#spelling errors cringe dialogue grammar errors

[koqabear]

reading my old writing pisses me off cause why are you talking like that !!!!!

[nereidprinc3ss]

hi do u think its ai bc of how quick theyre posting fics or the way the fics are written? bc i liked a few of the fics now i feel like a fucking fraud bc im so against ai LMAO

Both:( there’s a certain cadence to AI fics where they all just sound the same. There are bits and pieces of lukewarm creative writing but generally everything is spelled right and grammar is good. There r often continuity errors tho like you’ll notice one second they have their clothes off and then he’s taking her shirt off Again or their clothes will just magically disappear or they’ll apparently be facing away from each other but suddenly they’re kissing as if they’ve been facing each other the whole time. Another one I notice is like… the characters will say “damn” a lot?😭😭 and idk I never see real human writers make spencer reid say “you’re so damn perfect” or whatever and I think it’s cringe. Also the dialogue will just be giving bot like it will be giving generic smutty male love interest he will simply be randomizing smut phrases and every response from the reader will be “Spencer please…” over and over again. Yes I have done my field research LOL

Basically if they’re pumping out multiple fics a week that seem to all be syntactically and grammatically flawless that’s a red flag. Another one is these writers never seem to put warnings or anything like that, they SOMETIMES do summaries but they’re not very detailed, and they kinda talk about the fic like they didn’t write it (if they talk about it at all)? Like “idk what this request rlly meant but here’s the fic” or “idk why this is sooo long sorry” yk?? All bad news

Edit also don’t feel like a fraud I also interacted w a few before I started connecting the dots they r hard to detect sometimes!!

[01-05-2001]

how are you so good at writing??? genuine question tho like what is your writing process or do you have any advice for someone trying to get more into/better at writing fiction?

hi anon!! thank you, this is so so sweet :3 i wouldn’t consider myself like. an authority on writing and i definitely think i have a lot to improve on, but here’s some advice i can offer up!

my general process for my oneshots is maybe unconventional? but it works for me.

a basic premise. eg, “oh, i want to write a caldre vibrator fic. how the hell is that going to work?” and figuring out how to get from point A to point B.

this is random, but it helps me keep track. at the top of all of my fics, i write this:

TITLE:

DESCRIPTION:

TAGS:

NOTES:

the title is usually left blank for a while. but the description is an incredibly short summary of the fic’s contents. tags helps me plan in advance for posting. the notes is just anything additional about their dynamic that i want to remind myself of. i find this really helpful to check back on every now and then.

bullet pointing key scenes of the fic. helps to have a writing buddy who can help you troubleshoot or bounce ideas off of!

under each bullet point, i write the scene out like a script, adding in notes about body language or general actions. i also copy paste in any little excerpts that come to me!

i find this the biggest step in avoiding writers block: blocking the entire scene helps keep the flow uninterrupted, helps me establish a pace, and helps to establish a strong tone in dialogue that i can then follow through in action and description. worst case scenario, i can just jump into the next line of dialogue and come back to fill in the gaps.

working top-down, i follow my script and fill in the gaps with action and description! this is obviously the hardest and lengthiest part, but that’s just the truth of it. i stick on some music or a video essay in the background and get to writing!

i usually end up working the start around, restructuring paragraphs until i find a flow.

Some general advice:

write what you enjoy. nothing will burn you out faster than trying to please everyone. it doesn’t matter if it’s cringe, or ooc, or whatever you think. write it if it makes you happy.

READ MORE - and REAL BOOKS (and poetry!). seriously. i notice the fastest improvement in my writing when i’m reading regularly. look at books you enjoy and ask: why do i like this? is it the themes, the characters? is it the writing style - the rhythm, dialogue, pacing? connecting with literature and developing analytical skills will seriously help so much. look at what you like and mirror it.

back to basics. especially with longer form stuff - use classic structures like three acts, freytag’s pyramid, etc. they are classics for a reason! learn the rules so you can know how to effectively break them. consider metaphors, flow, phonetics.

also, basic grammar and structure is non negotiable - walls of text or lack of punctuation will turn anyone off no matter how good the content is. i understand english isn’t everyone’s native language, but even a basic run through a spell or grammar checker online can make a world of difference.

on a more technical level:

variety is KEY. vary sentence length to keep a tight control over pacing, to control flow. read your sentences out loud to find the rhythm. try to keep from using the same structures or starters. sometimes i have to pull up another book to remind myself of different ways to open sentences when i’ve been staring at my writing for too long, lol

balancing description with succinctness is trial and error. IMO it’s better to be sparing than excessive. “purple prose” is hard to keep track of, and can feel like padding to a story. pacing is always, always key. remember, you CAN part with things: copy and paste little excerpts into a spare document. learn to delete!

understand the impact of intentional word choice. i love punchy verbs over wordy adverbials! but i also prefer to use descriptive phrases over niche words that readers won’t know. it’s about balance: complex language has its place, but using it intentionally is key. get a feel for a word’s nuance, otherwise your work can feel like Baby’s First Thesaurus. also, NEVER underestimate the impact of PHONETICS!!!

[maria021015]

Part 29 of convincing you to read my Stiles x oc fanfic using dialogue from ‘Rising Tides’.

Stiles: I don’t know what I did, but I know I did something. I’m telling you, Scott. She’s mad at me. I haven’t seen her since we got back to town.

Scott: Didn’t you say her brother grounded her?

Stiles: Yeah, but it’s been two weeks and she hasn’t tried to sneak out once.

Scott: Maybe she’s just following the rules.

Stiles: (insistently showing phone) But her replies to my messages have been really weird. Look!

Scott: (hesitantly) This just looks like a normal conversation…She’s still responding to you, right?

Stiles: (sighs philosophically) Scotty boy, there’s something you gotta learn, and it’s that not all girls are like Allison. She might completely cut you off when she’s mad at you, which makes it easy for you to tell, but most of them don’t do that. Most of them - like Zaida - will tell you it’s fine when really nothing is fine, and everything is about to explode in your face! Look, there’s no pop-culture references, or little rants about movie plot holes, and it’s all grammatically correct.

Scott: (confused) Why does the grammar have anything to do with it?

Stiles: (irritably) Because, Scott, usually when she messages she gets all excited about what she has to say so she ends up making a bunch of spelling and grammatical errors. Sometimes her sentences don’t even make any sense. But these all make perfect sense. Ergo, she’s absolutely furious and plotting all the ways she’s going to completely eviscerate me when she gets un-grounded.

