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PROLOGUE JUST DROPPED FOR MY REWRITE OF Peter Pan: The Epilogue Unfolds

New visuals as well!!!

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Peter Pan: The Epilogue Enfolds

The new cover for my rewrite of Peter Pan III: Take On A New Adventure!

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Peter Pan: Take On A New Adventure FANFIC UPDATE

Just to cut to the chase, I will l be rewriting this fic. I'm so glad people have expressed interest in my work and it really means a lot to me. But while I have been writing and updating the fic, I have noticed plot holes, world building that doesn't really make sense, and changing many things over the course of the story which is on my part. I really want to give this fic a feel of what an actual third entry of the Disney Peter Pan franchise would be like so I will be giving this story a second chance along with new visuals and maybe even add playlists along with the chapters.

I will be leaving this version of the fic up if anyone would like to read it and as a writer I would appreciate it if anyone could comment any feedback on what they would like to see in this new rewrite or any writing critiques for me. 

Thank you for understanding and I hope you guys will be around to read my rewrite of this fic :).

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The one he stayed for.

Margaret Moira Darling

She is lighthearted, kind, a bit sarcastic, finds joy in the little bits of life, knows what she wants, and is an aspiring fashion designer!

Moira/Margaret is the granddaughter of Wendy Moira Angela Darling. She was the last name mentioned in the original novel “Peter Pan and Wendy” by J.W. Barrie. And as much as I do appreciate the different dynamics with the Peter/Wendy and Peter/Jane ships, I think my favorite ship in the Peter Pan universe will always be Peter and Moira/Margaret. Moira is a character in Steven Speilberg's “Hook” which came out in 1991. In the movie, she is Peter’s wife and the mother of his kids. The movie explains how Peter saw Moira and immediately fell in love with her which had me intrigued because it was different and I felt there should have been more to it than just that and I feel they probably had an adventure together. It has so much potential. And after seeing the fanart that Suzukiwee1357 posted(It is really good you should check it out I love their art style)with them both Disney-fied, I have shipped them ever since.

Let me know which design you think is best for her character!

Just a couple of visuals(use of excerpts of the movies overlapped and changed to fit the position of character to give a feel of what the character would look like in that style, credit to Disney and some Pinterest references) I made to explore more designs with this character. I feel like having that sleeveless look would portray her free-willing personality while being a modern twist since she is in a time period where sleeveless nightgowns were being made. But I also love the long sleeve look a lot and it took a little inspiration from the movie Hook 1991 from the nightgown when Peter saw her for the first time.

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Peter Pan III: Take On A New Adventure

Chapter 3: Distant Memories and Dinner Is Out!

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Here’s a part 2 on my ideas for Wish if I rewrote it!

So I realized I didn’t explain why Magnifico was experimenting between wishes and memories and here is why. Wishes are an “if” thing that Magnifico tries to use as an “always” thing but it doesn’t have as much power as he would like to take. But memories were always an “always” thing, therefore having more power for him to take. The only memories he took from was a young Asha. This is because she was right there and easy “to work with” since she was his daughter. But when he tries to only extract the memory from the night, it backfires causing him to almost take most of the memories from her childhood. Including the memory of Cyrus and the seven friends. And this does affect Asha and show the repercussions of destroying someone’s wish or memory. When Asha was younger she used to be competitive and always ready for a challenge, making her witty but at moments having those little spots were she was sweet and most of all, kind. But when Magnifico’s extraction spell backfired, it caused a complete shift in Asha’s personality, making her lose all memory of who she was in those memories taken away. Which is why she is emotionless, strict, monotone, and at times lash out at people at the beginning of my version. Her whole life, she only remembers training to be the queen she was destined to be. But in the beginning of the movie before Asha’s “saying of wish ceremony” when her parents tell her she can’t become queen on her birthday it makes her start to think and ask questions. And when she meets Cyrus and re-meets the seven friends, she slowly finds her way back to her old self with some help over the course of the movie.

