#script to screen

[buotella]

Conclave + lines from the original script (part 1)

[magentagalaxies]

Kids in the Archive: Episode 10

welcome back to kids in the archive! to celebrate my college graduation + KITA's 10th installment + finally honor the request i received from @oliviaskithworld multiple months ago (thank you for your patience!) today i'm going to be showcasing the classic s1e3 sketch "Citizen Kane"

even if there are other sketches that i would choose as my personal favorite, i respect "citizen kane" so much as a feat of comedic timing. the premise and dialogue are funny enough, but what puts them over the top is the perfect rhythm kevin and dave establish - fast-paced dialogue that's occasionally repetitive in its text but each repetition leads to escalation in the performance.

Citizen Kane: June 3rd 1989

I actually have two copies of the script for Citizen Kane: both dated 06/03/89, and nearly identical, to each other and to the version of the sketch that aired. There really aren't many differences to point out: some sentences are shorter or longer for the purpose of timing, and there is one specific line missing from the "white" pages that's present in the "pink" pages

i assume the version i have may not be a first draft - this was likely a scene performed at the rivoli for years before making it to the screen. or perhaps this scene was mostly created via improv, so the first time on paper was less an act of creation and more documenting what already existed. the only "big" changes are removing a section of brief physical comedy before picking up the newspaper (which was not being held by another customer).

honestly, as much as i wish i could've honored this request in a timely manner, the wait has allowed this episode to be so much better. this could have been it. i would have had to stretch these tiny differences into 3 bullet points because i just couldn't show you how the sketch evolved. except, as i write this on december 21st 2024, now i can. but we have to push a bit further...

Citizen Kane: ~2002

the kids in the hall tour-film "tour of duty" was unavailable to stream for most of this year before finally being reuploaded by a fan in november. i've previously put out a full essay with general thoughts on tour of duty, but let's examine the show's version of citizen kane.

tour of duty's "citizen kane" barely changes, especially compared to some of the other sketches in this show. sure, the words don't always line up exactly and the rhythm is a bit slower (a product of enunciating for a large theater vs recording a sketch for television), but most changes are physical. in the original sketch, a fake-arm was made for dave foley for the purposes of stabbing his hand. in this one, a prop-knife was used for the effect, freeing up both hands for motioning. most notably, this version ends with dave falling out of his chair and flipping 360 degrees before landing on the floor.

immediately following the sketch is a transitional scene with bruce and mark, where they essentially replicate the "citizen kane" bit of forgetting a name and refusing to admit you're wrong, only this time they're trying to remember the name of the sketch they just watched. it's cute.

Citizen Kane: November 25th 2024

so that's all well and good, but still not a lot of differences to parse through. what would it take for them to take citizen kane in a completely different direction?

well, what if 22 years later the kids in the hall reunited to put on a show in support of paul bellini's medical expenses, but dave foley wasn't able to attend due to pneumonia and the other kids barely had time to rehearse?

a high-quality version of the full show will be available in the new year, but recently i found a fan's uploads of a few iconic sketches from the november 2024 show, including the perfect finale to my citizen kane post, because oh boy did they go off-script. for starters, the original "citizen kane" as uploaded onto youtube is 4 minutes and 16 seconds. the "tour of duty" version (not counting bruce and mark's tag) is just under 6 minutes long. the november 2024 version is NEARLY TEN MINUTES LONG

and uniquely i am actually in a position to explain how these changes happened: scott was chosen to take over dave's part in the sketch the day of the show. they added mark walking on as "constable bobby" as a way to acknowledge dave's absence (and i was actually riffing with mark, kevin, and scott when they decided the character's name. in rehearsal, mark improvised a bit about his character going undercover as a teenager). but scott responding to kevin's "was it citizen kane?" with "yes"? bruce walking on as another officer? kevin kissing scott's forehead when scott apologized for forgetting his line? that was all truly improvised, and i was standing backstage watching it happen.

