it out there... He's such a different character, in fact the present day depiction of him starts out as literally a washed serial killer living in a rundown apartment with his two dogs, watching stuff from the 80s and 90s as he doesn't care for many modern shows. He's a man in his 50s who just wanted to be left alone.

Rouge.

I haven't done too much with her yet, cuz conceptually she's fine, but I haven't even heard a unique thing that's not among other proxies... She's got her senses heightened all across the board, and she's got something akin to a spider-sense, but for tracking. She can detect potential prey and is incapable of losing a target.

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nathantheauthor · 5 months ago

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So how do the Jane’s feel about each other? Do they ever think it’s werid they’ve been trying to hunt down the same guy lol?

Well, I wouldn't say it's the same guy, because I do all actively have their own Jeff that's tied to them.

However a lot of their Dynamics are pretty interesting, cuz I mean, none of them are related, very few of them have met, so wouldn't you feel a certain way about people who share the same title?

The original Jane The Killer, Jane Richardson, due to being active in the '90s, she personally feels like her and Hodek's back and forth, and how it never actually ended, makes her responsible for the existence of the other Janes. Which is true, but only to an extent, as you can't blame yourself for a cult spawning that worships your former enemy.

Her personal feelings towards Arkensaw, the second Jane are quite mixed. On one hand she feels responsible and incredibly sympathetic towards the girl's plight, but on the other hand she cannot condone Arkensaw's actions. Because if we are using that version of jane, it is important to note that she's killing Jeff's victims before he can. There will be a confrontation.

She and Everlasting don't see eye to eye, as they have very different ideas of what "Jane The Killer" should be. Richardson thinks the title should fade away because it's dumb and stupid... Everlasting is going to go for a record, trying to outshine Jeff out of pure spite. She's getting a confrontation as well.

Richardson feels a sort of connection with Phoenix, they're both superpowered vigilantes, with the only difference what being she was government sanctioned / made and Phoenix wasn't. She feels incredibly bad about the things Jeffrey Forester did to her, and acts as sort of an older sibling towards Phoenix. They have especially gotten along after her return from death.

She IS Keaton's legal guardian, after the events of this world's version of JEFFREY'S DEAD: THE FINAL SLEEP, Jane stepped in and adopted Jane Keaton. She actively wanted to prevent the cycle from continuing, to prevent another Jane The Killer. But of course the now undead Jeffrey Keaton wouldn't let that slide and she feels responsible, and an even greater connection now that Jane Keaton has injected herself with the prototype of what made Richardson herself.

Now we'll flip it over to from Arkensaw's perspective, as I am doing it in order of activity. This one's going to be fun.

Arkansas thinks that Richardson doesn't go far enough, and actively hates her for letting her Jeff live, doodly hates her for Hodek still being around for Woods to draw inspiration from. She blames Richardson for her existence.

She and Everlasting get along a little too well, having only met a few times, but with the two being the most warped they immediately hit it off, and that is a bad sign for everyone.

She feels bad for phoenix, having heard how she was burned, but she also does detest how much she reminds her of Richardson. It's a thin line, but she definitely feels... A lot more sympathetic after the return, how could you not feel bad for somebody who's died at least 32 times?

Arkansas actively hates Keaton, for her blood relation to her Jeff, for her adopted family situation with Richardson, and for the vigilante path. Maybe it's her warped perception, but to her it comes off as Keaton saying she's better than her. That Keaton could put her life together again and that she can't.

Like, Arkensaw has ISSUES.

Everlasting very much clashes with Richardson every meeting, one of the vigilante and the other wants to be a BETTER Jeff for her vengeance. Needless to say they fight often, with Richardson trying to pull her off the path. She hates Richardson, can't help but view her as self-righteous and can't even see her own faults.

Her and Arkansas get along like two peas in a pot, as both of their methods of vengeance towards Woods and Dove make some just as bad as the Church of Smiles, actively working like the Jeffs. They need to be permanently separated, preferably impacted cells and therapy.

Her in Phoenix don't get along, in fact she's scared of the girl after their last encounter, where Phoenix nearly burned her alive, carrying on Richardson's vigilante justice. Although she can't help but feel bad, she remembers the headlines... The statements made when she came back to life. Her feelings towards Phoenix are complicated.

She and Keaton are frenemies, if they're not trying to kill each other, they're sharing music and childhood stories. She can't fully hate the girl, and a lot of that stems from knowing Keaton's history. Her blood relations make being friends easy, sympathy is a powerful tool.

Phoenix's turn, and boy is this one going to be fun!

She and Richardson are pretty much family at this point, getting along like actual siblings. In fact it is her research and knowledge of the original Jane that kept Phoenix from going down the darker path. Richardson is her hero, somebody she looks up to.

