I know the ask is about ships but could you make a non ship one with Dean and Carlos from the Winchesters? I can't think of an exact thing for Dean to say, but the first sentence can be what Dean would say for their first meeting. Thank you if you can (*^‿^*)
"I like your hair," Dean says, staring up from where he's clinging to the bottom of Mary's winter coat, and Carlos grins wide when he adds, with all the breathless gravity of a four year old eager to impress their opinions upon a new friend; "It's swooshy and it's pretty like Mommy's hair, and your-- your beads are pretty and shiny and shiny is my favorite color."
"Swooshy and pretty and shiny is exactly what I was going for, so thank you, little buddy."
Even with almost six years between now and the last time he'd seen Mary, Carlos is relieved to find that they still have a good sense of one-another -- can still communicate silently, swiftly, like they used to when it was life or death. He meets her eye, and her face softens, and understanding passes between them before he slides one of his lucky beaded bracelets -- the bloodstone one -- free.
Dean's eyes light up when he takes it.
When he smiles, he looks just like his mother.
[for this askbox game if anyone else wants to send me a prompt]
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Any fans of David Clement Davies read his latest fantasy book "Scream of the White Bear"? What the hell happened to this one?
Fire Bringer, his 1st novel, is one of my very favorite books. SWB is at least his 4th book and somehow the worst written. It has a large and embarrassing amount of typos, rambling and confusing dialogue...so much of the writing just ssSUUUUUCKCKKS
I want to bite into David Clement Davies' fucking arm every single time he makes a character say another character's name repeatedly in dialogue, or add the word "though" to his sentences like infinite sandwich toppings. STOP THAT!! I can't follow half of what your character say about their mythology, which they treat like a deep religion and Lore(tm) but is just 1 single, convoluted meandering ass story.
The characters talk about their lore endlessly like its very deep but it's just. Not. They meander on about philosophical Maybes and like. Talk about their Jesus figure and an ancient warrior class who we are supposed to sometimes like and sometimes not like. The overarching story is interesting to me but the dragging, convoluted and dumb ass writing is a slog to get through. Mostly the dialogue.
Allow me to simulate some dialogue.
"Yes" Character answered the bear though "and perhaps it came from an old lore from within the ice itself, bear. Yet perhaps it was told to change the stories themselves too, Bergo*, and it shall change darkness into light as the world dies and turns our dreams themselves dark, bear. The world goes mad though, and gods whisper much abed the shores like my father. But in the Great Story we know our peace, you and I are one abd the same though bear."
*T/N Bergo means bear. Bellarg also means bear. I think Barg also means bear.
I have to wonder if this book was written under some sort of intense time crunch or out of financial desperation? I know it was an ebook first. You'd think that would be a chance to clean up typos before printing physical copes, but NAH
And the audacity to begin each chapter with quotes or snippets from the likes of W.B. Yeats and Shakespeare, when you published this I-never-kill-my-darlings first draft??!??
"Whatever little light came would not be great" oh is that so, is that bc there's little light u just said? Good bears are getting murdered by the villain and girl bear says "Oh Uteq it's so terrible!" is that ur best dialogue when u witness murder?
"Our quest within as well just begins then," said Sorgan though---I AM HAVING A FUCKING STROKE
I try to read so many sentences and rambling, half-coherent paragraphs of this ice lore shit and I'm like David STOP!! David shut up!! David think about what you're doing! PleasE! DaVIIIIIIID!!!!
HE WROTE FIRE BRINGER AND SIGHT!! I KNOW THIS MAN CAN WRITE FANTASY EPICS AND ENGAGING, ETHEREAL PROSE, AND THE BONES ARE THERE, BUT GOD WHAT HAPPENED TO THIS ONE!
I am 276 pages in and I'm probably going to finish it.
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(@ what do you think about the mun post) it takes a lot of balls (not to mention a fine attention to detail) to really peel apart minthara's character and to portray her well. i admire anyone that goes for one of the more "unpopular" canon characters because it is really hard to stay true to their personality while also letting your own take seep through. i think you do a brilliant job and balancing all parts of her: her faith, occasional seductiveness, and intimidation. it really takes a really attentive person to do that, and coming from another individual that rps a canon character, i just want to acknowledge that i really do appreciate seeing another canon character be portrayed in such a faithful way that does the character and writers justice while also giving some leeway to your own spin. i feel like i can read all the dialogue you write with minthara's voice. idk, i hope this made sense, but it's always a pleasure to see your interactions on my dash, even if we never interacted! 💜
Gosh. Golly. Oh jeez. Oh goRSH. OH MY. I really don't know what else to say because I genuinely didn't expect anything like THIS when I shared that I honestly just wanted to remind people my Anon was on for questions and concerns. And I READ THIS!! MORE THAN ONCE! AND STILL READ IT MORE THAN ONCE READING IT!! I'm sorry this response is a little late I think I got sick this last week my energy was in the trashbin. But oh boy did I notice! DID I APPRECIATE! Thank you!!! I'm so touched that you have followed me in detail enough to even notice me let alone go into detail like THIS. Thank you, THANK YOU! SOOO MUCH! I'm gonna add this to my headcanon posts so I can read it when I pass it every single time until the end of time.
reputation meme / @dxnse-macabre
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