prior to the show, citizen kane was one of the sketches scott was the most nervous about since it's actually quite difficult to memorize: so much of the comedy relies on repetition and timing. i've probably watched the sketch more times in the past year than he has and even i wouldn't get it word-for-word. but once you're out there onstage, you can't beat yourself up over forgetting a line. you make that part of the gag, and suddenly the sketch becomes citizen kane on top of citizen kane: a sketch about someone forgetting something and ignoring their friend's corrections becomes about scott forgetting his lines and ignoring kevin's corrections.

there's no way the kids in the hall could've replicated everything about citizen kane on the evening of november 25th 2024: the sketch was at least 35 years old, it was being performed with minimal sets and costumes in a 1500-seat theater, and the person whose comedic voice it most represented wasn't around. but in my opinion, citizen kane 2.0 reflects exactly what a live version of a pre-existing kids in the hall sketch should be: using the well-known framework as a basis for improv while still being grounded to the important beats. this attitude carried over into the night's other sketches, even ones which didn't feature dave at all like "salty ham." it gives fans new and old something new to appreciate, and allows the KITH to focus on making each other laugh. after scott got off the stage, he wasn't upset for flubbing citizen kane. he was smiling ear-to-ear, whispering to me "i forgot how fun this was". i would take this over "tour of duty" any day

or maybe i'm just saying that because i now own 2024 citizen kane's prop-knife

oh, and don't think i've forgotten the one line that changed between my two scripts, both dated 06/03/89.

"that's a hayley mills vehicle, that's not even close"

and because of scott's role in the 2024 show, i now know that's the one line HE contributed, leading me to believe the "white" pages were just kevin and dave's writing, and the "pink" pages were after the input of the other KITH on the same day.

god, i love how things become full-circle.

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PREVIOUS KIDS IN THE ARCHIVE EPISODES:

Episode 1 - armada finale ("do we make it?") Episode 2 - fran & gordon: the vacation Episode 3 - comfortable Episode 4 - cathy & kathi: is he? Episode 5 - danny husk: kidnapped! Episode 6 - trappers Episode 7 - sizzlers & the bank Episode 8 - darcy & francesca Episode 9 - show within a show

thanks for reading!

[charmac]

[air--so--sweet]

Personally I think not giving Klaus telekinesis in TUA was the right choice (or at least not to give him telekinesis to the extent he has it in the comics) as it would just make him very OP and, in my opinion, it doesn't quite work with the direction they took his character. That said - I really love the image of Klaus conducting a ballroom of dancing clothes and laughed out loud at the punchline.

The differences I find interesting in the script are the bits that are actually closest to what we see on screen but not not quite there yet, like Luther and Diego's fight resulting in damage to Reginald's favourite tree rather than Ben's statue, or a random locket in Viktor's room that gets pulled across the room and pins itself to the wall instead of the locket Luther gave Allison.

Or Five simply saying 'that's unfortunate' in reference to Viktor leaving having originally been this -

I know it was likely changed as it undermines Five's line to Viktor later that he's the only one he can trust (which exists, though slightly differently in this draft also), but on the flipside it also adds a lot of weight to why it's Klaus that Five gets to pose as his father when he goes to meritech. Because you could just read it as Five choosing Klaus because he knows he'll agree to do it for money, but it is in fact that Five trusts him.

Also, if anyone else wants to read the script download link is here. I found it quite some time ago on reddit, I don't know how it got online or what draft of the script this actually is (I think I called it a first draft in another post, but that was an assumption, I tried looking it up and there's no info on how far into the process this script was written).

[onyx-collective]

McKinley Freeman and Emayatzy Corinealdi set the bar for on-screen marital tension 🙌🏾

[frary-us]

The itvxofficial Instagram account posted this short video of Toby Regbo's Matt meeting Jasmine Jobson's Lisa for the first time in the new Platform 7 series.👍 Great seeing talented.Toby on screen again.💖 (x)

[pensbridge]

I do not--we are FRIENDS is what Colin was about to say. It's interesting what little differences do and don't make it to screen and how it changes the intention of the scene. Colin doesn't need to say they are friends, because he's too flustered & taken off guard this time & there's the underlying truth that...they are more than friends. (I also assume they did not like Pen's "I do not need you to answer that").