I do want there to be a scene where Cyrus and the seven friends discover the memory and a book going along with it. This book will be the certain book missing when Asha, Cyrus, and the seven friends look through Magnifico’s old observatory for answers on Cyrus and if there were other like him. This is also the place we’re Asha’s birthday ball will be held which is suspicious and starts up some questions as well. But the scene will look a little like this: Cyrus and the seven friends break into the study to try and steal back all of the wishes from the royal family(after Asha and Cyrus were separated after Simon split them up somehow by convincing Asha that Cyrus’ family tried to kill her’s and got his wish) and find the missing book. But what was inside shocks them and Cyrus immediately drops the book sprints out of the study and they all follow him. The camera then pans to the open book that reveals his plan to steal the life forces of all of the guests at the ball. It also reveals the studies and experiments he has done on Asha and plans to take the rest of her memories as well.(the memory he currently has is also in his scepter so after he is defeated, Cyrus takes the memory from Magnifico)

Also I have been seeing many people talking about the demo of “At All Costs” and it being a duet between the star boy and Asha and I LOVE that idea. It would fit into my version like this: while Asha, Cyrus, and the seven friends are searching Magnifico’s old observatory, they all split up into groups. Safi, Bazeema, Dahlia will be a group. Hal, Dario, and Gabo would be a group. And Asha, Valentino, Cyrus will be a group. Once they all split up Asha and Cyrus explore the main part of the building which is where the ball is supposed to be held. And to their surprise, some of the wishes have been moved to this location which is weird because Magnifico keeps the wishes with him all of the time. But when Cyrus is looking through some old books, he turns around and sees Asha practicing dancing with an imaginary partner for the ball. He sees this and admires her for a moment before a voice in the background starts singing the beginning of he demo of “At All Costs” as if it was Cyrus singing it.(He is mute in my version so he can’t actually sing it, it will be something like “Can You Feel The Love Tonight”) Throughout the song Cyrus shows Asha the importance of these wishes to her people and they also partner dance in it. They ALMOST kiss but Gabo interrupts the by complaining that they didn’t find anything other than star maps.

There will also be another important change in the version and that is having Queen Amaya die trying to save Asha. Amaya’s character development will represent a parent trying to fix her ways of parenting. Near the end of the movie she confronts Magnifico and tells him to stop bringing Asha into their villain business. Magnifico would usually stop at the mention of Asha but with the book taking over his mind, he disagrees and traps her in a prison made of a green shield, and doesn’t even try to break out of it because of how heartbroken she is seeing Magnifico like this. During the battle she realizes what she has to do and the green shield melts away at this realization. She enters the main area of the ball and sees Magnifico fighting Cyrus and Asha with her magic wand. Amaya quickly runs over and blocks some of his attacks but Magnifico also uses verbal abuse to try and bring Asha and Amaya’s spirits down to make them weaker. Under the influence of the corrupted spirit of the book, he decides to try the “taking away life force” spell on them both first. Amaya doesn’t hesitate to tell Cyrus to get Asha out of there. Asha refuses at first but then Amaya tells her she needs some time to recover from her casting all of those spells. Asha still refuses while Cyrus is hesitant about leaving the queen. Amaya then tells Cyrus to get her out of there and that that’s an order. Cyrus takes Asha’s hands while Amaya says to Asha that she is sorry she didn’t try to be a good mother while she could. Asha is taken back by this and Amaya tells her again to go with Cyrus. Cyrus tries his best to get her out of there as gently as possible while Asha fights against him. Once they make it near one of the exits from the main room, the camera will shift into slow-motion as Asha is reaching out her hand to her mother as a blast from Magnifico’s scepter hits her. This will prove that Amaya would’ve done anything for her daughter which results in Asha forgiving her mother after she dies.

