#internal dialouge

[rockgodklav]

gonna visit one of your concerts one of these days and throw underwear at the stage. but it's not mine, its apollos.

“(..Klavier, don’t say what you’re thinking. Oh gott. Don’t say it. Don’t say it. You’ll get cancelled; don’t say it—)”

[dhmis-autism]

anyways since i hurt my wrist ive been reading a lot of DHMIS fic, and as such i have some opinions on alla them! i also have some faves that i am going to reccomend now if any of you are in the mood to read:

First up, this whole series of DHMIS shorts are SO well-written and very bittersweet. They’re both sort of mini stories AND explorations of the positives and negatives of each individual character in the trio + their dynamics with each other. Pretty accurate to the characters, I think, and just straight up, well-written, fun to read. CANNOT OVERSTATE how much I enjoyed these ones. This was my fave of the three, I think about it ALL the time. Though, honestly, you can’t just read ONE and not read the others!

Alright, next is my FAVE FAVE FAAVEE dog/dad duo fic! I love a lot about this fic! I love the in-character dialogue, I love the thoughtful way this fic explores one of my favorite dynamics in the show! It's heartfelt and awkward and jumpy and misshapen- and I think it's a pretty fantastic avenue to take when exploring these characters. There's also a bit of existential terror, for those of you who like that element of the show! Anyways, this fic is literally ALWAYS going to have a rent-free space in my heart.

THIS ONE is a really smart and thought out rearrangement of the first TV season, with a kind of emotional narrative throughline that I gotta say, I was invested in. I always like fanworks that reintegrate lines from canon in different contexts and this is something this fic really understands how to do well. The epilogue made me understand why people will buy and read books telling the exact same event from a different characters POV. tbh i’d buy this if I could.

THIS one is short,sweet and REALLY fucking funny. I literally crack up just thinking about Duck asking Red which of the other two he’d rather be stuck with on a desert island. Comedy of errors with a bittersweet ending that has really stuck around in my head.

This one is less of a singular character exploration and more of a exploration of a hypothetical character dynamic ,imo. And I LOVE the dynamic in it so much! It's compelling, it's messy, it's very push-and-pull, it's like watching two cars almost crash into each other, miss, and then smash violently into poles in opposite sides of the street. I like the OCs in it ( they have a very funny bit going ), I like the fun little fanmade songs, and I like that the relationship between the two main characters is used as a really good platform to see what their insecurities  and their worst traits are up close. I rarely see ship fics that do that! And as someone who is far more interested in the characters themselves than the ship together, I am all in on the carnage. 

[forgetmenomore]

WELL, FORK

FORK, DUDE, FORK

[whats-todays-hyperfixation]

the original crows as those sad mashups of songs on tiktok:

kaz: waiting room x all i wanted

inej: the labyrinth x the archer x not stong enough

jesper: the archer x not strong enough

[ask-grian]

Back home, Grian gingerly raises his sleeve once more, to see what he feared; the sculk had spread even more..

His whole forearm was now splotched with midnight blue, and the skin near it looked bruised, turning a purplish green shade. Worst of all, when he touched it, it stung like it was doused with poison.

Grian winced.. He really really really needed to get rid of this.. or tell someone, anyone. Still, some part of his brain told him he should just ignore it, like everything else.

What will Grian do?

[eesh... this is getting kinda bad... but... ugh, I heard Xisuma started a containment program, and I've just worked up the nerve to get back- no, I can hide it a while longer. It's fine. No one has to know! No one will know.]

[caramellody]

Me dusting off my A03 despite my like. 5 unfinished projects in order to write nsbu fanfiction

[bbleague-crispin]

gonna do my bbq's to take my mind off of things !!!! i think if i held his hand i'd feel better,.,,

[puptroid-dread]

tried my hand at b&w photos on my walk home today

[lucindarobinsonvevo]

exert from ‘Elle and Robert vs. the Knife’ 

And in his defense – It was a good first punch. It connected squarely with the left side of her face, and he thought he felt something crunch under the weight of his closed fist. Perhaps that’s all he’s ever been. A closed fist. It’s not the first time he’d hit his sister, he and Elle had their fair share of scrapes – But  it’s also not really the example he wants to set for Harlow. Children can be very perceptive to these things. She continues to state at him, the knife remains millimeters from an artery in his throat. 