She feels no sympathy for Arkensaw, only a bit of pity. The reason for this being she very much views Arkansas as somebody who's made their choice, somebody who's made their bed and now needs to lay in it. Sure, she does recognize the tragedy, but it's what she did afterwards that matters to Phoenix.

She absolutely despises Everlasting, viewing her as no better than Jeffrey Forester, another monster that needs put in her place. So yeah, she has tormented everlasting, come close to burning her to death.

She and Keaton get along VERY well, she pretty much acts as the fun aunt, Austin helping Keaton get into trouble and hide it from Richardson, or even helping pull pranks on Richardson and Mary. A lot of this is to help Keaton maintain a sense of normalcy, a tiny sliver of a normal life. She knows the story, all that Keaton has been through... And she knows when somebody just needs a friend.

And it's finally time for Keaton.

I stated, her and Richardson are family, and for a while she had a very mixed feeling about this. But nowadays, she has no hesitation in calling the original Jane "mom", same case goes for Mary, they have become her family after everything, and they mean so much more to her than her blood family. Sometimes such bonds aren't decided by blood.

She actively dislikes Arkensaw, both for her actions and methods, and also for how much she's deemed the woman self entitled. She recognizes that she's had it better than the other James for the most part, however, that doesn't didn't give Arkensaw the right to act the way she does. She thinks Arkensaw could have had it better if she actually did something worthwhile about her life.

Her frenemy relationship with Everlasting is one that very much spawned from the latter catching her listening to Pierce The Veil, and legend they have the same taste in music. So instead of fighting that night, they ended up talking about music and other interests. They refuse to actually kill each other, but they do fight and try to take the other one off the board in some way. There might be hope for Everlasting after all.

She and Phoenix are pretty much the best of friends, she gets along very well with her aunt, and recognizes the grief involved in Phoenix's story. Ultimately, maybe it's both of them that needed this friend, that needed this connection. She shares her music, hobbies and gets into trouble with phoenix, she'd say it's a good life. .

That should be an insight to some of the stuff with the Janes, I did drop some huge things in this.

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nathantheauthor · 5 months ago

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I know I said the next major information post was Ripper Inc concept designs, but, I'd like to introduce the new and improved....

Sally Williams!

Part of the reason I'm talking about her is because I just recently changed my rewrite for her, cuz I have an idea I like much more than what I had. I'm just going to kind of say it out right, apart from appearance and initial design, she shares very little in common with the original Sally. And it's very much because of the general theme of the character rewrite.

Growing up and the stages of grief.

The reason why I'm going for this spin is because the original and it's subject matter are very fetishized, I don't think I need to explain what the context of "Play With Me" was, and why I wouldn't want to touch that. The uncomfortable SA and pedophilic nature of the original is something I believe needs to be firmly buried and erased, character deserved better than her Creator gave her. Sally needs a full overhaul. This is something I've been thinking about and struggling with the past couple days, as originally the story would have involved The Rake handling uncle Johnny, but I've just removed Uncle Johnny... I've cooked a very different horror, a very different nightmare for Sally. This is the alternative version I propose, in cliff notes.

Sally's death stems from neglection, a lack of supervision, and from the innocence of childhood. The death itself occurred when Sally and her friends were playing doctor, and they had broken into Aunt Regina's medicine cabinet. Sally's death is into murder, it isn't a grand display, really kids playing with things they shouldn't... An overdose. They didn't understand what was happening to her, they were all still under two digits for the most part. Sally was only seven. In fact the blood dripping from her head is stemmed from her friends attempting to get her down the stairs and dropping her, nobody at the time was sure what killed her, the head injury or the drugs. Something Sally never got an answer to.

She couldn't understand the following days, why Aunt Regina was hauled away by the police, why no matter how much she screamed and cried nobody would answer, why... No matter how much she rubbed at it, the blood wouldn't stop seeping from her forehead. She came to learn a few things over the course of the days, she could fly now, lift objects without touching them, even walk through walls. She was... A superhero! But why could nobody see her? How can she be a hero if the people she's saving don't know she's there?

More and more time passed and as it turns out, she wasn't exactly as unheard as she thought, the neighbors mentioned screaming and crying in the old Williams house, of the strangest moved items each day. They were beginning to believe the place was haunted. Hell, leaving sometimes caught glances of her moving down the halls, walking through walls to make the traveling easier.

To add on to this, Sally is getting a bit more daring, trying to take steps outside and finding another problem with the whole idea of "superhero". She can't leave the house, in fact, she feels the strongest in her room.

Years went by, and with it Sally gets older- her soul is aging. She was eleven now, disillusioned with her situation and feeling hollow, there have been people attempting to move in, but she'd always accidentally steer them away. "we didn't know the place was haunted!" They'd always say, and once again leave her to her isolation. The wound was healing, she supposed that was an upside, but she'd grown a sense of comfort from the blood. A consistent companion in her loneliness.