Bridgerton 3x01 | Out of the Shadows written by Jess Brownell Script-To-Screen (9/?) (script courtesy of the Writers Guild Foundation Shavelson-Webb Library) Happy Anniversary "Good night, Mr. Bridgerton" Scene | Bridgerton Season 3 Official Clip (released February 14, 2024)

[magic-worms]

"equal ground" a blu engiespy comic

CWs: graphic descriptions (not illustrations!) of violence/torture, illustrations of blood, bruises, fresh stitches. for the first one, please refer to this clip from poker night at the inventory if you need a preview.

thank you for reading

[greysblues]

challengers (2024) dir. by luca guadagnino and written by justin kuritzkes // script vs. screen

[fratercrucis]

I watched supernatural and fell in love with this tall handsome albeit cute shaggy haired beautiful pretty baby boy who has the brightest soul that can light up your darkest days and is as strong as a diamond. No matter how many other pieces of media I consume, he has my heart, brain, liver, kidney, intestines etc. No other character has ever appealed or mattered so much to me. They don't make men like Sam Winchester any more.

[greyonelost]

Dedra's obsession with Axis is not what you think

Have you noticed, that in season 2 up until he saw him at Palmo Plaza, Syril never mentioned Andor? Not even a single time. Almost as if he had found peace. He was getting promotions and living happily with his fascist wife. Who very likely had told him not to try to play cop by himself again and that catching Andor and Axis is something she is working on. "Andor must be found" she told Heert.

But let's think about that for a moment. WE know about all the rebel activity Andor really was doing. All the ISB knows about him is that he stole a starpath unit and took part in robbing an imperial garrison. For the ISB Andor is just an opportunistic thief. Why is Dedra saying "Andor must be found" instead of "Axis must be found"? And, the same Supervisor Meero from season 1, who was eager to prove herself, is now ready to give up on all the credit for catching ANDOR ("You can have all the glory"). Why the change of heart?

Also, remember that there was plenty of rebel activity at that time, Dedra could have indulged in hunting and interrogating as many rebels as she wanted to advance her career and satisfy her thirst for crushing terrorist activity and protecting the law and the Empire. Makes no sense for someone so efficient and result oriented like her to be obsessed and wasting time with something that consistently failed to bring results. She even moonlighted on the Axis case after Ghorman throwing all caution to the wind.

Almost as if there was something personal. And I think it's because Axis was connected to Andor and Andor mattered to Syril. And we know, that he had told her about uncle Harlo, so there is no way Syril "I would never lie to you" Karn didn't give her the full story about why he ended up saving her on Ferrix. And then we have Dedra "I give promotions to my meow meow and make sure his predator of a mom doesn't upset him" Meero knowing about Syril's obsession with Andor.

While season 1 Dedra was hunting Axis for her career, season 2 Dedra wanted Andor for Syril and was ready to give up on the glory. She was doing it for him. Even before Ghorman. Because he couldn't go after Cassian himself and it mattered to him. And after Ghorman it became a desperate, self-destructive obsession, the only thing that kept her alive and going. To catch the guy Syril always wanted to catch. The last thing, that connected her to him. The last way she could honour him.

[buotella]

ELPHABA & GLINDA (part 1) Screenplay by Winnie Holzman & Dana Fox

[ofkithandmckinney]

Another fantastic instalment of "Kids in the Archive"!

Kids in the Archive: Episode 4

it's been a while, but thanks to the influx of new-old kids in the hall scripts i got from bruce's storage last summer and the fact that i already finished all my homework for this week i'm happy to present a new episode of Kids in the Archive! for those unfamiliar, kids in the archive is my show in which i focus on one individual kids in the hall sketch and give you a behind-the-scenes comparison of script and screen

Previous Episodes: Episode 1 - armada finale ("do we make it?") Episode 2 - fran & gordon: the vacation Episode 3 - comfortable

for our return to the archives, i'll be covering the S1E16 classic "Is He?"