Scott: Has anyone ever told you that you’re unnecessarily dramatic?

Stiles: Yeah, all the time, but what does that have to do with anything?

Scott: *internally face palms*

Stiles: I texted Lydia to ask her if she knew if Zaida was okay, and she said nothing was wrong! Can you believe that?

Scott: Believe what? Doesn’t that mean that she’s fine and you’re overthinking it? (Backtracking in realisation) Wait a minute, you got Lydia’s number, and instead of gushing about that for hours you’ve been decoding Zaida’s messages like some kind of Shakespearean book?

Stiles: Okay first off, that means that Zaida’s not just upset in general, she’s just mad at me specifically, which is infinitely worse. Secondly, Shakespeare wrote plays, not books. And thirdly, YES, keep up!

Scott: Right…And are you sure you still like Lydia?

Stiles: (ranting spiritedly) Yeah, duh. What does my hopeless crush have to do with anything? I’m not talking about Lydia right now, I’m talking about Zaida, and the fact that she’s going to use her powers to cook me from the inside out like a Stiles-sized microwave dinner!

Stiles: *blinks* Oh, shit.

Scott: ‘Use her powers’? What powers? I thought she still wasn’t presenting?

Stiles: Yeah…about that…So, we kind of discovered that the reason why she didn’t turn into a werewolf when Peter bit her was because she was already something else. You know how I told you I couldn’t hang out because I was sick with the flu? Well actually, I took her to her beach house in Monterey and we found her family’s Bestiary in a secret room hidden behind a bookshelf, which told us that she comes from a long line of Nymphs.

Scott: (outraged) You guys did what? You’ve both been working on this for how long? Who else knows?

Stiles: Just us two and Lydia. Oh, and Derek kind of knows a little, I guess. Which means Isaac probably knows a bit too. (Cringes) But Allison definitely doesn’t know anything.

Scott: So Allison and I are the only two people who had no idea about any of this?

Stiles: Look, she just wanted to figure it all out before she told you guys. Or, at least, before she told you. She doesn’t want to tell Allison anything because she’s convinced she’ll get another crossbow bolt to somewhere a bit more important this time - like her face - and I’m not yet entirely sure that she’s wrong.

BONUS

Stiles: Apparently, this is just the beginning of her power. Deaton thinks it can extend to being able to manipulate emotions too and project feelings onto other people.

Scott: Deaton knows too?!

Stiles: *blinks* Oh. Yeah, I forgot to mention him.

Stiles: Sorry, buddy. But hey, in our defence, you neglected to tell us that you were conspiring with Gerard and double-crossing him by slipping wolfsbane into his pills. So, I guess we’re even now.

[toofarovertherainbow]

hey babes what does beta-ing ur natejo fic entail ?

hello!! thank you for showing interest in it first of all mwah. so i need someone to tell me if some of the dialogue sounds hot or just cringe and to tell me if some of it is a bit too much i did this i did that i did this i did that. also just to check my grammar and spelling errors. i would be super thankful because i don’t think i can look at it again anytime soon atp it’s taken me so long to write it. also disclaimer obviously it is smut so if that isn’t your thing don’t worry about it!

[spicler-man]

thanks for the tag!!!

1. How many works do you have on AO3?

75

2. What’s your total AO3 word count?

214,434

3. What fandoms do you write for?

oh jeez. we'll stick to just what ive got posted bc otherwise this list will crash my computer. mcu, obviously, but there's also stranger things, gravity falls, danny phantom, miraculous ladybug, random kids movie called the little vampire that i got obsessed with, atla, my old mcyt fics, mia and me, phineas and ferb, my old sanders sides fics, stardew valley, exactly 1 undertale fic, and mha. i refuse to make pseuds or new profiles if you subscribe to me you WILL see all my works.

4. What are your top 5 fics by kudos?

i think they're all irondad? nobody knows like a waterfall System Error: Reboot i’ll always come back mr. dad❤️🔧 yep. all irondad

5. Do you respond to comments? Why or why not?

i try to! but i have bad adhd and completely forget most of the time. trust me, i see it and i love it and then i forget to answer it

6. What is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending?

probably The Phantom Menace just because it's short and there's no closure. one of my earliest irondad works, if not my earliest

7. What’s the fic you wrote with the happiest ending?

good question!! most of mine are pretty happy or at least hopeful, i'd say mr. dad❤️🔧 just because there's little to no angst throughout the entire thing

8. Do you get hate on fics?

yep! as previously mentioned, i have horrid adhd, so sometimes ill get stuck in a little echo chamber of my own brain, and ideas that make sense in my head, with all the surrounding details i've come up with, the full thing won't make it into the story so it makes little to no sense.

9. Do you write smut? If so, what kind?

i've never written a smut fic, i tried my hand at writing smut (with ocs) when i turned 18 just to see if i could. however i sincerely doubt it'll exit the specially made password-locked document i made for it

10. Do you write crossovers? What’s the craziest one you’ve written?

i don't, not really, so i guess i'll have to say my pnf and irondad crossover, which is less crazy when you remember phineas and ferb already did that.

11. Have you ever had a fic stolen?

nope! no one wants 'em

12. Have you ever had a fic translated?

also no

13. Have you ever co-written a fic before?

i've been a supportive cheerleader on the sidelines for a couple of my friends fics, as well as an idea generator that they've been like "ooh thats good i want to use that" but never a co-writer

14. What’s your all time favourite ship?

i might have to go with my stupid little elf polycule from mia and me. its my all time favorite because if i don't love them, who else will?? and i can never get tired of content from them bc there is none.

15. What’s a WIP you want to finish but doubt you ever will?

oh god. ive never finished a multichapter. did you all know that about me?? i've never made it all the way through. the final chapter of silent spidey has been complete since november 2022. but i haven't made it there yet. and now i doubt i ever will.

16. What are your writing strengths?

dialogue. i like to think ive got a good handle on dialogue. also spelling and grammar are fun for me so none of those pesky little errors

17. What are your writing weaknesses?

my willingness to sacrifice important plot points for a joke i found marginally funny. looking at you, stranger things wips.