Of course, all things change, nobody stays lonely forever, and eventually the real estate company hired a specialist, no, it wasn't a Ripper, merely a friend. Today everything properly changed was when the paranormal investigator known as Valkyrie Nevermore arrived, and with her the electromagnetic investigator brought answers, something Sally hadn't gotten since before the incident.

Sally's soul hasn't processed her own death, it's aging her like it perceive the aging of a physical body, she was what Valkyrie referred to as a "Redead" (yes, that's Zelda ref), that even resolving her unfinished business or accepting reality wasn't going to pass her on. Ultimately the encounter ended with Valkyrie freeing her from her haunting location, and delivering her to the one person she trusts with a spectral being.

Sally has since found herself amongst Ripper Inc, with Jack Revver having taken her in as his own child.

Well.

So, yeah, those are the cliff notes of the story I want to write with Sally, rewriting and recontextualizing her as even more of a tragedy, because I don't believe she should ever be an antagonist, that she should ever be evil. Sally's at her core a scared and frightened child, and that's something I wish people writing her with a horror in mind would remember. You can use her for horror, but make the events from her perspective, make SALLY the protagonist. There is plenty of opportunity there for great psychological horror about the loss of innocence and isolation. Dive into the horrific depression and loneliness of being a ghost.

Why have Sally age? The reason for this is actually quite simple, it's a physical representation of the story themes, as one of the major ones is the fact that despite her death there was still a lot of growing up she needs to do, that the isolation serves to break her down slowly as if growing older. Her soul thinks she's alive, as this is also a manifestation of her denial, her inability to process and come to terms with the accident that killed her.

Who is Valkyrie Nevermore? Well, she's a character I've had for a couple years, with the concept being a paranormal investigator that specifically goes in to help souls find peace, or exercise malevolent spirits using a combo of her electromagnetism and an understanding of the occult. There's MUCH more to say about her, but I'll save that for the group info drop for ZALGOIDS.

This would normally be the part where I get into her relationships and all that, but I want to work a bit more on those before I share them. So for now, this is the proposed rewrite I have for my version of Sally.

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"𝙃𝙖𝙩𝙘𝙝𝙚𝙩 𝙞𝙣 𝙝𝙖𝙣𝙙, 𝙖𝙡𝙡 𝙄 𝙝𝙖𝙫𝙚 𝙡𝙚𝙛𝙩 𝙖𝙣𝙙 𝙖𝙡𝙡 𝙩𝙝𝙖𝙩 𝙄 𝙖𝙢. 𝙚𝙣𝙙 𝙤𝙛 𝙩𝙝𝙚 𝙡𝙞𝙣𝙚, 𝙗𝙪𝙩 𝙩𝙝𝙚 𝙙𝙖𝙧𝙠𝙣𝙚𝙨𝙨 𝙩𝙚𝙡𝙡𝙨 𝙢𝙚 𝙄'𝙡𝙡 𝙗𝙚 𝙛𝙞𝙣𝙚."

Toby by Madame Macabre.

Y'all were desperate for him, he won by a massive majority vote... So I present my take on Ticci Toby, as well as some of his relationships and what he's doing now, and fair warning, it's HEFTY. I do have to lay out a couple things before we actually get into his rewrite, because they are important for his character in the long run, especially to understand his story and themes.

The first of these articles that I have to lay out first is the concept and existence of Ripper Inc, as that is where he is currently aligned. The concept of Ripper Inc is the closest thing to the Creepypasta Family you will get in this universe, I found family and sort of reformation program for serial killers and monsters, pointing their homicidal tendencies and destructive capabilities towards those more deserving. Jack Revver (oc), the living skeleton behind it, has also turned it into a safe haven and protection for those hunted by or once influenced by cosmic entities such as Slenderman, Zalgo or even The Rake and HABIT. it's essentially giving characters that would have been better people under any other circumstance that chance to be better. Pastas who hunt pastas in a way. It also makes them celebrities, but I'm not going to get into that aspect as I'll see the faction itself for its own blog post.

The other main thing we need to get out of the way is that this variant of Toby was very much made out of spite for what the fandom did to him, and has also since become spite towards his creator. This doesn't mean his original origin is very much intact, but there are several changes that neither would have expected or planned out, in fact I don't even call him "Ticci Toby" at all, he's just... Toby. And I'll get into that and why later on in this post. But I present a more faithful reimagining of Toby Rogers.

Now! Let's actually get into it, and I want to start with something that does affect his design a little bit, and that is his equipment!

My Toby comes strapped with dual holsters and two sheathes, as well as two ammo belts wrapped around him. The reason for this being while he's still sports his iconic hatchets that reside within the dual sheets, the holsters and the ammo belts contains flare gun and a sig sauer P365, as well as their ammo.

