Posting snippets from that WIP challenge post one at a time, part 25
((This WIP challenge post!
Today’s fic from the random draw is #4: Untitled document - A treatment of a potential second chapter of It’s Okay to Need Help (immediately following this doc is a different treatment of the same chapter with the same document name so it’s not getting an individual bullet, and neither is the other untitled document that does this later. or the fourth one. why are there so many)
Two or three of these are the same snippets in different orders anyway but one is more recent than the others. They’re all, like yesterday, treatments for potential It’s Okay to Need Help, except because these were intended to be the second chapter (yes. all of them.) they’re much more prime for cannibalization.
Rather than sort through cool things to pull from these docs (especially since I could only find two or three of them and one is the salvageable copy), I’m picking what I think might be one or two of the more fun snippets (I pulled them both from the same doc but one of them is in two different docs). They’re both Steven-in-therapy vibes.
No snippets are from the salvageable copy because it’s a boring framing snippet itself and little else. But it’s well-written so I haven’t cast it aside just yet.
Snippet one, in which Steven shows up to an appointment full-on Chad Steveny:
"Well, I can't say I've ever seen you like this. Maybe we should address it."
Her "maybe" is not a suggestion.
Her expression does not soften at the pink, buff boy's (faux?) confident grin.
He's not telling her that he's been this way for four days. Straight.
He's not addressing a thing.
He's fine.
Sure, his train of thought is salad and his coping methods are pudding and really honestly maybe he probably shouldn't have skipped lunch—
It's all fine. Everything's chill.
"Steven." She considers her words carefully. "I'm all for healthy growth, but you didn't look this way last week. Most… drugs don't work that fast, so I'm assuming this is a gem thing. ...Does this new look… hurt you?"
Does that new form… hurt you?
His breath catches. His smile falters. He shrinks, the pink and toned musculature disappearing in an instant.
I still really love the salad and pudding line, the vibe is so good and it is the very last darling I will ever consider killing. XP The Reformed reference is nice too
Snippet two, in which Steven is talking to his therapist about a different person he’s talked to recently (a bit longer than I might have otherwise wanted because I had a hard time figuring out where I wanted to cut it off):
"Mmhmm… and at the risk of sounding like a fictional TV show psychologist… how did that make you feel? To be called interesting. Your face is telling me you don't seem to have been thrilled with that."
Steven touches his face as if he's only realized in this moment that it's capable of communicating something so complex. "I… I wanted to be okay with it, but it made me kind of com--un… comfortable? I know she was just trying to make me feel better and she was excited to find something that would help me out when I get all… but it felt like an insult."
"Did you tell her that?"
He buries his face in a hand. "Oh, geez. I was supposed to, wasn't I?"
"Not 'supposed to'. You eat Craisin Bran instead of Crying Breakfast Cereal because you're supposed to. You buy car insurance because you're supposed to. You wear clothes outside of a nudist colony because you're supposed to. You do the stuff we talk about in here because we want to work on you finding healthier ways to deal with things, or to feel better. Do you think telling her would have helped you achieve that?
"...Maybe." He sighs. Time to come clean. "But in my defense it was a really off day."
"How off are we talking, if I may ask?"
"Somewhere between stepping out of the diamond essence and Jasper appointment."
She whistles a low note. Mentally. It'd be unprofessional to do that out loud, she thinks to herself, sparing a glance at her office toy shelf and her framed Archie Comics posters.
"...And how did that make you—"
"--Bad, I felt bad, thanks for asking."
"Thanks for sharing."
I really do think the chapter concept I have in my head that these two snippets tried to be part of could work... if only I could build them into the puzzle they need to fit into to make this work! DX
Reminder that this therapist is me borrowing Dr. Brooks from The Connie Maheswaran Fanclub (Or: How Connie Became the Most Popular Topic in School After She Pulled a Sword Out of Lion in Front of Literally Everyone) by @coreyww. Credit where credit is due!
And then there was one...
One is the loneliest number that you’ll ever do...
(The complete randomly generated order is this: 9, 2, 6, 10, 18, 19, 22, 20, 15, 8, 14, 26, 11, 17, 16, 23, 21, 1, 3, 12, 24, 5, 13, 25, 4, 7 FWIW XP)
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Posting snippets from that WIP challenge post one at a time, part 21
((This WIP challenge post!
Today’s fic from the random draw is #24: Untitled document - something something trial
...I actually don’t remember which doc this is. Searching for “trial” netted the following doc which I am not sure is the doc but yeah. Since I don’t remember, you’re not getting context. XP
Snippet:
Steven had never explained the trial.
But to be fair, the therapist had never asked.
Well, it was okay, she came around so fast once she knew.
She was the first to really help out of all the Diamonds when things started falling apart on Homeworld.
"Run what she said by me again one more time?"
"Um." Steven did not need to pause to remember. He needed to pause to steel himself.
"'I want to know what she thinks we're going to do to her, because I want to do something worse.'"
Nope, not okay.
He's still hanging out with that—
This doc is strange, because it is the only one that produced no line breaks when pasted here???? Maybe it’s the post being weird??
(The complete randomly generated order is this: 9, 2, 6, 10, 18, 19, 22, 20, 15, 8, 14, 26, 11, 17, 16, 23, 21, 1, 3, 12, 24, 5, 13, 25, 4, 7 FWIW XP)
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