I would also like to talk about the music. The music in this movie is good music but not good music for this certain movie. I think they should’ve done the same thing when combining the old with the new with the animation. I think they should’ve had some song writers that are strong in orchestral music like in the renaissance era of Disney along with some modern song writers used in movies like Enchanto. Having those types of songwriters work together would be difficult but it would’ve brought something creative to the table for this movie.

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I’ve been seeing posts about rewriting Wish and I decided to join!

Also I would like to say I do not hate the movie at all. This movie is very charming and a love letter to Snow White which is really cool. I would also like to say that many people put a lot of work into the movie and tried to make it to the best of their possibilities and I really appreciate that. The only problem I have with the movie is some plot aspects and diving a bit more into backstory but that’s all. Overall this movie is very charming at moments and I love the fact that they tried to combine 3d and 2d animation to combine the old and the new. I also love the detail of the backgrounds but I feel they should’ve done 3d and 2d for that too instead of just painting it so it would match the characters. (But I do love the backgrounds they look so pretty!)

So here are some ideas that I would experiment with with the concept of Wish.

First off, Asha would be the daughter of the king and queen. This will add more conflict and it will know make sense if Magnifico reveales the truth about what he was doing, especially on her 18th birthday. Asha in this version would also be more hard on herself to be the “perfect princess” from her parent’s influence, but as a result she is also a bit rude towards the servants of the castle and doesn’t really know how to show affection since her parents are very distant from her ever since doing their villainous deeds. Her character development over the movie will be her having a change of heart. With the influence of star boy she will make friends with the seven friends/servants and bond with her people and their culture. She will also develop a romance with star boy(Cyrus) which will help her realize and improve her mindset while it also referencing the movie romances in the renaissance films of Disney.

Magnifico and Amaya will both start out as villains in this one as well. Magnifico would be more bold and loud about his ego and evilness while Amaya in the beginning of the movie would have a sarcastic and “sickingly soothing” nature with her ego(reflecting the personality of their cat Charo) But Amaya will realize the error of her ways towards the end of the movie but there will be hints of unease on what she is doing throughout the movie. Magnifico and Amaya will be introduced as both king and queen with a very big ego and kingdom but under all of that, their people are not being treated as well. They also give their servants too much work to complete throughout the day. This will show how they only care about their moral, their fame and power being plastered over the whole world. The only reason they haven’t told Asha about their big plan is because they both agreed to leave her out of this which will make them seem more human and develop more conflict especially when Amaya finds out Magnifico tried to extract a memory from Asha as a child without him telling her. Also when Amaya decides she will not stand beside Magnifico anymore it will be a lot harder for her to leave since they both love each other. Overall the villainy of these two with be explained more in depth and result with bigger consequences.

Cyrus(star boy) will be the star that Asha accidentally wishes on during her “saying of the wish” ceremony. His personality will be described as bubbly and peppy, he will also be mute so his movements and emotions will be very animated. Asha and Cyrus will meet in the forest and at first Asha will be very stand-offish with him but over the film she does grow close to him. Cyrus is the prince of the stars or the star people and when he comes down from earth, he is fascinated with the human life but still at the same time seems to be familiar with a couple of things, especially when going in the castle. This will be explained later when we figure out that the star leaders and Magnifico and Amaya used to know each other, this is how Asha and Cyrus met for the first time as children.Their romance will be built off of giving knowledge to each other of their type of life like how Cyrus will teach Asha to be kind(star will also represent the influence disney has had on many people’s lives) while Asha teaches Cyrus how to live up to the responsibilities of the title of prince of stars(and soon king of Rosas). Also the name Cyrus does have two meanings but I’m using the one that means “heir” to point to the fact that he is a prince.