Kind of the reason for the guns is because I always felt it a little bit weird that proxies mostly were given only melee weapons, especially in a world where any house you can break into you can just get shot. So, of course, Toby adapted and got the Sig Sauer, the flare gun was something he picked up afterwards, which out of universe is a reference to the burning of his house, but in universe it is a tool for hunts and just... Yeah, he won't hesitate to shoot somebody with it. Does he prefer melee? Yes, but he knows he's always going to be able to get close.

I've kind of made Toby into the asshole with a heart of gold archetype, he's a tsundere. Toby is rude, brutally honest, snarky and has sassy, but somewhat dry sense of humor. He's prone to depressive episodes, he's an overall conflicted person, one that's not even sure that he deserves redemption. I'm writing him that's how I see the natural progression of the original Kastaway Toby as a person.

I should also note that Toby does in fact have a small list of powers, as these are the baseline abilities I gave every single proxy. Toby has Captain America levels of strength, speed, agility and durability, as well as a healing factor that allows him to heal from minor wounds in a matter of 10 minutes and substantial damage in a couple hours.

One of the key distinctions between him and a lot of variants is the fact that when we first see him he's already been a proxy for years, he's in his mid 20s now, hell, he was already legally an adult by the time he was proxified, he was 19 during the events TICCI TOBY. I wanted to be more accurate to his source material for his age, as he's constantly getting shoved into the younger brother type role among a lot proxy interpretations, but he's not THAT young, he's at least a grumpy middle child.

Toby by the time we meet him is not a good person, but he can't be described as truly evil either, he's a victim of the world's darker side, from the cruelty of children to manipulators, a lot of his life was decided for him. But that doesn't excuse the things he's done, cuz ultimately, doing the things he's done are still, maybe out of necessity, but that doesn't make it any better.

Toby absolutely hates being referred to as Ticci Toby, the reason for this comes from the fact that this has been a name used throughout his life growing up to demean and mock his tourettes, to break him down, it's a nickname synonymous with bullying. This is something I've always kind of disliked the fandom form, using the story title as his code name instead of giving him a new one, so for this rewrite... During his team as a proxy, well, they call him "Matchbook". A permanent reminder the scorching fire he left his old home in, and a nod to the end result of a lot of his missions. However, nowadays he merely goes by "Toby", wanting to distance himself from his past and start anew.

Now, I'm sure this is what you're waiting for, the actual meat of his character, how I've completely restructured and rewritten his years as a proxy and what comes after. And we'll close out the thread with a lot of his relationships with those around him.

Toby's early time is a proxy was very much constant work, hit jobs, information scrubbing, stalking, and even stealing from police stations. A mind controlled pawn willing to do any odd job, he had nothing but orders left. It wouldn't be until after the first month that he would be brought to the "mansion", a dilapidated manner on the outside, but the interior was absolutely pristine, and it seemed to stretch on forever. In fact, it did, but other oddities were present as well, such as a door quite literally growing a name plate for him, or the living doll and undead nurse running around. Not that he could really feel anything towards it all other than cold and difference, that was the blessing of this situation, it was no longer just the physical pain that he didn't feel, but matters of the heart either for a time.

Of course emotional numbness didn't stay forever, and some of those around him began to become like family, a clawed entrance guard, a stoic tunnel dweller, a crimson artist, a fallen cop and even a missing soldier, they were the first things he's had to emotional connections since he vanished that night. He finally and fully settled into his life, knowing there was no way back for him and nor did his slender sickness riddled mind want to go back, he was a proxy to the end, a puppet on strings dancing to the static beat.

And it would be that way for the majority of his time as a proxy, mission after mission, and time spent with the few proxies he had gotten close to. Eventually it culminated into what would be his final day as a proxy for a long while. Thinking that Toby's ties had been completely broken, and that his missing memories we're finally and fully lost. During the final year as a proxy Toby was given a single mission, to hunt down and kill a woman who'd been close to figuring out his identity, an ultimately he did track her, and with pistol drawn... He found himself unable to fire, because what stood before him was his mother and everything came flooding back.

It was after this moment that Toby went on the run, taking his mother with him, and for months they were constantly moving, trying to throw off any of their would be hunters. A miracle fell into they're laps, as he saw her for the first time, Jane Phoenix. With the two of them brought before the skeleton, Jack Revver, their days of being hunted was over, as well Toby did not have the context for it at the time, deals were pulled to guarantee his safety.

The trio together, Toby Rogers, Jack Revver and Jane Phoenix, formed the organization known as Ripper Inc, Hired guns that handle contracts that I wanted Dead or alive, jobs that are usually considered suicide missions. It was because of a public incident regarding them that the world found out about the existence of monsters, but the veil of secrecy around the paranormal and supernatural have been truly shattered.