18. Thoughts on writing dialogue in another language in fic?

depends!! i'm bilingual, so if it's a language i've got a handle on then yeah, why not? if i gotta translate it, i'll probably include the translation in there somewhere with an html code

19. First fandom you wrote for?

miraculous ladybug, back on wattpad. if you find my old unfinished fic on wattpad with no clues from me ill give you five bucks

20. Favourite fic you’ve written?

i really like to be a bit of warmth for you. it was fun to write and i can still reread it without cringing so i count that as a win!

no pressure tags: @creative-girl @multifandomforthemostpart @call-me-coley @ironfidus

(under the read more is the blank questions for everyone)

1. How many works do you have on AO3?

2. What’s your total AO3 word count?

3. What fandoms do you write for?

oh jeez. mcu, obviously, but there's also

4. What are your top 5 fics by kudos?

5. Do you respond to comments? Why or why not?

6. What is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending?

7. What’s the fic you wrote with the happiest ending?

8. Do you get hate on fics?

9. Do you write smut? If so, what kind?

10. Do you write crossovers? What’s the craziest one you’ve written?

11. Have you ever had a fic stolen?

12. Have you ever had a fic translated?

13. Have you ever co-written a fic before?

14. What’s your all time favourite ship?

15. What’s a WIP you want to finish but doubt you ever will?

16. What are your writing strengths?

17. What are your writing weaknesses?

18. Thoughts on writing dialogue in another language in fic?

19. First fandom you wrote for?

20. Favourite fic you’ve written?

20 Questions for Fic Writers

thank's for the tag @waitingondaisies

1. How many works do you have on AO3?

- 180

2. What’s your total AO3 word count?

- 1,701,826 (Holy Crap!)

3. What fandoms do you write for?

- All of my fics are MCU, predominantly Irondad but there are a few Spiceychell fics mixed in there too.

4. What are your top 5 fics by kudos?

- A Parent Apparent (528,718 words, 7,349 kudos) A really freaking long slow burn Irondad co-parenting with May fic.

- So Many Things to Say (82,998 words, 3,914 kudos) A electivly mute, foster child Peter fic. This is the first part of an extended series.

- What I Really Need is You (18,520 words, 3,581 kudos) A fluffy 5+1 of Peter needing things from Tony.

- Distracted by a Dime (56,169 words, 2,476 kudos) A homeless Peter AU- Stony AU. This is the first part of a series.

- Suspended (3,607 words, 2,177 kudos) A One-shot about Pter getting suspended and Tony picking him up from school.

5. Do you respond to comments? Why or why not?

I try really hard to reply to every comment!

6. What is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending?

I don't really do angsty endings... So Maybe this one? Breathe, Kid (You're Not Alone) (4,086 words) Ned Dies and Peter feels responsible. Tony is there to help him pick up the pieces. The ending is hopeful and comforting- but there is no instant fix.

7. What’s the fic you wrote with the happiest ending?

Oh geez. You want me to pick one??? Uh... Let's go with this one because it has some sweet Christmassy vibes. Secret Sugarplum Spiderling (27,923 words) Peter is a ballet dancer and he doesn't want Tony to know- yet. Lots of super sweet fluff.

8. Do you get hate on fics?

Sometimes. Usually, it's someone who has decided that my fictional story filled with fictional characters who have fictional superpowers isn't 'realistic enough.'

9. Do you write smut? If so, what kind?

I have written exactly ONE smut fic- but it has NEVER been posted. 😘

10. Do you write crossovers? What’s the craziest one you’ve written?

One- by request. It was a mini-fic about Pokemon trainer Peter and Pokemon Professor Tony. Rotom Roundup (979 words)

11. Have you ever had a fic stolen?

Nope. My art, despite emailing them several times, is still up on a 'coloring sheets' website though. Which mostly annoys me because what they nagged was a draft. I would have happily sent them the clean line art.

12. Have you ever had a fic translated?

No. I had someone offer once and gave full permission but I don't htink it ever happened.

13. Have you ever co-written a fic before?

Yes! I have co-written a few fics. And I have one in the works with @waitingondaisies

14. What’s your all time favourite ship?

Most of my fics are platonic relationships. But I often have background relationships in them; usually Stony or Pepperony. Some spideycelle and once, Ned/Peter.

15. What’s a WIP you want to finish but doubt you ever will?

I hope I eventually finish all of them! But there is one I found that I am not even sure where it was going. All I have written is 800 words of Kraven the Hunter confronting Peter.

16. What are your writing strengths?

I think I am pretty good at dialogue.

17. What are your writing weaknesses?

I am still learning a lot about POV depth, visceral details, and deep introspection.

18. Thoughts on writing dialogue in another language in fic?

I don't use it much, if at all. But it doesn't bother me.

19. First fandom you wrote for?

Irondad

20. Favourite fic you’ve written?

Oh! It's a tie!! So Many Things to Say will always me towards the top of my favorites lit. But my newest fic, The Hoax, is starting to creep into 'favorite fic of all time' territory.

I am going to tag (If they are interested) @spicler-manie @cajun-fangirl @asyouleft @thwip--thwip @justme--emily and @kubabergen

[aye-write]

An aye-write Guide to Beta-Reading and Feedback!

Beta reading and feedback is an important part of the writing process! Whether you’re looking to fix simple spelling and grammar errors in a short drabble, or a full examination of a 150k epic, it’s really valuable to you and your beta-reader to have a good grasp of how to give - and receive - feedback!

How to Ask for Feedback One of the things that I will always suggest giving your beta-readers is a Beta Reading Worksheet. Simply put, the writer puts forward a list of questions, topics, or points they’d like the beta-reader to address. I did this when I sent my murder mystery out to betas: 

As you can see above, the questions I chose gave me a great overall impression of how my betas felt about the novel and also I was able to address specific concerns that I had. Another great reason for giving beta-readers a list of questions is that it also helps them give you meaningful feedback, especially if the beta-reader is unsure of what you want from them or struggles to think of “good things to say”. 

Be as specific as possible! Do you want your beta-readers to look out for spelling, punctuation, and grammar? Let them know! You don’t want them to comment on the overall story but more on the technical details? You need to tell them! The more you help them, the more help they will be able to give you!

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Ideas for Questions for Getting Great Feedback  Here are some questions that I’ve either seen used or used when considering feedback for all sorts of pieces! Some may be of use to you, others not, so feel free to adapt any of them to suit you!

GENERAL

As a reader, what did you like about the story? 

What makes you want to read on? 

What makes you want to stop reading? 

What questions did the story make you want to ask? 

Did the story hook you in? 

PROSE AND TECHNIQUES

Was the prose easy to read? 

Were the sentences too short or too long? 

Were there too many adverbs or other writing quirks that stuck out? 

How well is the prose written?

Is there too much description, too much dialogue? Not enough? 