“I used to imagine about all the ways I would kill you.” She says, blood spilling off her top lip onto the pearls of her teeth. “How I would get revenge. For Serena.” She inches the knife closer to his throat. The knife had been chosen not for it’s killing efficacy, but for it’s intimidation factor against the pregnant Kinski girl who has since escaped while he was busy tangling with Elle. It currently feels very efficient, from where he’s lying.  “For Cam.”

“You can’t kill me.” He says, choosing to play his trump card now in the hopes of getting the knife away from his throat, “You need me to save David.” 

“I don’t care about David.” He believes her, while the other siblings had all seemed scared for David, and Dad was out of his mind enough to make a deal with him Elle had seemed so calm back at the hospital, watching him from where the other two – Amy and Leo – had sandwiched her between them. 

“Would you take Harlow’s father away from her?” He asks, flipping to plan B, “You know what it’s like to grow up without a father.” He hopes that playing on her emotions will sway her. It seems that she and Dad have remained as close as ever. Which doesn’t surprise him, he’d always preferred his golden girl to his sons. 

“I think Harlow would be better off without you.” She replies, unmoved. “Don’t you?” He doesn’t want to answer that question.

[weirdnotal]

As heartbreaking as the theory that Cody purposely missed so Obi-Wan would fall of the cliff because he knew Obi-Wan could survive is, and it is, I also think it's very funny.

Cody's internal dialouge: how do I get the general as far away from me and the rest of the clones as I can? Throw him off the cliff he'll live

[rwby-encrusted-blog]

Jaune: I don't feel so good ... Why are all my limbs slack? Why can't I move my eyes? Why can't I move my mouth? Is this and internal Dialouge? I can't see the end of the Horizon- WEISS SCHNEE?!?!

Jaune: Have you come to put me out of my misery? Please! I don't like feeling like slack Three Dimensional Model!

Weiss: Hmm~ you're going to need to beg a little bit harder than that motherfucker!

Jaune: PLEASE! PLease! THis is not the kind of existence I can keep going with!

Weiss: What will You give Me~

Jaune: ... I will give you the satisfaction of snuffing out another life, Please-

Weiss: I'm not sure if that's enough!

Nora: Hey, What's going on over here pals! Is that Weiss Schnee? Are you begging for death from Weiss Schnee?

Weiss: Yep!

Nora: Me next! Me next! Me next!

Weiss: Mmmmm ... Maybe~

Jaune: Certainly you feel this horrible, diminished existence to, Nora. I can't be the only one who feels they are less than whole! please!

Nora: I feel, Like, A Ragdoll being Manipulated.

Weiss: Fuck, can't imagine.

[smiling-stel]

Tcf novel spoilers o7

Im all for Caleism my fandom friends, and also cooing or face-palming over how altruistic Cale's actions are

But thats the difference

◇ His [actions] end up being altruistic - that's an undeniable fact - but Cale, himself, isn't

And we know this from all his internal dialouge since the narrative is 98% from his perspective

Multiple times over does he advocate for survival above all, emphasizing this msg especially towards the children

His entire mentality is this. He would rather the crew Fail than ever get to the point of no return to succeed in whatever they're working toward atp

"Because you can always strike again as long as you're still alive" ~im paraphrasing from later chapters of Book 1 (i think this msg was directly said once Cale's backstory was touched into more)

The majority of the time, Cale's "acts of altruism" are him, not being fully aware of the consequences of using his ancient powers.

Either from miscalculation (ex. Second time he used Fire of Destruction after fortification + first time he uses Sky Eating Water in ch. 295) or from complete oversight, being caught up in the moment (ex. first time he uses Fire of Destruction in the elven kingdom)

◇ Sure, it all resulted in Cale coughing up blood or fainting after an Act that benefits someone other than him, but his intention was never "ill die for this cause" so therefore Cale cannot be called an altruist

♤ but ofc that doesn't mean his actions aren't altruistic

Because as always, there's a fine line between what someone [intends to happen] and [what does happen]- which also isn't helped by the fact Cale doesnt ever explain himself ((which, like valid sometimes- but dam communicate with ur found family please TToTT))

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Anyways I just wanted to make a post saying this cause I've noticed a trend in the fandom babying or cursing Cale for being overly Altruistic 》》 playing with this borderline mischaracterization (which is fair cause its Hella entertaining, I get it) but practically simplifying a large part of Cale's character to JUST being a hopeless altruist,,

So I wanted to just get this out there that Cale isn't an altruist, but dam do his actions result in altruism.

Tldr; Cale's a begrudging altruist- an altruist only by the perceived situation, not the definition

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But thats why his story and character are so beloved - at least for me that's why I like him as a character so much. This is one of my favorite stories, if not my number 1.