And this was his life for a while, he became a celebrity, he was free from the reign of the Slender Man, and most importantly, he'd found family and saved his mother. But nothing good lasts, and ultimately, in the same year, there would come again that shattered him once more. Didn't always been a hot shot, for all the months you've known her, but he never expected her to chase down Jeffrey Forester by herself, and there were three things that happened that night. Jane with ultimately be slain by the very man who made her what she is, a grieving Revver would be cited carrying her body through the streets in a vain attempt to get her help... And Toby returned to the proxies, he sought emotional numbness once more. How could he not? She was 19, she was the very age that he started at. A twisted mirror of sorts.

So yeah, that's all like pre-story open, that's all set before 2017. So this is where we first meet him, this is where we first pick up. In September of 2017, Jack Revver tracked him down once more, pulling him out alongside Heather Marshall, and with the choice to take one more. See unbeknownst to Toby, a truce had been formed, an agreement reached for reasons that only a couple years later he would find out.

There was a new found family, made of three familiar faces and a new one, he he hadn't ever met Bethany (Nina) before, but it heard about what Forester did to her family once they reach the offices, he felt... A sort of responsibility. Years have passed since then, and we're currently in the year of 2025. He has found a new family fully, been able to spend time with his mother, befriended other people like him, and even been on talk shows. Toby's.... Living a future he could have never seen. Often times he's still not even sure if it's deserved, he's killed countless, burned and destroyed homes and lives, but he's basically living the high life now.

He's in a high position the boot, as a founding member and one of the highest ranking members of Ripper Inc, and he almost gets the feeling, he's going to be the next head. Revver always told him of bright future, and often times Toby gets the impression that Revver is talking like he's going to die.

So, yeah, that's kind of where we are and where we leave him for now, so let's get into character relationships and dive into what his relationships were with his fellow proxies and the Ripper Inc family.

Proxy relationships:

Slenderman is probably one of the people he hates the most, if not his most hated. He is his a manipulator and abuser, the creature that's quite possibly the one who orchestrated his entire life to be as miserable as it has been. His freedom from the creatures control is something he's never going to give up again.

One of his most iconic dynamics, we'll dive into how he feels about Masky. He hates him. Toby and Tim often fight, Toby often pointing out the hypocrisy and arrogance in Tim's words, and Tim is often quick to point out Toby's lack of teamwork and rude attitude. Toby considers Tim to be a self-righteous and self-serving bastard. He hopes they never cross paths in a professional line of work again.

Hoodie is also rather hated Toby, and a good portion of this is due to the fact that hoodie does not care about people, he's begun to only focus on the mission. His indifference frustrates and worries Toby, making it so he'd deny in mission that he has to work with him.

His dynamic with Kate is probably one of the most healthy he has amongst the proxies, having formed a sort of sibling dynamic over the years. And even now, they're rather close, meeting up at the tunnels Kate spends most of her time every now and then. She's often one of the people Toby invites to the Christmas parties and ALWAYS shows up for his birthdays.

Toby and Own Allastar happy weather unique dynamic, much like Kate, he feels a sibling role, however he was the first to encourage Toby to pursue his hobbies outside of the missions, that a weapon wasn't the only thing he had to be. He was probably one of the most true friends Toby had ever had, and still is. The Red Artist's artistic depiction of Toby hangs within his bedroom.

Toby has very mixed feelings about Cody, this boy was made to replace him, he had been indoctrinated during Toby's months away. Ultimately, he believes X-Virus to be a good kid deep down, but can't bring himself to look the boy in the eye. He can't stand looking at his reflection, it makes him sick to his stomach.

His dynamic with Nightmare Ally is certainly a strange one, well they aren't on negative terms, he wouldn't consider them friends either, even if she still does occasionally help him, it's more of work acquaintances. And Toby is rather thankful she's one of the ones that often shows up as aid thanks to the truce.

His relationship with Ashlie is. . . Unique. They were briefly an item, he can safely say he's dated the boss's daughter. Although, the relationship died due to the lack of expression and communication on her side.

His relationship with Gregory Blaine is probably one of his most important, he was the small injections of morality back into Toby throughout his years as a proxy. Archive was, and is an essential part of Toby's foundations for the present. The former cop wasn't like the rest of the proxies, is frog's vacation wasn't made out of a choice to save the woman he loved. . . Toby respects that, maybe even envies it.

Probably the most surprising one, was Eric Watson, a former soldier who served in the Middle East after events of 9/11. Wildcard as they called him, was the very man that taught Toby how to shoot. The friendship they've shared is one Toby never could have predicted, and in recent years. . . He's lost contact, he's unsure where he went.