Does the text feel repetitive in places or are there descriptions missing? 

DIALOGUE

Is the dialogue believable and easy to follow? 

Can you tell who is speaking? 

Are there too many distracting dialogue tags? 

Does the dialogue seem boring or does it move the plot along? 

CHARACTERS 

Are the characters believable and interesting? 

Do you know what their motivations are? 

Were they described enough to picture them, or too much?

POV AND TENSE

Do you know what the POV (point of view) is? 

Does the story stay in the right POV or does it switch and become confusing? 

Does the written tense stay consistent? 

Does it change or come across as confusing? 

SETTING AND WORLDBUILDING

What did you think of the setting? 

Was there enough detail to set the scene, or too much detail that overpowered the story? 

Could you tell where the story was set easily? 

Does the setting/world building come across realistically? 

PLOT

Can you follow the plot of the story? 

Does the plot seem too obvious or vague? 

Does the story end satisfactorily or do you feel cheated/bored? 

Are there any plot holes? 

 How is the story paced? 

Does it move slow, drag on and bore you? Or does it move too fast and feel rushed? 

Can you tell the theme of the story? 

Does the plot and characters evoke any particular emotions? 

Personally, I wouldn’t send everything on the above list to a beta-reader, you don’t want to overwhelm them after all, but you could pick and choose a couple!

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Be Good to Your Betas  Whether they’re beta-ing a three page short or a 400 page novel, beta-reading is a huge commitment, and can be a tough, and sometimes thankless, job. Giving them guides for betaing like above can really help! Here are some more top tips to help out your lovely betas: 

Give them an as polished a draft as you can! This will help both you and your beta-reader get the most out of the experience.

Give them plenty of time! My betas had three months to read my 104k novel. More time for more words and more detailed betaing. 

Be flexible! Life happens and things do go wrong. 

It’s fine to disagree with what a beta-reader has to say - they are only one opinion after all - but asking for clarification or more details will serve you better than getting annoyed!

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What If I Don’t Like my Beta Feedback?  It’s definitely disappointing when you get some feedback that you don’t like. Especially if it’s a piece you’ve put a lot of heart and soul into. If you think there’s some problems with your beta feedback, consider the following points: 

Get a second pair of eyes (or third... or fourth!) It’s always better to have multiple eyes on a piece of work - even just to make sure nothing gets missed - but especially if there’s discrepancies between feedback. If four out of five beta-readers pick up on an issue, odds are it’s something you may have to address, even if not in the particular way the beta-readers suggest. 

Is the feedback fit for purpose? Does the beta-reader have an innate bias or dislike for a certain aspect of your work? So, if you’re told that your dialogue between two girlfriends is “cringe” and you discover your beta-reader dislikes romance, that feedback may not be fit for purpose. This is another reason why you should lay out your expectations and explain what your piece will explore before taking on a beta reader. A good beta-reader should be able to tell you how/why something works despite their own personal preferences. 

Are you asking readers... or writers?  A lot of people think readers make the best betas. Others argue writers. Personally, I think there’s value in asking a mix of both. Reader feedback may be able to indicate where things don’t “feel right” but may not be able to articulate exactly why. But reader feedback can also be invaluable because they’re the target audience! Whereas writers can usually articulate the problems “under the hood” of the piece, as it were, and help you with more targeted support. Fellow writers are also fabulous for earlier drafts. 

Trust your instincts!  At the end of the day, beta-feedback is just feedback! And your story is your story. You’re the one who knows it inside out, you’re the one who knows what you want to get out of it, and ultimately you’re the one who decides what goes into the piece. You don’t have to take every piece of advice as gospel. 

[tsuriaa]

# 𝐋𝐎𝐕𝐀𝐁𝐋𝐄 𝐈𝐃𝐈𝐎𝐓 ᝰ [𝗚𝗘𝗡𝗦𝗛𝗜𝗡 𝗜𝗠𝗣𝗔𝗖𝗧 𝗫 𝗧𝗪𝗦𝗧]

Summary: A girl with odd morals found herself being acquainted with the most chaotic people she had ever met, especially when she's just trying to blend in with the crowd and not create a crowd

# 𝐃𝐈𝐒𝐂𝐋𝐀𝐈𝐌𝐄𝐑𝐒

Genshin impact & Twisted wonderland are not mine, credits to the owners

I don't take credits for the videos, photos, etc. used in here! except that I only own the edited photos here

This book was originally posted on wattpad but I decided to repost it here bc why not?

Grammar mistakes & spelling errors

Profanities and Cringe

Probably gonna end up as Crackfic idk

Like the description says this is gonna be a modern au with some characters aged down or aged up

Slight crossovers ig?

And you're also gonna act feminine on this one so if you're uncomfortable with the MC (you) acting feminine, I highly suggest for you to click off

Inspired by the fanfic "veil of a smile” twst fanfic on quotev!

OOC

My ocs might be added here as part of the love interests

But don't worry, once you get to know my oc's you guys can get to decide whether I make it official for them to be part of the love interests or no

However, some jokes will be included here and there

I, once again, don't own anything used in here except for my story and oc’s

There may be slight histories behind my oc's and some characters but overall won't affect the relationship they have with the MC (you)

There also might be some filipino dialogues in here that some of you might not understand, but don't worry this story will mainly focus on the language english, translations will also be contain in here so some of you may understand :D

^ Note that my translations may not be the accurate ones, but I'll do my best!

Also note that I'm more onto the english speaker type of Filipina, so my filipino grammars here might suck :p

Even though you're a Filipina in this book, all of you are free to imagine your own appearance except that your skin color will be tan but you guys can decide on your hair color, eye color, etc.

Filipino references will be included

Not sure if I'll make this official since this idea has stayed on my mind for quite a while and might lose my motivation for it lmao

  ^ So pls don't get your hopes up!

If you're wondering how tf mc ended up in Twisted wonderland, i honestly don't know 

Female reader (sorry non-binary and male readers :< )

No regular updates. I only update whenever I'm bored, free, have motivation or can't sleep :p

Doesn't really have a good plot so be warned

That is all and enjoy yourselves !

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Wattpad account: @-MIRIAA

[yournotsolocalcryptid]

I was wondering if you could make an imagine with Warren Worthington and number 1 of that 55 dialogue prompt list you made? Maybe smut, if you're comfortable with that.