The misconceptions cause by Cale's actions seemingly being selfless, but then the complete opposite internal dialouge is so gold every time

☆ I really adore how Trash of the Count's Family is written with him as a biased narrator, but still showing glimpses of the other character's minds as well as the perceived opinion of the masses within that world. - which, i guess is the definition of Unreliable Narrator, but compared to ORV with Kim Dokja or Shen Yuan in SVSSS (ik, horrendous line up of stories, im cringing w myself too orz) it feels like Cale doesnt gaslight or fool the readers NEARLY as much--

Its 1st person POV like the other two stories mentioned, but its also more 3rd person restricted POV than ORV or SVSSS(?) Perhaps this is me going insane after staring at words on a screen for the majority of the day today, but TCF feels less of a biased perspective(?) If that makes sense..

[Edited thx to @/ghocty's comment <3!]

TCF is 3rd person while ORV is 1st person (tho ORV has its own nuances due to worldbuilding but we won't get into that rn) meaning we can see more of the other characters thoughts n other scenes we otherwise shouldn't know ab if it were 1st/2nd/or even 3rd person limited narration (because Cale isn't aware of some scenes, but we the readers know thx to the 3rd person omniscient narration)

However both TCF and SVSSS are 3rd person omni (unless I'm wrong again, to which, just shoot--- I mean plz allow me to correct myself again), but TCF, in my opinion, has waaaaaaay less bent or twisted truths from the narration than SVSSS (because Shen Yuan is legit a freak, we all been knowing)

♡ Its just how each story is written/how the characters interact w each other//the differences between the Genre of the stories bc SVSSS is mostly focused on the main pair's romance, so ofc the narration would be narrower than TCF which is around Cale's life, who he is as a person, and why it leads to him alw getting more work to do

Cale's POV doesnt feel like it warps the exposition it as much compared to Dokja or Yuan anyway-

This is reminding me of that one pic of the triangle titled "unreliable narrators" with Dokja as a liar, someone else as delusional, and Cale as oblivious - cause yea,, accurate.

[enlightenedfeline]

Writing an emotionally numb character:

There's a lot to take into consideration when writing a character like this, but I'll narrow it down to what I think is most important!

Who's perspective are they normally in? Is this a side character in your story? The protagonist? The antagonist? What importance do they have?

Are they in first person?

Emotional numbness is something that can be easily observed by people who know you, it can become a trait they use to describe you, basically you don't need high emotional intelligence to come to the conclusion that someone you know is generally emotionless.

Perspective doesn't matter in knowing whether or not a character is emotionally numb, it matters in how you introduce it and express it.

Here are the do's and dont's of each perspective:

First person: dont: have the character aware that they are emotionally numb, it is generally not a trait one would notice about themselves if it's unintentional. do: show the reader that this character generally suppresses or doesn't feel their emotions through internal dialouge.

This seems a bit contradictory, right? Because how do you make a character unaware of a trait, while also making it obvious to your reader?

Don't put all the weight on your own shoulders, your readers analytical abilities matter too, and if it's too obvious from this perspective it'll make it seem like your character knows they're emotionally numb, which would paint them as manipulative and calculated.

Pause. If that is what you want, look out for more advice posts in the future, because this one won't be helpful.

Now continue. We all have small habits and thought processes that are unhealthy that we're not aware of, it would be difficult to recognize them yourself. Thankfully, you don't have to in this situation, you're writing a character, you are aware of all their little thought patterns, that's how you show your reader their emotional numbness.

In how they avoid emotions, or don't treat their own struggles like they're worth mentioning, this is a habit we can all recognize as wrong when we read it, and that's the easiest way for you as the writer to express emotional numbness.

Third person limited (and second person): If it's from the emotionally numb character's pov, follow the advice above, if it's from another character's pov then, Dont: give the character unlimited knowledge of the emotionally numb character's past and what makes them this way. Do: gradually have them learn more about the emotionally numb character, and follow their thought process as they connect their past with why they behave the way they do.

Third person omniscient: DONT: info dump right off the bat. do: gradually reveal details about the character.

As you've probably noticed, the advice for both third person povs is essentially the same. Third person is probably the easiest pov where you can introduce emotional numbness, however, it's also the easiest pov to fall into an info dumping session about said character.

Emotionally numb characters give you so much room for angst, use it!

Make your emotionally numb character a mystery to your reader, make them disliked by other characters, make it affect their relationships, then give your reader hints and scraps as to why they behave the way they do, let them figure it out!

