#rewrite stuff

[thepinokio]

name

[dorphizar]

It was so much fun to draw this goofy dude tbh

And yea a little headcanon that this idiot has hooves, referring to the kaibutsu form

[victoriansnakearts]

Wip for my asmodeus redesign! (He’s got a lot going on rn so I’m definitely gonna simplify him lol)

Also lil sneak peek on a verosika redesign (trying to make all the hellborn resemble their proper deadly sin)

[soda247]

Umm since I need to look like I’m doing something here is TIO 

Also look at what I got!!

[m0wie]

Rewrite in my style :3

[angelic-ish-phantom]

I’m so unhealthily obsessed with doing narrative design for this show whenever I think about its existence for too long it occurs to me that I could be updating the blog I like about it instead of sitting on shit as usual. Will I get back to this thought? Hopefully. Maybe not tho. Maybe this is all anyone gets while I pretend I’ll get back to writing it out fr forever.

The first and second episodes, while not the earliest thing I’ve placed chronologically, do a really good job of introducing the shows main themes and characters, while establishing a bit of a pattern, immediately.

The whole thing with season one is covering a smaller scale story. The stakes are meant to be muddled. Danny becomes more secure in his position as protector of Amity Park, but he’s simultaneously maturing, something that is mainly seen through how he interacts with his friends. The trio is meant to functionally trauma bond over the course of this first season, hardships and shared secrets, leading to a halfway codependency; they become less friends of convenience and more friends of necessity. A bit of an it’s too late to bail so we should probably try harder to like each other situation.

[thelovelydoggycatmadi]

a pet peeve of mine is when someone rewrites or remakes a piece of media, whether that be good or bad. And tries to make it into something it’s not because they don’t understand or even like the source material. So they just make what is more appealing to them without even considering what the original creators wanted.

Before anyone calls hypocrisy on my end I’m trying to make my Aphmau content its own thing for me and my own audience. I’ve stated this before multiple times.

I don’t currently claim I’m trying to be constructive with my changes. I’m not claiming to make PDH or Mystreet as a whole better. Am I taking some major inspiration and basing my own story off of it? Absolutely, but I’m not trying to “fix” anything as a whole.

What I’m SPECIFICALLY talking about is those post that take a franchise as claim to be constructive but end up just making something entirely different while claiming it’s the same franchise just “fixed” or “better”. Not fan-fiction, au’s, or rewrites that are just for fun or are just to explore the character and ideas further. I’m specifically talking about rewrites and redesigns that people claim are supposed to be constructive and for criticism.

Examples of what I’m saying include:

Deliberately changing a certain part of the story or character design because you hate it specifically. (It’s not poorly written, problematic, or implemented.)

Not articulating why you changed something if your reason for changing something consists of the following; “it’s just looks bad (and or some other vaguely insulting word)” if you can’t articulate a reason either leave it alone or don’t bother bringing it up. “it’s just for *insert problematic reason but refuse to explain why it’s problematic*” the internet has enabled you to just say things about a person without explaining but I won’t. “I just don’t like it” so you’re making it the creators problem???? Not every little thing is going to be tailor made to you. “It’s just (or) I just” statements in general not all just most, because they normally don’t follow any sort of well thought out reasoning.

simplifying or over designing a character without the consideration of the media they’re from or what the creators intention with it was. (As an animator please stop doing this one specifically it hurts.)

So in conclusion actually be constructive with your criticism don’t just change stuff meaninglessly because of your bias! It’s dumb and unhelpful to creators that actually want to learn. Thank you.

[rotshi]

Ah.....

[beneathsilverstars]

i think if you’re doing mirabelle’s rpg. you have to put isat right in the middle. i think it should go like… she goes through vaugarde collecting the orbs and noticing all these mysteries about her companions and mourning all the frozen towns, and she wants to get to know her friends better, and figure out what’s bothering them and help with it, and go do fun touristy things with them, etc etc, but they have a country to save. there’s no time, and everything is frozen. if that wasn’t the case, they wouldn’t even be traveling together at all! and the whole time mirabelle’s struggling with anxiety and imposter syndrome and the weight of being The Savior. she has to fix things but she can’t, she wants to help her friends but she can’t, she has to change but she doesn’t want to. she’s getting a bad grade in rpg protagonist!!!

but then we hit isat. and you expect it to be the culmination of mirabelle’s arc, but she’s not ready for that yet, just like she’s felt unprepared and unworthy all game, stuck in this role, under the weight of everyone’s expectations — of course doing the thing everyone wants her to do can’t be mirabelle’s defining moment, no matter how much she also believes in the importance of the quest. when she vanquishes the king, it doesn’t actually fix any of her personal problems. it wasn’t even really about her.