Tooru Jirou is someone Toby has VERY conflicted feelings towards, they get along well, and he does feel sympathy for her situation. . . But at the same time you can't exactly deny but it's all her own fault, play stupid games and you win stupid prizes. Adrenaline is definitely living with her stupid prize, whether she wants to or not. Regardless, they do often work closely together, she's even convinced him to appear on her streams.

Ripper Inc relationships:

Jack Revver is sort of the father Toby never had, a source of guidance and often the first to help him pick himself back up. Revver has shown Toby levels of kindness he's rarely seen outside select people, an unmatched sense of generosity and patience towards him. They'd start Ripper Inc together with Jane Phoenix, and it's made the two's bond unbreakable.

Toby's friendship with Jane Phoenix was like that of siblings, they bickered and fought, but deep down they always cared for the other. He still feels a sense of responsibility for what happened to her, despite knowing it wasn't his fault.

Bethany Gent (Nina Hopkins) is another he has found himself quite close with, as if using his sense of guilt and responsibility over what happened to Jane as a building block to protect Nina despite everything. She's a victim, just like him, and just like Jane was. Nina is one of the few people that can get him to go out shopping, acting as a sort of little sister dragging her older brother around. He'll never admit that it's kinda fun, he'd rather die first.

He's known Heather since their days as proxies, she'd served as a secondary motherly figure, somebody he could always depend on, one of the few cornerstones. Even now, he's still close with her, often going on missions together. Their bond has become inseparable. Rouge is one of his closest friends.

Liu Woods is, well, they get along alright, but he can't exactly really tell how he actually feels about the man, they haven't exactly going out of their way to befriend each other. Their relationship is strictly professional.

Nurse Ann used to greatly scare Toby, her methods we're far from humane or rational, but nowadays, he's doing quite close to the undead nurse, Annabelle Mia being his most trusted medical professional. They bonded over a shared distaste for Tim.

Jane and Mary Richardson have quickly become some of his closest friends, the two serving as elder sisters to him, with Mary often checking up on his mother for him while he's on a mission, and Jane serving as his personal trainer in hand to and combat. He's forever grateful to have met the married couple, they've had a positive impact on his life.

Eyeless Jack. . . Frankly scares him, such an unpredictable individual and one he could never spot unless he made his presence known. Sure, he'd trust EJ with field medical work, but just how literally talked and how hard it was to tell he was there in the first place. . . It just rather makes Toby uncomfortable.

His relationship with Korbyn JumpingEagle is one with a lot bumps, as initially she didn't truly understand his personality and who he was, and instead would opt to nag him and hit him with her trademark sass. Of course, overtime is they've become friends, given a couple near death experiences, it tends to bond people. They both pulled a better understanding of each other nowadays, even occasionally joking with each other.

Sally Williams and Lazari Swan are like the annoying youngest siblings to him, much like corbin, they were under the protection of Revver... And he's often found himself begrudgingly joining their tea parties or playing pretend with them. He for some reason just can't bring himself to be as mean as usual with them.

His relationship with scarecrow can best be summoned up as enemies to friends, they did try to kill each other in their first encounter. Once the circumstances had changed, they bonded rather quickly over there shared trauma with cosmic horrors, he with Slender, and her with Zalgo. They work rather well on the battlefield together as well.

Zero frankly weirds him out, the tulpa's bizarre antics almost never make sense to him and he's begun to learn not to question it. They get along all right, but he can't help getting the feeling that somebody's always crying for help when he looks at her.

Sadako is probably one of the weirdest dynamics he's had, I mean, there's not really much proper planning you can do around a media ghost who can now just travel anywhere she wants to the internet. They are in fact friends, but it does tend to lead to awkward moments and comedic situations half the times she appears. But alas, there's nothing to do, if she's the information relay.

Samantha Revver has shown that much like her husband, she quickly took on a parental role, and even became quick friends with his actual mother. The vampire has been nothing but kind to him, even going as far as to teach him how to cough to help him be even further self-sufficient.

Jana Revver has shown as well, that kindness. She's playfully picked on and teeth toby, but at the end of the day they act like siblings, she acts like an elder sister and almost reminds him of. . . Lyra. The entire Revver family has been like a second family to him. He wouldn't trade their bond for anything.

Jeffrey Hodek is somebody that Toby can't help but pay, before joining up with the group he was just a washed up and retired killer I wanted to live a normal life, but of course, as Toby knows well. . . Normal isn't an option for people anymore. They've got a rather friendly relationship, but ultimately they don't talk too much. Hodek is much more likely to hide up in his room and rewatch shows and movies the 80s and 90s.

Clockwork is... Natalie Oulette is an individual that greatly concerns him with her behavior, and yet... He finds himself strangely wrong to her, and ultimately they have gotten together. More than once. They're dysfunctional, sure, but they're actively working to find a way to make it work. If any song would describe their dynamic, it'd Your Stupid Face by Kaden MacKay.