I’ve never written full-blown smut before. Not bc I’m uncomfortable with it but more bc I’m worried it’ll be cringy as I’m not very experienced sexually. #immavirgin. You guys will have to let me know what you think of my first ever fic featuring smutty stuff! 

Prompt(s): 1. Do you trust me?” 

Pairing(s): Warren Worthington x afab!Reader

Warnings: SMUT TOWARDS THE END AND IMPLIED SMUT AT THE VERY END DO NOT READ IF UNDER 18. Mentions of blood (not during the smut), fluff? poor writing skills and very poorly proofread. I apologize in advance for any spelling errors, grammar errors and any cringe-worthy moments. 

Word count: 1.2k

Both you and Warren tended to keep to yourselves partially by choice but the other students had always kept their distance. Because of this almost all of your interactions with Warren were in training, class or on missions, and what you learned is that Warren, despite all appearances always had your back. In training, they would often split you into groups of 2-4 and on more than one occasion it had been you and Warren against another classmate and apparently the two of you worked well together, or at least that’s what Storm and Professor X said when they sent the two of you on what was supposed to be a simple recon Mission by yourselves.

You were inside mingling with the guests at this event, Warren was watching from a distance and everything was going smoothly. Until it wasn't. You don't know what happened or what changed but all of a sudden you were bleeding and running for your life through an upper floor corridor.

“Talk to me Y/N” you heard warren say through the earpiece “what's going on? Where are you?”

“I’m being chased through a corridor a few floors up, I’m bleeding, I have no way out,” you said breathlessly as you ran “I’m trying to find a place to hide but all the rooms are locked or occupied and I don't have time to kick a door down”

“Y/N do you trust me?” 

“Yes” you responded without a moment's hesitation. 

“Can you find a way to the roof from where you are?”

“Yes. I-I think so”

“Good. go to the roof”

“What are you planning?” no response “Warren?” you shouted as you climbed staircase after staircase

“Trust me” was all you heard before the line went dead again. 

You climbed one last staircase and bust out onto the roof making sure to find something to jam the door with. Your shirt was now half covered in blood and the cut on your face stung in the wind.

“Warren?” no response “I’m on the roof. What now?” still nothing “Warren?” 

“Behind you”

You whipped around and saw Warren landing on the far end. You sprinted over. 

“What’s the plan?”

“Hold tight” was all he said. He wrapped his arms around your waist and took flight again

 You flung your arms around his neck and wrapped your legs around his waist. Thank God for Warren. 

 When you landed at the school, You took no notice of the amount of blood you’d lost but Warren definitely did as you made your way to Professor X’s office to report. The two of you recounted what happened while Professor X listened intently, when you were done he thanked you and said you should find someone to help you get cleaned up, but before you could protest and say you were fine, Warren volunteered, grabbed your arm and lead you out to the hall, to his room and into his bathroom. 

“Sit on the counter” he said as he started grabbing things from various cabinets. You debated arguing but figured it wasn’t worth it. He did offer to help you after all. After hopping on the counter you pulled your shirt off so he had better access to your wounds.

He turned back to you, his arms full of supplies and He set them down beside you on the counter. He made no indication that he cared about or even noticed your lack of shirt. He gave you a small glass of water from the sink and some painkillers which you took. Then He took your knees in his hands and spread them so he could stand between them. Then he used an antiseptic wipe and started carefully cleaning each of your injuries, then he covered them with gauze. You watched as he did all this. You watched his hands, you watched his face and you realized you’d never seen Warren be this gentle before. When he finished, he stepped aside to wash his hands and he looked up after drying them to find you still watching him.

“What?” he asked 

You hopped off the counter and walked over to him. Your bodies were so close yet not quite touching when you asked,

“Do you trust me?” 

He nodded and swollowed almost nervously and you closed the minuscule gap between your bodies and your lips met his. He kissed back almost immediately and his hands landed on your waist, then slid down to your hips then onto the swell of your ass. Your hands started tugging at his shirt when he pulled away and his hands moved back to your waist.

“Wait. wait” he said a little breathless “are you sure about this?” 

You nodded and within seconds his shirt was on the floor his lips were back on yours and he was guiding you backward toward his bed. As you walked you hastily undid his belt and tossed it aside, then unbuttoned and unzipped his pants. Your knees brushed the edge of the bed and you let yourself fall onto the mattress. He moved to climb on top of you but  you stopped him

“Wait”

He looked confused for a moment but the second you hand reached behind your back the look in his eyes shifted to one of pure lust and hunger. You undid the hooks, slipped your bra off and flung it out of the way. 

“Fuck” he whispered lustily 

In no time at all, he had crawled over you and kissed you again before attaching his lips to your breast and paying attention to the other with his hand.  You arched your back at the sensation. When he switched sides you slipped your hand between your bodies, into his pants and felt him through his briefs. He moaned loudly but the sound was muffled by your breast. 

He stood up and your hand slipped out of his pants. Warren took his pants off and made quick work off yours leaving you both in just your underwear which he then removed as well. He pulled you towards the edge of the bed, knelt between your thighs and looked up at you the question of consent written clearly over his face. 

“Warren if you don’t touch me I swear to god-“ but you were cut off by the feeling of his fingers on your folds. He collected some of your wetness on the tip of his finger and slowly pushed the one finger into you. 

“Oh fuck” you breathed as Warren started pumping his finger in and out at a steady pace.

“Do you think you can take another one?” 

You nodded and he pushed a second finger into you causing you to moan loudly. 

“W-Warren use- fuck- use your mouth” 

Warren obliged and emphatically started licking and sucking at your clit, you moaned loudly, your fingers tangling in his hair and he started curling his fingers within you messaging your g-spot perfectly. 

“Fuck Warren! I’m s-so close” you moaned

He continued these motions, his eyes never leaving you as you felt the knot in your stomach get tighter and tighter until it snapped and you came hard around his fingers. 

“You up for more?” He asked cheekily 

“Fuck yes”

[particularemu]

um...hi? I just wanted to rant to you for a while. so long time ago i was writing stories and fics and i was really satisfied with my work because i was like 15 and I was writing about things I was interested in but then people around me saw my work and they just kinda started making fun of me and my style and I was so sad and hurt that I stopped writing and deleted all my works. its have been 3 years since I stopped and utill now I'm scared of writing anything I'm scared people would judge me:(

Part 2: I have those days when I'm feeling good and I wont to create something but then I'm starting to overthinking again and I'm just not doing anything + I'm also scared that since English is not my first language people will make fun of my and all and I'm like 😭🤡 I'm just so scared of everything. :(( sorry for wasting your time shsh

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OMG No you’re not wasting my time at all :3 

Okay, so 👏I was in the same boat as you when I first started writing, so I totally understand where you’re coming from. 💜

If you’re proud of your work and you enjoy writing, I think you should start again :3 

The only way to get better at writing is to write! 💚

Also, please remember that all the writers you admire now went through a bad writing phase too. 