instead, the focus of this event is on siffrin, since it turns out the unchanging king was his foil all along, not mirabelle’s. mysteries are answered about both siffrin and the king, but more importantly — this is the turning point for everyone. the result of the most seemingly-stand-offish character’s arc is the key to making progress in everyone else’s: the party admits they care about each other and decides to keep traveling together.

the second half of the game, then, is going backwards through vaugarde, visiting all the same places again. and now that they’re not on their blessed quest in the name of change, they DO have time and they ARE all officially friends. everyone gets a little arc, echoing the five orbs, starting with isat as siffrin’s. they’re still clearing out sadnesses — and there’s some really strong ones as everyone takes stock of how much time has passed and how much damage has been done — but they don’t respawn anymore. people are starting to recover! and instead of dungeon puzzles, there’s fetch quests and mini games as the party helps vaugarde rebuild. a lot of the quests relate to things they saw while frozen, a bunch of mysteries and tragedies that they can finally DO something about. and in the same way, the family can finally get closer and talk about important things and meet each other’s friends/family and share their interests etc etc, all these old mysteries and maybe-some-days getting resolved!

and then, finally. mirabelle has been doing work that she CHOSE, helping vaugarde rebuild. and sometimes people use the opportunity to rebuild differently, but sometimes people just want the same familiar things back, and that’s not actually bad, it’s nothing like being frozen. you can keep living in the same house but making new memories, fixing things as needed, both different and the same. and mirabelle realizes that she doesn’t need to change. she realizes she has changed, and she will keep changing, but she can stay the same the whole time too. she doesn’t need to be what people expect, not the perfect housemaiden or the rpg protagonist savior. she can just strive to be the best version of herself!!

and that’s the end of the game, bc mirabelle isn’t trying to figure out how to do everything right to win the game anymore. she’s just living ^^

[erinwantstowrite]

i've spent almost five hours on this WIP and i'm alllllmost done i think but i have to wait until tomorrow to try and finish it </3

[thepinokio]

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[jsmifty]

Henry Emily doodle

[victoriansnakearts]

Sir Pentious redesign!!!! Original for comparison ( also lil ramble below)

For starters I actually like sir pentious’ original design a lot! He’s one of the designs that actually feels demonic, if that makes sense? ( I feel like a lot of the designs are sometimes too bland or just anthro animal)

The only things I didn’t like is the generic suit and the top hat being a bit too expressive, it got too distracting for me.

For my redesign I tried to lean more into steam punk inventor since that’s seems to be a huge part of his character.

Some notes

I gave him a more Victorian outfit to better match his time period (it’s not the best but it’s better than shoulder pads and bow ties 😭)

I changed his primary colors to green and purple ( mainly to reflect the sins of envy and pride) you know since he desires to be an overlord I imagine he’s pretty envious of those in power, also he does have a bit of inflated ego

I simplified the hat, it’s only has the eye now, the pupil can move around and dilate but it’s not as expressive (it’s mainly a me thing I just find it way to distracting that the hat makes so many expressions)

I thought it would be a neat idea if he’d put lil accessories on his tail ( like different ray guns or weapons) I thought it would be cute since it would be like a lil rattler, I’d like to think he switches it out often

And probably the biggest change is the robotic limbs, I really wanted the sinner forms to not only reflect a persons life and death but to also be a form of punishment for them. So when pentious first arrived in hell he had no arms, a punishment to prevent him from inventing , the thing he loves to do the most. It didn’t stop him tho as he managed to build himself some prosthetics later on.

Also egg bois confuse me so much so I just made them lil robots, also needed to fill up the page with a doodle lol

This is still in the works, I’m not 100% satisfied and my ideas are a bit scattered but I do like how it turned out! I’m considering doing an alt demon form for him as well as his heaven version too ( I hate how it’s just a palette swap) Let me know what you think! Input is appreciated!!

I’ll probably do an Alastor redesign next ( I have quite a bit to say about him) that or redesigning IMP, I’m open to suggestions!

[soda247]

Funny comic of Zizzi and pony because I’m bored🥰😍

Yeah, for the beginning of my rewrite Zizzi does not really like pony😿😪

Don’t worry they fall in love later on!😨 maybe 

[parasolladyansy]

DxP REWRITE - All Set

Easy does it now ;u;

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🔼 Diamond x Pearl REWRITE 🔽

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[madmaxmon-art]

happy pride to my favorite dumdum miraculous sapphics