Wow, this took so much longer than I thought it would but welcome to the end of the Toby information! Hope ya like this ramble!

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More of these will be dropping soon, the next 10 chapter skeletons are approaching.

Originally I was going to save these and drop them as a collective 15, however instead I'm going to be dropping little tears and breakdowns for each of the first five stories to launch at random intervals. So for now, enjoy the first Arc of.... RIPPER INC.

The following Arc is intended to set up the core initial group as well as the general tone and some world building.

ARC 1; BACK IN ACTION.

CHAPTER 1: PRESCOTT DRIVE.

-the opening narration is done by Revver himself, talking about an event that we do not get to see in the main series but do eventually learn what actually happened. Establishing a sort of vaguely personal connection to the current job.

-We're given an overview of Prescott Drive and the Gent family having a game night, a hooded figure smelling of charcoal and burnt flesh lurking outside, Revver's thought continuing as he muses how this was. . . Not a pleasant night.

-we fully switch from his perspective and overview to Bethany Gent, the bright and cheerful gathering brought to a screeching halt as Jeffrey Forester smashed the window, his unique ability allowing him to paralyze most of the people with fear. You get introduced to the concept of Knightbreed, superhumans, right here.

-Jeff's ability is established to be nightmare projection, essentially allowing him to visually and audibly trap you in your greatest fears or most traumatic memories

-after her parents and brother are killed we get in intense Chase where Bethany manages to escape her hallucination, she doesn't manage to get outside without gaining a slash across the cheek giving a half smile on the side of her hair with a pink highlight.. giving her a somewhat reminiscent look of the classic Nina Hopkins.

-We get our first look at Revver, and initially we expect Beth to be the one in horror... But she's oddly relieved and Forester is in the one mortified.

-the first chapter ends with Forester taking a shot to the head and Revver bringing Beth back to his office building for protection. Ending off with a moment of a third party dragging off the "body" into the night.

CHAPTER 2: DREAM THEORY.

-taking place a couple weeks later, we're giving an opening shot of Maxwell Ferguson from his hideout in the slowly rebuilding town of Spokane (having been destroyed by Jeffrey Keaton during Wrath of Keaton).

-Beth is adjusting to her new home in the office building, staying in a room that once belonged to another victim of Forester, somebody she doesn't feel like she deserves to be in the room of.

-It is revealed to us what Ripper Inc is and that a tragedy had previously struck to destroy the original crew, Revver is actively working on putting it back together, expanding it.

-We get a teaser and foreshadowing for other classics pastas in Revver's files. The included pastas are;

Eyeless Jack

Homicidal Liu

Lexx (WhisperedFaith, and by extension The Rake)

Kagekao

Ben Drowned

Jane (The Killer) Richardson

-we are trying to Maxwell with a nightmare sequence, The Smile Dog corrupting and twisting his dreams in ways that have never been seen from it before. Maxwell's long term exposure to Zalgo's creation has forced it to find new ways to try and break him.

Journeying into the rebuilt parts of town and ending up bumping into another escaped inmate from Ferguson's Ayslum... Helen Otis / The Bloody Painter while getting over the counter meds in a desperate and futile attempt to ease the demonic presence in the dreaming world.

CHAPTER 3: PRODIGAL SON.

-We open with an inner monologue from Toby, the subject matter being about loss and a desire to no longer feel the pain. Diving into a bit of how lost he felt without Lyra and dealing with the grief that plagues him from somebody we finally get a name for. Jane Phoenix, someone with ties to him, Revver AND Forester, we get the context that he had returned back to The Slender Man so he wouldn't have to grieve her death.

-We're introduced to the structure and nature of the proxies in universe, and the sinister truth that Slender is basically brainwashing and puppeteering them, removing their stronger emotions to manipulate them.

-some of the proxy dynamics are immediately established such as Tim and Brian immediately trying to kill each other for events in their pasts, as well as how protective Kate is of Toby. Kate sort of plays the role that Lyra once had for him, she serves as a sister in the neverending halls of Slender Manor.

-It is revealed that Maxwell survived his encounter with Helen, as he's now skipped town and found himself on a bus out of Oregon. Barely any money to his name, and even fewer personal belongings.

-Slender is far from the only member of his family debuted in this chapter, as a tall faceless woman watches the bus leave Oregon. The mysterious entity seemingly tracking Maxwell for unknown reasons.

-we finally get a look at what Revver is doing as we join him outside of the forest Slender has claimed as his domain.

-Revver vs The Proxies. A prolonged, brutal but non lethal fight as Revver makes embarrassingly short work of the proxies, his untold centuries of combat experience and superior speed combined lead him to take on Slender's on site proxies with a brutal combo of hand to hand combat and even going as far to break limbs and or serve tendons. Neutralize, not eliminate.