They had the cringe-y dialogue, the bad storylines, the fics that made no sense, the horrible spelling and grammar errors — and I’m convinced they 100% had that smut that just screamed that they don’t know how sex works. I know I did lol.  

But over time you learn from your past writing and you improve. 

Don’t let the haters drag you down. 

I won’t lie to you… your writing is not going to please everyone. I still get people who complain about my cursing, despite the fact that I curse like a sailor on this blog. Like come on guys it’s not a surprise. I’ve also gotten hate about the way I write the boys and their personalities. 🤷‍♀️

But the nice messages in my inbox mixed with the hyping from my baes @jisungsjheekies, @channiesmixtape, and @backhugsforhyunjin mean far more to me than the hateful messages I’ve received. 💚

If you decide to take up writing again, please let me know. I’ll be there hyping you up every step of the way. 

[chansoobookshelf]

Ok, so I’m an ok writer and I feel like when I write it sounds choppy and sounds like a 5 yr old wrote it; how do I become a better writer?

Hi nony!

First off, you’ve already accomplished a lot just by writing!Getting started is often the hardest part. Give yourself a pat on the back!

In terms of improving, here are a few things that have helpedme. They are not one-size-fits-all by any means, but hopefully one or two (orall) will work for you.

This is kind of long so more after the cut XD

Plan Before You Start

Outlining, character profiles, and test writing can dowonders for a story. Explore the setting you are writing, the people that livein it, and work to understand how all the pieces fit together. That way, whenyou go to actually write your story you should have a very good idea of whatyou want to write (though of course things pop up here and there and nothing isset in stone).

Outlining can seem daunting. It is something I havestruggled with in the past but from experience (and the advice of many writerfriends) it is a key element to crafting a well-rounded story. You can createas detailed or brief of an outline as you need, but I would recommend at leastlaying out the plot diagram. Here is an article that talks about the parts of aplot.

Usually when I outline I have bullet point for all 6 parts(exposition, conflict, rising action, climax, falling action, and resolution)and fill those in with plot points. Later, as I go back and review I fill in more details scenesand events in sub-bullets.

Character profiles are also very helpful tools. Creatingprofiles can help you to better understand the characters you are writing and givesthem depth. Here is an article that talks about creating character profiles.

Test writing is another great way to get to know a story. Write a few hundred words in your AU. See how it feels, how the characters feel. You don’t have to publish what you write or share it with anyone. Test it out and see where it takes you. 

Some writers I know like utilizing visual aids. Doing a pin board for a story can really help the creative juices flow. Try padlet if that is more your cup of tea.

Ultimately, planning is a very personal thing. Some writers plan a lot, others do the bare minimum. I would recommend at least doing some sort of outline and character profiles of your main characters so you have some insight into the story you want to tell. 

Keep Writing

Like many things in life, the more you do it the better youwill become. Writing is not an exception to that rule. Write, write some more,and then keep writing. The more you write the more you will realize what worksand what doesn’t. The more you write and post the more feedback you willreceive from readers and beta readers (see below).

And don’t shoot for perfection either. No one is perfect andwe all started somewhere. I look back at the first handful of stories I wroteand cringe, but I never regret writing them. Why? Because that is how I learnedhow to write, through trial and error and the feedback of the people who muddled through the fics with me.

Don’t be afraid to just word vomit. You can edit it alllater. Usually when I write I create what I think of as the word vomit draft.The first draft is full of spelling and grammar errors. I don’t stop to correctthings as I go, I just write. I get down the story and go back to fix the restof it later.

But don’t be afraidto take a break

Sometimes the words really don’t flow and that is okay.Sometimes it is better to let a piece sit for a week before you go back to it,which is also okay. Heck, let it sit for a month if it has to. Coming back toyour writing with a fresh set of eyes can help you spot mistakes and pacingissues you may not see the first time around.

Show, Don’t Tell

If you feel like your writing is choppy it might help to bemore descriptive. You may have heard the show, don’t tell advice in the past.The short of it is that you want your readers to feel your story, not just haveyou telling them what they should feel. When you write with the aim of showing,you become more detailed by default. When you write a sentence think of how youcan show what you want the reader to feel. Example:

Chanyeol was cold.

I just told the reader that he is cold. If I wanted to showthem he was cold I might write:

Chanyeol adjusted hisscarf with his gloved hands, his breath rising up in a fog. He pulled hisjacket tightly around him, burrowing in the heat of the down padding.

Here is an article that talks about show, don’t tellwriting. It is definitely something that takes practice, but trying to do moreshowing instead of telling will be an asset to your fiction. It isn’t a hardand fast rule (sometimes you really do need to tell instead of show) but it canhelp to make your writing more descriptive.

Some other useful links:

Writing body language

Writing a good setting 

Writing dialogue 

Writing smells 

209 words to describe touch 

Find a beta reader

A good beta reader can not only help you fix grammar andspelling errors, but also offer feedback on plot pacing, structure, andpotential plot holes. Being open to feedback from a beta you trust can dowonders for your writing.

FY! Exo Fics has a list of individuals who offer betaservices. If you are comfortable having a beta I would suggest checking out thelist. You can find it here.

If you can have multiple people read over your story, that is even better. The more people who can give you feedback the more you can understand how your writing comes across. You don’t have to take every piece of advice given to you, but it is an asset to have multiple sets of eyes take a look at what you wrote and give their opinion (in a constructive way, of course).

Utilize writingsoftware / sites

Writing software and sites are your best friend (along with your beta), trust me.Here are some good (and free) ones to check out:

Hemingway Editor. Helps to make your writing more conciseand crisp by spotting grammar mistakes. 

Grammarly (free version, plug in to word available) Grammarcheck 

WordCounter. The redundant use of certain words can makeyour writing less readable. This site checks usage by word (as well as someother nifty statistics). 

Read and read somemore

And do so actively. Re-read your favorite fiction and figureout why it is your favorite. Is the author great at suspenseful endings? Ormaybe it is how descriptive they are. Keep reading and note what you like, thenlearn from it. Investigate the things you like (descriptive writing, orsuspense, or great characterizations – google is your friend). Good books /fanfics can teach writers a lot just by being an active reader.