I love the little interactions with the seven friends and it is very charming in the movie. In this version their characters will be fleshed out a bit more and they will have a bit more relation to each other than just being friends. I think that maybe most of the servants in the castle were adopted from orphanage in exchange for work, which would make the king and queen look good on the outside but really this was just a way to easily get servants without trying. This will explain why they are all so close to each other and there could be a moment where they are hesitant to rebel against the king and queen since they were the one’s who took them in and they feel like they are betraying them. Asha also could’ve know the seven friends when she was younger, but when Magnifico ripped the memories from her, she completely forgot her whole friendship with them. This will also add some conflict between them thinking that Asha completely abandoned them. I also would like some of them to be related to each other to give some more dynamic like making Safi and Bazeema brother and sister and only Dario immediately being friends with Cyrus when he meets him. I would like them to have little character like learning to accept themselves as they are or they can improve by doing their tasks by using their strengths. And the betrayal with Simon I would definitely keep in there but he moral would be attached to the king with a type of deal thing. Simon has already made his wish Magnifico knows this while he is trying to find his daughter and this starboy. I’m thinking that he will find out about the little romance Asha and Cyrus are having and would make a deal with Simon that if he separated them somehow, he would have his wish granted. Once he has now separated Cyrus from Asha, he gets his wish granted but only to the benefit of the king to now find Cyrus.

Valentino would be an early birthday gift from a neighboring kingdom that Asha, in the movie time, has only had for a week. So she is very distant from him and pushes him away when he gets to close to her. But Valentino follows her around and when she meets Cyrus he is given a voice which would be voiced by a toddler since he is a baby goat. He has eaten many of Asha’s books when he has a chance to be in the castle(and some of Magnifico’s books)which will come in handy when they need to know what speed Magnifico is planning to use on all of the subjects from far and wide at Asha’s birthday ball.

The main conflict and mystery of the film would revolve around this. Magnifico wishes on two stars(the second star to the right and the first star on the left which would be a Peter Pan reference) which were the leaders of the stars. He was granted powers from his wish and set forth to study these powers and use them for his fame. He meets Amaya who has the same morals as him and falls in love while building a kingdom. He still knew the star leaders and as he started to gain more power he started to abuse his power. Meanwhile he now has a 6 year old daughter named Asha and one night the star king and queen come down to earth to confront Magnifico and Amaya. But Cyrus followed his parents down and meets Asha who is playing outside in the garden. While they bond, the king and queen of stars confronts Magnifico and Amaya and it turns into a battle but soon the star king uses to much of his power which, for a star, results in them exploding. The star queen is devastated and since you can’t kill stars, Magnifico and Amaya banish her to a book to which she becomes the entity that whispers and makes you evil. Meanwhile the big explosion is heard and Cyrus helps Asha hide before the remnant winds of the explosion shoot him up into the sky while he is is flying.

Asha is eventually found by her parents and she is terrified. Amaya is worried for her and so is Magnifico but since Magnifico is experimenting with taking people’s wishes and memories, he decides to try and take away Asha’s memory of that night in her sleep with Amaya knowing. But it backfires as he takes most of the memories from her childhood but could feel the power radiating from the memory. He decides to keep it when he sees this star boy that could potentially reveal what happened that night. And the big plan the king wants to do basically is take everyone’s “life force” since everyone is made from stardust which could fuel his power and doing it at his old observatory would be necessary for the spell he has to cast.

There will also be a moment in the story when Cyrus saves his mother from the book but Asha is now dead due to her using all of her strength in magic to defeat her father. Cyrus wants to heal her and tries but he can’t. So he exchanges his immortalness as a star in exchange for Asha living so he could be with her. Also Cyrus and Asha’s kiss would be them both holding up the wanted that he gave her and while they kiss their love transforms the broken kingdom into a beautiful village and palace and Asha and Cyrus become king and queen.

Those are just some ideas that I have been having and what I would use the concepts for. I really love the idea Wish had and I’m really hoping they try to remake the movie or make a spin-off series to try and repair this idea and explain some plot holes. And this is only a little sliver of what I’m thinking for a rewrite. But overall I really these ideas and think they would be a cool concept to work with. :)

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This story takes place after the events of Peter Pan Return to Neverland (1950s) and is in the Disney universe. This will just be a project I will be working on throughout the year along with some visuals. Please give it a read!(READ UPDATE)