-Revver comes faces to faces with Slender, standing over the beaten and bloodied Brian (knocked unconscious with the back of his own gun), Revver showing no fear at all for his situation. Slender is internally disturbed by what's standing before him, as he sees more than just a skeleton when gazing down upon Revver. He sees... A spiritual anomaly.

-A truce between the two is formed, changing how both of them operate but allowing both to coexist for the war that is to come, a moment of the enemy of my enemy. As part of the agreement of this truce, Revver takes three of the proxies with him. Rouge, Nurse Ann... And reuniting with Toby. The prodigal son returns.

-we catch back up with Maxwell in a Colorado gas station, his faceless stalker getting closer and closer as her presence begins to slowly distort his audio logs.

CHAPTER 4: ON THE PROWL.

-the chapter opens with us getting a glimpse at the one behind the mask, with Heather reminiscing on the circumstances that lead her to become Rouge.

-We get more context and information on what Ripper Inc is from a conversation between Toby and Revver, our current main perspective character, Beth, listening in. Sure, it's all information she already knew to do its public accessibility, but, it's also establishes why the group broke up originally.

-a lot of the melancholia's cut short when Revver announces the first mission for this new version of the company, taking them out of the United States and into The United Kingdom as they set out to chase down and permanently eliminate Springheeled Jack as he reemerges in the modern day.

-as they arrive in Gloucestershire rouge's briefed that her unique talents as a proxy make her ideal for chasing their current target, her equipment tailored to agile and swift overhead movement.

-Meanwhile, we return to Maxwell on his bus trip across the states, making quite the headway to Tennessee... However his symptoms deprived body forces his eyes closed for what feels like a moment and he finds himself lost in the woods in the English countryside. In the woods he comes face to face with what he initially thought was an abandoned cabin before the light of the fire place provides a dim glow in the night. Intentions clear as the path to the door is lined with white heather on both sides. A metaphorical red carpet.

-we finally get a full proper meeting with Maxwell's stalker, This tall faceless woman in a suit that mirrors her brother's, long black hair seeming to move like additional limbs at times. She introduces herself as Cynthia, lamenting on the ridiculous pension that her siblings have for odd titles, and how she opted to pick up a human name. From Maxwell's internal dialogue we get the information that everything she says to him is entirely within his mind, total telepathic communication.

-returning back to the group in England, we are immediately greeted to a chase as Springheeled Jack evades shots at him and Rouge's attempts to catch up, his mocking laughter filling the air as he gives a demonic grin.

-the chapter ends with the chase failing and a distant view of the Ancient Ram Inn greeting our quartet of hunters.

CHAPTER 5: FAVOR.

-exploring the Ancient Ram Inn, Toby and Rouge get separated from Ann and Revver, the spirits were residing within the old buildings Halls seemingly threatened and manipulating the layout.

-Toby and Rouge find themselves in The Chapel, Toby moving cautiously with hatchet in one hand and revolver in the other, the room impossibly extended. The duo come face to face with and end up finally ending the terror of the native demons to the inn.

-Ann and Revver find themselves at The Witch's Room, getting a greeting from an old friend of Revver's. Eslpeth. The ghostly apparition manifests, sitting at one of the tables in the room with a slight smirk. We are given more information about the original Ripper Inc during the interaction.

-picking back up with Maxwell amd Cynthia, the two sitting down at the kitchen table with a cup of tea, YouTube talking about the demonic dog present in his dreams with rather mysterious details coming to light.

-Revver and Elspeth begin a fortune reading, the ghosting winch using the cards provided to read the fortune of the four who have arrived, Toby and Rouge finally catching up to the duo.

-a series of cryptic but seemingly misfortunate cards are drawn, telling of many hardships in the near future. Finally, Elspeth gives themthe information they're after on the demonic terror that has begun to attack Gloucestershire. However, there is a price. She desires a favorite.

-Elspeth reviews that she tires and being bound to The Ancient Ram Inn, and that the only way for her spirit to leave these Walmarts and transition into a wandering one would be to possess or partially attached herself to a living being until she was 56 meters clear of the inn. However, there are only two potential bodies for her to hitch onto, Revver and Ann being impossibility because of their status.

-before Toby can even say anything because Rouge steps forward and finds herself temporarily possessed by Elspeth.

-we pick up with Spring-heeled Jack as he makes his way across town, his rampage leading him to an old estate just beyond the trees. His depraved laughter.

He breaks into the window, landing behind a large chair or a figure sets, the fire going out and she wishes in red drink in her wine glasses... Her eyes beginning took a load red in the dark. "It's rude to sneak up on a lady." Is the last line we get in this arc.

Join me probably later this week for a break down and teaser for the second arc of RIPPER INC...

Join me soon for...

NIGHT KIN.

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