And of course,brushing up on the mechanics helps

I am the first one to admit I don’t do enough when it comesto brushing up on the general grammar rules of the language (ask my long suffering beta). If I need to readpages about sentence structure I quickly find anything else to do. But let’sface it, I would (and many people) would benefit from brushing up on themechanics of the English language. Sites like Purdue Online Writing Lab are great resources torefresh your mind on the basics.

Good luck with your writing!!!

-Admin I (AKA London9Calling if you want to see my own word vomit hehe)

[xseedgames]

Ys SEVEN PC - Localization Blog #1

“Bring us Ys SEVEN on PC!”, the players said. “We want Ys SEVEN on PC!” The rallying cry echoed forth from all corners of the internet, and we knew it was only a matter of time before it echoed so loudly as to become almost deafening. Thus, we decided to silence the cries by giving the players what they wanted… and so Ys SEVEN PC came to pass, with its launch scheduled for August 30th (so soon!) on Steam, GOG, and the Humble Store by Humble Bundle.

But aside from a handful of screenshots and some emphatic assurances of quality, we’ve said and shown very little of this port, leaving you all to wonder, will it be any good?

Well, wonder no longer! I’m here to address all your concerns and assuage all your fears! So… let’s get right into it, shall we? We shall proceed in the tried-and-true form of the classic Q&A!

Q: Is this version of the game based on the Chinese PC port of Ys SEVEN from Joyoland?

A: No, it is not! This is a completely new port contracted by us. See my answer to the next question for more details.

Q: Is Durante porting this game?

A: No, he’s not. Nor is this a port from our regular programming guru, Sara. Due to the recent increase in the volume of PC titles we’ve been releasing, we’ve been forced to branch out and find new sources of programming wizardry to work with – and just as we’re very careful when selecting localization contractors to work with, we try to be very selective about whom we entrust with our partners’ code.

Since the particular group we’re working with for Ys SEVEN hasn’t yet come out and spoken of their involvement, we’ll respect their privacy and not name any names (you’ll be able to find out who it was soon enough when the game releases), but we will say this: these guys are GOOD. It’s a Japanese company that’s done extensive work on PC and console games alike, and they take a lot of pride in what they do.

Having never worked with this company before, we were initially wary (as we always are when working with somebody new for the first time), but they almost immediately proved themselves a true force to be reckoned with. The very first build of the game they sent us was basically a 100% playable port of the Japanese game from PSP to PC, complete with upscaled HD visuals and a 60 fps framerate. It looked great, played great, and ran perfectly on every one of our PCs. Plus, it was delivered to us much, much sooner than we expected.

And this was just a quick and dirty proof-of-concept build!

So if you’re worried about how the game will run on your system, or whether the port will even be any good… don’t be. These guys (who are apparently pretty big fans of the Ys series to begin with) clearly know their stuff, and have been an absolute joy to work with. We hope to employ their services again on future PC projects, and we hope you guys enjoy the fruits of their labor come August 30th.

Q: Will the PC version of Ys SEVEN have all the same features Durante added to the PC version of The Legend of Heroes: Trails of Cold Steel?

A: Sadly, no, because most of those simply wouldn’t apply to Ys SEVEN. Remember, this is a game that was developed for the PSP, whereas Trails of Cold Steel was developed for the PS3. As such, there are limits to the visual enhancements that can be applied – without completely remaking the game from scratch, there will always be restrictions present here that you wouldn’t find in a game designed for HD visuals from the start. The most noticeable of these are the game’s textures, many of which don’t exist in high-res form. We experimented with upscaling these textures, but the results looked… less than ideal, and wound up highlighting other flaws (such as introducing very obvious texture seams and mismatches which are otherwise virtually unnoticeable).

Now, don’t go thinking this means the game will just look like a PSP title blown up to fill an HD screen! Far from it. Even if the textures are still rather lo-res in spots, the 3D models are all sharp as can be, with characters faring particularly well. There’s a lot more detail present on the characters now than ever before, helping to highlight their impressively fluid animations – and those animations look *especially* fluid at 60 fps!

But we do worry that those of you who’ve played Trails of Cold Steel PC might be a bit spoiled for choice after bearing witness to the sheer breadth of options available in that game’s admittedly brilliant launcher, so consider this a bit of advance notice: the launcher options for Ys SEVEN are far more basic, but the end result is a game that’s just as lovingly ported, and just as big an improvement over the original version. We feel that if you go into it with this caveat in mind, you’ll find yourself equally impressed with the end result.

Q: What’s this I hear about the text being updated?

A: Yep! As long as we were working on this game anyway, we figured, why not make some improvements in the process?

See, Ys SEVEN was the very first editing project I ever worked on when I was hired as a Localization Specialist for XSEED Games over seven years ago… and I was hired near the end of the project’s production cycle, so I had precious little time to work on it. I had a lot of help from our esteemed former editor Jess (whom many of you may know as the sharer of blobfishes on our Twitter, among many other things), but the time constraints and my overall newness meant that my editing wasn’t all it could’ve been, and a lot of minor errors slipped through the cracks. In addition to typos and grammar errors here and there, there were even spots where I’d gotten the context of scenes wrong, as well as a general inconsistency in terminology and capitalization rules from one file to the next. It’s mostly stuff that wouldn’t be noticed by the average player, but I’m certain some of you language nerds like me who played Ys SEVEN on PSP must have cringed at least once or twice before its conclusion (and not just from my poor attempts at humorous interjections).

But all that changes now! …Or most of it, anyway. I’m sure we didn’t catch everything, and there are still plenty of issues with the text only filling up a small portion of the dialogue window in which it appears (this was tied to the text limits we were initially given when working on this game seven years ago, so it was a bit too universal to address across the board). But the fact is, we made changes to over a thousand lines of text – most just minor corrections to spelling, punctuation, or word order, but some consisting of complete rewrites for better clarity or more accuracy to the original Japanese – so we’re pretty confident in saying that any returning Ys fans who play this game should find themselves more immersed now from beginning to end than they were seven years ago, and new fans playing it for the first time will have the best possible experience doing so.