Give your reader the tools and let them build the house, make the emotional numbness a mystery to the character and to most characters they interact with.

The second thing to explore about emotional numbness is the why of it all.

While it may be your first instinct to give them a life altering event that caused it - and while that's not bad - you can consider other paths and approaches!

Emotional numbness is a trauma response, to what exactly is up to you.

Maybe their emotions are treated as a burden, so they begin to see them as a burden, so they begin to suppress them until they reach a point where they can't stop doing it.

Maybe it was a mentally scarring event that made them too emotional, and when no one around them could handle it, they started suppressing everything.

The word suppress is being used a lot, that's because it's the core of emotional numbness. No matter what we try to tell ourselves, we feel emotions, so to be emotionally numb does not mean to be emotionless, it means to suppress emotions.

And if you want your emotionally numb character to be realistic, make them breakdown when they can't suppress it anymore.

The most realistic thing you can have your emotionally numb character do is breakdown into a supernova of emotions, because no one can hold it in all the time.

They can breakdown in the arms of a loved one, or in a public setting, or maybe even in front of the person they despise most. Get creative, get angsty, or get fluffy!

Emotional numbness can make or break your character, they can either be a stereotype or something never before seen, make them your own, and remember to make them human.

Maybe some of this advice will help, maybe it won't, either way, I hope this feline has enlightened you!

[the-ivy-family]

Are you looking for me or did you give up already? I've never met a clown that's bad at hide and seek.

- Juniper🪷

I should have taken the buddy was sooner. This is such fun.

[isat-script-project]

Do you have a list of how many lines each chaaracter has of dialouge? Like a total number for each silly!! Im curious of who has the most lines and least lines

Thank god nobody can see how i monologued to the draft post. Anyways.

The Probably Most Accurate Way I Can Think Of to do this that also isn't total agony is to count the combined number of how often a certain character's portrait appears (Which means searching the game files for something like "M_" for Mirabelle) + how often the voice macro for text without a portrait appears (same example, this would be scanning the files for "\m[vmnp]" for Mirabelle).

For Siffrin I searched for both their voice macros. His dialogue is weird because all of it is legally a dialogue options, so I Think the voice macro has to be set every time.

(To clarify a voice macro has to be set every time the text beeps change. So every time there is a character switch or no beeps for Sif monologues. Meaning the number of voice macros is always gonna be Less than the actual amount of lines, since characters often have multiple lines in a row.)

The flaw of this method of course is that if a line has portrait variations, that line gets counted twice, but idgaf. so. and YES i did remember to exclude the japanese translation file from the search.

again. these are Rough Numbers, please only treat them as an estimate, and not as absolute fact.

These are ordered as voice macro + number of portraits

Siffrin: 728 + 869 (For reference: searching for Sif Portraits turns up 1530) Mirabelle: 520 + 2685 Isabeau: 353 + 1764 Odile: 196 + 1859 Bonnie: 165 + 1624 Loop: 322 + 1560 (Plus, the tutorial voice [also Loop] has 120 results) Euphrasie: 26 + 226 King: 76 + 363 As for rough totals: Siffrin: 1597 Mirabelle: 3385 Isabeau: 2117 Odile: 2055 Bonnie: 1789 Loop: 1882 Euphrasie: 252 King: 439

As for Sif Monologues, my best attempt came up with 4433 results (Searching ["( in the files, as that includes nearly all sif monologue lines, while also excluding some system stuff). So. The highest line count goes to Siffrin's internal monologue, actually.

i will not be doing NPCs as that would be annoying as hell cuz they work different

[waywardsuniverses]

Heya I'm not doing too well rn but I'll probably try to write something here ok 🌹 🔥 🖊️

Respond when you can, I'm dealing with something internally rn tonight.

Take care.

Hey, thank you for sending me this ask from the comments!

Oh you are the first smut prompter, this will be fun! Thank you for the new request

As per usual one prompt and one dialouge prompt coming up!

Prompt: Character A and Character B have had mutual feelings for each other for a while. But neither of them have had the guts to tell the other how they feel. One day whilst on a mission the two of them have to hide or else be discovered. They clamber into a discarded locker and shut the door, wait for the coast to be clear, only to find that they cannot open if from the inside. It's cramped and the two of them are pressed up against one another...but neither of them seem to mind

Dialogue Prompt: "You're so easy to tease" "I am not" "Then why are you the same colour as the paint you are using?"