this sketch is one of my favorites from season one, and one of my favorite cathy and kathi sketches altogether. i'd cite this as one of the many examples of kith being ahead of its time with regards to gay humor - i've shown this sketch to other gen z's who had no idea "is he (limps wrist)" goes back further than online memes. as a queer-comedy-history nerd i already knew about the gesture's origin, but i still was taken aback by how all these jokes feel completely timeless

The Handwritten Notes

overall, this sketch is fairly faithful to the script i received, so there aren't quite as many "alternate version" moments to showcase. however, this script does have the interesting quirk of having handwritten changes to it that don't follow the version in the tv show. other scripts in my collection have this, and i'm fairly sure these notes were made for adapting the sketch to a live show or tour. the photo above selects the walkout music as "9 to 5", and sets the scene in a break room with coffee and donuts rather than at their desks. this might be an easier setup for a live show with more limited sets, and build in time for the fan reaction to seeing favorite characters return

unfortunately the version of "tour of duty" on youtube was taken down, so i can't now compare these notes to the version in that tour recording. i do remember that i liked that version less. while i enjoyed the wordplay and euphemisms on their own, i felt they slowed down the flow of an already good sketch and distracted from the existing punchline. none of these euphemisms are present in this sketch, but there is one handwritten edit that i think weakens the writing

The "Improv"

in my previous episode, i cleared up the misconception that comfortable featured a fully improvised exchange. kids in the hall rarely improvised full dialogue on-air, even if they used it at some stage in their writing process. however, there are still small "improvised" elements to these performances that show the performers putting their own spin on the established structure. in "comfortable", it was scott replacing the "da da da da" song with "hava nagila" (for some reason, we may never know). in the case of the cathys, this improv often comes from trailed off sentences

most instances of kathi's giggle aren't specified, but during the stage direction "bruce just giggles like a ninny" scott improvises some sentence fragments to cover for kathi's awkwardness

The Ending

as i previously mentioned, there's no big difference between the script i received and the sketch that made it to air. it's a mostly faithful transcript of all the dialogue that was spoken, with some written descriptions of actions that take place. i feel like i'm just describing what any script is at this point

overall, i enjoy having "is he?" in my collection, not because it presents an alternate reality with different casting and whole other scenes like some of my scripts, but because of the indescribable feeling of having the script this favorite sketch of mine was made from. every wonderful part of this sketch started out as just words on a page, and was built upon to create something truly special. again, i could be describing any script, but damn it i love "is he?"

as always, i hope you enjoyed this episode of "kids in the archive" and be sure to stay tuned for the next one (which will hopefully be coming out much sooner this time). if you have a specific sketch you'd like to see a script-to-screen comparison for let me know and if i have it i'll make an episode and tag you in it.

[sonnet18s]

my pookie

[air--so--sweet]

Personally I think not giving Klaus telekinesis in TUA was the right choice (or at least not to give him telekinesis to the extent he has it in the comics) as it would just make him very OP and, in my opinion, it doesn't quite work with the direction they took his character. That said - I really love the image of Klaus conducting a ballroom of dancing clothes and laughed out loud at the punchline.

The differences I find interesting in the script are the bits that are actually closest to what we see on screen but not not quite there yet, like Luther and Diego's fight resulting in damage to Reginald's favourite tree rather than Ben's statue, or a random locket flying across Viktor's room and getting pinned to the wall instead of the locket Luther gave Allison.

Or Five simply saying 'that's unfortunate' in reference to Viktor leaving having originally been this -

I know it was likely changed as it undermines Five's line to Viktor later that he's the only one he can trust (which exists, though slightly differently, in this draft also), but on the flipside it also adds a lot of weight to why it's Klaus that Five gets to pose as his father when he goes to meritech. Because you could just read it as Five choosing Klaus because he knows he'll agree to do it for dtug money, but it is in fact because Five trusts him.

Also, if anyone else wants to read the script download link is here. I found it quite some time ago on reddit, I don't know how it got online or what draft of the script this actually is (I think I called it a first draft in another post, but that was an assumption, I tried looking it up and there's no info on how far into the process this script was written).

[onyx-collective]

Let's take a pause and appreciate the sermon Delroy Lindo just delivered. That's a whole word right there! 🙏🏽