And I’ve gotta say, it feels good to have revisited this text and made some of the corrections I’ve been dying to make for the better part of a decade! It definitely adds a sense of closure to my beginnings at XSEED, and I hope you all are able to notice some of these differences and appreciate the hard work that the whole localization team put into them – because this wasn’t just me going back and fixing things, but all of us making a group effort to give this script a new lease on life. It’s like we all banded together for a common cause, and I couldn’t be prouder to have been a part of it. And even though the majority of our changes are so small that you may not even notice them, we believe that the subtle effect they’ll have on your ability to become engrossed in the game’s world will make all of our efforts totally worth it in the end!

Q: Can we expect more ports like this in the future?

A: You’ll just have to wait and see! If we haven’t announced it, we can’t say anything about it. But that doesn’t mean we don’t have things in the works behind the scenes!

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So, did I miss anything? If you have any further questions, feel free to pose them on our Facebook or Twitter – or on our forums at www.xseedgames.com if you want to reach out to me directly, since the forums are my usual stomping grounds.

And come August 30th (my birthday!), I hope you all have an awesome time with Ys SEVEN. As of today, it’s been exactly seven years since our initial release of the game, and while we weren’t quite able to time the release of the PC version so it fell on the same day, we’re thrilled we can bring this wonderful game (one of my personal favorites in the whole series) to a wider audience, and we hope to hear nothing but good things from you guys as you sink your teeth into it in two weeks.

Please enjoy your time in the land of Altago, everyone!

-Tom

[theanalyzersfanfics]

21

21) what do you think when you read over your older work?

I do think a lot of it’s okay and find myself enjoying it at points. You know how people say they come back to writing they’re proud of and find it isn’t so hot? Well, I get that but I also find the writing I struggled through isn’t bad as I thought. 

I do spot flaws while reading. That funny tumblr post about your ability to spot spelling and grammar errors improving after you post a work is so true. It’s annoying but not that much. I do spot more deeper flaws occasionally.

For example, in Familial Tour I find myself skimming the part where Bron meets the gang’s parents to get to the part where he meets Ruby and Chomper. I don’t know if those scenes should have been altered/cut in some way or I just have my favorite parts. Two reviewers did note those scenes did drag a bit. I wouldn’t know what scenes to replace them with or how to alter them. Something needs to get the characters from one favorite scene to another. I guess I might learn how to determine those transfers in the MFA program.

Another example is Dinner with Royalty. I read it yesterday and though I’m fond, some of the dialogue felt directionless and a bit expositional. It’s partly about the fun of seeing Taiki’s Xros Heart team bouncing off his mom but some of it I wasn’t as satisfied with. Oh well, I do feel I might’ve got better with dialogue, since I don’t feel those things nearly as much with my latest Land Before Time fics.

Granted, I’m only usually rereading a couple of my fics and if I made it more extensive read of my work, I might find more things to cringe and critique. But for the ones I do read, I am mostly happy with what I came up with so far.

[rosalindmosis]

Beta Reader Questionnaire (http://stacyclaflin.com/2014/05/15/beta-reader-questionnaire/)

Beta Reader Questionnaire by

Stacy Claflin

Over the course of the last couple years, I’ve learned a lot about having those awesome people called beta readers. They are a wonderful group of people who help make my stories all they can be by providing valuable feedback before publication.

One of the first things I noticed with my first round of beta readers was that I wasn’t getting the specific feedback that I was looking for from some of them. The problem was that I hadn’t given them enough direction, giving them the questions I wanted answered. With my first book especially, I wasn’t even sure what those questions were.

I’ve done some digging and incorporated questions from various authors who have well worded questionnaires. I can’t recall all of the sources, but one was author Dannika Dark.

Now I have my own questionnaire, and I’ve had a lot of requests to see and use it. Rather than giving it to each author individually, I’m posting it here for anyone who would like to use it.

Authors, feel free to take all or part of the questionnaire as it applies to your stories. Horror authors, for example, will have some questions that aren’t asked here. Those without romance in their books will want to remove those questions.

Beta Reader Questionnaire

Thank you for taking the time to read my story! Please read the questions before starting the story, so they’ll be in the back of your mind as you’re reading.

Opening:

Were the first paragraphs and first page compelling? Did they make you want to keep reading? If not, what was the problem?

Did you get oriented fairly quickly at the beginning as to whose story it is, what’s going on, and where and when it’s taking place? If not, what were you confused about at the beginning?

Did the story continue to hold your interest through the first few chapters? Or is there a point where your interest started to lag?

Characters:

Were there characters that needed development or focus?

Could you relate to the main character? Did you feel her/his pain, joy, fears, worry, excitement?

Which characters did you connect to and like? (Or love to hate?)

Are there any characters you think could be made more interesting or more likable?

Could the bad guy(s) be nastier or more interesting? How?

Did you get confused about who’s who in the characters? Are there too many characters to keep track of? Are any of the names or characters too similar?

Did the main characters have chemistry and did their relationship make sense?

Which side characters are you curious to know more about after reading this installment?

Romance:

Did you have to reread any part of the romantic scenes or interactions to figure out what was going on?

Did any of the romantic dialogue or interactions make you cringe?

Did anything make you feel uncomfortable? What and how?

How well did you think the relationship developed between the couple and how did it serve the story?

Dialogue:

Did the dialogue sound natural to you? If not, whose dialogue did you think sounded artificial?

Setting:

Were you able to visualize where and when the story is taking place?

Did the setting pull you in, and did the descriptions seem vivid and real to you?

Plot, Pacing, Scenes:

Was the story interesting to you? Did it drag in parts? Where?

Which scenes/paragraphs/lines did you really like?

Which parts were exciting and should be elaborated on, with more details?

Which parts bored you and should be compressed or even deleted? What parts did you dislike or not like as much?

Was there anything that confused, frustrated, or annoyed you?

What parts resonated with you and/or moved you emotionally?

Did you understand every phrase / term I used? If not, which ones?

Did you notice any discrepancies or inconsistencies in time sequences, places, character details, plot, etc.?

Visual:

Can you SEE every action clearly?

If you went there in real life, would you recognize the places? If not, elaborate.

Did you have to reread any part of the ACTION SEQUENCES to understand who was doing what? List any issues lines/paragraphs that didn’t make sense and required a re-read.

Could you SEE what the characters looked like clearly? If not, who?

Writing Style/Tone/Voice:

Do you think the writing style fits the story and genre? If not, why not?

Ending:

Was the ending satisfying?

Was the ending believable?

Grammar, spelling, punctuation:

While you were reading, did you notice any obvious, repeating grammatical, spelling, punctuation or capitalization errors?

Notes:

In your opinion, what are the main strengths of the story? The main weaknesses of the story?

Anything additional you want to add?